The second paragraph I'll take to heart, though. For me, I'm kind of someone who wants to know all of the facts about something as quickly as possible, so I guess that had to do a bit with the paragraph about Delia there. Originally, I actually wrote a lot more there, but I ended up cutting most of it out. I guess it's maybe a good thing I did. I guess this is what Imaginative meant when he said "show, not tell?"
You're not offering specifics? Lol, could've fooled me. I don't mean to sound rude, but I'm not gonna face all of the criticism I get with a smile and a nod like I'm in a pageant or something. I like to have discussions with people, not just have someone say, "Oh, you made a mistake here and there, etc." and me just nod and say "okay!" That just doesn't really work for me. At the very least, I want to acknowledge the advice given. The piece of advice I called unfair is the perfect example of that. I didn't call it unfair because I thought it was unfair to me, it's because I thought it would be unfair to the readers. The guy told me to "maybe only explain moves some people won't know," well it's kinda hard for me to decipher which moves someone would know and what they wouldn't. Should I assume that fifth gen moves would be the ones that are unknown? Or what about a more uncommon move from an earlier generation? Meditate is a move from generation one, yet I had no clue what it was or that it even existed until like two months ago. So, it's kind of unfair for me to try and guess what kind of moves people would know, or what they wouldn't. Especially since I'm trying to write this in a way so that someone who knew pretty much nothing about Pokemon, could open it up on their browser and still be able to follow it without getting too confused. I may fail terribly at that, but lol.
Even if I object or dispute with certain pieces of advice, it does not mean I don't take it in. That's just not true. Like I just now said, I like to have discussions with people. For some of these suggestions, I may not really understand what the reviewer is trying to tell me, so of course I'm gonna ask them to elaborate in that situation. Maybe I even disputed something because I didn't quite understand what someone was trying to tell me. And if I've come across as rude to anyone here, then I sincerely apologize. Not once has it been my intention to scoff at a suggestion, but I know that it's sometimes hard to decipher tone from text on the internet. It's not my intention to make any kind of excuses, either, but if something sounds like one, well then so be it. I'm not gonna claim my story to be perfect, and there probably will be a plot hole I overlooked here or there. In that case, I'll be glad if someone points that out to me.
Feel free if you want to review the actual story itself.
I'll take that as a compliment, thank you. I hope you decide to come back and read on as I write on, and enjoy the story for what it's worth. And lol @ the strikethrough. Is it because you hated that chapter or loved it? :P
Would "have gathered" be a better word choice than "are currently gathered" in this situation?In one area of this town, a small group of three children have gathered in a small field, taking part in one of the most popular of Pokemon practices: Pokemon battling.