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*coughs importantly* I must say this is one of my favorite chapters in the whole of the fic. The use of words like 'colliquial' gave it a very professional tone, as if it were a real book. More than anything, I enjoyed the development of Ash and Iris through their dialouge. It flowed very nicely, and while reinforcing Negaishipping, it also made their individual characters not as bland as they often are in the anime. (Particularly Ash's clever comment about his actually winning their race).
As always, the pokemon interactions from their POVs was expertly done and cleverly integrated. Vincent is clearly top notch, and if I'm like anyone here, I'm looking forward to the next chapter both for more of him, and the likely scary 'conversation' Iris wants to have with Ash.