I figure you mean "body slam" in that he unintentionally rammed his body into them, but initially read it as "like when Hulk Hogan picked up and slammed Andre The Giant" and was very perplexed as to why the hell he would do that? I guess he DOES owe that Golduck. LOL. Not a mistake on your part, but my pop-culture ensoaked brain gave me a tremendously funny visual. Thanks for that!he woke Golduck and Nuzleaf, and proceeded to body slam them.
I can't believe I JUST thought of this: Why didn't the Pokeflect save Dorian from that attack, anyway? (I'm still SUPER interested in this device)“You’re not making any sense. Did Golduck hit you too hard? Is that it? It didn’t look any stronger than usual.”
Good last line. Very foreshadowy.The scene depicted on the stone was odd, almost disturbing. However, even as the thought grew in her mind, it gently slipped away
I LOL'ed.“You mean he trusts me,” she said, smiling coyly.
“Yes, he explicitly said that several times,” he admitted
Kind of a silly moment since we haven't seen this side of Shelton at all. But again...I LOL'ed.“That’s why you’re so excited!”
“Any other time, I would call attention to the fact that were both yelling!”
“Same here, but this occasion calls for it!”
“Yes!” she agreed.
Was someonbe watching Mean Girls when they wrote this? It seems really derivative of the "fetch" dialogue.“Let’s do it!” Dorian announced. “Strap on the nitro!”
“Really?” Shelton asked, “Come on Dorian, we talked about this for like half an hour.”
“Come on, just give it a chance,” he pleaded.
“No. That catch phrase is never going to catch on. Besides that, its barely a catch phrase. Its just random words that have nothing to do with our current situation.”
-I like the quick, zippy dialogue here, because I usually write a lot of that (my fic hasn't given me much of a chance yet, but que sera sera). I really like two characters going back-and-forth in a rapid succession. SOME of the lines there seemed a little forced (the "Last word freak" one stuck out to me), but by-and-large, it was a lot of fun to read. I enjoyed that part a lot.
-It's good seeing the plot develop here, and I like the irony that Dorian is leaving Johto for Kanto while Ethan is doing the opposite. Good job removing both characters from their element. I look forward to getting to chapter 4 tomorrow.