Reading about Dawn's withdrawal broke my heart a bit. I love how you had Ash sing for her, even though he doesn't seem like the type of person to particularly like singing in general. The love he had for her really made itself clear in this chapter and I love it.
One thing that kinda bugged me was how...rushed the second half (starting from the point when they were rescued) seemed to be. It might be just me though, so...yeah.
Sorry my review isn't really helpful/long this time. I don't have much to say about this chapter that I already haven't. Even so, you're doing a wonderful job. Keep it up!