OMG guys... who knew I was still alive here? Well, definitely not me... I only came back because I was bored and working on my own fictional story not based on anything really and wanted to see if this entire forum was still alive.
But aside from my stupid ramblings I'm super excited to be back and completely rereading this thing in like 2 days... Because why shouldn't I stay up until like 4:30 in the morning reading this?
But let us get to why we're actually here. The story...
It's so much fun going back in time reading this again. Back to when I was in like middle school... early high school when I first started this and all the cool writers were around. Anyway... It's very fun reliving this story and again seeing how it's changed from what I kinda remembered happening and how it's evolved into something completely different yet still somewhat similar. And of course writing styles change as we mature and do more of it. It's pretty apparent, to me at least, between the 2-3 year gap we had between chapters even that the writing quality has improved.
I feel like I have to draw from something I've been noticing in my work recently is speech. Like character said, or character said halfheartedly or w/e adj. you want to use, and sometime completely forgoing the fact the character "said" something, but using as action the character was doing as he/she is talking. In the early parts of the fic, there's a lot of the former and it gets closer to the latter example. I really hope that makes sense at all...
But I do enjoy all the changes that have been made for clarity's sake. Like doing a little more exposition on the SS Anne chapter and definitely on the training in Midnight stadium. Which I swear happened like much later in the earlier version... But again, I don't think I remember much of the earlier version. I mean I remember a lot of the cool plot points we haven't gone over yet... but ya... We'll get there.
I do enjoy a lot of Jade's character. Her sense of, I have no idea what I'm doing. Especially for someone who is new to the whole trainer thing and hasn't had much success even in school not only with Pokespeech but also with battling. But we are seeing her grow and I'm excited to see more of her confidence in the actions and decisions she makes. Rudy is a lot of fun too, but at the moment, other than Chibi. They're really the only characters I enjoy. The others do seem kinda like the one dimensional bots that are just there to help out with conversations and such. But I'm sure we'll get a little more with them soon when we get deeper into the rebellion.
I'm definitely enjoying the evolution of the descriptive process. I feel at first it was giving us a little too less detail, then moved to a little too much like Negrek was commenting on a couple chapters ago, and I think now it's hit that happy medium of just enough to get what you want the reader to know and not too much they're reading a Tolkein book...
Anyway, this is my attempt at a review after not doing one for at least 4 years is it now? I feel like I just need to lurk again... These things always seem to be me just rambling about random things...
Either way I'm excited to see Chibi again, because then we get to some of my favorite Pokemon characters that I can't discuss... (yet) And I'm also excited to see Aijia again. (sorry for butchering her name, I think I'm a little too tired to go back and check if it's right or not.)
Until next month! (maybe) (hopefully)
Yes people, I have returned.
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