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    Red face snorlax.. (Beatles Blackbird parody)

    snorlax sleeping in the dead of night....
    Take these chicken wings and they are deep fried....
    All your life....
    You were only waiting for your pizzas to arrive....

    snorlax sleeping in the dead of night...
    Take these Bread rolls and they are free...

    All your life....
    You were only waiting for your pizzas to arrive...
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    Snorlax should be capitalized, as its in the front of a sentence.

    Blackbird singing in the dead of night
    Take these broken wings and learn to fly
    All your life
    You were only waiting for this moment to arise.

    Blackbird singing in the dead of night
    Take these sunken eyes and learn to see
    All your life
    You were only waiting for this moment to be free.

    Blackbird fly Blackbird fly
    Into the light of the dark black night.

    Blackbird fly Blackbird fly
    Into the light of the dark black night.

    Blackbird singing in the dead of night
    Take these broken wings and learn to fly
    All your life
    You were only waiting for this moment to arise
    You were only waiting for this moment to arise
    You were only waiting for this moment to arise.

    These are the words to the original song... your's should look a lot like it. So your should look like this:

    snorlax sleeping in the dead of night -capitalize Snorlax
    Take these chicken wings and they are deep fried -doesn't match up.
    All your life
    You were only waiting for your pizzas to arrive -take off the s in pizza

    snorlax sleeping in the dead of night -capitalize Snorlax
    Take these chicken wings and they are deep fried -doesn't match up.
    All your life
    You were only waiting for your pizzas to arrive -take off the s in pizza

    -include the Blackbird fly stanza.

    snorlax sleeping in the dead of night -capitalize Snorlax
    Take these Bread rolls and they are free -uncapitalize bread
    All your life
    You were only waiting for your pizzas to arrive -take the s off pizza
    You were only waiting for your pizzas to arrive -take off the s in pizza
    You were only waiting for your pizzas to arrive -take off the s in pizza

    Your chicken wing verse doesn't match up. You should count the syllables in each line. Its required that that number is the same, but its really good if you can match it up word for word.

    Pizza can be singular or plural without adding an "s", so have it just be pizza.

    Uncapitalize bread.

    Don't forget the Blackbird fly Blackbird fly/Into the light of the dark black night.

    Have a nice day!

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