I see a few grammatical errors.
"I wish you can meet Ash's Tailow..."
Make it "I wish you could meet Ash's Tailow"
Max: “Hello, Mr.! Are you a ship captain?”
If you ask me, I think you should write "Are you the ship captain?"
Max: “Yell me please, when the next ship to a Pacifidlog Town?”
Max (smiles and shouts): “Oh yeah! How could I forgot that?!”
I think you meant to write forget.
Aside from these errors it was a great chapter.
I also agree with the fact that Max should have a rival. It would be nice because then he would have less random battles.
Anger the Blaziken, and you get BURNED
Example of the above:
YOU: Hey Blaziken, your ugly!
BLAZIKEN: .......JO FACE!(burnnned)