Disclaimer: I do not own the Hyper Yo-Yo line, or the rights to any of the yo-yos that were licensed to it.
Synopsis: Young yo-yo players from different time periods are gathered to a futuristic stadium for a yo-yo contest like no other. Their host; a mad but well-meaning scientist with a passion for yo-yos. What are his true intentions?
Prologue: Set Up
Dr. Raymond Nakagawa, a mad genius with a childhood passion for the yo-yo, has finally done it; the creation of a high-tech stadium in which yo-yo contests would be held. However, his intentions for this creation, which he named the HyperDrome, are much, much grander. He had settled the HyperDrome in a separate pocket dimension where time runs differently than normal, as part of a most unusual plan; To gather young yo-yo players with raw potential from different time periods, and bring them to the HyperDrome for a yo-yo contest unlike any other.
Nakagawa had already found the first competitor from the present day, a young boy named Alexander Hemmerich, who lives in Nova Terrace, a neighborhood in Solar Valley, California. The 13 year old Hemmerich, who is nicknamed "Alexander the Great" by his peers, is the neighborhood yo-yo champ. Cool, patient, and collected, this lad possesses some mean yo-yo skills, particularly in offstring play. Of course, he also knows several good string tricks, as well, with a bit of looping on the side. He is also known to partake in parkour, and even applies it to perform all manner of showy and physically active yo-yo tricks, especially in offstring. Hemmerich is also infamous for an intimidating glare that he uses against his more arrogant opponents, even to get any point of his across. He is also known to be a hard person to bargain with, due to that glare, especially when it reads, 'Betray me on this deal, and I'll be coming for you!'. So, how did Nakagawa convince him to participate in his project? Well, let's just say that the good doctor promised Hemmerich that at least one of the yo-yoers would provide an interesting challenge.
At the moment, we see them discussing about the method through which Dr. Nakagawa would bring the other contestants to the HyperDrome. Hemmerich asks the good doctor, "So, you will be sending THOSE yo-yos to different time periods, each with an invitation
(This is a work in progress, so it's not finished yet)
Chapter 1: Enter the Contestants! Part 1 Coming Soon!
Last edited by AlxK9207; 28th March 2015 at 7:39 AM.
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There's a solution to this, though, and that's writing on a word processor. If you're writing on a laptop or PC (read: not a phone), there are definitely a ton of options out there, ranging from Microsoft Word (not free) to OpenOffice (free) to Google Drive (free and online). If you're on a phone, a lot of pretty neat advancements have been made recently, and you can find word processors for both Androids and iPhones. Writing in a word processor has a lot of benefits, but the most obvious one in this case would be that you'd have a place to save your work off the forums so you don't present stuff that's not ready for an audience.
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