Welcome all to my fan fiction labelled "Forgotten Memories, The Banished Renegade's Revenge". This is the tale of a boy, not just some new trainer boy, but a mysterious one who will embark on a journey to find something he's been missing his entire life. Without further ado, shall we begin?
NOTE: I have decided through multiple cliche searching, reviews, and friend support, to "revise" my fan fiction in terms of the plot. IN NO WAY am I giving up on the grand idea that I had and abandoning it (as some of my friends have pointed out that it has great potential, just lacks the necessary pacing and development). I just really feel as if I could start the story a better way than the way I did.
Honestly, there are alot people I want to thank.
Dragonfree:He answered a question I was having for introducing my fan fiction, and after I looked through it multiple times, I finally understood what he meant. Thank you.
Epicninjask:The review he posted on Chapter 1 really opened up a conflict I was having with myself on the pacing. He pointed out great things that I needed to understand and I thank you for that.
JX: I would like to sincerely thank you for making me create an entirely new prologue. You my good sir, rock.
Scaldaver: Your review on the Prologue really made me think on it and make it more descriptive Thank you
And so, I would like to re edit my story. Also, if one of the mods could please close/ delete/ or remove all of the posts up till now for this thread?
If this is against any of the rules, I apologize now, I went through the forum rule guide and I didn't see anything about a request for a thread deletion so I assume it's ok?
Running was all he could do.
He didn't know where he was going, how he would escape, but knew that being captured was not an option.
His ears twitched slightly, as he could hear the barks and screams of nearby threats that had been closing on his trail. With haste, he sprinted faster as drops of sweat began to drip down his forehead. His heart rate steadily increased with each step he took.
The moonlight that was cast over the grassy plains illuminated the scenery and revealed the shadow's of his pursuers.
“Don’t let it escape!” a husky voice screamed from the opposite direction.
Swiftly, he picked up his pace, ignoring his current surroundings until he tripped over a rock that had been laying on the floor. His back arched awkwardly as he began to tumble down the hill. He continued to fall until he splashed into a river that laid below him. His body plummeted to the ocean floor as he opened his eyes and gazed upon the moon above him. Refusing to yield, he waddled his legs as his body floated. Knowing that he would be discovered if he emerged, he continued to float underwater until they were gone.
Two silhouettes of human figures had stepped out of the tall grass and looked around the area. Frantically, they cocked their heads around but to their annoyance, the target couldn't be found.
“Blast it! We let it get away” one of the shadowed images exclaimed as he held a flash light.
Next to these pursuers were two dark canine creatures that had been snarling since the target they had been chasing had got away.
Believing that he had escaped, the two began to walk away from the scene until they were nowhere in sight.
Confirming that they were gone, he cocked his head up from the river as he let out a huge exhale.
He leaped up from the water, unfortunately dripping wet from being submerged for quite some time. He looked around the area and discovered a small narrow pathway that lead into a pitch black forest.
He nodded, deciding that this would be his next destination. He continued to run towards the forest that was overshadowed with pitch black. The forest possessed a terrifying atmosphere towards it and didn't look as welcoming as the forests that appeared in broad day light, but he was left without a choice. He decided to venture inside the mysterious green land as he needed a place to rest and recover his strength.
Surviving was all that mattered to him, no matter the cost. He made a promise that he was going to keep, and he wasn't going to let him down.