Okay, I'm back. This is how busy I am these days; I'm struggling to find time to give shortened replies to comments. Oy!
#5 SilentMemento: I think I might (or might not) have explained this better in a comment earlier, but the Barry thing is something else that might have been better in my head than in reality. In my head, between Barry's efforts and the PSC crew's water-types, no one died (it's not like they were helpless or Barry was the only person knocked off the ship by the wave), but Barry wasn't sticking around to patch them up, either. They all (probably, in Barry's best guess) had cell phones or radios to get help. He just wasn't super concerned about people who attacked them. So in my head, it's not awful. It's more of a "Did they die? No. Good, then screw'em". But I'll keep an eye out for that. I wouldn't say Sam necessarily TRUSTS Alonzo, but sees him as a means to an end. At least Alonzo is in the same chapter (if not the same page) as Sam. I actually have no idea who "Palmer" is. Must have missed some research there; oh well.
The whole Cynthia thing is getting its own paragraph because a few people have thus far (rightfully) called me out on it: I realized, like, halfway through that fight that Cynthia's usage of Spiritomb was less than well-thought-out. But...I really wanted to write that Spiritomb scene. I have internally rationalized it a few ways: 1) I got a sense while writing Cynthia that she is a Son Goku-esque character. She lives for the battle and proving her strength. And, in that regard, she sometimes does things that seem counter-intuitive, or she stalls when she should be hurrying because she's caught up in the thrill of battle (*cough* Planet Namek). She sensed that Sam was a tough trainer, and she got lost in the battle. Also, as Prof Carolina pointed out, they assumed after a one-out match (when Chispa lost), that that'd be the end of it, so since Spiritomb is a winner, that's what she chose.
But yeah, ultimately, it was my just really having a vivid image of that Spiritomb battle and wanting to use it. So yeah. My bad there, and I realized it. Thanks to everyone for holding me accountable!
#6 Skiyomi: (First off, I'm going to read Out Of My League's new chapter SOMEDAY). Yeah...the "guilty" bit makes sense. I'll keep an eye out for stuff for that going forward. You're totally right about how the Canalave City cargo ship chapter should have ended. Dang. I wish I had thought of that. Oh well. A few readers at this point have had trouble picking up on the broken Kantoan of the PSC guys. I wonder why that is? I haven't wanted to make them sound TOO silly because that'd by a bit cartoonish, but as it is, some people are missing it. Hm.
#7 Azurus: Oops! I'll have to add a link to chapter 16 later today! Thanks for letting me know!
#8 Knightfall: I think it is amusing-ish that I am apparently contributing to a meme with the whole Sinnoh public transportation thing. That was mentioned earlier, too. I might have to check that story out and see what its take is. Glad you enjoyed the new chapter!
...All right, still not done. Sigh. I'll get to Ememew (there's a lot I want/need to address of yours, even beyond the Cynthia stuff I covered with SilentMem) and Chibi Pika later on. Whew. I think page 8 of this topic is going to be all replies and comments. Ugh!
And I'm back!
#9 Ememew: Abiword doesn't default double-hyphens to dashes...I don't know why. It means the same thing, though, so I am generally nonplussed about it. I'll have to see if maybe I can FORCE it somehow. As i mentioned earlier, my love of Sinnoh is possibly underdeveloped and under-researched in the sense that I don't remember Palmer at all. Drats. Might have just screwed that one up. I'll have to Google it later. Rowan COULD have just let Sam bring Tommy to the legends, but Rowan is extremely distrustful in regards to the legends and didn't know Sam from Adam when they mett. Obviously it's a decision all parties involved regret right now. When Sam last met Mr. Alonzo (prior to meeting at the match), Sam was kind of unstable and had just shown a proclivity towards violence. That's why I would think Alonzo was not bursting forth to give him a phone number to be friends. Brief note on the paramour thing: at my last job, I worked with individuals with intellectual/development disabilities. It was generally accepted to refer to their boyfriends and girlfriends as "paramours", so that's where I got the term. Certainly hadn't heard it used regarding a mistress, though! Maybe Rowan is getting some on the side As I mentioned previously in my first batch of replies, Sam isn't supposed to be particularly likable here. He's really gotten to the point where he distrusts EVERYONE and is only out for himself. He doesn't like Carlos much and sees no reason to sugar coat it; Carlos is just another means to an end as far as Sam is concerned. He needs to refind his conscience... Sam and Cynthia is not love at any sight, I promise. But she will be back, so I won't say too much. Chispa IS awesome, and I'm thrilled everyone likes her. To think, I regretted introducing her at first and thought I'd made a mistake. She is playing an important role, I think, even if nobody has [outwardly] noticed it. You bring up a point that comes up next chapter, and that's the logical assumption that Sam has actually expressed before: won't the legends just return to their homes? I think Sam is feeling mopey and despondent and borderline hopless here after having just been SO CLOSE, and that's why he doesn't IMMEDIATELY go to that, but...he gets there soon. I promise that wasn't just an oversight.
I think this just leaves Chibi, and I'll get to you in a bit!
#10 Chibi: I'll try to keep an eye on making all dialogue distinctive and using more tags when necessary. Sometimes my disdain of heavy use of dialogue tags gets the better of me. I've addressed the Cynthia stuff above. And thanks for continuing reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
All caught up! Now to get back to actual WRITING.
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