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    Chapter 1

    Thunder boomed across a gray, pouring sky with a loud shout. The rain didn't let up its assault on the soft, muddy earth, cleaving off leaves, and even full branches alongside the wrathful wind. All the Pokémon of the bombarded forest fled for whatever shelter they could find- to their own little huts- but they still couldn't escape the harassment of the elements. But one Pokémon decided to stay: a lone Lucario.

    He sat on a fallen trunk as if the storm around him wasn't happening, meditating with arms crossed while the impaling rain pelted his fur. The others poked their heads out from their huts, to watch this mad Pokémon in shock and awe. They all watched with the same question on their minds: has he gone insane? The weather didn't treat the challenger kindly, it cracked the sky with many blades of lightning in several attempts to faze the blue jackal. Lucario denied it the courtesy of even twitching his eyelids to the disaster.

    The Pokémon calmly stood from his log, ignoring the continued fits of thunder and lightning happening around him. No matter how much the downpour drenched his fur like a wet towel, or the screaming wind tore it off, he payed no mind to nature's childish tantrum.

    He brought both paws to the middle of his chest. Through the thick curtain of rainfall, the cowering denizens observed a faint bluish light he summoned, growing brighter while cutting through the grayness. Their eyes became fixated on the Lucario, who focused his aura into a single point, growing it larger, and larger, and larger, until it all collected into a large ball of light. Why did he want to practice his moves in a time like this, they all asked themselves, he really must have gone mad. Their scared and sheltered auras shrieked in his ears, questioning his guts without understanding the pure thrill moments like this give him. When face to face with death, he felt more alive.

    Life and power flowed from every vein in his body, and into the Aura Sphere, it squealed in a soothing, high-pitched tone. He could just feel it- this was the most powerful Aura Sphere he ever made. But if he wanted to show nature's wrath its place, he needed more to his power. In the middle of trees falling right beside him, to shots of lightning threatening to strike him down, he stood firm, charging his attack. Suddenly something distracted him from reaching his attack's fullest potential: the insides of his body shook violently, like his heart was somehow causing an earthquake. A loud, shrieking voice harassed his thoughts, growing louder and louder the more he tried to ignore it-

    “Wake up! WAKE UP! WAKE UP!!!”

    The voice rung through Oran's ears, static screeching in his head like nails on a chalkboard. He opened his scarlet eyes wide, but gave the morning light a chance to burn his little eyeballs out. He rubbed the blindness out with his fist, but sadly the first thing he had to see in the morning was Loudred, the guild's living alarm clock, looming over his side. The first thing he saw every morning was always him. “WAKE UP, YOU'LL BE LATE FOR GUILD LESSONS! YOU'LL BOTH BE LATE,” the Big Voice Pokémon blared with his large, gaping mouth to both him and his still sleeping sister. Sometimes, Oran wondered to himself if Loudred could even hear himself talk; then his mind would answer back: he has Soundproof, of course he can't. Some Pokémon just don't know what an “off button” is.

    “Rrgh.” The Riolu forced his groggy body from the pile of hay that he called a “bed”, dusting off the itchy straw from his black and blue fur. A little weak in his knees, his body felt heavy, and had a little jiggle to his stance, as if he was about to collapse any second into his hay pile for a few more Z's. “Do we have to get up so early?” He asked.

    “YOU HAVE WORK TO DO TODAY. YOU BOTH DO. HOW WILL YOU WORK IF YOU BOTH ARE SLEEPING IN?!” Loudred screamed. Regardless of the time of day, it was as if Loudred had a sadistic fancy for bursting other Pokémon's ear drums.

    “Agh, okay, okay,” the pup yielded, folding his ears over themselves to block out as much of that Pokémon's screeching roar as possible. “We'll be there! We'll be there!”

    “BE THERE AT THE ASSEMBLY HALL, SOON. OR ELSE YOU'LL TALK TO THE GUILDMASTER AGAIN.” With nothing else left to say, and his job done, the Loudred stomped out of the room.

    “Geez, how loud can that guy get?” Oran asked himself, while rubbing his aching head clear of that painful voice of his. “Just listening to him should be its own work.”

    “I thought you wanted the guild life,” His sister yawned while shaking her body awake. For being the oldest sibling of the duo, she stood no taller than her brother, only a foot and four inches to his two feet four inches. Typical of a Buneary, she could rival a Teddiursa in cuteness, even after waking up. Despite being the older sibling, her baby brother towered over her by a foot. For her lack of height, she compensated with a quick tongue, sharper than any Seviper's tail. “Only a week in, and you're giving up. I knew you were just bluffing about joining.”

    “I want adventure,” he replied. “I joined to be just like mom, and explore the Unido Region! I joined to learn how to use my aura powers! But I've just been getting chores ever since I came here. Speaking of which, how can you deal with him screaming every morning?”

    “Soundproof,” Pecha joked.

    “Whatever, let's just go, already.” With no more words he wanted to say to her, the two left the morning awkwardness of their quarters with a walk to the assembly hall; It was just an appetizer warm-up to prepare their bodies for the mountain of warm-ups that awaited them for the day.

    The assembly hall was nothing but a meadow of grass inside a stone dome, lit by the many torches lining the restrictive walls of the guild. Wind could only flow through the opening at the top of the dome.

    The room filled with the gathering members, still a bit sluggish from their ears being assaulted so early in the day. Among the growing mass: Normal, Grass, and Bug outnumbered all other types, including Oran, the lone Fighting-type. Big and small, strong and weak, there's no such thing as discrepancy at the Florges Guild- only teamwork and happiness.

    Pecha and Oran walked into the conversing crowd, with only talks of job requests floating around to be heard. Oran could only catch white noise as he dug around in his own ears, trying to clear out Loudred's lasting echo.

    “Okay, the first thing we should do is find Azumarill for our duties,” Pecha told herself while exploring the hall, with Oran tailing her.

    “Sis, what are you doing?” he asked his big sis while watching her wander. “The job board is that way,” he pointed the opposite direction they were walking, though Pecha refused to pay his notion any mind. “Why don't we just skip the chores, and grab a request while they're still good?”

    “Because we're not big enough for those requests,” she replied to him with a blunt tone wreathing with irritation, about what she was uncertain, “I prefer being prepared over running into things head first.”

    “But Azumarill's jobs are so boring! I mean, garden maintenance? Cooking? Sentry duty? Those are boring! I want an adventure!”

    “Aww, how cute,” the Buneary stopped, teasing her brother as if what he said was absolutely precious, “you're so eager to take down a Legendary! Everyone, run away from the big, bad Riolu!”

    “Cut that out,” he demanded, “I can tell when you're being sarcastic! I'm being serious!”

    “Hmm? Me? Sarcastic?” She hummed, her left paw coyly placed by her mouth. “You must be saying things.”

    “I'm not!” His sister's words stung him under his skin like a swarm of Beedrill. He pushed her to the grassy ground with his full upper body, thinking that would stop the teasing. She hit the soft lawn with a thud, her adorable fur coat got painted with mud and grass stains!

    No matter how much she scraped her paws across her pelt, the stains never came out. “My fur! Oran, you jerk!” when she got back up to her feet she gave her brother a taste of his own medicine, returning the push he gave her; a war between siblings soon erupted: while each side pulled at the others' ears and fur, neither stood an advantage without grunting an angered, painful moan. The fight quickly took to the ground, with Pecha jumping onto her brother, pinning him down under the weight of her bottom. Oran squirmed for freedom, but his sad attempt only put a wide grin across his sister's face, “Ha! What are you gonna do now, Mr. Big Bad Riolu?”

    “Get off me, Pecha,” Oran barked.

    “Say, 'pretty please',” she said, ignoring the painless flailing her brother's giving her. “Now say you're sorry.”

    “Never!” Too determined to give up in the face of his vain sister, he flailed even harder with every free limb he could control; to his disdain, even then, progress remained constant- he withered himself, while the punished only felt slight tickles to her skin.

    “You always wanna do things the hard way,” She teased him some more.

    “Of course,” he huffed under the little breath Pecha's weight squeezed out from his lungs, “H-how else'll I become strong? At least I'm not taking the backseat, like you!”

    “That's not what I'm doing-!”

    their vocal war soon broke to the cry of a peacekeeper, “Ch-children, please, stop fighting!” The gentle calling somehow was powerful enough to reach the two through the collective chattering of their surrounding, yet soothing enough to quell the children from fighting anymore. Pecha and Oran looked up with puzzled eyes to find Azumarill, the Guildmistress' assistant, on the verge of tears. “Wh-why are you two fighting? Don't you love each other?” She asked them in a faint voice, almost ready to break into a waterfall.

    “Azumarill, tell Pecha that we're ready for a job request,” Oran told her at the top of his lungs, still struggling to catch breath from Pecha being on top of them.

    “Be quiet, Oran, you're going to get us in trouble,” the Buneary hissed in his ears.

    “I was told to bring you two to the Guildmistress' chambers this morning,” She told them.

    Oran couldn't ignore the large pit that just dropped in his stomach; Loudred couldn't have reported him to her already! As his sister released him from the ground, he caught several quick gasps of air, then spoke, “w-w-w-wait, Azumarill, I-I can explain: I was going to wake up on time, this morning, I swear!”

    “Huh? What are you talking about? Miss Florges said she had something special for you two.”

    A moment of confusion befell the pair, which quickly sparked into a flame of curiosity that sparkled in their eyes. “Really? What is it?” The children asked her in high hopes.

    “She wanted it to be a surprise,” Azumarill told them. Seeing the children not attempting to kill each other any more, her smile broke from the confiding gates of her own blues. “Are you interested in finding out?”

    The children needed no words- their expressions of joy were enough to speak to the Aqua Rabbit Pokémon. They followed the assistant through the morning crowd, in hopes of finding out the secret.
    Last edited by 0bss1d1ankn1ght; 10th November 2015 at 6:58 PM. Reason: merged prologue into chapter 1; fixed spelling and grammar errors

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    Chapter 2


    A wonderful fragrance sneaked up the kids' noses as they entered an indoor garden with Azumarill; just one step in, and their morning grumpiness melted away like snow during the springtime. Rows upon rows of fresh earth supported different beds of flowers: from beds of blood red roses in front of bushes of deep sea blue hydrangeas, to budding lilies as pure white as snow sitting next to a field of vibrant purple lavender, their gardener had a taste for variety.

    A slender figure rose from behind a bush: she had flawless, pure white skin, whiter than any Floslass' ghostly dress. Her circular head ended in a slim, pointed nose, with long, tear-shaped ears dangling from both sides. Sometimes, she liked to blink for the sake of batting her overtly long, luscious green brows. She wore an entire garden of blue flowers around her neck; she was a living, walking, talking bouquet. Two black diamonds covered her like a bra, while the rest of her body gave an impression of a dark green dress. She had no feet; rather, her lower half ended in a mermaid tail, with two large leaves as her fin. “Ah, good morning, children,” She spoke in a motherly tone, sweet and soft to every ear.

    “Guildmistress Florges, what's our sur-?”

    “What's our surprise?” Oran eagerly cut his sister off. She grunted a frustrated sigh, with arms crossed.

    Seeing children act like children brought a slight chuckle to the Guildmistress, “well, aren't you two so eager, today. Come here, children, I have something to show you.” They ran over to Florges, as she pulled out a neatly folded piece of paper. Oran's eyes lit up brighter than any star in the sky at its sight.

    “Is that-?”

    “You both have been working hard this past week,” Florges said, “And I thought it might be time for your first job request.” She opened the folds of the paper with care, and showed the duo its inscriptions. “Here, children- read this-”

    Maranga Berries Needed

    It is that time of year, again, Florges Guild: the time when the Maranga berries are in their prime for the picking. I would like a handful of Maranga picked from the Verde Forest, about five should do it. Hmm, yes, five would do just nicely. A very generous payment of 5,000 Poké will be rewarded.

    -Slowking

    “What? Berry picking?” Oran complained; just as his hopes were raised up high, they crashed back down to earth like a meteor.

    “Hmm? I thought you wanted a job,” Florges said, a bit puzzled about the little one's reaction.

    “Don't mind Oran, Miss Florges, he's too picky for his own good. I appreciate your gift, though,” Pecha told the guild leader with an impressive set of manners for a kid her age; though, if you asked Oran, she only said it to prove how much more perfect she was than him.

    “Am not!”

    “Tell me, Oran: what do you find so unsatisfactory about this request?” Florges asked with open ears ready.

    He stood there, looking away from her eyes while fiddling with his paws; there weren't any words he could say to clear out the lump in his throat. At least anything that won't make her mad, anyways. With his sister forcing him so far into a wall, a risk had to be made, and his displeasure had to come out somehow. “W-well, I...i-it's just...i-it doesn't sound fun to me.”

    “What do you mean?”

    “I-I don't know. I don't want to make you mad, Miss Florges.”

    She smiled, seeing through his childish game, “It's okay to tell me, Oran, dear. You won't make me mad.”

    “R-really?”

    “I understand, you're an adventurous type. But you want the big journey all too soon; it's better to first take small steps to achieve your dream, rather than giant leaps. In fact, some of the greatest explorers started off with requests like these.”

    He gave it a small thought; if some of the greats had to go through this, he might as well, too. “Okay. I'll do it.” He told her.

    “What are so special about these berries, that the guy asked us to pick them for him?” Pecha asked. “Can't he pick these himself?”

    “Maranga berries don't grow just anywhere,” the Guildmistress explained, “Only a certain area of the Verde Forest can sustain their growth; we're located near that area. Every year, around this time, Slowking would request this, all the way from Azul Shores. I like to save these requests for newcomers to the guild, like you two. The Maranga bush is located not too far from here: just follow the trail, and you'll find it.”

    “But what if we get attacked by a wild Pokemon?” Pecha asked.

    “The guild is in good terms with the Pokemon of the forest; there shouldn't be any trouble.
    But just in case,” Florges handed them a small leather bag, shaded in a deep brown all across its surface. Its contents interested the duo the most: inside its dark green walls were a pair of bandannas, one green, and one red. Pinned to them were two glimmering bronze badges. Oran held the winged pokeball up close, and saw the start of his dreams reflect off its metallic surface. As he tied his red bandanna around his furry neck, his heart beat with a feeling of connection, like he felt he became a piece to something great, just by putting that scarf on. “wear these- as long as they see those badges, they'll know who you are.”

    “You chose the red one, Oran? I wanted the red one,” Pecha complained.

    “You can have the green one,” he replied. His sister's paw lunged towards his neck, aiming to take from him what she thought belonged to her.

    “Children, no-!” no matter how many times Florges cried out in shock, she couldn't reach their ears. As Pecha kept violently pulling on his scarf, he could only pull back from her in pure desperation to catch a breath.

    “Come on, Oran, give it to me!”

    “N-no, I chose it first!”

    “I'm older than you! I'm supposed to get first choice!”

    “That's enough!” Florges lifted the bratty bunch off the ground by their scruffs, quelling their inevitable bloodbath. She looked at the Buneary, with not a single sign of approval in her eyes, “I am very disappointed in you, young lady! That is not the kind of behavior I expect from you!”

    “But he took the one I wanted!” She said.

    “That doesn't give you any reason to attack him!” After a quick breath, the Guildmistress continued with tested composure, “Pecha, dear, it shouldn't matter which one you choose.”

    “But I don't like green,” she whined to the Guildmistress. “It clashes badly with my fur!”

    “That should be the last thing to worry about when you go out there,” Florges yelled. “Not liking it I understand, but I won't put up with that kind of spoiled behavior! Apologize to Oran.”

    The Buneary crossed her arms, and puffed her face. She hoped her agitated expression would get across to the Florges, but looking into the angered glare of the Guildmistress changed her reluctant stand. “I'm sorry, Oran,” she said hesitantly, without batting an eye to him. The Guildmistress offered the Buneary the scarf, though Pecha hesitated to take it. She already foresaw the humiliation awaiting her if she put that gaudy thing around her neck; but she also foresaw worse if she kept the Guildmistress waiting. Swallowing her pride, she snatched the scarf from Florges' hands, and tied it loosely around her neck.

    “Well, aren't you two just the cutest, little explorers this region has ever seen~!” Florges praised them both, almost like she forgot about her rage a moment ago. “It's like those badges were practically made for you. Now, remember: there's no rush, just do your best.”

    Oran threw the strap of the bag over his shoulder, and bolted for the door, “Don't worry, Miss Florges: we'll get those berries faster than you can say 'Extremespeed'! Let's go, Pecha!”

    “I'm coming,” She shouted, trying to catch up to the speedy half-pint. All was quiet in Florges' chambers, once again.

    Florges returned to planting a rose bud in a fresh spot of dirt, without noticing her assistant standing behind her. “They're a rowdy bunch, aren't they? I can barely keep up with them,” Azumarill said.

    “Oh, they're just children,” Florges replied, while patting down the dirt around her bud, “though I wish they wouldn't fight over the littlest of things. I know they'll grow into wonderful Pokemon, one day; they're just young seedlings awaiting their time to bloom. I know they'll make the guild proud. Extremespeed.”

    Despite the morning heat hiding behind the thick foliage of the Verde Forest, the boiling hot air tried to get to the minds of the two explorers; Oran ignored it all with a smile, knowing this was just a part of the experience, yet Pecha knew none of these conditions would do her fur any justice. They traveled the fresh, muddied path for what felt to them like hours, when it's only been an uncomfortable ten minutes.

    No matter how much Pecha pushed herself, she couldn't match her brother's eager speed. Each time she took a step, the soft ground latched onto her paws, and refused to let go. “Rrgh, Oran, can you slow down a minute?” Her constant struggle over her feet with the earth stretched the distance between her and her brother. Watching Oran practically breeze over the clingy road only agitated her more.

    “How about you hurry it up a little, Slowpoke?” He replied.

    “Easy for you to say- you don't have short, stubby legs! I can barely walk in this mud!”

    “Isn't this what you signed up for? Why are you so afraid of getting a little mud all over you?” He asked while keeping his eyes on the winding path.

    “It's because I'm not made for these conditions,” she replied with an exhausted huff.

    “That's funny, I thought you appreciated Miss Florges' gift,” he chuckled. “Who's the picky one, now?”

    The most bitter of tastes tingled her tongue; she kept her silence about her while being fed her own medicine by the hands of her own sibling, the bitter taste soon turned sour. “Let's just find the berries, already.”

    “Look!” Their strenuous journey paid off. The path lead them to a dead end, with their target in sight: waterlocked by a small pond, the trail led straight to a small bush; a beam of sun broke from the tree lines, warming the vibrant green leaves of the plant. “That must be the Maranga berry bush!”

    “Are you sure about that?” Pecha asked, unable to soak in the same belief as her brother.

    “It must be; Miss Florges did say the path will take us to the bush, didn't she?” He said, rushing off to collect the fruits.

    The Buneary observed the softly rustling waves of the pond; within the light brown muddy waters, she noticed a large, shadowy blot escape her sight, like something was swimming in the murky pool, jetting towards Oran. Her normally rolled up ears perked up straight in the air, and each strand of her fur stood on end as a slight chill tingled up her spine. It was her own personal warning to herself- soon, they might have company. “U-uhm, Oran, I think those berries might already be taken,” she tried passing him on her warning, but he insisted on ignoring her. “Oran!”

    Oran ignored his sister's cry in the background as he admired the Maranga in his palm: a somewhat weighty berry, with thick, sickly green skin, and small prickles protecting it from the abuse of its holders' hands. Three longer spikes grew from the butt of the fruit. “Good, that's one down,” He sung to himself while placing the fruit in his leather sac.

    “Oran, look out!”

    “Hmm?” A loud splash broke from the pond as something shot out of its murky depths, and shook the ground around the little Riolu with a menacing thump. The monster was a light bluish blob, towering over Oran. He stared at him, his dotted eyes and dimwitted smile were frozen in a permanent state of pure bliss and oblivion, not caring to express his interior of never-ending pain and suffering. His smooth, slimy skin glimmered off of the sun's touch. His arms and feet were like flippers, with each owning three digits. The loomed over the Riolu with disturbing closeness; to the monster, there was no such thing as the concept of personal space. “Do you mind, pal?” Oran asked it. “you'll have your turn when I'm finish-”

    From nowhere Oran met the brute force of the creature's tail, throwing him into the waters like he was just a ball. He flailed about like a Magicarp on land, struggling to keep his head above the water for air. “Oran!” Pecha ran to his side, lending her paw to her gasping brother.

    With all her strength she fished the heavy pup onto dry land. Oran wagged most of the moisture out of his short fur, glad he could fill his lungs with air, once again. “Y'know...a 'Please, get out of my way'...would have been nicer!” He shouted at the Quagsire.

    “You should have listened to me, Oran! I tried telling you a about that guy,” Pecha said.

    “Hey, you: we're from the Florges Guild, and you're interfering with our business!” Oran flashed his badge at the Pokemon, but failed to even catch a side glimpse from him.

    Quagsire ignored the duo like they weren't even there, slowly picking a berry at a time off the bush, and then downing it whole. From the look of things: he perfected the art of swallowing his food in one bite to a disgusting fault. “H-hey! You're eating them all!” Oran charged at the Water Fish Pokemon, delivering a barrage of feeble flails to its backside without even fazing it. “Stop! Eating! Them! All! Give me a hand, Pecha!”

    “Pound!” Pecha unrolled her long bunny ears, and used them to deliver devastating punches to the Quagsire's back. Even with the added efforts of his sister, they were mild thumps to the creature, barely doing anything besides getting their bodies covered in his slime. Berry by berry, the Quagsire dried the bush out without even acknowledging their failed attempts for his attention.

    “What other moves do you know besides Pound?” Oran asked.

    “Nothing that'll help us at the moment,” Pecha replied.

    “Yeah, same here; I'm gonna try something else!” He seized his pitiful flailing and took several steps back. With all the running power he could gain, he leaped off the ground and threw his feet out in front of him before impacting with the Pokemon's back. Quagsire's squishy body absorbed his dropkick with ease, and threw him back on the muddy trail. “Ye-yeah, so that didn't work,” he whimpered as he picked his aching body back up.

    “Have any more bright ideas for wasting our time?” His sister asked, continuing her Pound attack on the Quagsire. The berries disappeared by the second, and nothing they did could slow the monster down. With each sound of its gulp, their success grew slimmer and slimmer.

    At the latest of times, a simple idea came to the Riolu's head. He got up to his wobbly feet, and harvested the berries on the other side of the bush while Quagsire was busy on the other. “There, that's two. Three.” The spiny shells of the fruit pricked his hasty paws as he grabbed them, but he ignored the slight pain. “And here's fou-”

    A stream of water blasted through the bush, launching the Riolu back into the moat with enough pressure to break through rock. “Oran!” His sister shouted.

    “N-now's not the time for me to practice my swimming!” He flailed around in the water, hoping he would eventually reach the shore. His arms and legs failed to do anything but ache, giving the water a wonderful opportunity to swallow him whole.

    “Ya know, for a happy Pokemon, you're awfully violent!” The Quagsire slammed her away from him with his massive tail. “Oomph!” she rolled across the wide path, stopping at the very edge where land stopped and the water began. Before she got back up, the Quagsire dropped into the pond with a lazy body slam that showcased its full grace.

    Oran could barely see anything in the cloudy belly of the pond as he slowly sank to the bottom. He patted the bag with a soft touch, feeling its contents were still safe and secured inside. “Well, this is just great,” he thought to himself while keeping his mouth shut tight, “how am I supposed to get myself out of this, now? I don't think more kicking would help me now. If only the guild taught me how to swim, I wouldn't be having this problem; but nope, gardening is a waaay more useful ability to have!” A subtle cramp in his lungs grew more noticeable, demanding he should take a breath in the coming time. Whenever he made an all-or-nothing attempt to surface, he only caused the cramp to worsen. “Man, I'm really in trouble, aren't I? I can't let this be the end! My dreams of exploring have only started! I-I need to get out of this mess, and fast!”

    From a distance he spotted a shadow moving towards him. As much as he wanted to believe it, from the back of his mind, he knew it wasn't Pecha- she couldn't swim that fast underwater, let alone this deep. The speedy figure made itself out quickly: Quagsire. His mouth agape, he aimed to swallow Oran's bag, along with the pup as an optional bonus. “No, no, no, no! Stay back!” While delivering multiple kicks to the Quagsire's malleable face, Oran kept his sac away from him within arm's length. The Water Fish circled around his target, trying to find a way to work around the jackal pup's sad game of underwater Keep Away, but the only thing he found was Oran's foot constantly bombarding his forehead.

    Quagsire took in a hefty breath, and pushed his opponent out of the belly of the pond with a merciless Water Gun. “Aaaaaaaagh!” The powerful stream broke Oran through the surface of the water, and launched him high into the air, before he dropped back onto dry land with an unkind face plant.

    “Oran!” Pecha ran over to help pick himself up. “Are you okay? We're too underpowered to fight him- we need to head back to the guild!”

    After spitting out a mouthful of dirt, Oran responded, “Are you asking me to run away, while it just started to get fun?” He stood to his wobbly feet as his senses returned to normal. His sister shielded herself from the nasty rain produced by her brother wagging his wet fur.

    “Everything we throw at him just bounces right off of him, Oran. I'm not asking us to run away- I'm asking us to take a tactical retreat.”

    “You can run away all you want,” he replied with a confident growl, “I'm staying to complete our mission; and I won't let even a hundred Quagsire get in my way!”

    The Quagsire jumped out of the moat and onto the trail, waddling towards the bratty duo; Pecha felt it from a distance: his permanent, carefree smile seethed with unimaginable rage aimed at them for interrupting his meal; to him, a thorough punishing was in order. Her mind debated on two opposite actions: take her brother back to the guild by force; or help her brother stand against this Pokemon. The more she thought about it on the spot, the more Oran's point gained her favor: they were on a mission, and they should see to its completion, whether she liked it or not. She caved in to her decision, “All right, fine. You wanna stay, Oran? I'll stay, too; as the eldest, it's only right that I lend a paw.”

    Oran couldn't believe it: for once, his ears caught the magical sound of his sister caring for him, even if it was just for this moment. He and his sister, finally working as a team, the very thought failed to keep his emotions locked tight behind his eyes. “Th-thanks, sis,” he sniveled while rubbing his face clean of tears, though he kept a certain level of toughness about himself.

    “But we can't fight this guy directly, he'll just shrug us off completely.” As the Quagsire drew nearer with each sluggish step, she had to devise a plan on the spot. “we need a plan.”

    “What is it?”

    Her throat dried up like a desert and closed on itself, as if it didn't want to speak of her embarrassing idea. But she gave her best wording it out, “I'm going to Attract him. While I have him distracted, you can pick however many berries you need left. Then, you will Quick Attack the both of us out of here. Can you remember all that?”

    “Sounds easy enough.”

    The Quagsire closed in on the duo with each slow step. Pecha gulped away whatever quick changes of heart she had about her plan; for it to work, she had to walk out of her comfort zone. “O-okay, you can do this, Pecha,” she told herself for a quick hype up. “J-just like what mom taught you. Just ignore that bad taste in your mouth, and do it.”

    She tapped into her inner well of cuteness. The approaching Quagsire stopped to watch the little Buneary sway her body back and forth, and found himself thrown into a fantasy occupied by only the two of them. She blew him a kiss carried by the wind, and stole his heart through all his fat and blubber. When she looked into his eyes, she noticed his face turning a faded lavender hue, and all rage that once filled his smile turned to courtship. Everywhere the Buneary jumped, the Quagsire followed after her like a love-struck puppy; she played her own version of Keep Away with the Water Fish Pokemon, trying to keep herself out of his grasp. “Okay, Oran, go,” She called out, “you have no idea how uncomfortable this feels!”

    While his sister distracted the beast, he rushed over to the Maranga bush, to carry out his side of the plan. Quagsire's Water Gun did a number on the inner branches of the plant, a gaping hole, clear of all leaves and produce, showed only its spine. The prickly fruits were scattered across the dirt, some even floated around in the moat. He placed the berries into his overly soaked bag, carefully avoiding their spiky shells as he placed his hand around them. In a matter of seconds, all five were accounted for. “Okay, Pecha, I got 'em!”

    “Gimme a sec.” Pecha stood still over the edge of the moat, with the infatuated Quagsire closing in on her. He reached down to grab her with his stubby flippers, but to his surprise- she took a step to the left. The Pokemon splashed into the pond without a care in the world. “Okay, I had enough fun for today.” She latched onto her brother's soaking wet back with a vice grip.

    “Quick Attack!” Before the Quagsire even poked his head out of the water, the children disappeared like ghosts, with only a trail of dust to prove of their existence. He dunk his head back into the pond.

    Florges found herself dumbfounded at the sight of Oran when he returned to her chambers: she stared at him mouth agape, amazed at how much dirt and scent of pond muck his fur collected after such an easy mission. “O-oh, my, what on Earth happened to you two?” She asked. “How did you get so dirty? And where is your sister?”

    “We fought a Quagsire,” Oran yelled with a shout brimming with glee. “Pecha went back to our room to groom herself.”

    “Y-you fought...a Quagsire?” Of all the Pokemon she knew living in the Verde Forest, she had no recollection of a Quagsire.

    “Yeah, but it got real mean whenever I got close to the Maranga berries.”

    “B-but at least you didn't attack it first, correct? You only attacked it in self defense?”

    “Mm-hmm, but none of our attacks could harm him; so Pecha came up with a plan to distract him while I cleared the mission,” he said passing his bag of contents to Florges. The leather sac felt heavier in her hands, not from what it held, but from what it absorbed from the pond. She flipped over its cover, and counted all five Maranga berries within its belly.

    A slight smile and a sigh of relief broke across her worried expression; knowing the children found a way to get out of trouble safely, she learned to rest a little easier. “I'm glad the two of you returned safely. I'm sure you enjoyed your first taste of adventure, didn't you?”

    “Definitely,” he told the Guildmistress with sparkling eyes. “In fact, I wanna go on another one, right now!”

    “Now, now,” she giggled, rubbing her gentle hand on top of his head, “let's not get too excited. You just came home, darling. You did wonderful today. Why don't you rest up for a while, get cleaned up? Thank you for retrieving these, I'll give Slowking a call.” She picked herself up, and walked to her desk.

    “But I haven't even been gone for that long,” he tried arguing back. “I wanna go on another one! Please?”

    “And in that time, you've done so much for the guild,” she replied. “Go on, enjoy the rest of your day. You deserve it.”

    The day slowly burned away into night, and the guild was left silent after dinner. Pecha slept as heavy as a Snorlax, but Oran's eyes couldn't seem to close, even if he made them. As he laid in bed, restless, he held his bronze badge high above him, letting its sleek metalwork be the only illumination in the dark room. He clearly saw his own reflection, and thought of what the future held as he held the badge.

    “Psst, hey, Pecha. Pecha,” he whispered to his sleepy sister, but go no response out of her. “Pecha, are you awake?” He poked at her, and never stopped until he got her attention.

    “Nhn, what?” She mumbled. “Can't you see I'm tryin' to sleep, Oran?”

    “I was just wondering: what did you think about today?” He asked her.

    “Well: my body is sore; Florges made me skip dinner; and I'm trying to forget that I seduced an older Pokemon. Can I go back to sleep?”

    “I thought today was fun,” he told her. “I'm just so excited for tomorrow, I can't sleep; I can't wait to go on another mission!”

    Pecha yawned, “I'm sure you are.”

    “You're not excited?” He asked her in curiosity.

    “I'm trying to sleep,” She told him. “I can't multitask sleeping and talking to you at the same time.”

    “I'm not that bad to talk to, right?”

    She ignored any attempt at restarting the conversation with him, she was out like a rock. He rolled back into his bedding, but the thoughts of future adventures refused to leave his head. As much as he wanted to make them a reality, he had to get his rest one way or another. He closed his eyes, and tried keeping them closed until his waiting impatience turned into sleep.

    The next morning started like all the others for Pecha and Oran: with an eardrum-busting song from the guild's alarm clock, Loudred. Waiting in the assembly hall, a strange visitor broke their usual routine of waking up, and starting their day with tedious work. Oran thought he was the funniest Pokemon he had ever seen: he had pink skin, and his large, scaled belly was a sandy beige. A Large, spiraling shell was worn as his crown. He wore a striped red and white ruff around his neck. Despite holding himself in a respectful, dignified manner with his back straight, he had a calm, easygoing demeanor. In his left hand, he held a sac filled with Poké. “Good morning, Slowking,” Florges greeted him with a bright spirit no average 'mon had the time to muster for the morning. “I hope your travel wasn't too strenuous.”

    “Hmm, yes, good morning, Guildmistress Florges,” he replied in a deep, slow voice. “Visiting your guild is always my greatest pleasure. I'm sure you have my berries, yes?” Florges passed him a bowl, holding his five Maranga berries. “Ah, yes, and what a wonderful harvest you did,” he replied in slow glee.

    He handed Florges the sac, and its sheer weight caught her off guard for a moment. “O-oh, thank you, Slowking. You're too kind,” she complimented him.

    He set his eyes on Pecha and Oran, “Are these the tenderfoots who harvested these berries for me?” He asked.

    “Yes,” Florges replied.

    Slowking looked the children in their eyes with his ditsy smile, “I must thank you two for retrieving these for me. Maranga only grow once a year, and they happen to be my favorite.”

    “Why are they your favorite?” Pecha asked.

    Slowking gave her question a slow thought with a long “Hmmm,” and remained silent for a moment. “I can't put my finger on it, everything about it is good,” he replied. “Their insides are just so gooey and smooth, sometimes I like to mix it with my coconut milk. I don't mind sharing if you're still curious,” He took one of the Maranga, and busted it open, sharing one of the halves with the duo. Just as he said, the berry was just a thick shell protecting a thick, yellowish goop.

    Oran dipped his finger in the batter, and licked it. From just a tiny sample, an overwhelming bitterness washed across every taste bud in his mouth. A harsh tingle ran up his spine, and he had the sudden urge to pass it to his sister without a word. She dipped her fingers in the goop and tasted it, “I like it.” Tilting the shell to her mouth, steadily she took small slurps of the thick cream.

    Slowking downed his half like water. “Ahh, how refreshing,” he said happily. “If you don't mind, I'll be leaving now, Florges. Take care, I'll be in touch,” he turned his back on the three, and went on his long way back to Azul Shores.

    “You two did wonderful,” Florges praised the children with a silky song. “Absolutely it will make a fine dinner tale for the guild to hear.”

    “Really?” For a moment Pecha felt her tummy upset itself, and stopped eating her treat; what if she already knew about what she did to Quagsire, she worried. Just the thought of bringing that embarrassing moment up to the entire guild made her stomachache worse.

    “Yes,” Florges nodded happily. “Oh, dear, what's wrong, Pecha?” She noticed the Buneary acting a little strange: she had her paws wrapped around her belly, and she shivered as if she caught a bad chill. “Has something caught you ill?”

    “N-nothing,” Pecha replied, “j-just, I probably just ate the Maranga berry a little too fast. I-I'll be fine, Miss Florges, honest.”

    “Hehehe,” Florges chuckled faintly, wiping her brow. “Oh, forgive me, I keep forgetting how quickly you children want to eat your food. Just be more careful, and take smaller bites next time.”

    “Y-yes, Ma'am.”

    “Oh, and children, before I forget,” the Guildmistress reached into the sac of coin, and handed Pecha and Oran a small handful of the reward: five hundred Poké for the both of them, glimmering the their palms. “Something for your troubles. I would love to give you two more, but I can only give each of you ten percent of all monetary rewards. Guild policy, I'm afraid.”

    “I don't mind, Miss Florges,” the Riolu said to the Guildmistress with a wagging tail. “As long as I had fun, I don't care what I get for a reward.”

    “You should at least care a little bit,” said his sister under an annoyed breath.

    “If you don't mind, children, I have my duties to attend to,” Florges excused herself from Pecha and Oran. “I'll have Azumarill arrange some tasks for the both of you shortly.”

    “Agh, what, we still have to do chores?” Oran's tail seized its wagging. All the hype he put himself through to get ready for today, the Guildmistress went and smothered it all.

    “Oh? Is there a problem, little one?” Asked Florges. “I just don't want you both to be lagging in your guild duties; they're just some things that need to be done. I haven't the time to argue, I hope to join you during dinner, tonight.” Florges waddled away to her chambers, to assess the newly acquired reward.

    “Man, what a bummer,” Oran fussed to himself. Not once while living in the guild did he ever enjoy the Assistant-Guildmistress' chores: they gave him time to think to himself, time to fight the voice in hi head that wanted to drag him elsewhere. The voice always won.

    But when he hoped for a response from his sister, nothing came, at least in the form of an answer. Pecha got over the symptoms of her belly ache, at the cost of throwing herself into a different problem, chanting a repetitive mantra to herself, “No, no, no, no, no.” Pecha this worried was a new sight to the little Riolu. “What am I going to do now? Now, they'll all figure it out!”

    “What's gotten into you, Pecha?” Oran asked.

    “Oran, this is terrible,” she whined.

    “Yeah, I know; I'm stuck here all day,” he replied.

    “That's not what I'm talking about,” Pecha shouted, unable to calm herself from her nervous fuss. “Everyone's going to find out: I attracted a Quagsire!”

    “Really? Is that all?” He teased.

    “No, you don't understand how embarrassing that was for me- I spent all last night literally repressing that horrible experience to the deepest depths of my mind to forget it, and now I have to tell everyone about it!”

    “Maybe they'll find it funny,” Oran attempted to reason with his big sis.

    “You're right, they'll find it funny,” Pecha looked her brother in the eye with calmed tone, only to work herself up, again, “they'll find it too funny! Too funny to take me seriously, again! Which is why: we'll tell them a little fib.”

    Oran asked, “What's a fib?”

    “It means I'll tell them the truth, but not exactly the truth. I'll keep it just vague enough to sound like it happened.”

    When two and two came together, Oran couldn't believe what he was hearing, “Are you saying you're going to lie to the entire guild? You can't do that, Pecha, lying is bad!”

    “Hush up! Hush up! Don't you have any volume control?” Pecha hastily silenced her brother's mouth with her paws, worried of any pedestrian member walking by, catching an earful of their conversation. “It's not all gonna be a lie- I'll just fabricate the ending a little. What actually happened in the forest, stays there; just between the two of us, okay?” She whispered.

    Oran squirmed his mouth out of her clutches, “Okay, but no more secrets after this! It makes me feel weird inside, and I don't like that feeling.”

    “Fine with me.” She sprung away from him in a hurry.

    “W-wait, Pecha, where are-?” He asked too late, he lost all sight of his sister before his question ever finished. “Shoot,” he groaned softly to himself. Alone in the assembly hall, he wondered for a bit, about where Pecha headed off to in such a rush, but entertained that thought no more than three seconds.

    When the chimes of the dinner bell finally rang through the stone halls, everyone stampeded for the cafeteria at the same mad pace- if it was a race to see who'd get food in their growling bellies first, everyone would come to a tie. The cafeteria cramped with anxious eaters in under five minutes, and not a single spot was left open; not even the smaller Bug-types had room to stretch. Despite the lack of shoulder room, the servers, watched by a stern Granbull, navigated through the crowded space with the flexibility of serpents.

    But Oran sat with his head lying behind his paws, ignoring the chatter around him with an occasional soft groan. His bones ached deeply, not from the labor he endured throughout the day, but from sheer boredom, from waiting for the slow-crawling hours of the day to carry him all the way to his dinner seat.

    “What's wrong with you, now?” Pecha asked him.

    Oran raised his head above his arm wall, “I'm so bored! I'm dying of boredom! I thought it would all wash away by dinner time, but it's still stickin' to me!”

    “Have you actually tried bathing?” She suggested in a neutral tone. “It might work.”

    “I'm an explorer! Explorers don't bathe,” he replied loudly. “We don't got time for that stuff! Not when there's an entire world of possibilities staring us in the face!”

    “And it's probably clenching its nostrils shut,” Pecha said while sinking her fluffy chin into her paws.

    Just in time to pick the childrens' spirits up with food, an Ambipom handed them each a bowl of berry salad consisting of: sliced Oran, Aspear, and Sitrus berries by the large palms at the ends of his twin tails. “Here ya go, oh-ho oh-ho,” he said with a beaming white smile, before walking off. Peering into the bowl of blue and yellow slices of goodness at least lifted Oran's spirits up a little, and his tummy impatiently growled at him to begin stuffing his mouth with them. He won't deny his own stomach food, for any reason.

    The chimes of tapped glass screeched and hollered across the noisy scene, silencing everyone within earshot. They all took their attention off their food to figure out where it came from, even Oran. Florges, the guildmistress, stood with a slow rise from her seat, eager to share some news with her fellow members.

    “Thank you all for giving me your undivided attention, I won't take long,” Florges said to her members. “This morning Pecha and Oran have fully completed their first guild mission,” She said as if singing it to the light applause of the cafeteria. “Yesterday they went to on a mission requested by Slowking; they have faced, and solved, an unexpected problem, all on their own! Truly they deserve their spots in our ranks: Guild Florges, please welcome our newest exploration team!”

    Oran's ears perked up to the rounds of applause given to him by the guild. The spotlight they gave them, he doubted he'll forget its warmth anytime soon. One part of him wanted to cry a liter; the other part told him to keep it together. While his sister played off her interest subtly while slouching into her paws, his excitement found a way to take control while his two halves argued with each other, “Really? You mean that?” He asked the Gildmistress as the rounds died down, a bit misty-eyed.

    “I mean every word of it,” Florges clearly told him from the other side of the room, smiling. “Starting tomorrow morning, you and Pecha will begin your training.”

    “Isn't this great, Pecha?” Oran asked her, with more stars in his eyes than in the night sky. “We're finally going to be explorers!”

    “Yeah, great,” Pecha replied, focusing her enthusiasm rather on the coming moments than the one now. She knew what's coming, she prepared for what's coming.

    “But in the meantime, why don't you two enjoy yourselves, tonight?” Florges asked. “In fact, I hear you two have a riveting tale about your first mission. Oran, care to tell?”

    “U-hm, really? M-me?” He was put on the spot. He wanted to tell the real story, maybe the guild might get a good kick out of it, he thought. But the promise he made to his sister formed a barrier in his mind, preventing him to find the words to speak it. All he could say without stuttering on his own nerves, “Uhm...lessee here...how did it go, again?”

    “Oh, no, Oran, did you forget, already?” Pecha jumped in, to seize the moment she was waiting for. “Don't tell me you already forgot what happened while we were in the Verde Forest!”

    “I-I did?”

    “I'm sorry, Miss Florges: I think Oran was so excited to tell you what happened, he suddenly found himself drawing blanks,” Pecha proclaimed to the Guildmistress.

    “I am?” At first Pecha's angle confused the Riolu, he thought she was talking gibberish. But then it struck him, and his confusion cleared. “I-Imean, yes! Yes, I got too excited to remember stuff!”

    “Don't worry, Miss Florges, I remember the entire story,” the sister said to the Guildmistress proudly.

    “Well, just as long as the story is told, I'm sure we'll all enjoy a little bit of dinner entertainment,” Florges replied.

    The guild continued their feast, while the Buneary spoke about her adventures in the forest with her kid brother to cap off their night, “So, there we were, face to face with the berry bush. Just as we were about to harvest it, a huge Quagsire came out of nowhere! The monster threatened to eat every single berry off the plant, and planned not to leave a single one for either of us! So, thinking quickly, I threw a rock at it to distract it, while Oran went to pick whatever we needed...”
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    Chapter 3

    The luscious green leaves of the Verde Forest filtered the morning sun from burning the early-birds while they sat in an even flat of swaying grass. While the gentle wind blowing through their fur felt nice in the numb heat,it felt like they were waiting their lives away for their instructor to arrive. Oran's wagging tail beat against the tall blades of grass as his head scurried from angle to angle, hoping to find someone. No one came.

    He yawned while leaning back on his arms, “Hey, Pecha, do ya think we might be in the wrong spot?” He asked. He turned his eyes to his sister, to find Pecha blacked out in her own lap. Her snores were monstrous for a girl her size, loud enough to even cause unrest in the surrounding forest. “That's fine, you just sleep,” he told her. Catching a few Z's himself sounded good to him, but he couldn't will himself to do it.

    He collapsed on the dewy ground with both arms stretched out wide. Watching the curtain of leaves over his head wave with the influence of the wind, he thought to himself, who will his instructor be? “I hope he'll be someone cool,” Oran said to himself, looking up in the sky. “Maybe he'll be a highly decorated explorer, who'll take us to touch every corner of the world! Or maybe he'll be extremely smart, and teach us every secret pathway in every cave!”

    His ears twitched, catching the nervous chants of someone close by, “I'm late! I'm late! This can't be good!” Oran picked himself off the ground in curiosity, and caught someone running towards him and Pecha: he was a large mantis Pokémon, colored a bright lime green. The bug scurried nervously into view, just enough for him to see the neatly folded bandanna with white stripes running diagonally was tied around his neck. He waved his left scythe while running, “H-hey, guys, sorry I'm late!”

    The Scyther fell to his knees when he got to Oran, huffing for his life, “Hah, hah, again, sorry I'm late,” he wheezed. Scyther always spoke as if he permanently swallowed his tongue; for some reason, he just could never pronounce his “s” sounds properly. “I would have completely forgotten about this if Florges didn't say anything.”

    “Are you gonna be our instructor, Scyther?” Oran asked him.

    “Yeah,” he said. “Is there something wrong with that?”

    “No, no,” Oran waved his paws in front of him, “I just never took you as an instructor.”

    Scyther chuckled. “Yeah, I get that a lot,” He said smiling. “It's probably just the way I talk; I don' let it bother me, though.” He looked to his right to find Pecha, sleeping like a rock while purring like a Glameow. “Is she all right?” He asked Oran.

    “Who, Pecha? Yeah, she'll be fine,” Oran said to him.

    Scyther got up from his knees and tiptoed towards the sleeping rabbit, “Okay, Pecha, I'm here, now,” Scyther said to her in a loud whisper. “Nappy time's over; it's time to start your lesson, now. Pecha?” Either his whispers weren't loud enough to reach her, or she learned Soundproof, somehow. “Why isn't she waking up?”

    “Don't worry, that's normal. Watch this,” Oran stood up, and poked his sleeping sister in her forehead, and watched her immediately collapse to the ground. “Not even Loudred could wake her up. I bet you I can throw her against a tree, and she'd still be sleeping.”

    “No, no, don't do that,” Scyther objected to that thought. “I just want her to wake up without harm! Is there any way we can wake her up?” He asked.

    Oran picked his sleepy sister up by her shoulders. There was only one way for him to wake her up: with a swift backhand across her right cheek! “Ow!” Her face flooded with pain and some tears, enough to shock her out of her sleep. She pushed Oran off of her, and onto the ground, “What was that for?!”

    “Scyther's here,” Oran told her. “We're starting our lessons, now.”

    Pecha rubbed her sore cheek, “Well, you didn't have to slap me! Those things on your paws aren't exactly the softest things ever.”

    “I told you to wake her up without causing harm,” Scyther screamed at the little Riolu.

    “Nuh-uh,” he argued back, arms crossed, “all you said was 'don't throw her against a tree'.”

    “You weren't listening, were you?”

    “You were going to throw me against a tree?!” Pecha blared into Oran's ears.

    Oran folded his ears flat on his head, and kept them there with his paws, “It was a joke,” he replied loudly.

    Scyther separated the two with his scythes, trying to keep the situation from getting any uglier, “Guys! Guys! Can we just calm down for a minute, and do our lessons?” He asked the rowdy duo. “Let's all just sit down for a while, okay?” He plopped onto the grass below him with a cautious pace, hoping he could convince the children to do the same.

    Pecha and Oran took a quick look at each other, they had no idea what was going on for different reasons. Without talking to each other, they both decided to join the Scyther in sitting in a close triangle. “Okay, good, very good,” he clanked his scythes against each other happily. “I hope we all got that out of our systems. Before we get on to our lesson, today, how about you guys tell me a little about yourselves?”

    His offering threw the Buneary back a little, “What? Why?” She asked.

    “Well, because we're gonna be working together for a while,” Scyther answered. “Don't you think it would be nice to know each other a little?”

    Pecha turned her head away from him, “No thanks, I'll pass,” she said in a huff.

    “Sounds like someone's a little cranky, this morning,” He said. “If you don't wanna go, then I'll go: my name is Scyther. I'm level twenty-six, and my favorite move to use is Fury Cutter.” He took a while to think to himself, “Gosh, how long have I been exploring? It's been so long, I can hardly remember. But the places I've been at, I'll tell you your dreams will never compare.”

    Oran gasped, wagging his tail ferociously, “Were they really that nice?” He asked.

    “Oh, you better believe it,” he assured the Riolu. “I can even remember some of them as if I just went there yesterday: the bright, shining violet stalactites of the Lavanda Cave; the rainbow-colored leaves of the Vida Forest,” he looked away for a brief moment, wiping a single tear strand from his left eye with the back of his scythe, “I can't even describe it without crying! I look like a weenie to you, don't I?”

    “No, not at all,” Oran told him, with a large smile on his face. He threw his arms out wide, “That's one of the reasons I want to be an explorer! I always want to go to new places, experience new things!” He looked at his open palms right in front of him, “And maybe, along the way, I can learn how to control my aura powers. All I know is it's an important thing to all us Riolu. It's our power. I'm just level five, but if I learn my aura, I can do anything!”

    Scyther rubbed the back of his left scythe against his chin, “Hmm, aura, that's a bit tricky,” he told him in an unsure tone. “I don't think I can teach that. Now that I think about it, I don't think anyone at the guild can teach that.”

    “Agh, really?” He crossed his arms, and groaned to the ground. He never thought he could feel so disappointed in his life. “Well, that kinda stinks. I was really hopin' the guild can help me with it.”

    “Sorry if I disappointed you,” Scyther apologized. “But we just never had the need to teach that. But I'm sure you'll meet someone out there who could help!”

    “Sounds like your power's just a waste of time, Oran,” Pecha butted in.

    Oran turned to his sister, “Why do ya think that?” He asked. “Lessee you do any better than that!”

    Hearing those magical words stretched a slight grin across her face, “Well, if you insist,” she sung. She looked at the Scyther, and cleared her throat a little of its morning dryness, “Ahe-hem. Well, like Oran, I want to be an explorer, too. But unlike him, I'm smart enough not to rush into situations that are over my head-”

    “Everything is over your head,” Oran interrupted, trying to hold back an intense wave of laughter behind his paws.

    Pecha aimed her irritated stare at her kid brother, with an uncontrollable twitch in her right brow, “You find that funny, don't you?”

    Oran tried calming himself down before speaking, “It's funny 'cause it's true!” The moment he opened his mouth again, he couldn't hold it back anymore. He fell to his back, kicking his feet in the air as he tried finding the air to breath after each howl of gut-splitting pain.

    Pecha let out a frustrating grunt, “Scyther, Oran keeps interrupting me,” she cried out loud to her instructor.

    The mantis gave the jackal pup a concerned glare, “Seriously, Oran, let her talk, okay?”

    Oran picked himself up, and sat himself back down, holding his waist as his giggles burned away, “Okay...okay, I'm done, I think,” he huffed, wiping the tears out of his crimson eyes.

    Pecha tried her best to ignore her brother as she began speaking again, “As I was saying, since I'm too weak to fight, I want to work my way up. But I want to explore for a different reason: treasure,” she yelled, throwing her arms with enough enthusiasm to rival even Oran's. “I hear rumors all the time about Mystery Dungeons protecting a lot of treasure.” She fonded over the thought while wrapped up in her own arms, “With all those riches in one place, what more can a girl want~?”

    “Hmm,” Scyther hummed, deciding whether he liked that reason or not. Any reason was a good reason to explore to him; but some took a little more persuasion for him to form a solid opinion. “I don't know about that, Pecha. Sometimes there's a reason some of it's left untouched.”

    “It's treasure,” Pecha replied in a brash temper, “It's there to be taken! I'm not just gonna stand there and not take it; it needs a home.”

    Scyther felt he wasn't reaching her the way he hoped. In order to get through such a thick skull of youthful ignorance he had to be crafty with his taste in words. Something clicked in his head, “I'm not saying treasure hunting's bad, it can be a very rewarding experience. I just think there's a time to do it, and a time to...not...do it.” Whether the translation from mind to tongue was lost in a sudden second thought or his thick, dorky stutter, he knew it wasn't what he wanted to say. “Moving on, since we all know a little about each other, let's move on.” He picked himself up from the soft ground, and started walking a bit before turning his head to the children. “C'mon, you guys,” he shouted at them, “I can't teach my lessons if you don't come with me!”

    “But where are we going?” Oran asked.

    “Everywhere,” Scyther shouted back in a happy light. “We have the entire Verde Forest in our convenience, and I'd really hate to waste it!”

    Wherever the dirt paths of the forest twisted and turned, Scyther went for miles, leading Pecha and Oran while admiring the quiet morning. It always made him happy to see the early sun's rays leak through the thick veil of leaves, feeling his short wings catch their warmth. But one of his students didn't share that appreciation with him-

    “Why are we just walking around aimlessly?” Pecha moaned from the back of the line, dragging her tired feet across the ground. “I liked it better when we were sitting.”

    “Sometimes when you travel through a forest, you have to walk for hours just to make progress,” Scyther sputtered with numb sounding words. “And besides, I like walking around, works up my ol' brain juices, y'know? We'll be doing this every day before our lessons, to get accustomed.”

    She groaned to herself while brushing her wool diaper, “Ugh, my fur's getting all dirty. I can already feel all this gunk weighing me down.”

    “Probably a good idea to sheer yourself, then,” Scyther replied. “You're gonna get dirty often when your out traveling.”

    “What's gonna be our lesson, Scyther?” Oran asked.

    “Well, since it's our first lesson, I thought it'd make sense to talk about teams,” Scyther said. “Ah, here we go.” The path led them to a clear patch after a good thirty minute walk, with nothing but a short stump in the middle of the ring of trees. Scyther parked down on the stump, and the children sat on their knees.

    “Much better,” Pecha sighed with sweet relief, letting the soreness in her feet slowly fade away.

    “Okay, so this is basic stuff,” Scyther started to explain. “Your typical exploration team has around two to four members. Each member has their own role in the team, for example: the leader, who obviously leads; the strategist, who comes up with strategies for the team to safely subdue any possible threat; the quartermaster, who packs and manages supplies for the team; the list goes on and on. For the purposes of my lessons, I'll function as the leader of our group.”

    “So if we're a team, does that mean we'll go on missions and stuff?” Oran asked.

    “That's the plan, kiddo,” Scyther stuttered back. “When that time comes, I'll start us off with some easy stuff-”

    “Are you kidding?” Oran barked. “Where's the challenge in that?”

    “That's not the point, Ora-”

    Oran passionately interrupted the instructor, “How are we going to grow as explorers, if we don't do the difficult stuff? I wanna feel the struggle in my bones!”

    “Here in a second, Oran, you're going to feel the struggle everywhere,” Pecha barked back to her brother, ready to enforce her warning on him. “Quit being a pain.”

    Oran jumped from his sitting position to confront his big sis, pointing a finger very close to her nose, “How 'bout you quit being so bossy?!”

    Even with a single finger almost touching her nose, she just crossed her arms and looked at it as if she expected it, “You really like testing others' personal spaces, don't you?” She asked in a bland tone.

    “Guys, guys, we're getting really off topic here,” Scyther intervened, having to yet again protect the two from each other with his gentle scythes. He felt his top inch closer and closer to blowing off if he had to keep doing that; these children did a thorough job of testing his mellow nature, and it hasn't been a full day, yet! “Are you two done, yet?” Scyther asked them in a frustrated squeak that was meant to be an angry growl. One look into his piercing glare, and Pecha and Oran couldn't stop shivering under their pelts. “I won't be ignored while the both of you egg each other on!”

    “But, Scyther, I wasn't doing anything wrong,” Pecha pleaded. “Oran's the one interrupting your lesson,” She said pointing at her brother.

    Scyther aimed his glare at the pup, “Oran, I am not going to put up with behavior like this, do you hear?” He asked in a harsh tone.

    “Y-yes, sir,” Oran said, fearing for himself.

    The mantis dropped his behind back onto the stump. He took a deep, relaxing breath or two, before his blood had the chance to completely evaporate. He looked back at the children, lacking all harshness he had a moment ago, “If we are going to be a team, we need to be in unity,” Scyther replied In a much more calmer demeanor. “I'll be frank: it may all sound like fun n' games, now, but out there, it's survival of the fittest; we need to cooperate with each other, or we're not gonna last five minutes out there. I was at least hoping to be the nice teacher about it- but if we're not going to be serious- then I guess I'll just have to be the not-so-nice teacher.”

    The siblings looked at each other, sharing the same guilty expression, nodding before answering to him in a synchronized “We'll listen, Scyther.”

    “Thank you,” the mantis replied. It took him a couple seconds to figure out where he last left off, “Teams aren't limited to only exploration, you also have: archaeology teams, who focus on unraveling mysteries kept locked beneath the earth; bounty hunting teams, who specialize in tracking and subduing outlaws; and rescue teams, who relieve lost or injured Pokémon from dungeons and forests. There are many paths to choose...”

    Within the center of the Verde Forest was the homely Verde Town, a small community of thirty, just half a mile north of the Florges Guild. Being one of the most southern-bound settlements in Unido separated from the rest by several hundred acres of overgrowth, life was often quiet for the little town- when it didn't concern the guild.

    The early afternoon heat wave failed to faze the denizens from opening up their shops: from the Kangaskhan storage facility and Klefki Bank, to Arcanine's transit services and Roselia's herb shop, everyone knew everyone, like they all were in the same family. Even visitors and strangers felt at home when stepping into town.

    Like an orange blur thundering through the town an Arcanine rushed to the entrance of Florges Guild, with two passengers riding atop his back. “Thank you for choosing Arcanine Express,” the bear of a dog thanked his customers, while kneeling low to the ground.

    The Delphox crawled off his strong back cautiously, to make sure she regained the feeling in her legs from the long ride. She raked at her matted burnt-red fur with her short claws to smoothen it out. Before she had the chance to thank the giant bear-dog, he was gone in a flash and a cloud of dust.

    Delphox looked down and shook her arms a little to wake up the sleeping Pokémon she held, “Cheri, baby, we're here,” she whispered to her.

    “Nhnn.” The small Fennekin pup stretched her body inside her mother's hold, and let out a small squeak of a yawn. She opened her sapphire eyes, and through her foggy vision saw the stone face of the guild's owner, lightly coated in moss. “Where are we?” She asked her mother in a slow moan.

    “This is the Florges Guild,” Delphox said. “This is where we'll call our home.”

    Though she usually never thinks much of anything while sleepy, the Fennekin knew exactly how she felt looking at the coarse stonework of the structure- it made her want to fall asleep again. “I liked our old place better,” she replied as she burrowed her pointed snout into the soft fur of her mother's arm.

    “In due time you'll learn to appreciate it here,” the mother told her sleepy pup. Delphox viewed the stonework in a different light than her daughter that made her smile on the inside: she had a certain appreciation for anything built by a Pokémon's hand as art. “The Guildmistress requested me by letter, saying she was in need of a move tutor.” Her mother was no ordinary move tutor: her methods involved magic, a medium other tutors dared not touch. Using such a volatile force to tinker with the inner machinations of other Pokémon, who could blame them for not wanting to get near that stuff? They called her insane- she called them inept. With her drowsy daughter in her arms, Delphox stepped forward through the giant stone Florges' mouth of an entrance.

    After a day under the roasting heat, Scyther, Pecha, and Oran welcomed the shady coolness the assembly hall offered. They've spent three hours in the wilderness; overloaded from Scyther's wisdom, Pecha and Oran's ears, hiding underneath their paws, couldn't take another lecture.

    “So many...so many words,” Pecha whimpered messaging her crammed cranium, feeling it might burst at any moment if she didn't soak in what she learned today.

    “MY HEAD FEELS LIKE IT'S LEARNING,” Oran cried falling to his knees. “MAKE IT STOP!”

    “It wasn't that bad, you guys,” Scyther sputtered to them encouragingly. “I know it was a lot to cover, but you'll get used to it.” The team stopped in their tracks. Two Pokémon they've never seen before stood out in the shallow crowd: a Delphox, with her Fennekin child. “Are they looking for help?” Scyther asked himself, as he compelled himself to meet the stranger upfront, with his young students following behind.

    The mantis confronted the family openly, “Can I help you with something?” He asked the Delphox.

    Delphox shot him an uncaring glare that pierced through him as if he was invisible, “We will not be need your assistance,” she told him in a low tongue. “Our needs have already been met.”

    “Uhm...okay.”

    Seeing another Pokémon his age, Oran couldn't controlled himself, and ran to the Fennekin. “Hi, my name's Oran,” he introduced himself with glee. “What's yours?”

    The fox took several steps back, and sheltered herself behind the thick robe tail of her mother, with only her head popping out. She had an uncomfortable look in her eyes, as if Oran threw her into a corner just by asking her for her name. “Don't be shy,” Delphox told her as she watched. “Tell him your name.”

    It took her a few seconds to gather the courage to speak, “Cheri. My name's Cheri,” she told him.

    “Cheri, huh? That's a cool name,” he told her smiling.

    “Y-yeah.” She hid herself deeper behind her mother's legs. Socializing was never one of the young Fennekin's strong points- she never found a way of getting around the nerve-wracking feeling of being being spoken to.

    “She is not in the mood for conversation, it seems,” Delphox told the group. She bowed to the Scyther, “And my name is Delphox. I am terribly sorry if my earlier attitude seemed strange to you.”

    “It's no big deal,” Scyther waved his scythe. “I've met with stranger clients, before.”

    “Client?”

    From one of the hallways leading from her office, Guildmistress Florges strutted to the Delphox, with a smirk of joy that a realtor would have after selling their first house. “Miss Delphox, Cheri, may I interest you in a tour of our- oh-!” the early arrival of Scyther and his two students came as a shock to the Florges. “Scyther, you're back already,” she exclaimed. “Was it a short lesson, today?”

    “Nah, it was pretty normal,” he replied. “Are you working with these two?”

    “Why, yes, I am,” she sung. “Everyone, as of today, Miss Delphox will be our new move tutor~!” the excited Florges proclaimed to the Scyther and his students. “Isn't that wonderful? Now we won't have to travel for miles just to relearn our techniques.”

    “How long have we been looking for a move tutor?” The mantis asked with his interests somewhat piqued. For as long he was with the guild, he forgot how long that certain position was left empty.

    “Far too long,” Florges happily responded. She turned to the Delphox, and asked her, “May I interest you in a tour around the guild?”

    “Yes, that would be lovely. Thank you.” Delphox tailed behind the Florges to discover what her new home had to offer.

    “Well, today sure turned out to be exciting,” Scyther told himself as he walked away from Pecha and Oran. He rubbed his long blades against each other, making mental notes of their bluntness, “I think I need to order a new sharpening stone,” he murmured to himself, “my scythes have been feeling really dull for a while.”

    “All right, Oran, let's just get this day out of the way,” Pecha said to her brother as she walked away. Her teacher's lesson put a heavy strain in her head, limiting what she felt like putting up with for the day. “The quicker we get to Azumarill, the better.” Something came off as odd to her: she turned her head, and saw her little brother staring intently at the new Fennekin. “Oran, what are you doing?” She asked. But Oran still stood motionless.

    A wild beat drummed in his chest, and his blue coat almost took on a faint purple hue. He couldn't put his finger on it, but there was something he liked about her: maybe it was her mustard yellow fur? The fluffy, scarlet tufts in her ears that looked like clouds? Or was it simply those deep baby blues that needed little eye contact to capture him? A violent shake by his shoulders broke him from his hypnotic funk, falling to the ground as he pushed himself away from his aggressor, Pecha. “What was that for?” He asked.

    “Don't ignore me like that,” she told him, “You know how much I hate that!”

    “Sorry, Pecha,” he said, “I was just thinking to myself.”

    Pecha had herself a good giggle, “What?” she asked, wanting to know if she hadn't misheard. “You, thinking? Good one, Oran.”

    “It's true,” he yelled back.

    “Right,” she mocked him. “It's a good thing I stopped you then: any longer, and you would've overwhelmed yourself. And what exactly were you thinking about?”

    He paused for a moment, mouth gaping as if he forgot what to say. Regardless of what he'll say, his big sister would make fun of him, anyways. “I was...I was thinking about food,” he told her.

    “Pfft, whatever,” Pecha scoffed. “Get up; let's just get our chores out of the way.”

    “Okay,” he grunted back, picking himself off his knees.
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    I'm back again, computer failures and poor motivation can only hold me back so much!
    With that out of the way, I guess its back to reviewing, so here's a review, just for you!

    As is typical, I cannot review the plot as of now (not enough plot), so I guess I will have to go with the characters.
    Oran and Pecha not the worst names I have heard from MD 'fics, but as a matter of personal taste I feel like this is naming a child strawberry, however Oran's character is what matters, and I think a Riolu with delusions of grandeur is hilarious, and has a lot of potential for stories, with Pecha more grounded in reality, this has a lot of potential for either humor or drama.
    Azumarill's has not been elaborated on enough for me to review it.

    I found two typos, (Ha!, Watcha gonna do now, Mr.Bid Bad Level five?
    I also feel like you did not describe the surroundings enough, but don't try and overdo anything.

    This has been a review by me, the Omegagoldfish, as things stand (as of Chapter One), I cannot give a rating.
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    Well, time for me to review Chapter Two!
    I should mention that your descriptions of the Guild-mistress are a bit too florid for my liking (although she IS a flower...) and I dislike announcing attacks, but those are stylistic choices.
    The battle with Quagsire was well done, and conveyed a sense of fear, and the constant bickering between Oran and Pecha was amusing throughout the chapter, but as usual, you had a mistake or two, for example, Magikarp is spelled with a K, not a C.
    Guild-Mistress Florges is an okay character, but we know very little about her, other than her being somewhat biased towards our protagonists, while it seems that Oran is the more enthusiastic explorer, leading to humorous bickering about why they are doing what they are doing.
    (As a side note, Quagsire getting attracted to Pecha brings up some unsettling implications.)
    Again, there is not enough plot for me to review, but that does not matter as of now.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Omegagoldfish View Post
    Well, time for me to review Chapter Two!
    I should mention that your descriptions of the Guild-mistress are a bit too florid for my liking (although she IS a flower...) and I dislike announcing attacks, but those are stylistic choices.
    The battle with Quagsire was well done, and conveyed a sense of fear, and the constant bickering between Oran and Pecha was amusing throughout the chapter, but as usual, you had a mistake or two, for example, Magikarp is spelled with a K, not a C.
    Guild-Mistress Florges is an okay character, but we know very little about her, other than her being somewhat biased towards our protagonists, while it seems that Oran is the more enthusiastic explorer, leading to humorous bickering about why they are doing what they are doing.
    (As a side note, Quagsire getting attracted to Pecha brings up some unsettling implications.)
    Again, there is not enough plot for me to review, but that does not matter as of now.
    Thanks for the reviews! I'll have those spelling mistakes fixed in the near future, no big deal. I'm doing a little character introduction arc, so I'm not so worried about the plot; it's a little slow right now, but I'm planning on speeding up soon.

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    Chapter 4

    Droplets of filtered water poured down from the hanging stalactites of a cave, echoing through the empty cavern as they hit the floor, producing a chorus of nature. Heavy footsteps disrupted the soothing silence: one set frantically ran, escaping the other set that faintly rang through the darkness behind them. The battered Garchomp had no time to catch a quick breath- he'd give his pursuer the opportunity of catching him if he did. His body feeling heavy and nearly drained of energy, he wanted to fall onto his knees, but he forced himself ahead.

    The tunnel led the exhausted land shark to a large, closed off room- a dead end. He fell on one knee in the middle of the room, seizing every quick gasp of air he could. Being pursued for days on end into a cave drained him to his very bone, and he struggled just to keep his foundation from crashing to the ground. “I...I can't,” the outlaw wheezed to himself. “I...I can't let him...catch me!”

    Burning through the darkness a bright blue light fired from the mouth of a cave. The shark had just enough time to save himself jumping out of the way of the speedy projectile, and hitting the floor belly first as the explosion turned the solid wall behind him into rubble. “Rrgh!” He lifted his one ton-heavy self up, eventually to where he could stand again. Stepping out of the slightly illuminated shadows, he stared down his approaching foe- a Lucario, with his black dreadlocks risen in the air delicately reading the aura around him. By reading his target from the back of his eyes, feeling his prey's weariness in his being, Lucario knew this chicken race was coming to its end.

    “H-how?” The hammerhead questioned. “How are you able to keep this up without tiring?!”

    “I'm just that good,” the Lucario replied back, a confident smirk stretched across his mouth. Having the bad guy where he wanted him, the Lucario assumed a standing stance: his left hind leg behind the right, and his left arm behind his right. “So: are we gonna fight? Or are we gonna run some more?”

    Being pursued so far through the twisted layouts of a mystery dungeon on the last of his legs, the Garchomp was out of options. The fins underneath the outlaw's single-clawed arms glowed in a ghostly white light, growing twice their original, monstrous size. “If I'm gonna be taken, it won't happen easily!” For a weakened spirit who was ready to collapse at any moment, he kept himself standing and in fighting condition purely off his desire for freedom- he was so close, he could almost taste it.

    “I like that answer!” Placing his paws over each other, he saw his opponent's Dual Chop, and raised him an attack of his own: he closed his eyes, and focused on the small marble of blue energy developing between his hands.

    “You left yourself wide open!” The ground crushed under each muscular step of his sprint, betting all he had on his attack; he understood very well: either he succeeds, or the freedom he obsessed over for days would poof right in front of him like a popped bubble.

    The marble in Lucario's paws soon grew to the size of a beach ball, moaning like a banshee as it still charges. He opened his eyes, and the Garchomp was right on top of him.

    Garchomp dropped one of his fins down like a hammer, “Dual Chop!”

    “Aura Sphe-!”

    When he prepared to throw his projectile, the Garchomp froze in his tracks like a floating statue just an inch away from connecting his Dragon-type attack to his muzzle. A faint shriek echoed through the cave, yet it remained powerful enough to quake the very ground from underneath him, “WAKE UP! WAKE UP! WAKE UP!”

    “Oh, no.” He knew who that disruptive voice belonged to. With each boom of the outsider's yell, the space around the Lucario distorted and twisted, becoming unstable. The walls and floors around him slowly dissolved into white noise, only being restrained and kept stable by his own thoughts. As his surroundings slipped into an oblivion, soon even the suspended Garchomp disappeared into chaotic static. “Please, just ten more seconds,” he pleaded with the voice that couldn't hear him, while everything slowly faded in front of him. “Ten more seconds; I wanna know how this ends!”

    “WAKE UP!” If Loudred screamed any louder, he risked the room falling on top of their heads. The Riolu pup groaned while lifting himself off his bedding, which he patted down with his body weight. “GOOD, YOU'RE FINALLY AWAKE,” Loudred said while Oran drowsily rubbed the sleepies from his dim eyes, “I THOUGHT FOR A SECOND YA GONE DEAF.”

    Oran yawned, “Nope, jus' geddin' there.”

    Loudred left the chambers, and went on his merry way doing the line of work he was made for with satisfied pride. Oran turned and rolled around in his pile, throwing hands of straw in the air while roaring in an agitated fit. “Every night! This happens every night,” he yelled to himself. “Whenever I have a cool dream, Loudred wakes me up! Why can't my brain make dreams earlier?!”

    “Oran, you're too loud in the morning,” Pecha moaned while she started making a stir in her own bed.

    “It's not fair,” Oran complained, still kicking around. “Loudred always wakes me up during the best parts!”

    “I think it's funny how you two are similar,” she replied, brushing her straightened, floppy eyes from in front of her eyes to the back of her head.

    “Me and Loudred are not similar,” Oran responded in a huff.

    “Sure you are,” the sister implied, “you two have the same voice.”

    Oran shouted back, “We don't sound the same, either!” He fell back into his straw bedding. “I just wanna know how at least one of my dreams end,” he told Pecha calming down from his stir, blankly staring at the carved niches in the stone ceiling as if they'll unfold an answer before his very eyes. But the grooves and cuts remained where they were, not telling him a thing. “I was an outlaw hunter, and I was chasing a Garchomp, a really mean Garchomp. I had him in a cave, and we were about to duke it out; but then Loudred happened.”

    The Buneary stood up, and stretched and twisted her body to the popping sounds of her bones realigning. Her body feeling loose, she shook violently as a chill ran from her toes to her head, and her fur puffed wildly. “Just assume you won,” Pecha told him. “You act like you don't have any control over any of it. Besides, that's the only place where you can win.”

    “Nuh-uh, you take that back,” Oran yelled at her, standing himself on his left side.

    “Why?” She asked. “It's funny watching you get rustled when I pull your leg.”

    Oran grunted. Being five months old to his sister's eight, he never liked being her vocal punching bag, and target for her jokes. As much as he looked up to her, she thought of herself too highly to look back down to him, despite being shorter than him. He planted his face back into the pile of straw, and murmured into it, “Whatever.”

    Oran began the morning sparring with Ambipom, his combat instructor, in the bald patch of the forest Scyther brought him and Pecha to the last day. Scyther and Pecha watched from the sidelines as the purple monkey hustled the little Riolu, either: hopping out of his attack's way, or blocking them with his large tail hands. Oran rolled across the grassy ground when pushed back by the Ambipom with a force great enough to dislodge a rooted tree. But he quickly regained his traction as he slid across the grass with his feet, breaking his series of ragdolling.

    “Quick Attack!” He dashed at the Ambipom- the faster he ran- the more visible and plenty his following afterimages became. In such a short distance and amount of time, he managed to make a gang of three Orans, all charging the purple monkey behind their leader. He threw out his right shoulder, ready to connect a high-speed tackle to his opponent. “Take this!”

    Ambipom's right tail palm stopped all momentum from the Quick Attack in its tracks. Oran pushed against the fleshy wall with all his might, his feet dragged and even dug into the ground, but the hand kept him in place. Oran grunted, “Rgh! Let! Me! Get! Through!”

    “Oh-ho, you're attacks are too linear,” the looming Ambipom told him with a large smile. “Mix it up a little!” Ambipom gave the Riolu a mighty push, Throwing him ten feet away like he was just a pebble. Oran picked himself up, refusing to stay down, but when he looked up, found the instructor suddenly breathing down his neck. “You took too much time getting back up, leaving yourself wide open! Double Hit!”

    “E-Endure!” Oran crossed his arms in front of his chest, and braced himself. With the first punch coming from the left tail, Oran stood solid against the boulder-crushing impact, although left a little shaky. But the right tail came with the second hit from out of nowhere, knocking him clear off his knees, skipping him like a stone across the pond of grass. Winded and wheezing, he clenched his gut as he sat on his knees, “Okay...okay, pause...lemme catch a quick breath.” The more he exhaled, the more he realized his opponent didn't fool around, even for a sparing match.

    “Be careful with that move, Oran,” Scyther yelled from the sidelines. “It may keep you in the fight, but you're still getting hurt!”

    “I know,” Oran replied weakly, “but thanks to it, I'm still in it!”

    “Oran, tag out for me,” Pecha suggested, noting her brother's shaky condition as he stood back up. “We'll have a better chance at beating him if we switch!”

    “She's right, kid, oh-ho,” Ambipom commented. “You can't just solo the enemy; let your teammate take a crack at me.”

    “Are..are you kidding? I'm just gettin' warmed up!” His body refused to call it quits, somehow managing to get him standing on his own once more. He cupped his paws over each other, and emitted a bluish light from his palms. While the glow grew harsher and its whistling became louder he held it to his left side.

    “Oh-ho?” The monkey stepped back, a small amount of shock in his eyes as he watched the student attempt something he didn't expect. He watched the light grow into a sphere, while also deciding if he should stay where he was, or neutralize a possible threat the child was about to bring on himself.

    “Oran, listen to me,” Scyther called out, “You have to tag out! You can't beat Ambipom on your own!”

    The blue sphere in his hands soon became the size of his own head, and he wasn't keen on wasting it. With a strong toss, the ball screamed straight for the Ambipom; as the move was Fighting-type in nature and Ambipom was a Normal-type, he was sure it would cause some damage.

    “Oh-ho!” Ambipom guarded himself using his left tail hand as a shield. The attack ricocheted off his palm, before popping like a bubble full of glitter in front of his face. And not a single scratch on him. Oran saw it in his eyes- he tried to desperately hold in a howl of laughter.

    “Ambipom, be cool about it,” Oran told him, his feelings on the verge of crumbling, “don't laugh.”

    But his request was ignored. Ambipom tumbled to the ground, rolling around as his gut busted, “Ahahahahahaha! Aha, Ahahahahahaha! Oh-ho, ahahahahahahahaha!”

    Oran stooped to his knees. He put all he had in that one attack, to show the instructor what he was made of. And it just poofed in front of him; he was convinced Splash would have done more damage than that. Now he had to deal with the pain of all the broken pieces of his pride cutting him from the inside all day.

    A shadow suddenly blotted out the light. Oran looked up- it was Scyther, looking down at him with a disappointed stare. He chuckled nervously, “Ehehe, how'd I do?”

    “Welp, to put it bluntly: you'd be a Riolu pancake right about now,” Scyther told him.

    “We would've passed, if you didn't decide to take him on by yourself,” Pecha yelled at him.

    Oran got into his sister's face, “I thought I actually had him!”

    “Oran, we're a team,” Scyther stuttered to him in a softer tone. “As such, we all have to work together to take down the foe. Out there, they actually want you to do what you just tried to do to Ambipom.”

    “What, Aura Sphere them?” He asked.

    “No, you're missing the point,” Scyther said. “When we go out as a team and you decide to disobey my orders and run off, they'll see you as easy pickin's; who knows what they'll actually do to you. Take a look at Ambipom-”

    Oran took a look where the mantis pointed, at the Ampibom that still had no control over his own laughter, rolling around like he caught on fire from a Flamethrower. “What about him?”

    “Say, for instance, he was an Ursaring who thought we were intruding on his territory: instead of laughing, he'd do whatever it takes to squash us- you, Pecha, and I. When we go out there, that's essentially what we're doing- to some of them, we're invading their home. That's why we stay close together, cooperate with each other, and only attack when we are attacked. Understand?”

    “Yeah, I guess,” he pouted.

    “Okay, Ambipom, that's enough laughing,” Scyther told him, becoming irritated at the monkey's refusal to stop. “You're making Oran feel bad.”

    A suspicious rustling in one of the nearby bushes by the group took their attention, even stopping the Ambipom from his mad, uncontrollable laughter. The shaking got louder, as if someone, or something, raced to meet them. In the anticipation they readied themselves for the confrontation- be it a friendly meeting, or a brutal conflict.

    “Ahh!” A small Pikachu burst from the leaves and branches, stumbling on his own feet when he couldn't control his speed before finally eating a face full of dirt. Small bruises and slightly bleeding cuts lined his yellow body where the branches and vines he ran through struck him like little whips. Even his zigzagged tail was all but a gigantic bruise. He coughed all the mud out of his mouth as he could, before screaming, “Somebody! Somebody, please help!”

    “Oh my gosh!” Scyther ran to the downed rodent, and helped him get back on his feet. “Are you all right?” He asked him.

    “No, I'm not,” he screamed at the Scyther while he could only breathe quick and shallow breaths. “This is horrible! Really, really, horrible!”

    Scyther told him, “Calm down, and tell me what's horrible. I'm an explorer at Florges Guild- you can trust me.”

    The rodent took a few slow, heavy breaths and slowed himself down before his heart had the chance to explode in his chest. He finally spoke, “My, my wife, Dedenne, she's in real trouble,” he told Scyther. “We were going for a honeymoon stroll, heading for the Cristal Springs, but must've taken a wrong turn into the Indigo Overgrowth. As we tried figuring our way out, a bunch of Ariados attacked us, too many to count! She told me she could handle them while I run to get the nearest help. You gotta help her: as tough a girl she may be, she can't handle all those Ariados on her own!” He started breaking down into his own arms, little streams of tears leaked from his palms, “If she doesn't get help soon, she'll be-!”

    “There, there, it'll be okay,” Scyther kneeled to the electric mouse, assuring him the best he could. “Go with Ambipom to the guild; my team and I will make sure you'll see your wife again.”

    Sniffling, he wiped his eyes clear with his muddy arm, “Th-thank you.” Following the purple monkey, Pikachu dashed for the guild, placing the safe return of his loved one in the Scyther's claws.

    “What's happening, Scyther?” Oran asked.

    Scyther slowly stepped from his knees, “Oran, Pecha, we're going out, immediately.”

    Pecha shot her eyebrows up as far as she could, “what?! Now? But what about our training?”

    “The most important thing to do as a guild member is help those in need,” Scyther told her. “We can continue the training some other time.”

    Oran felt his skin crawl with energy; something like this was just what he needed to really start off his day. “Yes! A mission,” he psyched himself up. “I can't wait! We'll show those Ariados what for!”

    “Indigo Overgrowth, that's just to the east of here,” Scyther said to himself, softly enough where even Pecha's excellent ears had trouble picking up. He looked at his younger teammates while they got under each others' skins as usual, “And maybe a little sample of what it's like out there will be healthy for them; I doubt they'll learn a thing if I just tell them about it. The quicker we get there, the better the chance we'll save Dedenne.” Scyther hollered at the two, taking their attention for a sliver of a moment from each other, “Pecha, Oran, pack your bags: we're going to Indigo Overgrowth.”
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    Chapter 5.1

    After hiking for thirty minutes Scyther, Pecha, and Oran stopped before the mouth of the Indigo Overgrowth. all of the leaves of every tree in their sight was a deep violet hue, almost appearing entirely white from the thick veils of web topping the gigantic plants like a blanket. The air felt strange and clingy to their fur, especially to the Buneary; each pat she gave her excited hairs, the more they crackled and bit at her paw.

    “Ow! What's with my fur all of a sudden?” She screamed, while swatting at her fur as if trying to kill an entire family of mosquitoes that chose her for their next picnic.

    “I dunno, but it sounds funny,” Oran commented. “I wanna touch your fur!”

    She took two steps back, and screamed at his approaching paws, “Stay away from me! Go touch yourself!”

    “But mine isn't as long as yours; it won't make the funny sounds,” he stuttered to her numbly. A slight tingle caught his tongue; the more he smacked his mouth, the more the tingle spread. “I cant feel my tongue all of a sudden,” he said to himself. He told his instructor, “Is this what it feels like to be you, Scyther?”

    “Look!” He pointed his right scythe in the air, and their eyes followed its direction. A large bolt of lightning broke from the back of the Overgrowth's throat, screaming with electricity, and causing a flock of bird Pokémon to scatter away from the danger in panic. “A Thunder Wave,” he told himself underneath his voice, “Dedenne is still here, after all. Guys, we haven't much time,” he told his students. “Dedenne is still here. I'll make this quick: we'll have a better chance of success if we all stick together. Ariados aren't brainless, so we need to be careful of our surroundings; for all we know, they've set up the entire area as their hunting trap. And Oran, whatever you do: don't use your Aura Sphere.”

    Oran threw his arms up in response, “What?! Why? That's my favorite move!”

    “Oran, quit complaining,” Pecha told him. “Every time you use it, it pops like a bubble.”

    “Yeah, but every time I use it, I get better at it,” he told her back. He looked at his palms, tightening them into fists. He didn't know how to say it, but while looking at his fists, he heard his powers whisper into his ear, promising him they'll succeed this time around. “I have this weird feeling,” he said to his sister, “I just know it, I know it's going to work this time!” He said to the Scyther, “Just let me use it this one time; I'll get it to work!”

    “No, and that's final,” the mantis told him, looking him dead in the eye.

    “Scyther, please-!”

    “How will we know for certain if you can get it to work?” Scyther asked him. “In a situation like this, we need to be precise; we can't rely on vague gut feelings. I know how hard it must feel, Oran, but the more we argue about this, the more we're letting Pikachu and Dedenne down- and not just them- but the whole guild, too.”

    “Right, so we don't have time to lose!” Oran charged right into the mouth of the woodlands without a second thought. He had no fear of what's awaiting. He had no interest in thinking it through. His mind had two priorities: find Dedenne, and fight off as many Ariados he can, in any order he wanted.

    “O-Oran!” Scyther's heart jumped seeing that boy dive into unknown danger headfirst. He and Pecha took off for their impulsive teammate. Scyther shouted, “Come back! What did I just say about sticking together?! Oran!”

    “Oran, what are you thinking?!” Pecha yelled.

    Out of sight, Oran's voice echoed through the throat of the woodlands, “No time to lose!”


    The bruised and dirty Pikachu sat on Guildmistress Florges' desk back at the guild, in front of the Single Bloom Pokémon and her assistant. As time passed, his heart calmed from its nervous beating, and he regained some lost breath, though his chest still cramped to a degree. “And that's my story, Guildmistress Florges,” he told her, looking her face to face. “Three of your guys are already out there looking for my wife.”

    “This is quite the situation you've brought to me,” She thought to herself out loud.

    “Guildmistress, what should we do?” Azumarill asked her. “Should I issue more help?”

    “I trust in Scyther and his team that they'll get the job done,” she told her. “But Indigo Overgrowth, Arceus know if the rumors I've heard about that area is true.”

    The Pikachu tried hiding his breakdown behind his paws, but the rivers of tears seeped through the cracks of his dam. “I'm begging you, Florges, please, do whatever it takes to save Dedenne!” sniffling, he wiped most of his waterworks off with his arm, “She's the best thing that ever happened to me. I...I don't think I'll ever find someone like her again! I had one happy moment happen in my life, and those Ariados are going to ruin it!”

    “There, there, it'll be all right,” she whispered to the distressed rodent, running her delicate fingers across his head.

    “Th-thank you,” the Pikachu whimpered while drying his eyes with his arm. “I wouldn't know what I'd do without you.”

    “You're very much welcome,” she told him smiling. “I just wouldn't feel right denying help to a Pokémon in need.”

    He smiled, wiping one last tear from his eye. “I-I'm supposed to pay you for your service, right? I don't have anything to offer, I-”

    “That's all right,” she said. “My guild's services do require payment, but we'll work something out. Your wife must be someone special if you're taking her all the way to Cristal Spring.” She laughed into her hand, “Ahahaha! Taking her to a place like that, you must treat her like a real queen!”

    Pikachu looked away, his red-dotted cheeks glowed with a soothing light. “Ehehe, yeah,” he admitted. “She's my cheery, energetic, little queen. She can be just as bossy and abrasive as one, but that's just how she defends herself. When I got to know her, I saw how she really was on the inside- she's just as anxious and soft as I am. And I have no plans of letting go of her.”


    “Oran? Oran, where are you?” Scyther and Pecha's calling voices cried through the Indigo as they searched for their missing teammate, but with no returning reception. They had him in their sights, and somehow, he stayed evasive to their search- not two Pokémon were in need of potential rescuing.

    “Rrgh, Oran, you can be an idiot, sometimes,” Pecha grunted to herself. “No wait, you're always an idiot, what am I saying. Do we even have time to look for you?” Wherever she placed her eyes, the more the unnerving chill crawling beneath her pelt grew worse. She didn't notice it back at the entrance, but the deeper she walked through the woodlands, more and more white sacs of tightly coiled silk clinging to the violet trees lined their coarse. Some hung low, almost as if laying on the ground, while the rest hung high above in the branches like fruits. Some were even so thinly wrapped, Pecha made out the dried remains of other Pokémon inside.

    “Don't look at them, Pecha,” Scyther told her while devoting his eyes to the path in front of him, as if he had eyes in the back of his head watching her soak up the macabre scene

    She cleared her throat of its choking pit by gulping it down, “S-Scyther, are they all what I think-?”

    “Yes,” he replied. “They are what we're trying to prevent Dedenne and Oran from becoming. Don't let it scare you, Pecha- as horrible as it might seem- this kind of sight is normal in the wild. Just stick by me, and everything will be okay.”

    “Don't look at them, he said,” she scoffed to herself. With at least three of the cobweb sacs showing up within her peripheral vision with each step she took, and then three more, it was something of an impossible favor- unless she knew how to keep on coarse while keeping her eyes shut. Her stomach gurgled with an uneasy sensation, and she forced back the urge to cry, though for how long she didn't know.

    “Pay attention, Pecha, do you see these?” Scyther asked her, pointing his left scythe at the treeline. Pecha couldn't understand what he was talking about, nor could she see what he was pointing at. But while squinting her eyes, she caught a vague shimmer of sunlight. Several thin, invisible strands of silk dangled from what appeared to be each tree, only made visible by the sun's touch.

    “Yeah,” she told him, “What are those?”

    “Those are how Ariados bait their prey,” Scyther whispered to her. “Once one gets on you, it lets them track you down back to your house. The worst part is: you'll never even realize them, until a hungry Ariados shows up to your front door. Just watch where you walk, and you'll be all right.”

    Her tightly coiled ears shot up and stiffened. She felt every one of her hairs get delicately plucked off of her body by the air, one by one, as if it tried to get her attention about something. But when she ran her paws across her little body, she found her hairs still intact. Her muscles stiffened to the point where even walking became a struggle. She tried telling Scyther about it, “U-uhm, Scyther, I have a really bad feeling about this. My danger sense is acting up. I feel like something's looming over my head.”

    “It's going to be all right,” Scyther told her calmly. “As long as I'm here, you don't have anything to worry a-”

    It came from nowhere, right before their eyes a thick string of silk latched onto the anticipating Buneary's back, and reeling her into the branches of the tree above her head with unreal speed.

    “AAAAAAAAAGGGHHHHHHHH!” Pecha screamed her lungs out while she was lifted into the tree, watching the ground shrink underneath her feet. “Scyther! Help me! Help me!” The more she struggled to break free from the sticky silk, the more she got herself lassoed and wrapped in its grip.

    Scyther cried, “Pecha!”

    Pecha trapped herself in the webbing with her entire torso in its bind, and her arms restrained. The more she struggled to free herself, the tighter it squeezed her; she wasted most of her energy in one moment, and had little strength to keep it up. She huffed to herself, “It's no use.”

    She felt something wet drip on the back of her head; it might just be morning dew dripping off the tree leaves. When she looked up, she wished it was only that: two purple eyes glaring brighter than a candle wisp looked straight at her from the shade within the tree. It had a small red head armed with a single horn as long as one of her ears, and a larger red body with black stripes. The drips she felt came from its two large fangs, which were excessively coated in the stuff. It hung on the side of the tree by its four yellow legs as it reeled her in by the web it spat from its mouth.

    “S-Scyther,” Pecha cried once more, “Scyther! Help! Help me, I can't get free!” Meeting face to face with her predator breathed some new life in her struggle. But once again, all attempts for freedom tangled her more in the string.

    Before the spider claimed its meal, Scyther severed the silk with a single swing of his right scythe, cutting through it like paper across his sharp bladed appendage. Before the Buneary ever had a chance to fall he held out his left scythe, and Pecha's stringy cocoon stuck to its flat surface. Using his beating wings to slow them down, he landed on his feet with a soft thud. The spider backed itself deeper into the shade of the tree line when Scyther spotted it looking up. “Hold still for a sec,” he told the frightened Buneary.

    “A-already ahead of you.” She had no choice but to trust him. Scraping her off his scythe was the tricky part, it always latched back on when he touched the string with his other scythe. With some fiddling, Pecha finally plopped to the ground. With a swift swipe down her back, Scyther severed her natural binds. “Ew, ew, ew, ew, ew, ew.” It seemed like the stuff had a mind of its own while she scraped herself away from its clingy mess, reacting to every little movement she made as an excuse to spread all over the place. But she managed to crawl out of it, crumpling it all into a ball that only claimed a handful of her hair. After tossing the nasty sight into a nearby bush, she held herself tightly. “Wh-wh-what was that thing?” She asked Scyther.

    “That was an Ariados,” Scyther stuttered. “That one just so happened to be one of the patient ones. Are you okay?”

    “I..I...” Her knees had the structural stability of a Ditto, and the uncontrollable wobbling sent her crashing to the ground. She lost all restraint to her stomach, emptying it all over the ground as a yellow-ish pile mixed with various chunks of berries. She cried into the puddle of mud she created, huffing and puffing without catching her breath. In the silence of her catching her breath like they were hiccups and wiping her face clean with her arm, she whimpered to her instructor, “Scyther, I don't wanna do this anymore. I wanna go home, where I won't be eaten! I can't handle any of this anymore!”

    Seeing the crying Buneary reminded Scyther of what he used to go through as a new explorer. He once felt her pain of inexperience, wanting to give up the first instant the world challenged his innocence, and made his stomach tie itself into a knot. This is what he wanted- an experience that would help them absorb his lessons- but why does he feel so guilty about getting what he wanted? If only he had hands he'd give her a needed, warming hug. He crouched down to her, “Hey, Pecha, it's gonna be all right,” he told her lovingly.

    “No! You, you keep saying that, but I know it's not going to be,” Pecha screamed. “I told you something awful was about to happen, but you didn't listen to me! I'm, I'm just a Buneary- all I'm good for is running away! At least you can defend yourself- you're big, and you have blades for hands; I am the preferred snack for all the Pokémon bigger than me!”

    A yellow flash lighting up from inside the belly of the Overgrowth caught Scyther's sharp eyes. “Aaaaagggghhhh!” A faint shriek followed it, one too feminine to belong to Oran on first hearing; its owner's cry reminded him of the little time they have left.

    Pecha sniffled while wiping the streams from under her button eyes, “I'm done playing explorer; I'm not cut out to actually be one. I never was. I don't know how Oran can just be fine with all of this, but I...I just wanna go home.”

    “You can't give up, now,” Scyther pleaded. “Don't blame yourself for feeling like that; if anyone's to blame, it's really me.” He took a short moment to think about what to say next, “I should have realized something like this was going to happen. But instead, I was too caught up in the thought that an experience like this would help you two absorb my lessons a little better. I shouldn't have endangered you and your brother like this.” He rose from his knees, looking down at the weeping Buneary, “But we've made it this far, and we can't look back, now; all we can do now is move on, and rescue Dedenne. You're right to feel afraid, and you're right to want to run- but you're letting those feelings control you. You may be just a Buneary, but you're the bravest Buneary I know.”

    Pecha sniffled, “Do...do you really mean that?”

    “I wouldn't be saying it if I didn't,” he told her. “You mustn't run away, Pecha. Everyone's counting on us, on you. Do you want to let them down?”

    Despite hearing what Scyther had to say, her gut instinct opposed his words. It kept telling her, “Run away. Run away. You'll be safer, then.” She considered taking its advice, and even thought of letting the instinct drive her and take her to safety. But no matter how much more sickened her stomach became, she choked it all back down. Against her own desire she stood back up to her feet, wiping off her tear-drenched fur. “Okay...okay,” she sniffled one last time to Scyther in a calmer tone. “I won't be afraid anymore. I want to help out the best I can.”

    “Alright! That's my Pecha,” he praised her, softly tapping her on the back with his right scythe. “I'm proud of you for doing this.” He picked the fragile bunny off her feet, and plopped her right onto his right shoulder. “Let's go save some Pokémon!”
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    Chapter 5.2

    She must have ran at least seven miles deep into the heart of the Indigo Overgrowth, all the while evading the fangs of what seemed like a hundred predators to her. Dedenne was just a tiny little gerbil, smaller than even her husband, defending herself in a bigger Pokémon's territory. Dirt lightly painted her burnt orange coat around her belly. Like Pikachu, giant red dots covered the entirety of both her face cheeks, though unlike him, antenna-like whiskers protruded from her spots.

    She put her brakes on, skidding a few feet across the soil. Peeking over her shoulder, several Ariados were still hot on her tail- seven in counting. “You're a persistent bunch,” she huffed. Though she was drained to her very bones of juice, it was all or nothing. She took a deep breath and howled, “Thunderbolt!” From the crackling field surrounding her she shot a single prong of lightning at the predators- when it hit one, it hit them all.


    “Gyaaaa-aaaagh!” Taking the lightning head-on, their bodies tensed and tightened to the point their muscles felt like solid stone to them. The Ariados fell flat, right from underneath their four legs that twitched uncontrollably.

    She barely had the strength to suspend herself upright from the ground with her own hands. She can't remember how long she's been going at this, paralyzing these one track-minded insects, but the toll of her efforts started racking up. Her body was empty of energy, muscles ached and screamed for immediate relief. Every time she opened her eyes the world around her spun and her vision fogged. She had pushed herself beyond her own limits, and still she pushed forward. “D...dangit,” she huffed to herself. “I can't...I can't keep this up much longer! When is Pikachu coming back with help? He better not have deserted me out here!”

    After taking her eyes off the paralyzed group, she tripped. She looked behind her, and an Ariados hooked her with its String Shot. Even with his body slightly twitching and muscles stiffening from being filled with electricity, Dedenne still had to rake her claws into the soil to keep from having his venom-drenched fangs digging into her. “No, no, no,” she chanted frantically, “I refuse to let you have me!”

    He answered back with a chant of his own, “Hungry! Hungry! Hungry! Must eat!”

    “Eat someone else- I'm not on the menu!” But her comment meant nothing to the Ariados, who could only think of what her plump, juicy, insides tasted like.

    “Leave her alone!” A voice broke from the shadows of the Overgrowth. A young Riolu hopped across the abdomens of the grouped Ariados like a stone path in a raging river. He leaped into the air, and kicked his heels straight down onto the leading spider's head, slamming it onto the dirt path. Disoriented with a mind-splitting headache from the attack, The Ariados let go of its web the Dedenne was caught in. “Hey, are you Dedenne?” He asked the gerbil.

    “That depends, just who are you?”

    “I'm Oran, I'm from Florges Guild,” he told her proudly, flashing his shiny badge stuck to his scarf. “Your boyfriend sent me n' my team to come rescue y-”

    “BOYFRIEND?!” Dedenne rattled the very trees of the Indigo with her voice- if she and Loudred were to go against each other in a screaming contest, all of the judges would go deaf, and no one would be chosen winner. Oran crossed a thin and fragile line, with the ignorance of his youth unable to protect him from her wrath. “KID, DO I LOOK LIKE THE KIND OF WOMAN WHO HAS A BOYFRIEND?! I'LL HAVE YOU KNOW THAT I HAVE A HUSBAND, AND HE'S THE REASON I'M BARELY SURVIVING IN THIS DEATH TRAP OF NATURE! IN FACT, I'M SURE HE'S PROBABLY RELAXING HIS LAZY BUTT AT YOUR DUMB GUILD, WHILE I'M RISKING MY LIFE NOT TO BECOME BUG FOOD!!” She came down with a dry hacking fit, coughing and wheezing out a lung, sparing the poor Riolu from the rest of her rant. “How did you even find me, anyways?”

    Instead of her question, all Oran could hear was a faint siren wailing from inside his ear lobes. He shaked his head hoping to get the splitting sound out of his mind, but the soft static still resumed. “What?” He asked her.

    “Rrgh, nevermind,” she grunted. Thanks to her lack of an inside voice, speaking to her rescuer won't work for a few moments. She reached for his left paw, her antenna whiskers sparked several times before delivering a shock over to him with the rest of her strength. At first it caught him off guard as he stepped back, but then he noticed- the shock isn't hurting him- not one bit! At worst his muscles just cringed on their own underneath his skin, but nothing painful or irritating. But it felt odd to him, like the electricity pinched him not to hurt him, but to relay something to him that physical words couldn't. “Take me to your guild.” Was that what she was trying to tell him?

    A stream of a thousand purple needles as thin as a blade of grass suddenly struck the gerbil, sweeping her off her feet, and out of the jackal's loose grip. “D-Dedenne! Are you o-?” From the side of his eyes he caught another storm of Poison Sting rushing his way. He tucked his head into his crossed arms and protected his chest, “Endure!” One by one the darts ricocheted off his arms like they were hitting a barrier, instead, and spiking into the ground around him. But the move failed to protect him from the sensation of being pricked barely beneath the pelt a thousand times over, like being stung by a swarm of wasps. When the rain stopped, he raised an arm high enough to take a peek through his defense- the Ariados have shaken off their paralysis from before, and, needless to say, they weren't too happy.

    “Rrgh.” Despite her body wanting to be a pin cushion and lie on the ground, Dedenne forced herself back up, ignoring the shaking in her arms telling her to stop, before collapsing again back down. The needles melted inside her as if they were icicles, taking their times spreading their vileness in her system.

    “Dedenne!” Oran hustled his way to her side, gently lifting her head into his lap. “Are you okay?” he asked.

    “Yeah, totally, I'm totally fine right now,” she whimpered to him, unable to block out the sickening pain in her body.

    “Really?” He asked her. “You don't look fine to me.”

    She wheezed “It's called sarcasm...you idiot.” The Poison Stings soaked deeper into her body. She wanted to scream- about how much she felt her insides turn to liquid- but her body refused her request. Being a lone Fairy-type in an area brimming with Poison-types must never be fun. “Just, please, take me away from here, already,” she coughed. “I...I feel disgusting. I feel like I'm melting inside.”

    “Don't worry, Dedenne, I'll take you to my guild, no problem,” he assured her, softly throwing her around his back like a bag. But the sheer weight of the rodent on his back nearly sent him to his knees. Each time he took a step her weight wanted to pin him to the ground. “Gosh, you are really heavy, y'know that?”

    Dedenne cried an ill groan into his back.

    The line of Ariados drew closer to the duo as a slow march, salivating entire pools of venom from their fangs and leaving trails of it behind. With all emotion replaced by hunger, their eyes saw two appetizers to alleviate it. “Hey! That blue kid is taking our food,” an Ariados shouted.

    The other came up with a brilliant idea, “Let's eat him, too!”

    Despite danger inching its way closer to the Riolu, he stood ready to fight them off one by one, with both his hands supporting Dedenne on his back. “Go on, come at me, I'm not scared of you,” he taunted them. “You mess with me, you mess with Florges Guild!”

    “Food is mine!” An eager spider broke from the line, and rushed at the Riolu. All it could think of was how the gerbil and jackal would taste together. But it felt one of its hind legs catch on something- it peeped behind it, a String Shot connected it to another Ariados. “What's the big deal?!”

    “If anyone gets food, it's me,” the Ariados hissed at its captive, tightening its String Shot to keep the captured spider from touching the pair.

    The captive spider responded, “Fool! They're both MINE! Let go!” The Ariados raked its pointy legs across the ground, attempting to force itself out of its lasso and take a bite out of the small Pokémon. But the captor stayed strong while fishing the misbehaving arachnid back into the group.

    Once unified under a simple goal, Oran watched the group fall into chaos under that goal: their tidy line dissolved into a mosh pit of hissing spiders, each trying to intimidate the rest from having their next meal. Crouching low to the ground while the appendages on their thorax flared upright, some even sniped back at whoever dared to get too close. “What's happening?” Oran thought to himself while watching it all unfold. “Were they all just pretending to be cool with each other? Were they all planning on turning on each other when they get Dedenne?”

    “Oran!” His ears twitched. With a few lightning quick slashes, Scyther pushed a path through the circle of arachnids, with Pecha riding on his shoulders. Although the team reunited at last, the leader had a couple words to lay off his chest to the young blue jackal, and none of them happy. “I'm very cross with you, mister,” Scyther told him with a harsh look in his eyes. “Just rushing in like that, what were you thinking?! You nearly endangered us all by doing that!”

    Oran argued back, “Hey, you said we didn't have much time to save Dedenne, so I took the initiative!”

    “I also said we must be precise,” the mantis replied. “Would you call running in with a head full of gusto 'precise'? I sure wouldn't!”

    Pecha hopped down from Scyther's shoulder, and delivered a slap across his face that thundered throughout the forest. “That's for nearly getting me eaten!”

    He knew she was serious- she put a lot more sting into that slap than usual. He rubbed the sore lump on his cheek, while his left eye started tearing up a little. “Hey, we can all relax, now- I rescued Dedenne! See?” Oran turned his back slightly, revealing the gerbil clasping for her dear life on his back.

    Scyther let out a huge sigh of relief, “Well, at least you did. And at least nothing terrible happened to you.” His eyes fixated on the small needles lining all over her back, which were now more like tiny magenta bumps. “Ooh, can't say the same thing for her, though. That's a lot of poison for someone her size.”

    “Please...help,” she whimpered.

    “Ooh, yeah, that does look bad,” Scyther said to himself. “Oran, hold her in front of you.”

    The Riolu unstrapped her arms from his back, and held her in front of his chest as high as he could. The mantis dropped to one of his knees, and held his silver badge that was pinned to his bandanna between his scythes. “Don't worry, Dedenne. Just open your eyes, and focus on my badge.”

    She had trouble just opening her eyes half way, but when she looked at the small sapphire piece in the middle of his badge, it started to glow pure white. The stone transferred the shine to her, its brightness rivaling that of the sun's, until it suddenly died down to just a twinkle- and Dedenne was nowhere to be found.

    “Whoa, where'd she go, Scyther?” Oran asked.

    “Back to the guild,” he replied. “My badge can teleport other Pokémon to the guild.”

    “Cool! When will mine do that?” He asked, starry-eyed.

    “Later, but that's not important, now,” he told the Riolu. “For now, we need to head back to-”

    “Hey!” The Ariados gang wiggled themselves up until they were upright on their feet again. They approached the trio with growling stomachs, and even angrier spirits. “You took our only food,” one slurped, “now you made us angry!”

    “Pecha, Oran, get behind me,” Scyther said, gently nudging them to his sides. “One Ariados is bad enough; a group of them spells trouble.”

    “But, Scyther, I wanna help,” Oran yelled at him.

    “Oran, just listen to Scyther,” his sister told him, “you've done enough 'help' for today!”

    Something felt off to the Riolu: It was like a pulse of negativity suddenly flowing through his entire being, like wind flowing through his sapphire fur. The negativity turned into images quickly flashing before his eyes- of him getting tightly wrapped up in a cocoon, like a mummy still alive. Then came the image of a spider, a living silhouette able to hold the cocoon like it was a pea- and it sank its tree-thick fangs into the wiggling sac. He felt his back suddenly flare up with some kind of sharp, burning ache, with all the pain concentrated into two spots. His howls pierced through the thick foliage of the Overgrowth, the experience drove him madly to his knees as he latched his paws on the furs of his head. “What's happening?!” he demanded in agony. “What's going on?!”

    His mentor joined in with his own screams of dwindling sanity as the wave even affected him, “AAAAGGH-NN!” He collapsed to his knees, pleading for the horrible images to stop playing behind his eyes: he flew anywhere and everywhere he could to avoid the silk streams, but he wasn't fast enough. As soon as his left leg caught on the web, he turned to a cocoon before he could even blink. His squirming and muffled screams for help attracted the spider silhouette; his dance for desperation made him all the more delicious for it, the silhouette drove its tree-sized fangs into the dancing bean, putting him out of his misery. “These thoughts! Make them stop! Make them stop!” Just with Oran's cries, Scyther found no one else to relieve him from the horror.

    “G-guys?” Everywhere she looked, everyone around Pecha seemed to have gone feral with insanity of some sort. She gulped a tight knot down her neck, standing in one spot while crawling beneath her own skin, and unable to figure out what's happening to everyone. “Guys, cut that out! I've been through enough weird stuff for today!”

    “GYAAAAGH!” Whatever Oran and Scyther felt, the pulsating horror extended to even the group of Ariados. No matter how much they shook their heads violently, or bang them against the ground, they saw the same images, too, and it drove them haywire! Through their hysteria they chanted out loud, “She's here! She's here! Run away, run away!”

    “Wait! Who's here?!” Oran screamed. “Scyther, what's happening?!”

    The pulse seized. The images in their images weakened to where Oran and Scyther shook them out of their heads. They became just a memory to be quickly forgotten. “Br-r-r-r-r,” Oran rattled his head, “That was intense; a little too intense.”

    “I-I think we were hit with a Night Shade,” Scyther told him with a hint of trembling in his voice. He aimed his eyes over the towering tree line. If it was the move he suspected, somebody must have had to use it close by. “That must mean whoever used it is right above us!”

    The Buneary's danger sense grabbed her by her soft ears, and chucked her forward off her feet. A large object fell from a tree and landed where she once stood with a ground-shaking thump. Another Ariados, but different from the rest: the rest of the bunch looked like newly hatched egglings compared to her gargantuan size. Instead of scarlet red, her exoskeleton was a deep purple, perfect for camouflaging in the Overgrowth's foliage, and bright blue rings around her legs, instead of purple.

    Oran stretched his arms out wide, “Whoa, that one is huge! I bet it can take on all the other Ariados!”

    But Scyther and Pecha didn't share the same enthusiasm as the little pup. The mere sight of her sent trembles down their spines, freezing the Buneary in place, and forced the Scyther into uncertain anticipation. “She probably has,” Scyther choked.

    She looked at the Buneary through her light blue tinted eyes with a glare of strange content, and Pecha could only guess at what she was thinking to the sound of her fangs clanging against each other. Like a showdown before noon, both predator and prey stared each other down.

    The Ariados took the first draw- she spat a thick stream of String Shot that no one's eyes managed to catch, and latched to the Buneary before she had any time to even twitch. The Ariados reeled Pecha in with a single jerk of her head, and wrapped her between her fangs. Her heart raced as moments from her earlier experience flashed before her eyes, but instead of giving in, she fought them back. Despite her hands being bound to her waist, her free ears delivered devastating Pound after devastating pound to the arachnid's face. She repeated her orders to her, “Let go of me! Let go of me! I won't be on your menu, today!” But the Ariados took all of her struggles as if she were being continually punched by a feather- not a single sign of flinching or hurt shown in her eyes.

    While she had the monstrous bug distracted, the Scyther and his jackal pup apprentice rushed in to help her fight. Scyther leaped, and readied his right scythe up high for an aerial slash. “I won't let you have her!” But the spider was quicker than he thought, jumping out of his way and onto the trunk of a nearby tree at the last second before he swiped at her with his sharp appendage.

    Stationed on the side of the tree, the black markings on her abdomen that formed a frowning face became exposed to the Scyther and Riolu. For some reason they couldn't take their eyes off the markings, fully aware of the hypnosis they were undergoing. The face twitched. Even while being plastered onto the female spider's back it seemed like it was coming to life on its own. Stiffly the dotted eyes slanted into an angered glare, and the single frowning line split and morphed into a stencil smile full of teeth.

    The face popped right off of the Ariados' back, and hovered toward the explorers like a bodiless specter looking for a victim to scare. It opened its mouth as if to eat them, then let out a small shriek of nails running across a chalkboard, knocking the two on their butts. When they opened their eyes, Ariados disappeared from the tree, but still seen hopping from limb to limb of each tree deep inside the woods.

    “Rrgh, she hit us with a Scary Face,” Scyther grunted getting back up. “She's slowing us down so we can't get Pecha- I hate when that happens. It always makes me feel so awkwardly sluggish.”

    “No use crying over it, Scyther, we can still get her back!” The eager Riolu lept to his feet. His legs filled with a sense of awkwardness, as if his very bones were going against his wishes of pursuing the spider holding his older sis captive, and wanted to stay in place, but he didn't listen to them. Through the subtle sensations of fear and shock he pushed himself through the Overgrowth's foliage that was almost as tall as he was, and nearly disappearing in front of the Scyther's eyes yet again. “Don't worry, Pecha, we'll get you back!”

    “There he goes running off, again,” Scyther said to himself. He stood up slowly. Each step he took felt like he was fighting against some kind of underwater current wanting to push him back to his knees, but he won't allow him to give in to it. He tried matching the Riolu's speed as he ran, ignoring his legs and knees wanting to lock in place in fear. “Pecha, whatever you do, don't stop attacking her! She wants you to tire out!” He shouted as loudly as his lungs could allow.


    The tree lines zoomed past Pecha while wrapped in the gnaws of her predator. Each long hop from branch to branch made her stomach want to hurl, but that was the least of her worries. She huffed and puffed while delivering a number of Pounds to the arachnid's face with her long ears, but the Ariados never seemed to be fazed from her attacks. Either she had a Durant's exoskeleton, or Pecha's soft, cottony ears were barely strong enough to swat flies out of the air. Rather than hurting the Ariados, the Buneary believed she was inching her way to the spider's last nerve. She wasn't used to attacking another Pokémon for this long: soon a strong wave of soreness engulfed her ears, her attacks started to slow down.

    Pecha shouted at the Ariados to the rhythm of her Pounds, “Let go of me! I've had it up to here with you miserable insects snatching me up! Why not go eat someone your own size? Oh, that's right, there is no one your size! You just love bullying smaller Pokémon, and gobbling them up! Well I won't let you make a meal out of me!”

    As soon as Ariados landed on her next branch, a bright bluish orb broke straight through the limb, and the spider tumbled down! She landed roughly on her left side, spitting out the rabbit she once had between her fangs with a long string. Her four legs danced and scampered in the air without anything to catch on until she decided to roll around on her back, landing safely back on all fours.

    “We're not done with you, yet!” A blue blur struck the Ariados breathless in her sides when she turned around to see who yelled at her. She tumbled and rolled across the ground several times from the impact; when back on all fours, she shook the pain right off her body. A Riolu seemed to have struck her with his elbow during his Quick Attack. Eyebrows narrowed, Oran stared at her with a readied face as he let the cracking of his knuckles speak for him. The situation turned out different for her: now she has two walking meals to scrounge on.

    The Scyther trailed behind Oran, finally able to run off the effects of Scary Face. He felt like he ran a twenty-mile marathon, despite running just two miles. He bent over and took heavy breaths, hoping to quell the burning in his lungs. “Nice...shot there, Oran,” he wheezed. “But how did you get it to go through the branch? I thought your Aura Sphere always ricochets.”

    Oran shrugged his shoulders, “I dunno, it just always worked when I practice on tree trunks n' stuff.”

    “Rgh, I'm sure glad the gang's all back together,” Pecha grunted to herself, trying to free herself from her String Shot cocoon. “Hey, I have an idea to celebrate this occasion- somebody help me out of this nasty stuff- whoa-!” The Ariados yanked on the loose string connecting her to the Buneary, reeling Pecha while she dragged across the ground. “Hey,” she yelled at the spider, “I said I've had enough of this for today!”

    “I got ya, Pecha!” Oran chased after his sister. He grabbed hold of her wrapped body, and dug his hind paws into the ground to halt the spider from claiming her. But he underestimated her strength, no matter how deep he dug his heels into the ground, she never slowed down her pull, causing him to rake rows of dirt behind him. “Rrrgh-!” This was one tug-o-war he refused to lose; taking one step at a time backwards, he matched his efforts to the Ariados', and Pecha was going nowhere. “I! Won't! Let! You! Have! My! Sister!”

    Pecha thought to give him some encouraging words, “Come on, Oran! Pull Harder!”

    “I'm...trying!”

    The webbing's elasticity was stretched to its absolute limit between the two Pokémon, but with all the tension stored within its strands, it still refused to break. But with a single touch from Scyther's right blade, the string gave way and flung Ariados and Oran in opposite directions. “Oomph!” The Riolu met the ground harshly with his back, but at least his sister is safe in his arms. Scyther turned to the Buneary, and freed her from her sticky bindings with a single swipe of his Fury Cutter. “Pecha, are you alright?” He asked her.

    She crawled out of the sticky string like a Butterfree molting out of her Metapod cocoon, but not without losing a few patches of fur on her. “Y-yeah,” she told him, freeing her left paw out of the mess, and throwing it on the ground. “Do me a favor: after we're done, let's not do any more missions involving giant spiders.”

    “Watch out-!” Scyther jumped right in front of the kids. One by one thousands of little Poison Stings punctured his back while he used himself as a shield for his little ones. “Rrgh!” His body tensed as if it went through a bad acupuncture session, he was unable to move a muscle outside of a simple twitch. His legs couldn't handle the weight of his body, and he crashed onto the dirt like a fallen tree.

    “Scyther!” Pecha and Oran ran to their fallen mentor's side. Frantically they pulled out every needle puncturing his backside that they can get their paws on, even risking pricking their hands on their before they had the chance to sink in. When Scyther was freed from the Poison Stings, his back was a chart of connect-the-dots left by the Poison-type attack that stuck him.

    “Thanks, guys,” Scyther grunted while slowly picking himself up; the absent poisonous needles left phantom pains that still fooled his body into wanting to lock up.

    “Scyther, let's just go home, now,” Pecha told him softly. “We rescued Dedenne, there's no reason to stay.”

    Scyther knew his disciple had a point. Their mission was over, and Dedenne is now recovering back at the guild. He could use his silver badge to teleport the three of them away, and call it a day. But something built inside of him, irking him to stay. “No,” he said.

    “What? No? But why?” The Buneary asked.

    “You're right that our mission is over,” Scyther said, “but when a Pokémon attacks my students, I won't let it slide!” He turned away from the children. Crossing his blades in front of his chest, he emitted a white glow around his body, and two more Scyther appeared by his side.

    Oran's heart raced as fast as his tail wagged. He always wanted to see how an experienced explorer handled business, and now was his chance. He cheered him on, “Yeah! Go, Scyther! Kick that bug's butt!”

    “Ariados, today you will witness the wrath of a Silver-ranked explorer!”

    The Ariados attempted to fire another round of Poison Sting, hoping that would finish the job, but Scyther and his doppelgangers easily fled the stream of purple needles, flying away from it. Their small wings turned ghostly white, and grew to be twice as long as his arms. They flew low to the ground, low enough for each of them to strike the spider with just one of their wings.

    As the Scyther gang swarmed above her like angry Beedrill, what felt like a light graze across her exoskeleton with their wings to them was like a deep cut to her. The Flying-type attacks kept coming, and with them another monstrous shriek of distress from the Ariados.

    Oran jumped up and down at the sight of the spectacle, “Yeah! Go, Scyther! You have it on the ropes!”

    “And now for the finishing move!” His two doppelgangers dissipated into mist, and the real Scyther revealed himself over the Ariados head. “Fury Cutter!” He dropped like a falling rock from the sky, his raised scythe screamed through the air.

    Victory was assured to him. Until the spider proved him otherwise, by catching his blade between her maw before it had the chance to hit.

    “What the? How is that possible?!” Scyther screamed. He tried to wiggle his arm out of her fangs, but her grip was too strong to even let him inch his way to freedom.

    She flung him around in the air like a toddler would with a brand new action figure, before flinging him back by his students' feet. “Even after being super-effectively hit by my Wing Attack, she still has fight in her,” he grunted as the kids pushed him up.

    “Why didn't you go for another Wing Attack while you were overhead?” Pecha asked.

    “I got excited, and thought I had her with my Fury Cutter,” he said. “I've never won a fight with my Fury Cutter. Let that be a lesson, kids: even when victory is assured, you still lose.”

    The spider drew closer to the group, her fangs leaving entire rivers of venom behind just to the thought of the all-you-can-eat-buffet she was about to have. Oran didn't want to stand by while his friends would be eaten; he had to think fast. He threw himself in front of the Scyther, his arms stretched wide. “No! I won't let you have us,” he shouted at the spider.

    Ariados didn't care for his plea; all she wondered was how much longer was her prey going to run out of steam to fight back. Then came her solution: she opened her maw wide, and aimed a thousand needles of Poison Sting at the Riolu.

    “I said I won't let you have us!” All he wanted to see was his friends' safety. All he wanted to feel was their pain in their place. A small spark of growth clicked inside of him- he crossed his arms in front of his chest, and the thousand poison needles just disappeared on contact with his skin. With each of their stings a dark blue aura around the jackal's body shined brighter.

    Pecha and Scyther watched behind him with curious fascination: what was happening to their teammate, they wondered with open eyes. The Buneary has never seen something quite like this before; the Scyther just can't quite put his scythe on what's happening in front of him. “Scyther, what's he doing?” She asked.

    “If my hunch is right, Oran is learning Counter,” Scyther sputtered to her.

    The pecking of the needles died off. “Here, have it all back!” With a wave of his right paw, Oran returned all one thousand needles to the spider. Of all he threw back only a hand full pricked Ariados in her face, but that small amount was enough to send the creepy-crawly into a fit, screaming bloody murder as she raked the pins out with her front legs.

    A shout from Scyther caught Oran by the ears, “Oran, she's weakened now! Use your Quick Attack!”

    “Okay!” After his first step his feet felt weightless and quick like the wind. Everything in front of him became a blur to his crimson eyes, all but the fast-approaching arachnid. Before time ran out he propped his right shoulder in front of him as he awaited the incoming collision.

    As the final needle fell out of her face, Ariados was lifted off her feet and carried off by the speeding Riolu. He slammed down his breaks, and threw the gargantuan arachnid with the rest of his inertia that still believed he was in motion. When she hit the ground she hit it hard, skipping across it like a stone over a pond while rolling. A sturdy tree trunk broke her momentum, along with, as evidence from her unconscious twitching, most of her body.

    “Hey, I did it! I won!” taking on a Pokémon three times his size and winning made him feel a while lot bigger about himself. Underneath all of the dancing around and hopping for glee, he felt like he could take an Ursaring on, no problem! “Scyther, did you see that?” He asked his teacher. “Wasn't that cool.”

    “Yes, you did a good job,” Scyther replied, grunting as he barely picked himself back up. “Hoo-geez, what an adventure. Sure thing I'm gonna feel this in the morning.”

    Pecha hopped to her little brother, “Oran, how did you do that?” She asked him, her jaw still hanging low.

    “Did what?” What a vague question coming from his sister. Usually she's more blunt when it comes to questions.

    “That blue, glowy thing, how did you do that? When you were shielding us from the Poison Sting.”

    he pondered hard to himself, rubbing the sides of his head to see if that helped bring back anything from that moment. Certainly he did remember that instant, but everything else was so vague to him: his feelings, all were as gray to him as the world around him. “I-I don't know how I did it,” he told her. “I was just so fed up with that Ariados trying to hurt you guys, all I wanted was to do something.” He glanced down at his open paws, “And then something just...unlocked inside of me. Just sort of sparked inside.”

    “Well, the important thing is, we're all at least in one piece,” Scyther told the children. “Just between us: Ariados aren't exactly my favorite Pokémon to deal with. They tend to be a bit unpredictable for me, it's scary.”

    Pecha turned to Scyther, nodding her head in agreement, “I hear that. This entire thing has been stressful on my fur.”

    “Okay, guys, time to fall in towards me. I'll take us home.” Pecha and Oran huddled around the Scyther. He gave his silver badge a slight tap, and its sapphire eye hummed while emitting a faint glow. A quick burst of light, and the crew was gone.
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    Hi. I've been meaning to get around to this for a while.

    Anyway, it was a decent start to a fic. I do have some questions about why the opening and world of PMD II were used for a story that is not PMD II in any meaningful sense, though. It seems like you might have just been better off creating a new universe to work with.

    Additionally focusing on children who clearly act like children is interesting, although the siblings of different species thing is a bit odd. My other complaint there is that while it is nice to see children in a Pokemon story behave like children, when they devolve in to bickering five times in a single chapter it gets repetitive and I start to skim big-time. If I was a bit more tired I probably would have stopped reading altogether in the early chapters.

    Battles here are pretty good. I particularly enjoyed the Quagsire and 5.2 Ariados battles, and they really signal the potential strength of the story. My only advice there would be to stop having everyone call attacks aloud, particularly when we know what they look like. Idly mentioning the name is fine, but most readers will be familiar with Pokemon so having it shouted aloud isn't necessary.

    Speaking of most readers being familiar with Pokemon, you could really get rid of fluff and speed the story along by only mentioning unique things about a new character relative to their species. Most people reading Pokemon fan fiction on serebii.net (or bulbagarden or whatever) will know what a Delphox looks like, and explaining it in detail only takes readers out of the narrative.

    Anyway, you have good battle scenes and I'll be keeping an eye on this story on one forum or another.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Rediamond View Post
    Hi. I've been meaning to get around to this for a while.

    Anyway, it was a decent start to a fic. I do have some questions about why the opening and world of PMD II were used for a story that is not PMD II in any meaningful sense, though. It seems like you might have just been better off creating a new universe to work with.

    Additionally focusing on children who clearly act like children is interesting, although the siblings of different species thing is a bit odd. My other complaint there is that while it is nice to see children in a Pokemon story behave like children, when they devolve in to bickering five times in a single chapter it gets repetitive and I start to skim big-time. If I was a bit more tired I probably would have stopped reading altogether in the early chapters.

    Battles here are pretty good. I particularly enjoyed the Quagsire and 5.2 Ariados battles, and they really signal the potential strength of the story. My only advice there would be to stop having everyone call attacks aloud, particularly when we know what they look like. Idly mentioning the name is fine, but most readers will be familiar with Pokemon so having it shouted aloud isn't necessary.

    Speaking of most readers being familiar with Pokemon, you could really get rid of fluff and speed the story along by only mentioning unique things about a new character relative to their species. Most people reading Pokemon fan fiction on serebii.net (or bulbagarden or whatever) will know what a Delphox looks like, and explaining it in detail only takes readers out of the narrative.

    Anyway, you have good battle scenes and I'll be keeping an eye on this story on one forum or another.
    Thanks for replying. I'll try to keep the bickering between the children to a bar minimum, at least to an understandable level. I was aiming for some kind of realism with Pecha and Oran's relationship, since they're so young, they're going to misbehave and bicker with each other. just thought that'd make sense.

    Sometimes I kinda feel the need to go into how the pokemon look in detail. Sure, I understand that most of us know what the Pokemon look like (I hope so, anyways), I just do it anyways for those who don't. Originally I wouldn't detail a Pokemon if I can't figure out how to describe it (Loudred for example), but if you don't want me to go into detail about them, I guess I can ween off of it a little.

    And I can see the whole "calling out your attack" thing being annoying to some. Originally when I planned for that, I wanted some sort of contrast between the "civilized" Pokemon and "wild" Pokemon: civilized Pokemon call out their attacks, and only attack back in retaliation, and will try to avoid casualties by fainting the enemy; wild Pokemon are extremely territorial, and will attack to kill you, without even calling out their attacks. Though now that I think about it, that's a pretty dumb contrast, and I should come up with a better one lol.
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    Well, I think I have delayed long enough, let's see chapter three!
    We get introduced to Scyther, who is currently unnamed. For his character, I have not seen enough (as I generally use two or more chapters of characterization to make my judgments) , so for now, he will not be reflected upon for now.
    We then reach some childish bickering between Blueberry and Strawberry, and the Pokémon stating their respective levels (although I dislike this intensely. I would recommend they state what experiences they have and let the reader determine the average power level of these characters, rather than stating it precisely, and besides, I think that levels should not be quantified anyway, they are bits of information that only the player of a game would know.) After a bit of talking (and the narrative stating that a Riolu has fingers, when they clearly do not) we get introduced to another character, and by using my super-advanced-future-telling powers, I can determine that the Fennekin known as Cheri has a high chance of joining Blueberry and Strawberry, who knows, perhaps their team will be named after a dessert! Yes, I was somewhat hungry when I wrote this review. We then cut back to our intrepid berries and mantis, and we get a line that actually made me laugh a little:
    “MY HEAD FEELS LIKE IT'S LEARNING,” Oran cried falling to his knees. “MAKE IT STOP!”

    Classic.

    After a bit more dialogue we get this bit here:" He had his full attention pasted to the new girl (Cheri), who he can still clearly see at the end of the hallway with Florges, as if her presence hypnotized him." Shortly after, we get this :“Someday, we'll be friends,” Oran said to himself, gazing at the fox girl. “Maybe someday, we'll even be on the same team. You can count on it.”
    Note that I made my predictions prior, and this lovely bit of foreshadowing tells me with that one of two things is possible, either A: Oran is a creepy stalker, or B: Cheri will be on their team (that's why they have matching names!)

    My apologies for taking so long.
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    @Omegagoldfish Thank you for the reply I've been waiting for, like, two months to have lol. Good thing I decided to go back to re-editing the chapters after I'm done with this next chapter which I'll hopefully post shortly. There are some things that you've mentioned that I was planning on re-editing anyways, like that...ending with Oran and Cheri (yeah, it sort of creeps me out too, once I start thinking about it).

    and the whole "have them declare their levels" I bet sounds a little pretentious, so I'll change that, too. Gosh, I have a lot of work cut out for me- I'm probably gonna be working more than resting during this hiatus lol
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    Chapter 5.3

    There couldn't have been any greater relief pouring from Pikachu's eyes seeing his wife again, back in Florges' office. He rubbed his scarlet cheeks against hers as he held her tightly, producing small sparks of static between them. “Oh, Dedenne, my love,” he cried onto her cheek, “I'm so glad you're okay! I'm just so happy that we're together again!”

    Dedenne only responded to him with a low grumble of irritation. After seeing her husband again after what she's been put through, how could she reply back to him with the same kindness.

    “Wh-what's wrong, dear?” He asked her nervously.

    “I think you know what's wrong,” she replied back with a bitter voice. She decided to let her foolish husband have it, “Do you know how long you left me stranded out there, at the mercy of every Ariados in the Indigo Overgrowth?! I don't even know how long I was out there, but it felt like an eternity! And all because YOU ran away to get help, when you could have stayed with me to fight them off! We could have solved the problem faster that way!”

    Pikachu's once gentle grasp around his wife grew limp and weak. He knew she had some harsh criticism about his decision, and he thought he could take it. But his watery eyes and cracking heart believed otherwise. “B-b-but I did get help for you,” he sniveled. “I-I only wanted to help.”

    She crossed her arms while turning her back on him, “Thanks for the 'help'.”

    “Dedenne, I-” the closer he got to her, the more she wanted to push away from him. he squeaked multiple huffs, and hid his eyes in his palms. “I'm so sorry, Dedenne,” he told her, with streams of water trailing down his tiny arms. “I wanted our honeymoon to be perfect; but instead, I ruined it for us! If only I didn't take that detour! Why am I so stupid? Everything good that happens to me I ruin!”

    “Cry all you want, I'm still mad at you,” she told him.

    “You deserve to be mad at me- even I'm mad at me- and I deserve every ounce of it!” Dedenne felt her husband's tiny hands gently placed on her shoulders, “I know today was sort of a hiccup, but let's try to forget about it. Every couple goes through days like this. But at least let me take us to Cristal Springs! Before our marriage dies before it even begins.”

    Dedenne glanced at her husband from her left shoulder. Even while bumbling, she noticed something different in him. Previously he was too squishy to support himself. Maybe some of that softness hardened into a backbone during her absence. And she felt a little proud, teaching him how to do that, though not enough to break through her anger. “Fine,” she sighed heavily, “I forgive you. I'm not gonna stay mad at you- at least you did try to help.”

    “R-really?” He pulled his wife in towards him for a tight hug. “Thank you, Dedenne,” he praised with tears running from his eyes, “you don't know how much that makes me happy! I promise not to mess this up!”

    She replied with no words, but with a, silent, hot huff into his arm.

    Pikachu peeled away from her, “What's wrong, love?” He asked. “Was it something I said?”

    “Oh, nothing,” Dedenne told him. Pretending to trip into his chest, she purred to him within his hold, “it's just that, after going through all that stuff, I'm really beat. I don't think I have the energy to walk all the way to Cristal Springs. If only there was a big, strong Pikachu that could carry me there- that would make me very happy.”

    He caught on to what she was trying to tell him, though he thought it best to keep it to himself, and just play along. “U-uhm, okay,” he said, “I'll carry you along the way, if that's what you want.”

    “Oh, that would be lovely,” she purred with warmth. Crawling into his arms she wiggled a little bit to fit snugly in his caress. She could almost fall asleep! It took the mouse by surprise: rarely did his wife ever let him hold her. His stubby, little arms just wanted to give way as soon as she cradled on top. But after all he put her through, he felt she needed this little rest, and he needed this little pain. She pecked him in his right cheek with a kiss, “Love ya', honey.”

    He chuckled a bit under his wife's weight, “I-I love you, too.” He looked to the three explorers standing in front of him who saved his wife, “Thank you, explorers,” he told them. “If it weren't for you, I would see my wife, again.”

    “No problem, we're always happy to help,” Scyther told him.

    Finally reunited, the Electric couple went on their journey, continuing for the glistening waters of Cristal Springs.

    “What, no reward?” Being left empty-handed frustrated the Buneary. She at least expected to be paid for all her labor and the fur she lost- some Poké wouldn't have hurt. She turned to the Guildmistress, “We're just letting them walk out for free?”

    “We've already worked out a payment,” Florges said while tapping a stack of papers on the face of her desk. “It may not come today, but you'll be duly compensated.”

    Pecha grunted, crossing her arms, “Could you at least tell me what it is?”

    Florges chuckled, “No, no, no, I'm keeping it a surprise~. I thought you'd appreciate surprises.”

    “I think I'm all burnt out on surprises for today,” the Buneary said.

    She felt Scyther's lukewarm blade wrapping around her right shoulder. He kneeled down to her, and stuttered, “Come on, let's get some rest, okay?”

    “Excellent idea, Scyther,” Florges praised, “you've all had quite a day, I'm sure. You all deserve some rest.” Being dismissed by the Guildmistress, Pecha and Scyther walked out of the office.

    Strutting behind the others Oran had one foot out the door, before hearing his name called, “Oh, Oran,” Florges said, “before you leave, I need to have a word with you.”

    A massive clump formed in his throat, and tiny goosebumps began growing under his pelt. Regardless of what she had to tell him, he never liked being called by her to stay in her office. He had a feeling he knew what she wanted to talk about, but a little speck in the back of his mind kept him cool, telling him she might actually commend him in private! He turned and asked, “Yes, Miss Florges?” Although his body stayed collected, his voice crackled with anticipated anxiety.

    “Scyther has told me about your behavior in the Indigo Overgrowth,” she explained. “I'm very disappointed in you. That's not the way an explorer should act.”

    he rushed over to her deck, “But if I hadn't, I wouldn't rescue Dedenne,” he argued.

    “That may be true,” Florges said, “but you could have put your teammates in danger, just running off like that. You could have easily put yourself in danger. I do not condone reckless behavior like that. I'm sorry, Oran, but you give me no choice: no dinner for you, tonight.”

    In one instant, upon hearing those words, he immediately knew what it felt like to be a Water-type being struck by Wood Hammer. “No, no, Miss Florges, don't do that,” he begged against her desk, his eyes misting lightly with tears. “I promise I learned my lesson! I won't do that ever again!”

    “I'll take your word for it,” the Guildmistress told him, “after you are finished with your punishment. Don't worry, I know you'll pull through.”

    “This can't be happening,” he chanted softly to himself while cupping his pointed ears to his head, “this can't be happening!” The anxiety was too much for him to bear, and he dashed out of her office before it had the chance to cripple him.

    The office grew dead and silent with just the Florges occupying its lonesome space. Her once erect form slouched sluggishly down on the desk, her face covered behind the wall her arms formed. A deep breath turned into a heavy sigh, and she raised her head from behind her arms, “I hope I wasn't too harsh on him,” she said to herself. “That boy is becoming more and more like his mother everyday. Pretty soon I have to discipline him the same way I disciplined her. Oh, Lopunny, why is watching over your children so draining? I'm a Guildmistress; not a babysitter.” A great yawn escaped her mouth, and she wiped the light dew from her eyes. “Oh my, I should take a break, too, before my job kills me.”

    The light of day quickly burned to just specks of light in the blackened Unidan sky, with just streaks of gray clouds casually floating across the canvas. A gentle, yet weary breath of wind blew through a beige prairie of dry grass. Like an island stranded in an ocean, there was a small cave formation looking over the field, softly illuminated by several torches inside its mouth.

    A young Gabite paced back and forth in front of the cavern at an impatient pace. Being on the run with her twin brother, it didn't sit well with her just staying in one place, while authorities came closer to sniffing them out. How much longer must she sit around until that happened, she thought. “Come on, come on,” she growled to herself as she chugged along her little personal moat, “where is he? The authorities are gonna be here any minute- where is he?!”

    “Calm down, Pele,” her twin brother told her from within the cave. Surrounding him where he sat was their plunder for the day: four hundred-fifty of Poké, three Oran berries, and just a handful of Gravelerrock. Hardly anything of worth in small quantities. “I'm sure we're safe for the night.”

    “Easy for you to say, Lono,” she hissed at him. “We can't have our guards down when it comes to the Pawniard Brigade: one minute we'll be miles ahead of them, and then the next they're breathing down our scales! We can crush those little worms easily- but noooo- we need to be on the run from them!” Repeatedly she took her frustration out on a nearest innocent wall by kicking it, crushing it bit by bit into rubble underneath her large feet. “He's an idiot,” she roared, “he's making us sitting ducks, while he's still out there! We're supposed to be a team!”

    Each kick by his sister caused the ceiling above his head to rumble a little bit, with a few strands of dust breaking loose. “Can you try to be a little more quiet?” Lono asked his sister calmly. “And while you're at it, I'd appreciate it if you don't collapse the entire foundation on top of us.”

    “Shut up, Lono, worry about yourself,” the sister barked. “Go back to counting our loot!” She was about to deliver another blow to the wall, but something stopped her. A curious rumble, softly vibrating beneath her grounded foot. The little shiver quickly became a violent shake, until a geyser of earth and dust exploded in front of the cavern, and a heavy object crashed back down near the gaping opening.

    The thin veil of dust settled, revealing a Garchomp behind it, one very large for his species. A deep scar from long ago stretched diagonally across his scarlet underbelly, and another smaller one permanently closing his left eye.

    “Where have you been, Ku?!” The Gabite female demanded. “do you know how much I hate waiting out here?!”

    “Shut up,” the land shark growled back. The authority and aggression in his voice took the female a step back, closing her mouth. “I was meeting with an associate of mine.”

    “I hope it was a good meeting,” the twin brother cracked.

    “All you need to know is we have our next target: a small town not too far from here. I hear they have something that has peeked my interest.”

    “Really?” Pele asked. “What is it?”

    “You'll see soon enough. It's time to head out!” The Garchomp hopped back into the hole from where he came.

    “Aw, man, and I was just starting to like it in here,” Lono said in a sarcastic tone, scraping all of the items off the floor and shoveling them back into his bag. “Any longer, I would've called this place 'home'.”

    “There's no use bellyaching,” Pele told him, rearing for a fight, “I've been looking forward for a little action all night! Come on!” The Gabite hopped and then drilled into the earth, disappearing into the hole she made.

    Lono huffed, “Why am I always picking up your guys' slack?”
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    Quote Originally Posted by 0bss1d1ankn1ght View Post
    @Omegagoldfish Thank you for the reply I've been waiting for, like, two months to have lol. Good thing I decided to go back to re-editing the chapters after I'm done with this next chapter which I'll hopefully post shortly. There are some things that you've mentioned that I was planning on re-editing anyways, like that...ending with Oran and Cheri (yeah, it sort of creeps me out too, once I start thinking about it).

    and the whole "have them declare their levels" I bet sounds a little pretentious, so I'll change that, too. Gosh, I have a lot of work cut out for me- I'm probably gonna be working more than resting during this hiatus lol
    That's fine, I am here to over-analyze things to see if there are any implications that may alter the story, in addition I apologize for the delay, I have no real excuse.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Omegagoldfish View Post
    That's fine, I am here to over-analyze things to see if there are any implications that may alter the story, in addition I apologize for the delay, I have no real excuse.
    That's just fine. I have the final part up and am taking a break for a while, so at least you have time to review the other chapters lol.
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    BUMP

    Chapters 1-4 have been re-uploaded.
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    Well, I stalled for more than long enough, let's begin chapter four! It starts, with another fantasy from Oran (which has Pokémon calling their moves, which I dislike), ending with him being awakened by Loudred. After a bit of arguing between each other, our two main explorers-in-training are sent to spar with an Ambipom who is a little bit off, most do not laugh hysterically when sparring. After Oran gets overconfident and tries to use a move his species cannot learn until evolution, namely Aura Sphere (the idea of a Riolu using Aura Sphere is kind of annoying to me, but at least you made it useless) which doesn't do anything (other than send the Ambipom into hysterics.) Then we get this line “Welp, to put it bluntly: you'd be a Riolu pancake right about now.” Is it me, or does that sound delicious. (Yes, I was hungry when writing this review as well.)
    Then after a few remarks about teamwork and a bit more revelations about the character of Scyther (seems to be the stern, yet caring adult figure most stories have) a small Pikachu appears (so in this world, Pokémon have a range of sizes, I think that happens too.)
    After a line that states that there is something similar to a wedding in this world, our heroes get their next quest!

    I'll see you there!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Omegagoldfish View Post
    Well, I stalled for more than long enough, let's begin chapter four! It starts, with another fantasy from Oran (which has Pokémon calling their moves, which I dislike), ending with him being awakened by Loudred. After a bit of arguing between each other, our two main explorers-in-training are sent to spar with an Ambipom who is a little bit off, most do not laugh hysterically when sparring. After Oran gets overconfident and tries to use a move his species cannot learn until evolution, namely Aura Sphere (the idea of a Riolu using Aura Sphere is kind of annoying to me, but at least you made it useless) which doesn't do anything (other than send the Ambipom into hysterics.) Then we get this line “Welp, to put it bluntly: you'd be a Riolu pancake right about now.” Is it me, or does that sound delicious. (Yes, I was hungry when writing this review as well.)
    Then after a few remarks about teamwork and a bit more revelations about the character of Scyther (seems to be the stern, yet caring adult figure most stories have) a small Pikachu appears (so in this world, Pokémon have a range of sizes, I think that happens too.)
    After a line that states that there is something similar to a wedding in this world, our heroes get their next quest!

    I'll see you there!
    Thanks for the reply, I honestly thought you'd given up with the story at this point I've just gotten off my holiday hiatus and am writing the 6th chapter, and am planning on releasing it around the 20th this month before taking another hiatus for Christmas. By the end of New Year's I'm planning on going on an uploading schedule of about two weeks~ per chapter.
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    I never gave up, I'm just lazy.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Omegagoldfish View Post
    I never gave up, I'm just lazy.
    Really lazy.
    Well at least you aren't giving up on it. That would've made me sad; I'm starting to speed up the story progress, I think, and I don't want you to miss it.
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    I always check.
    I will do plot and character reviews (rather than summaries) every five chapters if I am not too lazy.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Omegagoldfish View Post
    I always check.
    I will do plot and character reviews (rather than summaries) every five chapters if I am not too lazy.
    I'm fine with that, but just as a little disclosure: I'm planning on making "major" edits to the story every 5 chapters or so; "major" meaning, I'm mostly going to go back and edit grammar and punctuation that I've missed in the past, and maybe rework certain events that I don't like or find a little awkward. I just wanted to tell you before you go and make big reviews on characters and plot and such, just to have my edits render them moot.

    So that's my uploading schedule after New Year's: a new chapter/part every two weeks or so, with major edits being every five chapters. Does this sound reasonable enough?
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    Quote Originally Posted by 0bss1d1ankn1ght View Post
    I'm fine with that, but just as a little disclosure: I'm planning on making "major" edits to the story every 5 chapters or so; "major" meaning, I'm mostly going to go back and edit grammar and punctuation that I've missed in the past, and maybe rework certain events that I don't like or find a little awkward. I just wanted to tell you before you go and make big reviews on characters and plot and such, just to have my edits render them moot.

    So that's my uploading schedule after New Year's: a new chapter/part every two weeks or so, with major edits being every five chapters. Does this sound reasonable enough?
    Grammar and severe (or funny) punctuation errors are reviewed every chapter, as are events that may need to be changed.
    At the end of every fifth chapter I will review the thus far.
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    And... I guess we met the villains? Not entirely sure how they're going to stand against a Garchomp, but that should be fun to read.

    Oran came off more as a kid here than an annoyance. So that portrayal was better, but no telling how it will hold in larger quantities.

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