This reminded me of the episode where the S.S. Anne goes all Titanic Style with all the Gyarados attacking the group Memories xD(Gyarados starts spinning in the water and creates a Whirlpool. Whirlpool starts getting larger and larger, and eventually traps Squirtle. Squirtle gets inside the Whirlpool and takes damage.)
There should be "an" before Orange BeamGyarados: "Tshaa!" (Orange beam appears in the front of Gyarados' mouth.)
I feel like Gyarados went down a bit too easily, but it really shows Squirtle's power so it's goodAsh: "We won!"
Bolded the mistakePiplup: "Pilpup!" (Starts creating a Whirlpool. Then it throws it into the water, and whirlpool becomes huge, trapping and damaging Empoleon at the same time.)
This chapter was really good Both battles were epic, and the strategies you came up with were really good And also, there weer basically no grammar mistakes so good job for that