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    Meh, I got the next chapter done. It's long, so I made it a cliffhanger. Don't flame me, Georgia lovers, that Dragon Buster is a jerk in my story. That is all. You have been warned...

    Chapter Seven
    The Battle Tournament


    After all tears and blood have been shed
    We set out once more to compete
    Battles are ready to be had!

    A week passed. Ash recovered fairly well, or at least his injury did. Emotionally, he still needed more time. It was quite difficult for him to adjust to his half-blindness, and to sharpen his other senses was imperative. But it was still hard for the others, too. It was rather difficult to get used to seeing a yawning flesh hole in your friend’s face…

    ~*~

    “Don Battle Competition at Rightwing Town?” Cilan read aloud rather questionably as he gazed at the poster. The colorful advertisement was stuck to the Pokémon Center wall. Axew popped out of Iris’s purple hair and let out a squeak of excitement, “Ax!”

    Ash’s single eye glittered with excitement, “It feels like ages since we did a Battle Competition!” he said cheerfully. Pikachu’s cheeks sparked in anticipation, “Pikachu!”

    Iris rolled her eyes, “We did one a short time ago, Ash. You’re such a little kid sometimes!”

    Ash grinned and shook his head in exasperation, “Ah, you got me there…!” he laughed. Pikachu smiled and sweat-dropped at the two, “Pika…”

    Cilan couldn’t help but smile at the pair’s antics. Looks like things are coming back to normal…

    “How about we find the signup area?” Cilan suggested, “A few Competitions aren’t going to give a bad aftertaste. It’s a good ingredient to anyone’s battle experiences.”

    Iris looked rather annoyed as more of Cilan’s “cuisine phrases” were used once more, but both younger Trainers nodded in agreement.

    ~*~

    After at least thirty minutes worth of wandering aimlessly through the city looking for the signup booths (city navigation wasn’t Iris’s thing, apparently), they found the registering stands were found. Rather relieved to be finished meandering off course, the group looked over the forms for the Competition.

    Name:
    Hometown:
    Pokémon (2):

    Cilan debated which of his three Pokémon to leave out when he heard a rather familiar female voice call his name…

    “Bonjour, Cilan! Have you been well, garcon? Well, no more!”

    It was his self-proclaimed rival, Burgundy. The Connoisseur turned to the lavender eyed teen behind him and smiled rather nervously, “Hello Burgundy…”

    The spunky girl sniffed with disdain at Cilan, “I hope your ready, because today my revenge will be accomplished!” Burgundy announced rather haughtily. Ash turned to Burgundy, looking rather amused. “Err…Hello Burgundy?”

    Burgundy jumped, “Zut! I almost didn’t notice you, garcon! What happened?”

    Ash winced rather noticeably, but didn’t reply. Pikachu shot the girl a dirty look with his dark eyes. Burgundy seemed to get the gist and turned to Cilan again, with a rather vengeful look in her eye.

    Luckily, before Burgundy could say anything unpleasant, a rather loud voice startled everyone, “WATCHOUTWATCHOUTWATCHOUTWATCH—“

    Ash, alarmed, jumped backwards and fell, and Bianca Whitechime ran right by him, tripped, and fell. Pikachu tumbled off Ash’s shoulder and plopped on the ground. The maladroit blonde rubbed the back of her head rather apologetically as she stood, smiling diffidently at Ash as Iris helped him up. “I’m so sorry, Ash! I’m—“

    “It’s fine…at least you didn’t knock me into a fountain this time!” Ash joked as he dusted himself off. Pikachu stood and cleaned himself with his tail. Bianca huffed, “That’s not my fault, it’s the writers’!”

    Iris raised an eyebrow at the wound-up Trainer, “You didn’t even hit him, Bianca. You’re such a kid!” she reproved. Axew laughed at the scene. “Axew Aaaaaax!”

    Before Bianca could say something unpleasant, Ash quickly cut short the argument. “Bianca, how have your travels been? Have you met up with your dad again?”

    Bianca smiled rather merrily, “My journey has been getting more and more exciting! Daddy’s really happy for me, see?” she said as she pulled out her Badge Case from her bag.

    Four shiny badges gleamed in the sunlight; the Insect Badge, a badge called the Intuitive Badge, a badge called the Manifold Badge, and most surprisingly, the Bolt Badge.

    There were gasps of respect from the group. “You won Elesa’s Badge?” Cilan asked, impressed.

    The blonde nodded, “Yup! After training a lot, I decided to have a rematch!”

    “Hey Bianca! Wait up!”

    The familiar shout made Bianca turn, “Hey, its not my fault your so slow!”

    Luke Facflict approached, or rather, ran towards, Bianca, looking rather exhausted. His faithful Zorua and Golett were at his heels, also pooped. But he still smiled at the others. “Hey guys, long time no see!”

    Burgundy raised and eyebrow, “It’s Luke isn’t it? You were at the Nimbasa Town competition, right?”

    The film enthusiast nodded at the Conniseuse. “Yeah, and I made a documentary for it!”

    “That’s funny, I was just about to ask that,” Ash commented, “How did the documentary go?”

    The look of shock in Luke’s died as soon as soon as it appeared as Ash asked the question. “I managed to put it all together. It helped me loads when I was writing the battle scenes for my next movie!” Luke shrugged before continuing, “But I still only have the script…”

    He turned to Bianca, “I was going to enter another one, because I missed the Donamite one. Bianca said she was going to enter too.”

    Bianca nodded, looking rather excited as she bent down and scooped up Luke’s Zorua, despite her protests. “I can’t wait! I just need to sign up right away. That’s why I was in a rush~”

    Cilan blinked, “Are you two traveling together?”

    There was the slightest hint of blush on both Trainer’s cheeks as this was added. “Yes…” Luke muttered. Bianca quickly moved out of her embarrassment and scampered to the sign up sheet area after putting Zorua down. “I really need to sign up, bye-bye!”

    The entire group sweat-dropped, and Luke dashed after the scatty blonde, “Hey, Bianca, wait up!”

    “Eww, do I smell a Dragon-Type?” complained a rather bothered voice from behind Iris. The Dragon Trainer turned to see Georgia Icerant, her rival and biggest bęte-noir. Axew growled at the redhead, insulted.

    Iris flicked a piece of hair out of her face before smiling smugly at the Dragon Buster. “What, still mad about a little loss at the Village of Dragons?” she asked before shrugging indifferently, “Wow, what a kid!”

    “Excuse me, but this kid sticks in reality, sister. The loss was no simple loss, smarty. Sorry.” Georgia replied, just as conceited. The two began to get the usual lightning in their eyes.

    Burgundy shrugged to herself, half-thankful that her relationship with Cilan wasn’t like that at all.

    Ash felt a slight twinge of annoyance at the two’s bickering. “Can you two—“

    Georgia turned and glared at Ash. She felt a stab of loathing for the Kanto Trainer for interrupting her quarrel. Even if she wouldn’t admit it, she was also still pretty ticked over her loss with him. “Oh hush. This doesn’t have anything to do with you!” she growled, and noticing something, she decided to throw in something else as well; “Geez, what happened to your face?! Did you run into a wall?”

    Score. Ash cringed at the question. Iris blasted venom at Georgia, “Hey! Shut up!” she snarled at the Dragon Buster. Pikachu glared at the offender.

    Georgia shrugged, as indifferent as Iris had been before. “Oh, looks like I’ve touched a sore spot!” she chuckled, turned and leered at Iris. “I’m not allowed to insult your boyfriend, now, am I?”

    “He’s not my boyfriend, Georgia! Shut up!”

    Ash seemed to squirm at the question. Only Cilan noticed, and he felt puzzled. Normally Ash was indifferent to love. Why was he acknowledging it now?

    Luckily, Georgia and Iris went back to shooting lightning from their eyes. Ash let out a soft sigh of relief.

    The Kanto Trainer’s gaze wandered around the area as Burgundy began to talk with (or rather, threaten) Cilan…until he spotted another familiar face.

    Ash’s main rival, Trip (he had never been told his surname) was taking pictures of the sign up booths. When he spotted Ash, he lowered his camera, as one would with a weapon if confronted with an enemy—slowly and cautiously.

    Ash gave the dirty blonde a small smile and waved him over. Trip approached the Kanto Trainer, looking both nervous and questioning.

    “Hey Trip, long time no see, eh?” Ash greeted him. Trip shrugged. “I guess…” he answered.

    “Have you gotten any stronger since we last met?” Trip asked. The normal question. Ash thought. “Yes…a little, at the very least…”

    Trip raised an eyebrow at his raven haired rival. He seemed less confident then when Trip last remembered. Maybe it has something to do with—

    His train of thought was suspended, however, when Ash spoke again. “So…how many badges do you have now?”

    “Seven…seven badges.” Trip replied. Ash nodded agreeably. “So do I. I guess that’s the first time we’ve been even?” he joked, hoping to lighten the mood.

    Trip smiled a little. “Yes, yes it is, isn’t it?”


    ~*~


    “We are pleased to see the number of people participating in the Don Battle Competition in Rightwing Town!” boomed the announcer Freddy O’ Martian over the microphone. The Don Battle competitors were gathered up in the stadium, ready to battle. Ash shifted nervously under the stares of the other competitors. I wonder how I can battle with one eye? I know how to navigate a little but…

    “I have Don George here to broadcast alongside me! Don George?”

    “Thank you, Freddy. The pleasure is all mine.” Don George said as he received the microphone. “Hello everyone, and welcome to the Don Battle Competition of Rightwing Town. We have the match-ups for the first of four rounds!”

    “Hey Ash, I didn’t see you there. How’s its going?” came a voice. Ash and Iris turned to see Stephan Zelecrong standing behind him, grinning. Carefully keeping his missing eye faced away from the competitive Trainer he greeted him, “It’s been good, Stephan.”

    Stephan shrugged and got a rather spirited look in his eyes. “Let’s cross our fingers that we’ll face off in this tournament, ‘kay?”

    Ash nodded nervously, “Okay…” he agreed. Inwardly, the Kanto Trainer was worried he wouldn’t be able to face the redhead. I’ve never battled before with a blind side, will I lose? No! I have to think positively! If I think I’ll lose, I most certainly will!

    “Here are the matchups for the first round!” announced Freddy. The large screen in the stadium flashed several Trainer’s faces before flipping them over and spinning them around. The cards matched up into pairs; the matchups.

    “First we will have Iris versus Bianca!”

    The Dragon Trainer turned and nodded towards the blonde. “Okay, good luck!” she said. Bianca nodded back, “I won’t lose!”

    “Second, John versus Trip!”

    The Trainer looked over towards Trip, “This’ll be interesting…” he snickered. Trip rolled his eyes, “This is going to be a disaster…for you anyways…”

    “Third, Danny versus Jeffery!”

    Danny grinned at Jeffery, “I’ll give it my all!” he promised. Jeffery smiled at the other Trainer, “Yeah, me too.

    “Fourth, Cilan versus Stephen!”

    “They got my name wrong again…Whatever. I get to battle a Connoisseur and Gym Leader! This is going to be a challenge!” said Stephan, pumped.

    Cilan nodded, contented. “Well, well, this will surely be a battle of many different flavor collisions!”

    “Fifth, Luke versus Harold!”

    “Okay, I’ve got this one!” Luke hissed under his breath.

    Harold shrugged nonchalantly, “A little overconfident, are we?”

    “Sixth, Lily versus Lola!”

    The two twins looked at each other and cried simultaneously, “I’m winning this!”

    “Seventh, Ralph versus Burgundy!”

    Ralph looked at the screen and nodded, “Okay, this’ll be fun!” he commented.
    Burgundy scoffed. “This is an outrage! Ah, well,” she turned and smiled deviously at Cilan, “My revenge will come soon enough!”

    “Great…I can’t wait…”

    “Finally, we will have Georgia versus Ash!”

    “Again?! And you don’t even have a Dragon Type…” pouted Georgia, “and you’ve only got half a face! What kind of a victory will this be?”

    Ash growled at her, “A hard one to get, that’s what!” he spat in reply.

    Iris jeered at Georgia, “Come on, you think you’re going to win this easy? What a kid!”

    Georgia straightened up, and sneered at Ash, “This is going to be easy for a kid like me. Just watch…”

    Ash gulped and turned away, worry gnawing at the back of his mind. This probably won’t go very well for me…

    ~*~

    Iris versus Bianca…

    “Axew, use Scratch on Minccino!”

    “Minccino, counter with Double-Slap!”

    Axew’s claws glowed white, as did Minccino’s tail. The two rushed at each other, and they collided. Axew head butted Minccino, sending the Chinchilla Pokémon sprawling. Iris nodded in approval. “Good job, Axew! Now use Dragon Rage!”

    The Tusk Pokémon shut his eyes and a blue glow charged in his body. Minccino stood up weakly. The battle had been going back and forth for a while now.

    “Minccino, use Swift!” Bianca called out. The Normal Type jumped into the air and swung his long tail, sending a ray of stars. Axew spat out a large blue flame at the incoming attack.

    The two collided, smoke flew through the air, and Iris quickly commanded Axew again. “Now Axew, Scratch, nonstop!”

    The little Dragon Type jumped through the smoke at Minccino, and began scratching him repeatedly. He cried out in pain, but Axew didn’t let up until he sent Minccino to the ground. Minccino stood up, only to collapse again, knocked out.

    “Minccino in unable to battle! Axew wins, and the victory goes to Iris!”

    Iris high-fived Axew smiling. “Way to go, Axew!” she praised. Bianca returned Minccino, pouting, “Oh, why?! It’s not fair!”


    John versus Trip…

    “Liepard, use Night Slash!”

    “Lampet, dodge it!”

    The Cruel Pokémon unsheathed her claws and brought the glowing black shredders down, only to slash open air. Lampet floated behind Liepard, eyes glowing maliciously. Trip quickly commanded his Pokémon, “Lampet, use Flamethrower!”

    The Ghost-Fire Type spat a barrage of fire at the opposing Dark Type. Leipard didn’t even stand a chance against the powerful attack. Throughout the whole battle, Lampet had worn her out from its dodges and surprise attacks.

    “Liepard is unable to battle! Lampet wins, and the victory goes to Trip!”

    Trip nodded and returned his Pokémon, muttering a praise. John shrugged and returned his Pokémon, “Oopsies, got a little cocky there…”

    Danny versus Jeffery…

    “Swanna, use Air Slash!”

    “Duosin, Protect!”

    Swanna slashed her wings across the air, and a blue slice raced at Duosin, only to vanish on contact on Duosin’s green Protect. Swanna flew around the battle field, looking for an opening. Duosin had been dodging and blocking for quite some time now.

    “Swanna, use Double Team, then Water Pulse!” commanded Danny. The White Bird Pokémon promptly made copies of herself, surrounding Duosin. The Psychic Type whirled around in circles, nervous. Jeffery decided to try something. “Duosin, Thunder Wave them all!”

    Duosin sent an electric wave across the battle field. Or at least was going to. A blue orb of water shot out of the sky, making contact with the Mitosis Pokémon. Swanna had been high in the sky the whole time!

    “Oh no!” cried Jeffery.

    Danny smiled at the worried Trainer, “Oh yes! Wing Attack!”

    Swanna flew at Duosin and slapped him repeatedly with her wings, now glowing white. Duosin fainted by the fourth slap.

    “Duosin is unable to battle! Swanna is the winner, and the victory goes to Danny!”

    “Good job Swanna!” praised Danny. Jeffery shrugged at Duosin, who smiled back. “Oh well…we tried…”

    Cilan versus Stephan…

    “Alright, Sawk, use Double Kick!”

    “Stunfisk, use Thundershock!”

    Sawk lashed out his legs in an attempt to kick Stunfisk, but the Trap Pokémon shocked the Fighting Type will a powerful jolt of electricity before jumping away. Sawk ended up kicking the earth instead, sending sand high into the air.

    “Okay then, Stunfisk, Mud Bomb!” commanded Cilan. Stunfisk leapt into the air and spat a large ball of mud at Sawk (ew). The Karate Pokémon tried to block, but it exploded, and he was knocked to the floor.

    “Sawk, get up and use Close Combat, I know you can!” Stephan called out to his Pokémon. Sawk stood up and launched at Stunfisk, battering the Ground-Electric Type with a barrage of kicks and punches. Stunfisk flopped on the ground.

    “Stunfisk, use Thundershock again!” commanded Cilan, rather fearfully. Stunfisk jumped into the air and slammed into Sawk before shocking him again. Sawk fell at last after the long battle of wills.

    “Sawk is unable to battle! Stunfisk wins, and the victory goes to Cilan!”

    Cilan straightened his bow tie rather smugly. “That’s how we do it!” he said, and Stunfisk grunted in agreement.

    “Thanks Sawk. You did well, buddy.” Stephan said rather sadly as he returned his Pokémon. “Gah, I guess I lost…Oh well!”

    Luke versus Harold…

    “Golett, use Shadow Punch!”

    “Vanilluxe, Ice Beam!”

    Golett launched a shadowy fist at Vanilluxe, which the Ice-Type tried to freeze. The fist was covered with ice. Wincing, Golett punched Vanniluxe, regardless. The Snowstorm Pokémon backed off in response.

    “Golett, don’t let it get away! Gyro Ball!” Luke commanded. Golett’s arms and feet glowed brightly before he curled up into a ball and he rammed into Vanniluxe.

    “Vanniluxe, use Harden, quick!” yelped Harold, his confidence inflating. Vanniluxe’s skin became rock solid, and no matter how many times Golett ran into him, Vanniluxe took little damage.

    Luke growled in frustration. He certainly wasn’t going to lose this round! “Golett, use Double Team!”

    Golett made several copies of himself, and they all quickly surrounded Vanniluxe, much to his confusion. Luke didn’t miss a beat, “All together, Shadow Punch!”

    Every copy and the real Golett smashed a shady fist on Vanniluxe. Even Harden couldn’t protect him against it.

    “Vanniluxe is unable to battle! Golett wins, and the victory goes to Luke!”

    Luke let out a sigh of relief. “We did it Golett!”

    Harold smiled warmly, “Ha, I guess I was the overconfident one…”

    Lily versus Lola…

    “Cottonee, use Razor Leaf!”

    “Petilil, use Magical Leaf!”

    The two Grass Type’s attacks collided in midair. Lily quickly took charge, “Cottonee, attack Petilil with Stun Spore!”

    Cottonee released a yellow powder from his leaves, and it floated towards Petilil. Lola wasn’t going to lose, however. “Petilil, blow it away!”

    Petilil used the leaves on her head to makes a gust, and the Stun Spore was blown away.

    “Cottonee, use Mega Drain!” commanded Lily. The Cotton Puff Pokémon discharged a long green glowing thread at Petilil, ready to suck the little Grass Type’s energy.

    “Petilil, use Growth, then Magical Leaf!” ordered Lola. Petilil grew twice the size it had been, startling poor Cottonee to stopping the attack, only to regret it when the now giant Bulb Pokémon sent a salvo of glowing, razor-sharp leaves at her.

    “Cottonee is unable to battle! Petilil wins, and the victory goes to Lola!”

    “Yay, we won!” cried Lola to Petilil.

    Lily sulked as did Cottonee, “Boo, we lost…”

    Ralph versus Burgundy…

    “Quick, get it Whirlipede, Poison Sting!”

    “Stoutland, dodge and use Fire Fang again!”

    Whirlipede tried to attack Stoutland with Poison Sting, but his burn made him cry out in pain. Stoutland and Burgundy smirked as the Loyal Dog Pokémon’s fangs were covered with flames, and Stoutland sank them into Whirlipede’s hide. The Bug-Poison Type screamed in pain as the burn was agitated, but Burgundy wasn’t done yet. “Now, Stoutland, Tackle!”

    The Normal Type slammed into Whirlipede hard, and he was sent skidding to the ground. Stoutland didn’t even get a scratch.

    “Whirlipede is unable to battle! Stoutland wins, and the victory goes to Burgundy!”

    “Oi, way to go, Stoutland! Now revenge is ever closer!” extolled Burgundy, giving Cilan the evil eye as she did so. The Connoisseur laughed nervously, but said nothing. Ralph sighed in defeat as he returned his Pokémon, “Heh…that was pretty good Whirlipede…”

    Georgia versus Ash…

    The two Trainers approached the field, standing on their respective sides. Freddy turned towards Don George, looking excited. “Don George, are you as excited for the last match as I am?”

    “I couldn’t be more. This is going to be a thrilling battle.” Don George replied.

    Georgia smiled evilly at the nervous looking Ash, “Well, where did that confidence go? You don’t look so sure of yourself.”

    Ash glared venomously back at her. “We’ll see…” he murmured to himself as he reached for a Poké-Ball. Georgia did the same.

    Georgia tossed her Poké-Ball into the air, “Beartic, let’s go!” she shouted, and her favorite Pokémon appeared in the field. He resembled a large pure white polar bear, standing up on his hind legs. His front paws had grey pads and claws, as were his nose and small eyes. He had a short beard of ice clinging to the bottom of his muzzle.

    Ash tossed his Poké-Ball into the air, “Oshawott, I choose you!” he yelled, and his cute Otter Pokémon materialized onto the field in a flash of red. Oshawott looked up at the large Ice-Type in front of him and shivered in terror.

    Freddy once again turned to Don George, “Don George, what do you see in this match?” he asked the man beside him. Don George’s eyes narrowed as he replied, “Beartic’s Ice Type moves won’t have a lot of affect on a Water-Type like Oshawott, but Oshawott’s Water attacks won’t do much to Beartic. Also, Beartic is powerful with offense and defense, but Oshawott is smaller and faster. I’d say its pretty even.”

    Iris, from the stands, looked back and forth between Ash and Georgia nervously. “This is Ash’s first battle with only one eye…” she murmured. Then the Dragon Trainer straightened, cupped her hands over her mouth, and yelled, “You beat her once, Ash! You can do it again!”

    Axew nodded with a loud aggressive cry, “Axew Ax Axew!

    The referee raised his flags, “Let the Pokémon match begin!”


    ~*~

    I'm feeling pretty evil right now. If you want me to explain the surnames, let me know.
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    Oh, you evil person leaving the reader in a cliffhanger >=]

    I seriously don't like Georgia here. *makes a fist* Let me at her and don't think of holding me back

    I really loved the way you described each battle and keeping each character OC except for Georgia of course. Also how every character except for Georgia is considerate about Ash's eye and not pestering him about it. I feel so sorry for Ash. Iris is always there defending Ash which is cute ^^

    Although I wish Georgia would epically lose, I actually want to see her win (don't hit me). I only say this because there's a higher chance for Neko Ash to appear and also a higher chance for Iris to lash out all her anger out on Georgia when battling her I do hope for the best for Neko Ash ^^

    Yes! Trip finally wins!!

    "Sawk is unable to battle! Stunfisk winds, and the victory goes to Cilan!"

    Cilan straightened his bowtie rather smugly. "That's how we do it!" he said, and Stunfisk grunted in agreement.
    I think it was "wins" not "winds". This was the only mistake I found.
    Bowties are cool xD Doctor Who reference

    Keep up the good work Moonlight Absol

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    I keep doing that wind-win error,darn it! And I'm not going to spoil who wins the match--I'm going to leave you guessing. I just might pull a Higurashi on Georgia...it just depends. Neko Ash might reappear in the next chapter. Trip is awesome. He's supposed to be that way. I have followed suit.

    I'm guessing some of you have noticed the rather noticeable absence of Team Rocket. Does this bother you at all?

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    D'awwww, But I like Georgia. . Anyway's, great chapter, but could you hurry over to the shippy parts already? I know that you're planning out a complex anrrative here but still...

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    Hm, a non-violent chapter, WHAT HAPPENED. -shot- jks. Nah, nice chapter, nice change and feel but i feel like this was just another pokemon battle chapter, honestly that was it. nothing more. I could skip from the start to the end without readin the middle and not much would of changed. maybe you could of added little hints of Hunter J into the scene of maybe a bad evil plan in the last parts of this chapter. It would of given the cliffhanger a more hard sharp feel. Makes the readers start to kill themselves.

    Now i can't remember if you wrote anything about Ash's, Iris's or Cilan's rivals reaction to Ash's injury, in fact i wanted to read some sort of emotional scene about Ash's new view on life. You said at the start that Ash needed to time to adapt, you did mention it from time to time but nothing major to really keep me, informed about Ash's current mental and emotinal side. The rivals seems to not noticed Ash's missing eye or something, but if you did mention, i guess i have to re-read over it it.

    The hints are getting there, slowly, its a nice change. Keep up the great work. Oh yes, thank you for reading Ringer. I feel flattered when other shippers like pokeshippers or negiashippers read my stories. makes me feel happeh.
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    ScourgeofHell, the Shippyness is more noticeable in the next chapter. Don't worry. This was a bit of a building block chapter, to set the scene for the next few. I warned all you Georgia lovers out there...just wait until the next chapter! midnightjewlez, if you read through it carefully, I have woven some reaction from Ash's face. And later, he feels awkward because a bunch if people are staring at him. So look carefully.

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    Finished watchIng Umineko no Naku Koro ni! Yay!

    I frickin love this story! Nee, I already know the next chapter except the Pokemon matchup was quite different...It was a total type disadvantage for Satoshi-kun! Sigh, guess I'll have to work on my story... I hate Georgia for being a jerk to Iris, disrespectful to Cilan, and BEING A B**** TO SATOSHI-KUN!!!!! >:[]

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    Gaspeth! You cusser! I wanted to make it a lot less predictable...shut up and don't spoil

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    Quote Originally Posted by Moonlight Absol View Post
    Gaspeth! You cusser! I wanted to make it a lot less predictable...shut up and don't spoil
    I wasn't spoiling, Sis! Sheesh! Anyways, I'm ready for whatever happens, and I already know everything. Chapter Twenty us going to make me scream!!!!:'(. I was hoping for more Burgundy moments...…darn, I guess I have to wait for the next chapter! Wonder how'll you'll screw up the original, and Go MIJUMARU! Kick Langley's a**!
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    Stop cussing Ninja.

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    Sorry Sis! Meh, the rufff draft is almost done guys! Just that chapter, the n more Pokemon HunterJ! Can't wait for hanako, and I want to get to chapter twenty already!!! Grr!

    Yeah, I'm hyper today since I am stuck indoors due to rain, darn it. AL&SP will be updated as soon as the chapter done, then I'll pester Sis to working on J chater! Nee! Am…really…impatient…for …moore!!!!! Greer!
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    Lovely. Hang on guys, I'm working on the chapter right now, it's almost done!

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    Well, I said I would gte Chapter Eight done by Sunday, right? Here it is. It seems a bit cheesy, but please bear with us.

    ~*~

    Chapter Eight
    Gloomier, Gloomiest
    A battle is about to begin
    And a savagery is about be unleashed
    To the suffering, will there be a Fin?

    “Oshawott, use Water Gun!” Ash commanded. Oshawott jumped in the air before spitting a powerful stream of water. Georgia didn’t even seem fazed. “Beartic, use Ice Beam to counter!”

    Beartic opened his large jaws and a blue-white beam shot out, freezing the Water Gun attack. The ice stream clattered to the ground.

    Oshawott cringed at this. His Water attacks were useless unless he could get up close…

    “Oshawott, use Tackle!” Ash commanded, fear edging his voice. The Water Type launched himself at Beartic with stunning power and slammed into his stomach. The Freezing Pokémon reeled back, wheezing.

    “Beartic, shake it off and use Slash!” Georgia yelled to her Pokémon. Beartic straightened and his claws enlarged, now glowing a bright white. He launched his paw at Oshawott, who dodged in the nick of time. Panting, the Sea Otter Pokémon turned back towards his enemy. Beartic leered at him. Oshawott cringed again. The Pokémon felt a wave of terror for his opponent.

    Ash could sense Oshawott’s fear for the larger Pokémon. Georgia could too, apparently, as she quickly took charge of the battle. “Beartic, Slash again!”

    The Ice-Type’s claws lashed out at Oshawott. He jumped and dodged, but Beartic was too vigorous. Oshawott was flung to the ground, those evil claws right behind him.

    From the stands, Pikachu could be heard shrieking encouragement. “Pikapi Pikachu!” he shouted, clearly concerned. Axew whimpered as he watched. Cilan looked rather worried himself. “Neither of their attacks will do much damage…and Oshawott is smaller than Beartic…he can’t dodge all the time.”

    Iris’s ginger eyes were glittering with hatred as she gazed at Georgia. The Dragon Buster wore a smug expression, which ticked Iris to the core. “Come on Ash, you can do it!”

    Ash’s single eye darted towards Iris before flicking back to Oshawott. He swallowed as Georgia’s relentless Beartic’s Slash attacked Oshawott. The poor Water-Type was exhausted. Ash growled softly.

    “Looks like Ash is in a tight spot, eh Don George?” commented Freddy. Don George nodded. “Yes, Beartic’s relentless attacks aren’t letting up the slightest on Oshawott. I wonder if he can pull himself together…”

    “Oshawott, hang in there! Use Water Gun in Beartic’s face!” Ash shouted over Beartic’s grunts and Oshawott’s yelps. The Water Type flipped over and a stream of water smacked Beartic in the face, blinding him.

    “Now’s our chance, Oshawott! Use Razor Shell!”

    Oshawott grabbed his scalchop off his stomach and had the tan shell morph into a blue glowing sword before leaping at Beartic. He slashed at Beartic over and over, and the Ice-Type roared in pain.

    Georgia scowled at the nuisance. “Geez, you’re annoying. How can you win when you can only see out of half your face? Beartic, get into his blind side!”

    As Ash was stunned by the insult, Beartic slithered away from Oshawott and into Ash’s left side….where Ash had no eye.

    “And Georgia takes advantage and makes a break for it!” Freddy called out from his perch. Don George nodded with a grunt but said nothing.

    Iris shot Georgia a look that could kill. “Georgia, you’re playing dirty!” she snarled, and Axew let out a loud yowl of agreement. Pikachu’s cheeks were sparking.

    Ash felt a twinge of frustration and he gritted his teeth and tried to point his good eye in Beartic’s direction. Darn it! Beartic is going to staying my blind side during the battle now! This is foul play… “Oshawott, attack with Aqua Jet!”

    Unbeknownst to Ash, Oshawott was stuck in Beartic’s jaws. “Oshawott Osha Wott!” he wailed as he struggled. Ash felt himself begin to sweat. “Son of a—“

    Come on now, I expected more from my other self. came a voice. Ash jolted with shock as the world seemed to stop. What…?

    Come, come, don’t forget me already…remember me? the voice taunted. Ash growled in a rather ferocious manner. Cat-Like!

    That’s a stupid nickname. complained the voice. Meanwhile, Oshawott wriggled in Beartic’s grasp. The voice began to ridicule Ash. That’s so pathetic of you. Can’t you even battle with only one eye? I’m rather disappointed.

    Shut up…Ash thought desperately. Shut up… “Oshawott…” he whispered, feeling a quivering inside him. Crud…

    Cilan’s eyes narrowed. “This isn’t going to end well for Ash at all…” he muttered. Burgundy’s voice made him turn, “Oi, what happened to when he wiped out my flavors in the other tournament?” the Connoiseuse commented aloud. “This…isn’t even fair.”

    “You could say that again…!” snarled Iris. She gritted her teeth, feeling a deep fury begin to build. Georgia, when I get my hands on you…

    “Let’s wrap this up, Beartic! Rock Smash!” Georgia commanded. The Ice-Type smiled maliciously as he paws began to glow an orange shade. He tossed Oshawott out of his mouth and socked Oshawott back into Ash’s view. His single eye widened. “Oshawott…!”

    “Oshawott is unable to battle! Beartic wins, and the match goes to Georgia!” announced the referee. Ash shut his eye before returned Oshawott. “Thanks Oshawott, you deserve a good rest…”

    He opened his eye to Georgia’s smirk. “Pity you didn’t have a Dragon-Type. How does it feel to lose to the Dragon Buster, Rip-Face?”

    “….!

    …………….pathetic….”

    ~*~

    Ash adjusted his hat rather uncomfortably as he waited for Nurse Joy to return his Oshawott to him. He didn’t bother to stick around for the match-ups. The Kanto Trainer was more concerned about Oshawott’s condition, and what Georgia said.

    Rip-Face? He thought to himself, Am I really that ugly? I haven’t even looked at my reflection since the incident…! Is that why people keep staring at me?

    Ash felt a wave of uncertainty inside him. Pikachu chirped softly and patted his Trainer’s head, shifting his position on the Kanto Trainer’s shoulder. Ash stroked the Electric Type’s yellow head in response.

    “Hey, Ash, you okay?” came a voice from behind me. The raven haired boy didn’t bother turning around. “Yeah, I’m fine, Luke…really…”

    “It doesn’t sound like it.” Came his rather worried reply. “Iris was fuming and she went after Georgia. I seriously think she’s out for the kill…”

    “Iris probably won’t kill Georgia.”

    “Probably?”

    “………….”

    Ash snorted and turned back to Nurse Joy, who had approached the counter, holding Oshawott’s Poké-Ball. “Here’s your Pokémon, perfectly healthy~”

    “Thank you.” Ash said gratefully as he received the Poké-Ball from her. Pikachu squeaked in relief. Ash turned back to Luke again. “Where is everyone, anyways?”

    Luke pointed behind him. “They’re in the café area to eat dinner. I decide to fetch you.” he replied. Ash sighed and hooked the Poké-Ball back to his belt. “So…let’s go?”

    Luke nodded and waved him over. “Follow me.”

    ~*~

    “Hey, Ash, looks like Luke found you, eh?” commented Stephan as Ash walked in. The Kanto Trainer snorted in amusement, “Yeah, looks like it.”

    The group were sitting the same area of tables. Pikachu hopped onto the ground by the table. Burgundy patted a seat by her. Noticing the rather unappealing absence of Iris, he sat down beside her. “Hey, where’s Iris?”

    “Isn’t it obvious? She’s going to kill Georgia. Zut, she has temper issues…” Burgundy replied. Ash tittered at the remark. Then he turned, “Um, congratulations for winning the first round, eh?”

    The Connoiseuse nodded confidently. “Merci! Soon, I’ll get full revenge on Cilan for sure!”

    Ash sweatdropped, but said nothing. She’s eager for revenge, isn’t she…! He though to himself.

    “Hey Ash,” came a voice. Both Ash and Burgundy turned to see Cilan approaching them. “Hey Cilan.” Ash greeted the Connoisseur. Burgundy merely sniffed, and Ash sweatdropped again.

    “Hey, Zorua, where are you~?” came a singsong voice. Bianca was looking for Luke’s Zorua. “Déjŕ vu…” Ash muttered, smiling weakly. “Oi…” agreed Burgundy, and Cilan face-palmed. Bianca didn’t seem to notice and kept walking, calling out Zorua’s name in a sweet and charming tone. Luke groaned and stood up to follow the lively blonde.

    Heh, looks like things are the way they always have been… Ash thought to himself. No matter what happens, I shall always treasure these memories forever…

    The Kanto Trainer laughed quietly to himself at the melancholy thought. This wasn’t like him… haha, maybe I’m getting old~

    ~*~

    After a while, Iris came back from her hunt, looking annoyed. Axew hopped out of her hair and onto the floor, next to Pikachu. Ash raised an eyebrow. “Well, did you find her?”

    “No!” came Iris’s outraged reply. “I can’t find her anywhere!”

    Ash blinked, “Really? I think you missed a spot.” He replied. She shot him a filthy look. “Your such a little kid for—“

    “I actually haven’t seen Georgia since the match ended,” cut in Stephan. “Maybe she went on a walk or something?”

    Iris shook her head scornfully, “She’s probably hiding from me…!” she growled. Axew made a chirping noise from where he was sitting. Ash shook his own head, in disagreement, “Georgia probably isn’t hiding…”

    Cilan nodded in agreement, “Ash is right. Georgia would probably rather take it head on rather than hide…”

    Stephan shrugged before leaving, saying something about getting more food to eat. Ash sweatdropped.

    Burgundy snorted with disbelief, “Zut! Your rivalry with Georgia is worse than mine with Cilan!”

    Cilan sweatdropped at the comment. Ash rolled his eye at the scene. Iris muttered darkly under her breath. Burgundy shrugged nonchalantly.

    At this point Trip approached the group. Ash smiled at the younger Trainer and tapped the seat beside him. “Sit down, Trip.”

    Trip seemed to consider this for a few seconds before sitting beside his rival. His grey eyes darted around the room, but he said nothing.

    “So, what do you think of tomorrow’s matchups?” asked Burgundy. Trip turned to the Connoiseuse. “Apparently you’re going up against Luke, Burgundy. I wonder who will win…” Trip commented, more to himself than Cilan’s rival.

    Burgundy sniffed, “Of course I’m going to be the victor. The more wins, the close my victory against Cilan arrives!”

    Cilan smiled warmly, “Well, we’ll see…best of luck to both of you!” he said affectionately to the two. Was it his imagination, or was Burgundy blushing?

    Ash wasn’t paying attention, or maybe he didn’t care. He was rather irked by his loss with Georgia. I wonder why Cat-Like appeared just when I was losing? Was he trying to help me win? Or am I looking too deeply into this?

    “So, which one of you guys made it to the final round? I can’t really remember~” came a voice. Ash cursed inwardly as Georgia walked into the room, smiling smugly. Iris sprang and looked like she was going to attack Georgia. Ash stood and set a hand on her shoulder to restrain her.

    Georgia made the act of thinking hard, “Let’s see, Luke, Burgundy, Cilan, and luckily, you Iris. I would like to battle you and your Dragon-Types during this tournament.”

    Ash raised an eyebrow, and released Iris. Pikachu hopped onto the table, closely followed by Axew.

    “Pity we didn’t battle in the match today, and we’re not going to battle tomorrow either. I’m kind of disappointed.” Georgia commented. Ash snorted in reply. “What does that have to do with anything?”

    Georgia glared at him, “I was hoping for a more competent battle with a Dragon-Type, and not a battle with a weak half-blind opponent like you.”

    Ash made a noise like an angry cat, and Pikachu’s cheeks began sparking. Cilan and Burgundy started, and Axew let out a yelp. Iris shot Georgia a look that could kill.

    “What…?!” Ash said, and didn’t even notice how hard he was shaking. Iris blasted venom at the Dragon Buster, “Look, Ash isn’t weak and, and you should just shut up!”

    Georgia didn’t seem daunted, “Well, its true, isn’t it Rip-Face?”

    That did it. Ash’s hand clenched into a fist, and before anyone could react, he bolted out of the room without a word.

    “Hey, Ash!”

    “Pikapi!”


    ~*~


    Ash leaned against a tree behind the Pokémon Center, lost in thought. He knew it had been stupid of him to bolt, but he had thought more criticism would come out of it. So instead of facing the trouble, the Kanto Trainer merely ran away. It had just been the easiest thing to do.

    The words Georgia had said were racing through his head over and over, like a repetitive old tape. He half-sat, half-collapsed on the ground.

    “I was hoping for a more competent battle with a Dragon Type, not a battle with a weak half-blind opponent like you.”

    “Well, its true, isn’t it Rip-Face?”


    Ash started as these words coursed through his mind. Rip-Face? Is that what I look like? I haven’t even seen myself after…after…since my eye was torn from me! Is it really that… bad?

    “Hey, Ash, are you okay?”

    Ash jolted as Iris’s voice floated from behind him. The Kanto Trainer turned and saw her, ginger gaze full of concern.

    Iris approached him, and sat by him, ignoring his mutters of protest. Resting a hand on his shoulder, she spoke, “Ash… are you okay?” she repeated. Ash buried his face into his knees in an attempt to hide his blush and sudden surge of tears. “Yeah…?”

    There was a lengthy and thoughtful silence before Iris spoke again, “Hey, about what Georgia said…”

    “I don’t care,” Ash interrupted, “That jerk can say anything she wants, it won’t upset me.”

    Iris let out a rather exasperated sigh, “You’re lying.” she replied, squeezing his shoulder slightly. “I think you actually aren’t that bulletproof.”

    Ash snorted and looked up, “Well, I’m only human, aren’t I?”

    Iris blinked at the philosophic statement. “I suppose…” she muttered. Then the Dragon Trainer remembered something. “Oh, yeah! I found this in the Pokémon Center…”

    She dug her other hand into her bag and withdrew a blue checkered bandanna. Ash raised his eyebrow, but said nothing.

    Sighing at his clueless-ness, Iris adjusted herself so she was behind Ash. He jerked in surprise, but she ignored him and gently tied the navy cloth around the injured side of his face. With the bandanna secured, Iris returned to her previous position. After scrutinizing the baffled Ash for a while, she nodded and smiled at him, “It’s perfect!”

    The bandanna covered the disfigurement on Ash’s face. The Kanto Trainer lifted a hand to feel the cloth, before smiling at his companion. It was the most genuine smile Ash had displayed since he was mauled. “Thanks Iris!”

    The moonlight seemed to illuminate their joy.


    ~*~

    Later that night, everyone was asleep. The two had entered the Pokémon Center late that night and silently vowed to say nothing about what had happened between them. It had been a rather touching yet embarrassing situation.

    Cilan, however, was still awake. As he slipped on his Shadow Triad costume, he remembered what had happened those many nights ago…

    “I know, Chili…I know…”

    “I’m glad you understand.” Cress straightened as he said this. “Master Ghetsis is concerned. There are still a lot of people who refuse to liberate their Pokémon. Even with our negative evaluations and Master’s speeches, a lot of people aren’t listening.”

    Cilan gasped, “How? Is someone encouraging them? Is someone discouraging us? Or both?”

    “Both, unfortunately…” replied Cress sadly, “Several Trainers encourage people to keep their Pokémon and ignore Master’s speeches. Even Lord N is starting to get frustrated.”

    Cilan shivered. Usually N was calm and serene. To see him lose his temper was definitely something he would rather not see. A thought suddenly came to him, “This means its time for us to come out of the shadows, isn’t it? At least, that’s the fragrance I’ve received from the conversation.”

    “Indeed. We’re scheduled to meet with Master Ghetsis and Lord N in a few days, during the half moon, near Rightwing Town.”

    “We’re actually heading in that direction now,” reported Cilan. “We’re sure to get there in time.”

    All three nodded in agreement before heading back to where they had come from. Cilan moved back to the camp.


    ~*~

    Cilan silently leapt out of the window of the room and snuck through the trees. The half moon was high in the sky, pulsing faintly. Glancing back to make sure no one was tailing him, the Connoisseur continued on his way until he met up with a clearing, hidden by many a cluster of trees. Chili and Cress, also in their Shadow Triad clothing, were there as well.

    Ghetsis Harmonia and his son, N, were there as well. His single red eye seemed to pierce the three. The other was covered by a steel and ruby monocle. “Greetings Shadow Triad. You’re aware of what has led me to call the three of you here, correct?”

    “Yes, Master Ghetsis.” All three brothers replied simultaneously. N approached the trio somewhat cautiously, “People are preventing Pokémon from reaching their rightful liberation. We need you to take a step forward with this. You’ll have to take the Pokémon… by force.”

    Cilan swallowed hard. His usual pride always seemed to melt away in the presence of his Lord and Master. “If…If I may be so bold, but… by force, what are you suggesting?”

    N’s green eyes observed the Connoisseur with such intensity that Cilan didn’t dare to look up. “I mean…steal them. Quickly.”

    “Is someone else stealing the Pokémon for their own benefit?” asked Cress. Ghetsis nodded at the Water Type specialist. “Indeed. There have been sightings… of a Pokémon Hunter and disappearances of Pokémon. We will have to stop them if we are to succeed in our goal.”

    Cilan jerked. His mind was racing, Pokémon Hunter? Could… could Master Ghetsis be talking about Pokémon Hunter J? If so…

    Cilan hid his smile from his Master. If so I’ll gladly fight as a member of Team Plasma to take her down!

    ~*~

    What a cheesy way to end the chapter, I know. BTW, I make that "Maybe I'm getting old" comment a lot. Mainly because I'm the oldest of three XD. Please review people...
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    Oooo, Cilan is part of the Shadow Triad. Nice. Also the moment where Iris covered Ash's bad eye was cute, a cute moment between them both. I'm guessing we are now heading towards the climax of the story. Cilan as a ninja, XD makes sense why they weren't in the game at the end. haha. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Keep it up!
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    Ooooh, you're throwing in the Sanyo-city-Shadow-triad conspiracy thing. that should certainly raise the stakes

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    *walks in and sees Georgia. Inches closer to her and taps her on the shoulder. SLAP!!!!!!* That's what you get for doing that to Ash and Oshawott >=[

    This was a cute chapter. You can really see Iris' protective and caring side! I loved that touching moment they had <3 it was really sweet

    Cilan as a member of the Shadow Triad just makes him even more cooler than he already is \(*v*)/

    I already gave my opinion on Georgia...

    Wonderful chapter overall! I enjoyed reading it
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    I haven't watched Best Wishes but mainly play the games nowadays, but your title grabbed me. I liked how you included some of the game characters like Cress, Chili and N because it helped me make myself more familiar with the fic. I like the way you formatted the fic because it makes the story look a lot more organised. I think the way it's written is quite cool as well. I like it's sleek and simple style because it's easy to see what's going on. I think you've hit Iris' character really well in the story though.



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    Quote Originally Posted by midnightjewelz View Post
    Oooo, Cilan is part of the Shadow Triad. Nice. Also the moment where Iris covered Ash's bad eye was cute, a cute moment between them both. I'm guessing we are now heading towards the climax of the story. Cilan as a ninja, XD makes sense why they weren't in the game at the end. haha. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Keep it up!
    Yup, things are going to heat up. Especially with both Team Plasma and J on the prowl! Yes, she's still around. I personally think the Striaton Three- Shadow Triad theory works. It just makes this story more interesting :P

    Quote Originally Posted by ScourgeOfHell View Post
    Ooooh, you're throwing in the Sanyo-city-Shadow-triad conspiracy thing. that should certainly raise the stakes
    Most certainly. Who's side is Cilan on? Who knows! Oh yeah...me XD

    Quote Originally Posted by watericedragon View Post
    *walks in and sees Georgia. Inches closer to her and taps her on the shoulder. SLAP!!!!!!* That's what you get for doing that to Ash and Oshawott >=[

    This was a cute chapter. You can really see Iris' protective and caring side! I loved that touching moment they had <3 it was really sweet

    Cilan as a member of the Shadow Triad just makes him even more cooler than he already is \(*v*)/

    I already gave my opinion on Georgia...

    Wonderful chapter overall! I enjoyed reading it
    Yeah, I want to slap her, but I'd just break my computer. Darn. Yeah, Iris has a soft side with Ash. Hopefully we'll get more of this.

    Quote Originally Posted by C.Gholy View Post
    I haven't watched Best Wishes but mainly play the games nowadays, but your title grabbed me. I liked how you included some of the game characters like Cress, Chili and N because it helped me make myself more familiar with the fic. I like the way you formatted the fic because it makes the story look a lot more organised. I think the way it's written is quite cool as well. I like it's sleek and simple style because it's easy to see what's going on. I think you've hit Iris' character really well in the story though.
    Yay! A new reader! Welcome to my fanfiction :P. Thank you for your kind words. Trust me, the only character I screw up on is Ash's, and its already been corrupted anyways. So no big deal. The title is cool. I'll tell you guys the meaning later...if you want to know, anyways...

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    The explanation for how you came up with the title is long, but it was very unique. I could have never thought up of something that creative before. I applaud you for that!

    I'm going to say that Cilan is a good and bad guy in this story. Here is why: Cilan is part of the Shadow Triad who are currently working under Team Plasma. In this chapter, Cilan seems to show that he is very loyal to Ghetsis and would do whatever it takes to defeat anyone who interferes with Ghetsis' plans. In this case it's Hunter J who I completely forgot was in this story until now. So technically, if he defeats J, he's considered a good guy for defeating a foe that's a danger to his friends and to Team Plasma. However, since he's still a part of a devious organization, he's considered a bad. Unless of course he realises his mistakes and betrays Team Plasma.

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    Quote Originally Posted by watericedragon View Post
    The explanation for how you came up with the title is long, but it was very unique. I could have never thought up of something that creative before. I applaud you for that!

    I'm going to say that Cilan is a good and bad guy in this story. Here is why: Cilan is part of the Shadow Triad who are currently working under Team Plasma. In this chapter, Cilan seems to show that he is very loyal to Ghetsis and would do whatever it takes to defeat anyone who interferes with Ghetsis' plans. In this case it's Hunter J who I completely forgot was in this story until now. So technically, if he defeats J, he's considered a good guy for defeating a foe that's a danger to his friends and to Team Plasma. However, since he's still a part of a devious organization, he's considered a bad. Unless of course he realises his mistakes and betrays Team Plasma.

    Tell me the truth. Am I close or completely off?
    I agree. I'm pretty weird with my titles. I'm not going to say, but you are somewhere in the middle. I really don't feel like spoiling anyone here. That would suck :P

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    Darn, Lostface was a better name than Ripface. I thought up Gougeface but Moonlight Absol was like no so yeah. Georgia is a pain in my arse for bashing my favorite character like that. All right, where's my nata? I'm going to chop her up into pieces: head, left leg, right leg, left arm, right arm, and torso. Yes, i was readng Higurashi When They Cry, Abducted by Demons book one. i was realy bored.

    I always loved the idea of Cilan being in the shadow Triad. The outfit wwould look rratherdecent on him, and also when I was reading "Twins of Evil" on Fanfiction.net, GintaxAlvissForever made an extremly good point. You know the battle between Cilan and Burgundy in A Connoiseus's Revenge? Well, It would be a win-win for Cilan is he was a part of Team Plamsa. Think. If Cilan won, he would be able to huminliate Burgundy again (as in the raw, Dento was throwing what he had said in their firts battle right back in Cabernet's face), but if he won, Ash would be forced to release his Pokemon. Isn't that what Team Plasma wanted? So, that's what GintaxAlvissForever said.

    Cat Like is so mean. How dar he taunt Ash so? NAd the battle was a bit too short, in my opinion. Oshawott should've taken that crap and then retaliated with Shell Blade, which is countered with Rock Smash. Ash is trying to see but Georgia beats him to it and uses Icicle Crash, sending Oshawott the the other side of the field, kncoked out. That would've been better. Also, you haven't described Ash's wound to us. What does it look like? I know you described it later but ash hasn't seen it yet, right? When will he? And also, since Ash has gotton out of his character, can he laugh like Maria from When They Cry 03? I love her creepy laughs, and if Ash got to even act like Maria during her creepy modes I'll give you a Rare Candy from my Pearl game. Okay?

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    I thought Water types are resistant to Ice attacks. :/
    Anyhow, you shall be done with next chapter soon or I shall take Bulba's nata :3

    He shoulda went Dawnish and used Ice Aqua Jet
    USE SOME FF REFERENCES :3

    THE THIS CAT
    THE IS CAT
    THE HOW CAT
    THE YOU CAT
    THE KEEP CAT
    THE A CAT
    THE MOUSE-BRAIN CAT
    THE BUSY CAT
    THE FOR CAT
    THE 30 CAT
    THE SECONDS CAT
    NOW READ WITHOUT THE WORD CAT AND THE.

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    Quote Originally Posted by StarMasterWarrior View Post
    Anyhow, you shall be done with next chapter soon or I shall take Bulba's nata :3
    Tou shall not steal my precious nata, sir! Do you even know how BIG it is? Around 25 inches long! And mine has a spike on the end like Rena's.

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