Feli chronicles: Vitandes

**jireh the provider** · 27th July 2012, 1:19 PM

Genres: Family, Adventure, Mystery, Fantasy, Hurt/Comfort
Number of Words: 1500 - 2500 words per chapter. Currently 47, 000+ characters in the whole series.
Age Rating: K+ to T+ Ages 12 and above
Type of Fiction: Southern Fiction
Content Warning: Possible child Abortion, mild blood, mild sexual and rape references, suicide references, murder references, family relations, and betrayal references.

Spoiler:- See Chapter list here:

“Run everyone! Run this way!” an old man shouts, looking into the distance at his dying motherland. They were invaded by shadows that deny their existence, a man protecting his people and children. Those minions seek only the power of their dark creed rise to power and placate the light of many innocent people. Inside a tunnel high in the mountains, four people are close to a portal of aquamarine behind a magical shield. Monsters of unknown forms kept on bashing the shield; attempting to kill the four people behind the shield. Just as the old man seals the gate with his magical power, three people are begging him to join them. Yet he refused their offer for he values the lives of his children.

“Master, please don’t do this to us yet! You said to be loyal to you ‘til the end!” one of his disciples begs to listen to them.
The two other female followers just cried, shocked at their mater’s decision. “Master! Please! We can’t live on without you!”

“My students, if you don’t go now, we’re all going to die and many more others! My final order for the three of you is to escape! And … live on!” the old man sighs as is seal is slowly breaking. With a shallow breath, he says, “I have nothing else to teach to you all. The rest is up to all of you to know. Teach everything I've taught you to the future children. Weep if you must, but … be joyous later.”

With one hand pointed at them, he unleashed a psychic force at them, dragging them towards the portal. “I’m taking all of you with me! Bless my children Feli; just as you have blessed a human like me.” Using the old man’s last strength, he concentrated all of his power to seal the portal with one hand. The other is to send out his most powerful element to fulfill his duty. Eliminate all of the shadows that he can to protect his beloved children. Just before he sealed the portal, he knew this will eliminate him. No way out to this fate. “Goodbye.”

Every volcano erupts like no tomorrow. Tsunamis are rampant, flooding everything in its path. Earthquakes triggered like the planet itself will splits to many pieces. Hailstorms and rains make the world colder than hotter. The shadows are grinned to their success. Using their ultimate power, they fired a dark laser to the old man – just as the old man used his power to fulfill his duty to his new goddess. The whole planet blew out white to oblivion.

**jireh the provider** · 24th October 2012, 2:59 PM

Feli Chronicles: Vitandes

The Start of the Seedling Arc

Vitandes.

A planet created by the Goddess Feli. Taken inspiration from a distant star, she placed one ocean and one sea, two continents, and blooming with mountains, forests, caves, beaches, deserts, oasis, plains, volcanoes, hills, lakes, rivers, and few other elements she deemed habitable. Inhabited in this planet were people called Tivanes; Beings that were believed to be the evolution of outcasted human beings from another dimension. Given powers by the goddess and the almighty ‘Aura Spirit’, she educated the youth of all generations to live a life of simplicity, innocence, maturity, curiosity, prosperity, respect, self-direction, faith, hope, and love.

For over ten millennial, life bloomed to the world in peace, protected from the horrors of the dark universe by the goddess. Simplicity evolved to prosperity yet it devolved to value simplicity’s balance. One cannot spin alone for both sides protect the world from the darkness lest to let the people live a dark reality.

The ‘Vitandes cemetery’ is the last resting place of the peaceful dead. Filled with windy grass and flowers of many kinds, it resembles on reflecting the times one lives through life, how much one’s achieve, how one’s actions evolve, and how one’s life is used for the good of Vitandes. However, one monument resembles a hero to the people of Tivanes. The small statue is base on six different colors of diamonds resembling a body of a human being yet the heart shined like an honorable Tivanes. Though what’s left of it is that it sows the extinction of the human race. The last human not placated by the creed of corrupted human society.

For this day, a young mother tivani carries two flowers with eight petals forming like a night star of winter. Light yellow it shines, this mother is adequate of height colored with white snow cappuccino skin. She wears a silk dress of petal white, along with a scarf of lavender with two stars found at the tied ends of it, and walks to the monument with a silk wood shoe of light brown. Opening her left hand reveals a symbol tattoo with a four pointed star inside a circle. She is now six months pregnant. She knows that her baby could come any minute now. Maybe ten minutes later. She could even feel her feet and legs sore for the past two weeks which tells her that the baby is ready to drop.

Kneeling next to the monument, she meditates. “Master, it has been a long while. Here’s a pot of flowers. I hope that its scent can be brought to the stars with you.”

“Five years has passed since that day. I can’t get much sleep at the time from those nightmares before. But after every nightmare, it becomes a good dream. Ahh, memories when I’m sixteen. But lately, I hear voices. What could it mean?” her mind lost in wander.

A giggle caught her attention. “Huh, what the…?”. A giggle is heard loose again, perhaps a little louder this time. Was it happy? Or was it sad? It sounds like a mix of both emotions.

Behind stands another tivani arrive who is slightly taller than her. With a skin color of light brown, he’s wearing a traveler set. Being a traveler and a farmer makes him a bit muscular but more on healthy flat tone. Packed with a bundled travel bag and wearing light green clothing, the young man place his stuff down. After kneeling down next to the monument, he begins meditating next to the young woman. From his baggage are plenty of necessities he carries when the time comes for Celena’s child to see the world.

“Hi there Celena. Visiting our master sweetheart?” The young man ask.

“Lucas? Where’s Mien Rin?” she asks and Lucas raised a hand leading to a tree behind them with another woman deeply meditating, Indian seat style. Being taller than both of them combined, she has a slightly pink hue on her skin tone with deep lavender tone. This woman was wearing a casual clothing of blouse and pants of rose red and sakura pink respectively.

“How’s the baby Celena?” Lucas checks on her belly. It has indeed grown quite a lot. “The baby could come at any time. I just hope that it won’t happen too-“

The weight of her growing child within her womb tells her it is time. Way too soon for her to even respond. The painful contractions kicked in.

“Aaaahhhhhh! The baby! It’s kicking now! Ahhh! Lucas! Hurry! It hurts!” Celena is carefully being carried by Lucas to the closest flat floor. She can feel the contractions happening inside her, almost unbearable to endure. Her child is certainly ready

Lucas calling Mien Rin for the childbirth procedures, he looks back at the fortune teller’s advice he got yesterday amidst his panicking mind.

“Young man, I see that tomorrow is more than your simple tour to your ode master.” A fortune teller spoke behind the curtain.

“What do you mean?” Lucas asked.

“Behold a shining cloud! For thy teacher returns a creed to thee lover thou hold. All found where thy never expect to seed the new star of destiny.” The elderly stared again at an orb.

“I don’t understand what you mean.” he wondered.

“Such a confused Navanian eh? You will have to find the answers for yourself. Your time should be used wisely. Something … or … some form … may be looking from your master’s grave.”

“Celena! Deep breaths now. Now Push!” Mien Rin did the hard work of child delivery. As for Lucas, he had to comfort her all that he could as she faces one of her most painful moments that can change her life. Tears are dropping down, breathing was shallow, and her head seems to be strained from all of her own screaming. It all happens so fast. What was once Lucas’ seed and Celena’s fertile egg will soon be the child they have been waiting for six months. It didn’t take long for her to hear another voice. Six months of careful health finally gave her a healthy child.

“Congratulations! It’s a baby boy. Both of you, Lucas and Celena Tanabata, are an official father and mother.” Cleaning up the baby and wrapping it up in white cloth by Mien Rin, Celena breaths in and out as she, along with Lucas, cry in joy.

“I’m glad that I am the doctor of our family. I just can’t imagine Celena going through all of this labor. Following a lost human book, the way tivanians give birth is very similar to the extinct humans. The only difference is that the baby inside her readied to be ‘dropped’ last month. Then she gave birth at the sixth month. He said to me that I will believe at master’s wisdom. Now I believe I was wrong about childbirth. Six months instead of the human nine.” Mien Rin sighs as she looks back at the past.

“Lucas. Would you kindly?” she points out to hold on to his lover as both of them get a hold of their child. Sleeping like every other child, it embraces the warmth of its parents’ warmth as the baby sees the new world after living inside its mother’s bosom.

“What shall we name our child my love?” he looks into her yellow eyes with tears of joy.

“We’ll name him … Jireh.” She sighs with relief when the baby cried again. Her husband smiles with no regrets. This song is her own-made song that is said to have a wonderful feeling to fellow tivani.

I see in your eyes
The sorrow sweeping
Let then my voice be
Be the light
Of your life.

Hear me. Child of Hope. I am a deity only known to my own creation. Your journey with life should have been your end. Here I am, a goddess carrying you a new mission. One that can change the way you will perceive life. It will save your soul from ending up like the vanished dusts of space. Just has trillions of life’s creation ended in misery, unlike the people whom I saved I called my children and creation. Will you do this for me?

**jireh the provider** · 25th October 2012, 5:50 PM

“Wanna camp out here until sunset Celena?” Mien Rin asks me.

“I’d rather rest back at Auvelis now. We can’t endanger the baby.” I feel a twinge of pain on my lower stomach. Grabbing me by the waist, Lucas assisted me to stand up.

“Celena. I know your reason but you should take it easy. Just have rest for now until I clean the opening that little Jireh made.” I am flattered about the opening she’s saying when my lover lay me down on a nearby tree. The contractions are fading thanks to my master’s early training in Aura Spirit manipulation.

“Mien Rin makes a good point. It is still early afternoon. Sit back and relax. Deal with the baby while I set our camp.” He makes a good point. I do need to make the baby happy and watch over him. Gazing at my newborn baby, its small smile eases my pain as I shed a tear. When I tried recalling my days with our master, he made me so happy. As if my child has resonate our foster father. Hehe … no way I’m letting a child just give me orders like I did back then. It kinda makes me sad a bit that I have to deal with many new things I refuse to do way back then.

“Does this mean I need to sacrifice my childhood in exchange for innocence? I wish it will not be my fate.”

“Feeling okay Celena?” As my husband always assure me, I nod. All four of us walk our road way back home. The warm path of the Prosperity Plains countryside is like invigorating our tired aura.

When I look at the right side, I’m left in awe. “Look Jireh, butterflies!” swarms of different colors makes the sunset more memorable for all of us. My baby just tried to reach out for them. It really makes us laugh for my innocent baby. It’s a wonderful thing to have for being a mother for the first time in my life. I pray and hope that life stays this way for me.

Finally, we arrive at our abode, “Welcome to Auvelis Village.” All three of us face with smiles to our home. Our place is part of the Kingdom of Navalis. Very simple you can call it, but we decided to live in this village years ago simply for the design of our homes that you can find at Herbardam. There are three more places that resemble the other kingdoms as well.

While we walk the way back home, we are greeted by two of our neighboring doctors. “Johanna! Avea!” the three of them are like old teenagers who seem very approaching just for everybody. Here are two of my big sister’s best friends. The Lexyria twins Johanna and Avea. They are very similar to pretty much everything. But I do know that some things separate them from each other. Avea is the doctor who’s always a happy go lucky Navanian like me while Johanna is much more rational and composed like big sister.

Avea who just can’t control her patience just began petting lightly my baby’s head.

Avea, who just can’t control her patience, just began petting lightly my baby’s head. “Awwww! Would you at that! You got an adorable baby Celena!” He just giggles while I blush a bit. It’s natural to both of us, even if she’s older than I am. “Oh! Oh my Gosh! I forgot to buy my congratulations offer to both of you!”

“Now now Avea. You know that it is recently living now. We better not make it cry yet. Its ears are too tiny. Plus, Celena shouldn’t eat cake or anything sweet just yet since she just gave birth.” I had to say Johanna is a bit more restraining than her twin. Even if she speaks kind of loud, Jireh just giggled at them instead of crying.

“But sister. Didn’t we plan all of this preparation from the beginning? So are you saying we should disregard our celebration to her baby?”

“I’m afraid so. If she just stayed with us at our hospital, we could have done it all for them.” I bet Avea must be muttering out to herself now. Both I and Avea agree that Mien Rin and Johanna just can’t get themselves to enjoy things that they wanted. I feel so sad that Avea didn't get to fulfill her promise to me. Where’s the fun for them? Looking at me, she spoke, “Sorry that we couldn’t keep our promise. Why don’t you three join our lunch? Hopefully that can be a way to make up for our unpreparedness. You and your baby may need a check-up.”

Cradling at my baby child, we enter their clinical house where both of them usually work. It is decently decorated like a living room with some doctoral tools behind the curtain on one room for medical purposes and stuff. The kitchen is sort of average in size. But they have four beds since they use the other two are for their patients.

“Lucas, if it is okay for you, can you buy the needed ingredients for our dinner enough for all of us?” I ask him as he brings out a paper and his wooden ink marker; the marker looks like a rounded stick with a long bird’s feather stapled in between, but it needs a bottle of ink to write something, right?

“I’m on it sweetie. What would you say something good for tonight? Mango Crescent along with a little Salad Bento?” I nod at the meals he picks for all of us. Well, there’s quite a happening on my appetite habit. But forget about that one. I’m a mother right now.

Johanna picks up a couple of things that she uses on examining patients. But I’d say I like the way of our health. Tivanian Nurses are known to have aura spirit energies that can do different kinds of healing and health examination. I just don’t know the full details about nursing.

“I’ll be the one checking up on you while my sister checks up on your baby.” After a little while, she placed her hands in both of my child and my own forehead and released an aura spirit that ease our minds. We fell asleep for a moment. These two know the right way to deal with patients.

It may sound very pervish for me to check on Celena’s undergarments. But it doesn’t feel like it as much. We’re nurses – or doctors you could say – that deal with Vitanian anatomy. I find it weird recalling my early days as a student doctor that we were ones spirits of these so called ‘humans’. I personally don’t believe in that. I believe we are Feli’s children who taught all of us the way of finding the light to live our lives to the fullest – before we are even born to this world.

“Now what could have happened to her ‘opening’ this morning?” I did a careful internal check-up – via Aura Channeling – a technique we doctors used to focus our aura to our eyes and hands, touching the host, in order for us to see the internal organs if there were any anomalies found. From the looks of her body, she seems to be healthy. Her womb seems to be reshaping itself to normal size. Our predictions were correct.

I sighed, “If only you listened to us yesterday.” I recall all of the happenings yesterday. She insisted us that she can handle it for two more days. Yet we denied her to do so. Her cervix was close to become wide enough for her baby to slide down. Well I don’t know her choices but she paid the price; a mother giving childbirth to some unknown place.

“Wake up. Wake up you two,” I can feel Avea nudging me and I carefully stand up while carrying little Jireh to the clinic’s dining hall as everybody else are having a bite of mango crest. We have a lot of fun being together as a group of girls, though they kinda tease up Lucas at times. But Johanna seems to be a bit exhausted and a bit empty looking … I guess.

“Johanna? Are you okay?” while I pick up a bite of the salad, she skips biting the food she has.

“Well … it’s … nothing. Just … exhausted.” Exhausted? She seems to be tired anyways.

As we leave their place and wave our goodbyes of the day once our dinner is done, Mien Rin speaks up. “Good thing is that both of you remain healthy. But my best friends seem to be curious with something, especially Johanna. They just want us to visit them tomorrow.” Curious?

“It’s alright.” The evening arrive quickly too. Just today, I can finally touch and carry my child. I wished last night that it will be after tomorrow. But … Feli wasn't listening. Arriving at our home, we enter our living room. It is certainly simple yet it felt very natural for some of our doors and rooms were crafted in wood. Supported with a bit of soil and stone from Hivanis, it can be very secure as well. My sister sleeps first. Both of us should be asleep too. But Lucas and I have other things in mind … like we need to tell this to her perhaps. We just find ourselves stargazing at the night sky. It’s just as beautiful as the day where the stars and the moon give us life to us while we are asleep.

Until a wishing star pass through the night sky that I whisper to Jireh that he should make a wish.

“If I can have at least one wish, my wish is that both of us will show great example to our baby child as his loving parents.” I warm up to Lucas as he hugs both of us while we passionately embraced our lips together.

We enter in our bedroom much later and we give each other a good night kiss, giving ourselves some good rest with my lover and child together on our one single bed. I love my family.

**jireh the provider** · 26th October 2012, 2:19 AM

It’s another morning for us both. While my twin sister, Avea, is on to her daily routine, I find myself puzzled by what I found yesterday. She didn’t get to see it by herself since she was dealing with Celena while I dealt with her recently born child yesterday. “That birthmark. Her child bears something I never knew before. A circle with seventeen lines spreading in a tivanian like figure. I don’t get it. How could have Lucas impregnate her with a child that bears something never found in our history?”

“Sister. We’re out of food.” Hearing my sister’s call snaps me back to my senses.

“Now I know what happened. We didn’t buy stuff at the market yesterday.” I thought of it way back as all of us ate our remaining fruit supplies last night. Celena has to get used to be a fruit eater and a vegetarian while she recovers from her recent pregnancy. “Let’s get ourselves some breakfast from Mien Rin’s Place.” I never need an answer from her since she is my twin.

Just before we left, I pick up an old decked toy, one that I played with my twin sister and Mien Rin since we were on our teens.

When we arrive at their place, we’re greeted by our best friend cooking inside their kitchen. After a bit of talking, she agrees with us to join in their meal. But I’m here for more.

“Where did Celena gave birth to her baby?” I ask.

“At Navanis Cemetery.” As simple as both Mien Rin and I like to speak.

“Born at a cemetery huh? Quite creepy.” We have known each other ever since we were young adults. And we’ve been through a lot together. But let’s say I get to know Lucas and Celena when Mien Rin’s master introduced them to us.

“Mien Rin. You could use a bit of a break.” My sister just gets herself straight to the kitchen and helps our best friend with a helping hand.

“Don’t worry pal. I’m fine.” Fine? Not really. She somehow lacks some sleep.

“Just set the plates for me. Is it okay?” and now my sister is holding their kitchen.

“Fine.” Thus, she is dealing with the plating while I am just reading one of the books I owned. “What do you mean creepy?” Mien Rin asks. I guess she remembers our talk.

“You will find it hard to believe when I tell you this.” It makes me feel a bit excited. Once they discover this secret, it’s gonna be huge! Then I hear yawning behind the halls.

“Oh really?” my best friend says.

“Mmmph … morning girls. What’s the early arrival?” behind me was Mien’ Rin’s sister, Celena, along with her new baby.

“What is your baby’s name Celena? You never even told us yet.” Avea reminds her.

“Yeah she’s right. We wanted to know your little kid.” I agree. She giggles when she shows us the cute baby’s little face.

“Jireh is the name.” did Celena feel so … composed? Or is it just me? She sort of changed … unlike my twin.

“Oooohhhh. An old name for being the ‘provider of light’.” It is intriguing, to name it closely to your master. I may never know what it likes to have a master like the Tanabata Family.

“Right.” I can say it for sure. Only a few of us name our newborn children closely to our treasured tivani.

“Where’s Lucas?” Avea does cook like me. But I kinda envy her a little that she’s a little bit better than me at times. Not that it’s a grudge though. It’s what I’m still improving now.

“Meditating. My husband has a lot of thing going on already.” I recall him muttering last night to himself that if he has confidence to raise our child. We share the same trauma on what happened to our master.

A few minutes later, Avea set up our main breakfast and called Lucas to join us. Of Course, I kind of went under lactation from Johanna to give my baby some breast milk. After having a friendly moment of many things, Johanna kind of share us a different look on her face.

“Everyone. Do you still recall what we know about the symbols that all of us Tivani bear?” Johanna asks. I don’t understand on what she’s trying to talk about. All of us participated in her talk.

“Every tivanes-“I cut of Lucas for the moment.

“Simplified as tivani,” I imply.

“--Were given symbolized tattoos of our residing lands here in Vitandes. There are five kinds of symbols that Feli, our Goddess, choose to bear on every one of us. She made a creed that no Tivanes will be born without one of her blessings for she has already educated us the way of the tivani before we were even born in Vitandes. We basically learn the easy ones up until such time that upon growing up; a tivani will know all of the teachings of Feli by heart, mind, and soul.”

Johanna places on the table five stones with carved symbols that are painted.

“You guys know all of these symbols and their corresponding kingdoms? Pick a card and tell me what birthmark are they.”

I pick the stone of the Sun. “The warm fire sun of Hivanis”

Lucas picks the stone of an Ocean Wave. “The cool ocean water of Manaqua.”

Avea picks the stone of a Brown Mountain. “The living earth stone of Tramore.”

Johanna picks the stone of an Herb. “This is the growing leaf forest of Herbardam.”

Then Mien Rin picks the last stone and places it at Jireh’s little hands. It is the stone symbol that I bear in my hand; a circle encompassing a four pointed star inside the circle wheel the outer parts of the star are painted in four different colors. “Last but not the least … ‘the circle of identity of Navanis’.”

“Johanna, how can the five symbols be related to our child? Does he bear the symbol of Navanis?” Lucas sounds curious too.

“Check his chest. That’s where his symbol was marked.” I began to unwrap the scarf that keeps little Jireh warm for a moment. When I check it, I see nothing. Johanna cut me from speaking. I don’t know why she brought with her a small flashlight of sorts. It is a pricey item that you can only buy at Hivanis.

When she turns it on, she positions the light on my baby’s chest. The next thing that happened left us in awe. The symbol on my baby’s chest is a shimmering gold version of my symbol. But instead of a Navanian symbol, my baby holds a birthmark where there is a small circle in the middle and seventeen lines forming some sort of tivanian body. It’s something I couldn't believe so easily.

“Does any of you three know something about this symbol?” Johanna asks. Me and my husband nodded side wards. “I see.”

“I wonder. What does Feli have in store for us?” I mutter to myself. Lucas looks at me with concern. I just stare at my baby, a tivani with a goddess birth mark never seen before.

“If only our master is still with us, he may know something.” I heard Lucas mutter. I know how we feel when we lost our dear master. Mien Rin comforts us with a hug.

“He already gave us everything that he could give. For all of us.” Mien Rin is right. She knows him just like us; just maybe … more than both of us.

“The market should be open by now. Care to join with us on the market?”Avea asks Lucas and me.

“What for?” both of us replied have to wonder.

“Since Lucas and you, Celena, are an official couple, the three of us will give you tips on how to keep your baby healthy and happy.” Avea makes a point. Both of us are completely new to this.

“And both of you need to listen attentively. Raising a child is not only challenging but also very rewarding. Both of you should already know that I was a baby sitter before. My best friends truly helped me before.” Mien Rin smiles, I bet recalling her days with our nurses.

“The good times.” Johanna is indeed pretty cute when she stares into space.

“Let’s go then. Maybe my baby learns quickly like us.” It giggles me when we got out of our house and begin our tour of my home village.

**jireh the provider** · 29th October 2012, 8:16 AM

Everything’s going busy on the market lately. The bright sunny day for us here in Navanis tells us it is “Market Time”. It’s also a good place and time to have lunch time with friends and family.

“Seems the cooks are doing their routine already.” We enter first to a nearby food shop. The way our food market works is that they always start in the farm and ranch together. That style of selling by itself gives us a bit of a walk. I can’t run or walk very fast yet after I recently gave birth to my child. But this also gives us a quick and fresh access to freshly cooked food from the restaurants hanging around the farms. When we found one, we order our meals and have ourselves some time waiting at a group table for our meals to come.

“Lesson time begins now!” the smile of the twins are contagious.

“We will start with affection. Tivanian babies are already sensitive to emotions. Hard to believe but they can already ask you two so many things through their ‘googooos’, their ‘wwaaahhhhss’, and even giggles. You just need to keep an eye on your baby all the time.” Johanna finishes it in time that my baby is touching at my bosom again.

“It tickles. I’m just so sensitive there.” I thought of it the more my baby’s little hands touch me there.

“Cel. I think our baby is hungry for your milk.” Lucas is looking at my baby … playing with my bosom.

“Pervert.” Oh those doctors made both of us blush even more. We just look away from each other as our baby laughs at us all.

“Does your baby find us funny? I think we’re funny!” my baby only laughs at Avea some more.

And some more things are taught to us during our wait for the food. The twins got their meal first though. The have themselves some noodles with a balanced diet like theme. But we decided to have ourselves a family buffet special. A fruit carnival salad which has two bowls holding wet fruits and the other with dry fruits. Included on the list would be a roasted beef with Hivanian Barbeque sauce. Both I and Lucas eat decently little but big sis is quite a huge eater. Lucas just got infected by her a bit while we were young. It sorta happened to me when way back, my baby is still growing inside me that I need to supplement the amount of meat Lucas did. And last, some fresh salad with honey mustard mixed with a lot of fried ember fries.

“Ahhh … Now we’re full! How about you three leave the shopping to us?” Avea, at times, kinda acts like big sis. Sometimes, she’s just right to some suggestions.

“Well … we could just buy them after we had our fill. Nothing could go wrong though.” Lucas makes a point.

“Unless you want to wait on a long line…” Johanna. You just kill the mood.

“Besides, we don’t want to burden you three missing out your meals. And also, I recommend that you shouldn’t give yourself some early heavy work out Celena.” Though I hate being bossed around, I just believe that Avea knows more than I do. I gave Lucas the nod to give them our cash for the supplies, ’Five hundred Oseps’, along with the list of our other necessities for ourselves.

“Here you go girls. Be careful about it.” He passed the pouch to them.

“This is the thing that I’m always bothered around you Lucas. Too much code of honor you had.” Avea is certainly unhappy.

“Catch you three later!” As they left the place with glee, we finally got our meals three minutes later and enjoy our feast. Big sister tried recalling to us our embarrassing moments of our young days.

“So then. Remember the day both of you got married?” Mien Rin. Why this?

“Mien Rin. Any other moment would do, but not our wedding. I beg of you to stop. It’s too embarrassing for both of us please.” Lucas tried what he can to defend our secret but she likes to go trivial in our big deep secrets always whenever she could. I was used to behave around her every time she tells me to stop speaking funny and embarrassing moments. But now, she’s the one doing it all to us.

Then an old friend comes back to us in the middle of our lunch.

“CEL! LUCAS! MIEN RIN! OVER HERE!” Looking at our right is a relative of our old master. Zoximayru Ulirys is waving “hi” at us at the entrance of the restaurant.

“Zoxi!” I call out to him via nickname.

“If it isn't my pal’s students,” he laughs, “That would have been embarrassing! With me getting some eye strain this age!” he does his usual laugh again. We've known him -- for a while -- during our time with our master. Unlike us, he is from another kingdom; a very rocky hot kingdom to reside.

“What cha got in there? Is that yo lil’ bugger you two? Congrats for becoming an official couple! You made my best friend proud!” Just as he gives us a hug, he takes a seat next to me. Just he tries touching my baby with a soft touch, little Jireh just cries before he gets the chance. Leaving my baby for a bit, disappointed, he is annoyed at us.

“Really? You two really got to fix that kid of yours! What did I even do to ya’ lil’ bugger?” it kinda ticks my husband when I look at him. Or is he just annoyed. I mean, Zoxi’s just being Zoxi himself.

“You know that he’s still JUST A BABY. I think your kinda spoke roughly, which scares our baby.” Both of them did their usual bro fist. A weird thing they do to me.

“Like I’m the one stupid.” He calls a waitress to order a glass of water.
“Men.” I thought so.

“Fine…” Zoxi expresses a normal look again for the ladies with us. “All of you having lunch here in the markets, I see.” He picks a slice of mango from me.

“HEY!”

“Don’t whin lill girl!” I groan. Add that Lucas is giggled by that. “What else are you three doing here anyway?”

“We need some help on what we need to give for our baby, which is why we’re going shopping, and also resupply our larder.” After a bit of cradling, we managed to calm down Jireh.

“Sorry Celena! As much as I want to help ya, I don’t know what is like to have a wife. I bet you can help ‘em right Mien Rin?” Zoxi carries again his box cargo. See him to be quite muscular thanks to his habits in his homeland.

“I will.” Mien Rin took the last strawberry coated with powder sugar. She’s lucky that I miss that last piece.

“Ey here, Luc bud.” Hearing him whisper to me, I lend an ear at him. “Did ya tell them about today’s party?”

“Party?” Did he tell me about this before?

“Why you justy little prong of a …. Uhhhhh. The anniversary of your master! Dear goddess!” Oh dear. I hated this side of his. He just whines like nuts whenever something goes bad for him. “I invited you three as special guests! It starts today! Guhh. Just tell them that now before either of us forgets about it for her dear sakes.”

“Sorry to interrupt your girly chat. But we decided that Zoxi will serve us a special meal for his upcoming anniversary. It’s coming today in the late afternoon.” What is he talking about now?

“An anniversary? For our master?” now that’s a sudden arrival

“Yes … Dang, I’m sorry that I haven’t told both you about this, my bad.” Lucas surely swears something; I may do something about that.

“It’s okay sweetie.” We give each other a quick kiss for relief. Not wanting for others to gaze on us. I never know that we’re invited by Zoxi. Why didn’t he tell me this before? Maybe he just forgot about it.

After paying our meals, we go outside. “Wait… Where are those two doctors?” I ask, wondering what is taking Avea and Johanna to get back with the necessities for the baby.

“What are those two doing with you three anyway? You could just let your sis help you. If those two chicks are wasting our time, we will leave via horseback with or WITHOUT them.” After carrying his personal stuff, he joins with us outside.

Well, he has quite a history with Mien’ Rin’s best friends for being the comical annoyer. Not really the prankster, as both of them kept calling them with some swears. They just make it a bit too personal.

“WHO SAID THAT WE’LL BE LEFT BEHIND?!” And there goes the doctor duet doing another payback act from what Zoxi did last week (whatever they did I don’t know), with supplies and horses? Took THEM fast to be here.

“What took you two so long buying our stuff!? We better have some change!” Mien Rin can be quite cute for a bit when she is disappointed or surprise. I just mock her early in those years. At least we get an okay change of One hundred Oseps.

“As usual, No spoiling!” Avea is INDEED Zoxi’s rival.

“ARE THOSE MY HORSES?! HOW DARE YOU STEAL THEM FROM MY TRAIN?! What is wrong-” he keeps whining now that they made Zoxi really mad now. It gets more intense when he found his co-workers being allured by their charms via telescope. Not much we can do. “Ah I see. Not bad. I’ll let you girls off the hook. C’mon everybody, we CAN’T MISS MY TRAIN! We’ll be partying all day around Luxentum starting this evening. So I suggest that all of you to pack yourselves up for a long travelling day. This is a special favor from me, to you guys.” I bet he refers us; not the doctors.

“Are we not invited?” Johanna seems pissed.

“Sigh … since you got me again. Fine. Don’t keep me waiting pals.”

As we leave the market, we return to our homes, and pack ourselves for a travel day for our master’s anniversary. Who knew this time may change so soon.

**jireh the provider** · 30th October 2012, 12:38 PM

Mid-afternoon, near the stables and the eastern exit of Auvelis, the group gather together with their things and place them on one of the wooden carriers. Next to it are the carriers for fellow Tivani passengers. With Zoxi as manager, he let the payment go for their young new family.

“Thank you for the trip.” Lucas said.

“Eh ... no problem. At least that’s one promise done.” Zoxi breaths out.

“And a couple more to go…” the girls sly on their tone.

“Yeah girls … you’re right.” Zoxi just checks his mood on a thought that he just know these girls all too well. Looking at his watch, they only have an hour left before the evening train fest begins. With everyone riding on the carrier, he goes for the whip move ‘hyah!’ Not without a plan to keep the twins busy and away from him and their cute little munch.

With both carts heading to the train station post, everyone gives themselves friendly discussions and look at the beauty of Mother Nature and the vast view of Prosperity Plains of the Navanian Kingdom.

“Really Mien Rin? I wonder what ‘your’ tattoo could mean for Feli?” Johanna may get very curious like Avea at times. Yet she’s true, I have a strange birthmark looking a black and white figure.

“Cmon best friend! I think you’re just hiding it from us you know.” sigh, I swear that this immature twin needs a punch in the face.

“Girls. Careful on what you say or … Rin could smack you two in the face.” Celena, of all the girls I knew, was the most childish of all.

“Young lady! That is no way of starting to be like a mother! You know that you are not a virgin anymore! Be mature right now sister. Don’t let that childish side take over your mindset!” Seriously I mean that. She may be growing up a few years ago but she is still, indeed, a little girl not wanting to grow up.

“What’s the grumpy look big sis? All of us need a happy expression of a child! Don’t get yourself too hyped up to sprout me to maturity already.” Celena, … I hate to admit before, that she makes sense.

“Really Mien Rin, too much work up in your mind is not a good indication for you.” Avea just grab a scope and began looking outside of me.

Johanna, at least knows what I’ve been going, “Let those two be. Just enjoy the scene.” Really, upon checking on Celena and little Jireh, they were very happy to see the horses running with the wind on the valley we are crossing.

After a few minutes, we arrive at the nearby train station. Then we begin unpacking the carriage and place it on a train waiting station, according to Zoxi.

“Here we are people! Hope you enjoyed the scene!” The horseman leaves with the dust flying to the air.

“Why did we stop here?” I ask. Then the ‘woot’ existed.

…

“Behold our finished product people! The Luxentum express!” Zoxi points his arms to our left and we can see something of a metal carriage emitting steam connected to much more carriages made of metal that doesn’t emit steam. When it stops to our station and see the insides, I am staggered by its beauty.

“This piece is incredible Zoxi! I never knew you could build something like this!” I’m in glee smiley now, maybe playing a bit jumpy with my baby too; since he likes it as well. I’m sure that the rest are awe’d.

“Whoaaah. This … is … wonderful!” Oh Lucas.

“We got no time for discussions people! Pack your stuff up on the train! We don’t wanna be left behind cause my crew can’t wait forever!” Zoxi is carrying most of the heavy stuff as we proceed inside the train. What’s beautiful is that there are rooms within the express itself! “What’s this kind of carrier called Mr. Zoxi?” I ask while seeing my baby nipping at my breast. “Guess he got a bit hungry…”

All of a sudden, this very carriage of sorts starts moving slowly. “Suppose you could you call it a steam train, this is built for transport like horse carriages. But this one is much more fixed for very long distances.” Zoxi sure is smart like our master.

“Oh.”

“I think you may not get it much yet. But who knows…” I’m sure that master did something with him back then before our master adopted us.

After placing our things on our chosen rooms (a room for three tivani), he left us a note, “Enjoy your stay ‘til we get to Hivanis! Lunch will arrive shortly.” Then he left the scene whistling through the corridor.

While we are fixing our things, Lucas is reading another book with the sketch of what we are riding now. “What you got in there sweetie?” I ask.

“Want me to tell you how this thing is built Celena?” I said yes and tell him to go on, “It seems that Zoxi and his team of engineers joined together to recycle Light stones from Tramore and Hivanis. And they used it to turn something useful for transport. That is what began the construction of a forgotten project that was near its completion. They are still testing something on how long will the ‘used light crystals’ last the trains performance though. But perhaps they built it for tourists who want to have a long travel.” He continues reading the book with strange pictures of lines that only he can understand.

“Not bad for an idea he made. It is revolutionary.” I thought of its creativity as something extraordinary.

“Mr. and Ms. Tanabata. Ms.Sanipela. Your lunch is here!” We just open the door to be greeted by a maiden wearing a waitress suit. “You’ll be having some Peach Juice, Fried toasted Pork chunks, and ‘3G health rice’. Your fruit desserts and your baby’s meal will be coming shortly.”

“Thanks!” we finally give our bellies the fill. That journey made me quite hungry. I mean, all of us are quite hungry.

“What shall be our dress for tonight’s festival?” I ask as we end our feast.

“Why don’t we LET our baby pick our clothing?” Looking at the pictures he passes to me, I knew immediately what he meant. We did this debate to each other ten years ago if we cannot decide what we should choose. Right now, we are carrying three clothes ‘for this so upcoming anniversary’ to wear tonight. I brought myself clothes fitting for a ‘white princess holding a harp’, ‘summer clothing set with scarves’, and my old ‘ceremonial clothing fitting for a forest girl’. Lucas on the other hand uses clothing that fits the ‘Emerald hourglass hero’, a ‘mediator of spirit energy’, and the ‘bearer of elemental energy’.

“Oh Lucas not this again.” When will she ever learn to enjoy the moment?

“Rin my pal. Sorry for blowing you a nerve but please don’t dampen the good mood.” At least my love knows me. Looks like baby Jireh will have to choose Mien Rin’s clothing. Maybe he will pick her ‘lavender fighter clothing’, or it could be the
‘Navanian Wind Geisha’ clothes.

“… Fine. You two win.” She give in as our baby began pointing at the pictures.

**jireh the provider** · 31st October 2012, 8:00 AM

A lot has happened when we are riding the train. My baby’s little arms seems to be reaching for the stars. Who knows? He could be the one meeting Feli herself.

“Ain’t the sunset just looked so wonderful?” Lucas sat next to both of us, enjoying each other’s company.

“Mama. Papa.” are those? Little Jireh’s first words?

I was now slightly crying in joy while my lover wipes the tears away. I’ve never been this soft in my whole life. It must be the same for my sweetheart, both of us being parents.

“Jireh. You made both papa and mama so proud of you.” Lucas and I began petting him gently to make him relax. Our baby giggles as we follow along his moment of joy.That is … Jireh just stops smiling. He’s merely staring at the door.

“What do you mean it might not make it in time?!” I’m here at the hallway having a brief conversation with the head of this train’s culinary team

“F-forgive our temporary delay Sir Uirys. This special meal that you’re asking us to cook is challenging for only a handful of professional chefs.” This guy, Russo, was an acquaintance of mine during the grand construction of this train. Being the cook on both occasions, this became the livelihood he has now.

“Sigh. How long will their meal be finished cooking then? I can’t disappoint my pal’s children.” I ask.

“Five minutes after your presentation unless you extended it. But we could get it done if we got a helping hand or two who knows basic cooking skills, then I may be able to convince my two other expert chefs to help us.” A helping hand huh? Now I know what to do with those annoying twins.

Writing on a piece of paper, I write down the location of those two doctors. Along with it are my instructions for Russo to do with those two. As I give it to him, he agrees with me. “See you after the party. Ok?”

“You too.” As he walks away, I check on Celena’s room … only to be met by her sister’s back fist.

“OWWW! WHAT’S WRONG WITH YOU GIRL?! IT SEEMS THAT YOU’RE SEEING ME AS A STALKER EVERYTIME I ENTER! WHAT AM I TO YOU?” We gotta admit (minus Lucas) that he looks so funny when he’s pissed.

“I dunno. But I remember you returning us the wrong debt. Maybe a …” Mien Rin and I just play along to ‘pretend to be innocent’.

“As for ya info, I ain’t a thief who just suddenly snatches stuff from yo own home milady.” But Zoxi could also be too contrary on his voice. I guess he really is bad on dealing with women and girls.
And as always, big sis knows what’s best for him.

“Oh I almost forgot. Were here at the ‘Igmaragma Volcano’” he then approaches my baby face to face. “Wanna tell you a great tale?”

I’m sure my baby just giggles without even knowing a single thing he said.

“Alright. Lights flashin on the room as curiosity goes blam blam… and importantly letting those two …”

“Importantly what?” My husband gets really suspicious huh? I wonder what it is now thinking.

“Errrhhhh … nothing. Just something to do with the train.” A sweat dropped mood for him eh?

“ZOXI! Once were done cooking, I’m gonna beat you to THE PULP!” both twins yell out and are heard all throughout the kitchen of the train.

“Calm down Mademosieles! We got some customers to serve. Don’t sour up them mood!” A Manavian chef notifies them making the customers disturbed with their personal argument. “And please get the juices done. They’re thirsty already. Or at least give them some water!”

Zoxi breaths in and out as he stares at the volcano outside the window as he begins dressing up.

“Once upon a time, during the creation of Luxentum, Feli left what was said two stones at the base of an empty cave. Every sixth year, the twin volcanoes erupt. Not ever stopping. These stones were the first couple living within the twin volcanoes. They lived their lives within the volcanic cave for many years. Until, on the sixtieth year, a sudden eruption covered the cave as a whole. The couple has no way out as every exit that they built been covered in lava. Thus, they faced their last moments together before their bodies mend with the lava. Feli wept for both of them. Becoming the two spirits of Igmaragma, the two souls gladly accepted their destiny and made the volcano the source of bountiful gems every six years of its life span. Thus, the stones that the residents used are also blessed with the spirit’s protection. Making the residents live their daily lives more accustomed, even on eruption days. Some believed that the volcano is named from the couple of this legend. Magmari and Ignisia.”

“Well anyways, completed my fashion, I suggest that all of you should come with me; a party’s about to burst tonight!” He leaves the room, until he pops his head on the door. “And make sure all of you dress up elegantly. Train post number four is our locale.” He closes the door.

“Giggle … how do I look sis?” Walking on the train’s hallways, we can hear cheerful music playing pretty much everywhere (minus the bedrooms). Celena can be a very good judge when it comes to outfits. Giving her a beautiful white petite kimono and a fan of yellow which matched my Green tunic (sleeves are dark green) and pants. Plus some brown boots to cover it up. Though I decide not to include my dark green cap for this event

“I think it suits both of you very well.” As for Mien Rin, she has an odd taste of indigo apple gown look. Every time we wear this, she always smirk at us. I hope it’s not about the epic fail kiss that she’s imagining. We slipped down on the floor at that long past time.

When we entered the post train, I can see quite a celebration happening.

“Welcome to train post number four. Mr.Lucas and Ms. Celena, along with madam Mien Rin. Please follow me for your reserved seats from our leader.” I bet this butler hands me a fruit juice of sorts. “Here’s a little something edible for your young kid.” I just nod and we followed. The party is calmed, lively, and importantly, nostalgic for me. The hallway is coated like maple wood polished by dandelions. It’s like that kind of joy that I have way back then with master.

“Master, why are you joining that party? I can’t see its importance.”

He pets me on the head. “I bet this can help you recognize of having joyful celebrations with people.” He whistles over to another guy. “Excuse sir. I wanted him to join your race. He’s quite fast enough for this field.”

I am agape to join randomly like this. With my friends cheering, I can’t get this kind of feeling. Why do I feel like doing it?

“I know you got used to being very solitude minded. But keep in mind that you need the joy of others as well. Look over there. Celena and her big sis are cheering for you.” He smiles at me. “Why not give it a shot?” then he watches the field as he gave me a smile. Was he being … fatherly … to me?

As we find ourselves a seat, I bet the rest went to their tables too as Zoxi takes stage. “Silly dude.”

“Good evening to all of you. Seeing all of you in your elegant looks gives me the feeling of the old times; especially the family over there wearing a white dress and a green dress. Fun fact, their baby matches the dad. Like the tale of two heroes; a hero and a princess who bear two symbols of a greater three symbol.” All of us giggled. This time, his voice is solemn and composed. “But enough of that, time to share some good stuff about our Tivanian hero … according to the poster blabbering behind me.” He has weird ways to make us laugh by his own enthusiasm.

“Five years … it does feel kind of long for all of us. He’s the one hero who saved our lives, and … my long time best friend. We really owe a lot to him, as if he really was the last of not just his kind … but also … our last predecessor who truly gave everything for us. I bet most of us already knew him. Wise, composed, approachable, sometimes strict and demanding, but most of the time loving and caring. Very care giving even to someone like me.” He turned to the left just in time to catch a thrown candy. Looking behind the curtains backstage, he knew them immediately.

“This train we’re riding … is the ultimate achievement we did as a race. A project he told me that made him so proud. We from Hivanis and Tramore did the hard construction. Manaqua and Herbardam were doing the Eco-friendly energy we used on this trip. Navanis did the entire master crafting of this place. There were a couple others too. But this train shows the united success we have as a race. To celebrate his achievements, we held a fifth anniversary toast here on the Grand Nation Project. The Luxentum Steam Train Express. Cheers everyone!”

“Cheers!” Thus the people of Vitandes began celebrating the night all night. Just having a good old time.

**jireh the provider** · 2nd November 2012, 3:56 PM

The Start of the Hivanis Arc: Ignisia

And now, his journey to innocence begins. Hivanis will be his first trial. I now give you a portion of its life. My student, this will be more than just a test for you. It will be you destiny.

The next morning: Inside Luxentum Express: 8 AM.

“I can’t believe that Zoxi did that to us! We fell for such a cheap trick! I’ll get my hands on him if I get the chance. Ugh!” here’s nothing that I could do when she loses her head.

“I admit that it really sucks. But for once, he’s quite clever to use such a handsome chef to call us for a helping hand.” “Avea. We should pack ourselves up soon.” Seeing her get out of the bathroom wrapped in towels tells me that I should give myself a bath too. Shedding out my clothes, I enter the shower and turn on the warm water and begin my quick bath. Our pride just got washed away last night while our friends are enjoying a delicious exclusive meal that we couldn't get to try.

It’s been a while when we recently woke up. I feed my baby some of my milk while all three of us have our breakfast inside our cabin. Not a bit later, we are close to arriving at the next pit stop of this train.

“It really is lucky for you that you didn't end up like us Mien Rin.” Oh Avea, quite typical of her to whine about the moment here in the train. Just what happened to them last night?

“End up what?” big sis asks.

“Sigh … later.” Johanna just left.

“Shall we pack up already?” my sweetheart asks as he was packing his things in advance.

“Sure. But can you lend me a hand?” he just receive a hand of shoulder from my big sister.

“Lucas, she just gave birth two days ago. If she works too much now, she’s gonna have a painful stitching to encounter later.” Did sis just say … stitch?

‘Gulp.’ I’m … just gonna stay and sit still, “How long should I avoid a lot of activity sister?”

“Three months.” that sigh from Lucas the moment Mien Rin answers me telss everything. “You should have listened to us before Celena.”

“Alright alright. I blame myself for giving birth at our master’s funeral.” Looking back at my choice, it is inevitable.

“All aboard! All Aboard! We arrived at Hivanis Station! Steam train inspection will start after thirty minutes! So we expect all passengers to leave the train immediately for repairs!” It must be the driver speaking to an “Emanator Crystal Box”, a square woodejn box with a unique green colored stone inside covered in circular glass.

As we arrived outside, I felt the power of this place’s heat. “Well, here we are now pals. Welcome to Hivanis Kingdom.” Seeing his homeland for the first time gives me a ‘WOW I like your place’ feeling.

“I’ve read many tales about Hivanis but to be here … it feels much more … expressive joy. Everything here is just bursting with activity.” I can agree with Lucas on this one. I know him that he is always curious on many things. “Not to mention … it’s hotter than I expect. I may as well wear my hat. You should do it too Cel.” As he digs out our hats, he wears his hat before he wears my head with my hat.

“I know what ya meant son. Guess that my best pal helped ya on expressing curiosity much more deeply, which is why I always loved my homeland with many reasons.” Zoxi may act like a lesser version of our master. Too jolly, a jokester (oftentimes get pounded by Mien Rin’s best friends), not that very leading, and easy to distract. But still, never underestimate him. I believe that he shares a lot of things from our master that we haven’t known so far.

Following him to a carriage station, I believe he’ll call a horse rider for us. And call he does with two horses.

“Hey there Rui! Hey Riu! Gauuhhh I miss ya two! Say how about we give ourselves a run to the springs?” he owns two horses?

“You own these two horses? I never knew you also raise livestock like him!” I react.

“Just what he said to me, ‘Ya always learn something new every day.’” It’s typical for Zoxi to smile in a smug. “They have been my pals since I was a kid! Thus it makes me quite a field runner back on the days. Then again it’s the first time ya meet my pals.” He leads us to the nearest stables and tied both of his ‘companions to an empty carriage.

“Then who gets to ride the other horse?” Johanna asks.

“I had to say this to both of you ladies. But you two ANNOYED ME BY THE FACT YOU TWO GET TO RIDE THEM! Ma new rule for ya two, don’t ride my buddies!”

“Zoxi. Were sorry…” Avea sounds so confident that both of them are taunting at our funny man.

“Hmph … sorry eh?” It’s only then that the three of them are having a fistfight with each other until everything settles down.

“Enough idle chat! All of ya should place your stuff behind that carriage. Cause I got an old friend to revisit. If you guys are feelin’ too hot on yo day, there are a couple showers for you guys to get yourself wet with. Just don’t take off your clothes though! Bath with your clothes on and that’s an order!” he jumps out of the cart and runs like a mad boss.

“Hey wait! Where are you … going?” I fail that one. Give it to my baby for laughing at me. I’m glad there isn't a comic like this.

“I got a bad feeling about this.” My husband whispers at my ear.

“Oh Lucas. Don’t get yourself too sensitive.” I’m playing with my baby’s belly to end our commotion.

“Guess whose back crew?!” Arriving at my hidden hideout, I and the rest of the train crew, who are my friends before, are doing their usual slack off routine. But I’m about to make OUR DAY interesting. “I brought us those twins who just made my day miserable,” Trying to sound manly here please, I just love doing it. “And my friends are here with a baby to boot!”

“Those two? Gosh they make things for you!” one of my engineers just hit the note.

“How should we prank them back?” though I cannot avoid the dumb drivers of our train, hearing different ideas from everyone, good and bad, always GETS MY MUSCLES PUMPIN. A bit later then, I made an anonymous decision.

“Not that I disagree with you or with me getting lazy to know something. Let’s mend those nurses a recipe for disaster.”

“Then what do you really need Zoxi?! Nurse them with fear?!” whoever of my workers said that, it’s a light bulb.

“Gather here.” I whisper my plans to everyone. Oh those nurses are gonna get it!

“Hey ladies! Sorry for being late!” I bet he place himself on the front ride and checks on all of us.

“What happened to them anyways?” as he ask me ‘that’ moment, I recall it for sure and tell him.

Sometime Zoxi is wasting. “Whew … this is getting too hot.” I know that Hivanis is very hot. But being here ‘yourself’ is way more than just very hot. “Can’t we give ourselves some bath ti-“

“We’re doing it now! CATCH YA LATER CEL!”

“H-Hey you two wait for-“as I tried climbing the chairs, I regret hurting my hips and legs badly. It’s like I am torn and on fire. Lucas is the one holding our baby. I trust him our child too.

“Celena! Please be careful!” Lucas is always like that concerned whenever it’s about my hurts.

“Sister! I thought I told you not to get yourself too worked up! Now look at you!” big sister always does things with too much discipline, much like my master’s way of training me. I hated those kinds of days. “Lucas. Turn around. Don’t you dare play perv like Zoxi.”

My baby giggled a bit. “Paapa. Maama.”

“I won’t. I’ll just … go to the showers.” as he turned around and climbed down the carriage, I blush. He and Jireh are gonna have some fun time bathing. Unlike me

My sister pulled up my skirt a bit to check on my undergarment. Even if it flusters me, she’s much like the doctor twins. A nurse too. At least Lucas and I find her 'ok' to check-up on us whenever we get wounded or sick.

“Just as I thought. Sigh … sister. You need to stop exerting too much action for another month. It just bled for a little bit. That means you need to avoid exerting too much activity for four months.” After a breather, she’s ready to speak again. Just as she opens her mouth, I heard loud screaming at the showers with sparks going random. As the horses neighed, the twins …

“WWWHHAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!” Awww Feli nnnooooo! Not my baby again! As much as Lucas tried, it did really little to my baby.

“Sweetheart! Help me with our child!” As he climbed back, both of us did whatever we could to calm our baby down.

“Avea? Johanna?” big sister tried calling for them both. But the twins got out looking … wet and fried by … something electric.

“D ..-d-d-d-d-dd-dd-d-don’t b-b-bb-a-a-at-t-t-th-h-h t—ththt-ht-hth-ee-r-e-re-rre. AAAGGHH!!” Both of them spoke … rusty. That last screams ONLY MADE IT BETTER!

I sighed as I continued easing my baby’s crying. It’s one of those times that I wanted big sis to help me. Too bad she’s not doing it much this time after she carried the twins back on the carriage.

“Not much I could do to them. Here’s a little something for that cute fella of yours.” He gave me a red jelly of sorts that I easily knew.

“What is that Zoxi?” Lucas asked.

“Taminiz Candy! I used to have this edible jelly when I was a kid.” I smiled.

“Plus, it is edible for newly born babies with health benefits.” Zoxi made his call and we started to travel to our next destination.

“Success is so sweet.”

**jireh the provider** · 3rd November 2012, 2:36 PM

After leaving the station of Luxentum express, the baby just began enjoying his tasty and healthy dose of Taminiz candy. Yellow was the baby’s favorite flavor.

“Avea just can’t help but picture little Jireh as a yellow Taminiz candy.” Yes it is. Avea just giggles with the baby oblivious to terms of edible food. On the far distance, a loud explosion occurred at the red sky. Followed with a shaking ground, baby Jireh isn’t the only one frightened.

“Whoa girls! Looks like Igmaragma’s goin for the Gem delivery! Brace yourselves for eruption day!!” Zoxi stares at another eruption from the distance. Did he just said-

“An ERUPTION?!” the rest reacted.

“GEM DELIVERY? What the heck does that mean?! Are we in trouble?” Johanna panics at this sudden event happening now.

“Not really! And part time yes! It’s just that we can get ourselves some Igmaragma gems soon!” Zoxi began opening a roof hatch made out of wood.

“Now close the door on your side while I close mine!”

“I knew I should not have joined you from the beginning! You brought nothing to us but trouble! How could you stay so calm at a time like this!?” Avea, oh please think wisely. I bet she’s going baby face crying now.

“You’re acting like a baby again Avea. I bet we will be fine.” I said to her whinning mouth, even if all of us are panicking.
Next to me, I could hear my sweetheart knock on the roof. Until Zoxi ‘ssh’ed him.

“I bet all of you were thinking about the upcoming lava to us. In fact, we are not yet around one of the Volcanic Rivers of Igmaragma.”

“Volcanic …. Rivers?” big sis asked.

“You mean … it follows the path to the ocean?” I said.

“Half time yes -- half lack of words,” Zoxi smugs again with a smile. “That means Igmaragma consists of river canals where the lava always travels while the gems are scattered equally all over the Hivanis Kingdom domain. And we’re close to that kingdom. At the end of those rivers is the big ocean. So let’s not worry at all about volcanic rock. We’ll only get rained by gems.”

“Are you really sure!?” my husband just stares at him in suspicion. “Is this related to the legend of your kingdom?”
Until, we hear the crashing of gems. This makes my baby very unhappy with all the noise going on. Avea is thinking about her upcoming demise while Johanna and Mien Rin bashed her on the head.

“I’m so GONNA POUND YOU IF I LIVE!!!” Avea then smacks Zoxi in the head.

“OWWW! You woman ….” After he said that, one big gem punctures the roof that’s covering us from the gems according to our jokester pal.

My baby is giggling to reach it. But I know it’s still raining gems. After about a few minutes, it settles down. I bet both Zoxi and Lucas are lifting up the roof of our carriage. Upon checking on the horses, it seems Zoxi made a custom roof for them. Guess I shouldn't worry at all. All of us climbed down (Lucas has to carry me down though bride style) and saw A WHOLE LOT of gems of different sizes EVERYWHERE!

“Zoxi. We’re just jealous right now.” Lucas. How could you say that to him?

“Tell me then Lucas on why should I be boastful to all o ya.” I always see these two get their talk non-stop once they’re making a comparison on two things.

“The amount of money you’ll get from this amount of gems is way higher than our usual farming income. It’s just crazy to imagine on how much you’ll get with those.” Lucas makes a good point. We only earn so much from our own small garden.

“While I disagree with you ma boy since we had to endure six long years just to get these gifts, you Navanians are luckier than us Hivanians since you guys have a better daily income thanks to your massive farming lands, while we’re just sitting ducks like dried lava.” Then again, I think their livelihood is way harder than ours.

“Shall we start grabbing some of them?” I ask.

“I got them. You three are just too occupied with each other.” Seeing my big sister holding gems already, I’m envious at her temperance.

“Hey! No fair!” she always gets ahead of me in many things while I let myself get behind.

I think all of us have gone to a ‘gotta catch ‘em all’ manner. Our jokester pal gives us some nice baskets for gem collecting these shiny minerals and began our first gem harvesting experience. My baby was nudging himself from me but after the punctured roof vanished from my baby’s view, it started to cry. Oh dear.

“Big sis. Please help me over here! I can’t tell what he wants at all!” I did every way I possibly can. But it seems it only made it worse, even with his favorite candy.

“Sorry … mom.” D-di … did my big sis…ugh!

“Mien Rin! You’re not helping at all!” I face away from her and go for the two doctors. “Any of you two know why my baby’s crying now?” I tried.

And they never respond…

I just lay myself on the side of the carriage where the roof’s hanging while I can hear smacking behind me.
“Waaaahhhh! Waaahhhhhh!” oh Jireh.

“O Feli…what am I going to do? I can’t believe my sis and everybody else just ditched me! And my baby just won’t stop crying. Is this what it really likes to be a mom?” I thought of the agony and confusion that I’ve been ranting to myself. Until ‘he hit me’ in the head.

“OOOOWWWWWWWCCCHHH! Watch it!” I whine again.

“SORRY THERE CEL!” Sigh, men.

Looking at the ground, I can see a ruby gem. My baby looked at it too. Then he stops crying.

“Is this … what he wanted? Why would he like a gem?” upon having that thought, he’s giggling as if he really wants it. I mean, it’s obvious that it’s not edible. Is it natural for a child of his age to already choose something like a gem? I remember having to choose only necessities; not something with obsession. That is odd for my baby tivani.

“Hey Cel! What are you staring at?” Johanna snaps me out of trance. “Hmmm … guess you found your first gem. I think you just need someone else to pick it up for you.”

“Thanks A LOT…” don’t ask why I’m annoyed at her.

“Got something bad?” even if she asks, I hate giving out some disappointment.

“Nothing. Just Jireh.” I lay my back.

Once Lucas climbs down the carriage, I just passed my baby to him along with his little gem. “Don’t … speak. My turn to get some gems, you already had your fun. Don’t throw that gem though. Our baby likes it somehow.”

After a bucket of collecting for us (it’s one bucket for each of us), we ride our way back on the carriage and continue our journey.

Arriving at a house with hot springs, my husband’s looking at the door. “Is … is that…?” did Lucas just act out as something else.

“Honey?” he gives me worries as I cradle a shoulder on him. I think my baby is also wondering to daddy from the look of his eyes.

“Seventeen years ago,” he sighs “me and my best pal found you on the entrance of my first hot spring over there.” Zoxi raised an arm over to the right of the wooden gate, looking like a mini house with wonderful crafting.

“Anyways, let me give you guys a nice hot spring. Oh, bring at least one favorite gem for each. That includes the baby.” Then we entered inside his hot spring building. We began changing and stripping ourselves with only the undergarments left in our corresponding rooms. Once we lay ourselves on the spring, we relax our bodies with our gems behind us.

“Lucas, you never told us … that he …” Johanna is left speechless.

“Nah. I ain’t his dad. I was just about to adopt you as my son out of pity in the cold night way back. Our hero arrived a bit later after bringing ya inside Lucas. I remember him taking you as a father figure. But after ya left, you kinda called me …. Uhhh…”I guess he is flattered. I wonder what he is flattered about?

“Uncle?” What? I know that he is adopted like us. But he’s also adopted by Zoxi?

“Hmmm … I guess so you said. I dunno what he said to you. Even I can’t fathom why he wanted me to be an uncle figure for you. But it sure was a long time. The only thing I clearly remembered was that we debated to whom you will belong to ma boy.” Zoxi just close his eyes as we viewed the night sky.

It is getting late. Everyone else is sleeping at their rooms. Me and my baby are still enjoying the hot springs. I guess adding a blue gem regulates the right temperature for my baby. He’s only getting his first hot spring experience now (the baby haven’t springed just yet). My baby is holding his gem and points to the color selector.

“You want to make the spring color red?” ask I ask him, he giggled out loud. It must be a yes from him.

“I’ll help you make it red.” The spring that I’m using is fairly deep that can reach until my lower waist. Giving him an extension, we place it in the center of the spring pillar. Then I remove the blue gem. Once we give ourselves a seat to the hot spring’s edge, I hug my baby gently. But … I’m quite … tired. Weird … is this … overusing … the springs? Oh for….

ZZzzzzzzzzzz…..

**jireh the provider** · 5th November 2012, 3:45 AM

???
Here I am. Feli’s light. Your wish … shall be done.

“Langit Lunggati”

“Mmhh… huuhh? … where … am I?” This place … is so … gray … and dark.

“Jireh? *gasp* Jireh! Where are you?!” Wait! What happened to my baby?

“Wait – what’s this place? It feel’s … empty.”

Sniffle …… sniffle

“Jireh? Is that you my baby?”

Jireh?

“Huh?” Is that … a voice?

Huh whaat? I have no name. Why are you here?

”Who’s there?”

Who’s … there? I am nothing. Even if there is that something you’re looking for, I’m still nothing. Why are you here?! Don’t dare finding me.

“What makes you think that I am part of you when I don’t even know who you are? I just want to find my baby child.”

… Child … baby … child. What is … a baby … child?

“It’s … something … that a father … and a mother create … to make a new life. But why ask me this?”

… … You hear something over there? Something … faint? Now this one’s … a girl?

[MOMMY!]

“*gasp!* Someone’s in trouble!” immediately, I find myself in an unknown pit sinking not just me. I found a child closer to the deepest part of this sinking thing.

“Gasp! Hold on Child! I’m coming!” try as I might, I felt myself being pulled away.

[CELENA!]

“NNNNOOOOOOOOO!!!”

“Jireh! Sweetheart! Wake up! Wake up!” my heart is pounding out of fear for her and my child. They are having a nightmarish murmur and scream. After a while, they managed to regain their senses. But my baby is shivering despite being wrapped up in a warm towel. I guess that is the aftermath of whatever they experienced. I bet Mien Rin felt it too. Both of us arrive at the scene together. I just can’t bear it.

“Sweet heart. What happened?” even if I ask, she gives me no answer. All I could see is a tearful face of both my child and my wife. A sad one. I did what I could to comfort them with a loving hug. I really felt so much pity.

“It’s okay. Daddy’s here for both of you.” I caringly spoke.

“It’s okay sister. I’m here for both of you too.” Mien Rin joins as well.

“EVERYONE! WE GOT SOME BAD NEWS BEARS! MY SISTER IS SICK!” seeing Johanna so shocked, all of us followed where she’s running.

“Just how sick is Avea? Johanna? Are you listening?” seems that she is lost.

When we saw her in her room …

“What happened to her?” It gasps me to ask.

“Simple! WE DON’T KNOW HOW AT ALL! OR WHAT COSTED IT!” Seeing my uncle figure serious is a once in a blue moon. “Just look at her.”

Poor Avea. It seems she is seriously burning up on skin color. She has quite an orange tone on her skin as she winces in pain. She couldn't even open her eyes. Plus, she has unusual scars all over her body. The rest of them just stared in horror. The sight of her only made Johanna cry a lot harder.

“I tried what I could. But it ain’t working!” it makes me feel sorry to Johanna. My wife catches up with the inevitable.

“This is not just a fever or any kind of anomaly. This is something grave. Everyone, gather your stuff! We are now leaving to reach the capital.” Then he just immediately ran off to the gate. I guess he’s preparing the horses. As everyone else left, he calls me back.

“Lucas! Bring Avea over here!”

I’m a bit hesitated at first. But Celena gave me the nod. Thus she let me carry her to the carriage. Arriving there, I can see that he is feeding his horses a little bit more. I’m sure of what he is talking about. Hivanis keep.

A few minutes later, everyone and everything is set for our emergency run. "Just what is going on now?"

About two hours later since our leave in the morning, we arrive at Hivanis Keep. A sign of two ‘volcanic rock made keeps’ resonates on what the legend of their history shows; the first young couple of Hivanis. For a keep, we had a bit of mountain climbing going on (they arrived somewhere mid-afternoon). Gladly, it isn't very high. That could have been worse for our sick woman.

“Hello to all of you. What brings you here?” A villager greets us.

“We need to visit your hospital. We got a friend who recently got sick this morning.” Our guest climbed in to check on her.

“Oh dear! Sir, follow my directions.” Then we had now our new tour guide. After a while, we arrive at the hospital built out of polished stone. But I notice another doctor just going to the hospital. I think he must be a professional one just to the look of his mustache. He’s quite old.

“Doctor. We’re here in need of help.” Zoxi spoke to our upcoming helper.

“Calm down now people. I need you two to carry your patient to our emergency room. Hurry up and follow me--.” As he’s about to run, Johanna hold on to his hand.

“I’m a nurse from Navanis. Please allow me to help you on saving my sister.” Johanna … seems to plead for her sister’s life. I can tell. Sisterhood. Then everybody followed inside with Zoxi, along with myself, carrying Avea to the room.

“Hello to everybody. I may as well introduce my name before talking about your friend’s condition. I’m Doctor Taitoko Kexiya. Call me Taiko. May I know your names?” He introduces himself with humble postur before he looks bat at Zoximayru. “No need to tell your name Sir Zoximayru. We know that you are the founder of this hospital.”

“I’m Lucas Tanabata. Along with my wife, Celena Tanabata. Here is our recently born child, Jireh Tanabata.” Lucas refers him and his family to Taiko.

“I’m Mien Rin Sanipela, eldest sister of Celena.” She shakes his hand.

“Johanna Lexyria. Twin sister of Avea.” She replied with a sad sigh.

“Hmm … Ahem. On the topic. From my past knowledge, we had no data at all on what her sickness could be. A ‘Navanian’ getting an orange skin tone with fever like a ‘Hivanian’ with mysterious scars is completely new. Normally, when we have a ‘Navanian’ undergoing a conversion, what happens is they undergo a transition of their birthmarks. Where only the white and another color remains intact and the other three colors fade away. Until such time that their physical figure changes to their remaining color. Hers is not normal. But one of our doctors tried to bring an empty orb of water. But this is what happened when it was placed next to her. Nurse, could you bring the orb we used during the operation?” He called at the hall.

Once the orb comes to view, it has a bright ruby red color with mysterious markings similar to what Avea had. Everyone is completely speechless.

“What was surprising are the markings at this watery orb. I dunno what exactly happened but the sickness your friend seems to transfer itself to the orb. Which means good news Ms. Johanna. Your twin is cured but in need of rest for a night.” Just as Taiko finished, Johanna cried and hugged him in relief to know that her sister will be fine.

Congratulations. My child.

You did what is necessary for her. Our next goal starts next year.

“Was this … the right way?”

Ask yourself. It’s a necessity to know yourself as well. Now go.

**jireh the provider** · 5th November 2012, 4:01 AM

Sometime has passed ever since we’ve met the doctor. Avea seems to be doing just fine but Johanna insists they will both return to Navanis once her sister heals up. I just hope they will be okay.

“Will you two be joining with our field trip once Avea’s up again?” my big sister asked. Sometimes, she’d ignore my callings if she had to deal some stuff with her friends.

“… We’d rather … head back home. Just somewhat … homesick. I bet that’s how she feels … even if she’s still sleeping.” Johanna was reading something for a bit before she took a sip of tea.

My baby was looking to both of them with intent. Who knows? Johanna noticed.

“You may not get it much yet little Jireh. Not unless mommy is giving birth to another next year.” As much as Lucas and I are annoyed, she pets him lightly while giving us a faint smile. No way I’M letting myself get pregnant again.

“Johanna, don’t beg us to procreate again. Our child is already more than enough.” Lucas agrees to disagree like me. Just as he finished his phrase … is that? … uh oh…

“Hmmm … more than enough huh? Lucas, try farming your sweetheart a sack-load of interaction tonight and harvest ten more. Better load it up my little girl.” All we did was froze and passed out of that one. Ten more? … I can’t take it anymore.

“Hi five pal?” Johanna raised her hand. “Hi five!” we ‘appeared’ and Jireh (who somehow still hangs on to mama who just fainted) giggles. Seems I’ll be holding him ‘til both woke up.

We are walking the hallway to get some fresh air after holding some medical scents all over us. My baby hates it just as much as I do.

“Really Zoxi … you took an awesome idea for us to do! Our plan during the station was a success.” Ahh it’s nice when I get to have a sense of laughter, though we had tendencies to go too far. “That sickness is NOT our fault though! We only just-“ oh Feli,… of all the tivani to enter our private plan

“QUIET GUYS!” all of just stood quiet. Maybe we flinched out for a bit.

“What’s all the talk going around here? Can’t you at least show silence for the patients? Our baby just woke up again.” Lucas the too much loyalist. He really has adapted my pal huh? Should have raised him when I had the---

“Hello? Vitandes to Zoxi? You’re ignoring us again.” Celena. What really happened to you? Let loose a bit of fun here and there.

“He…heheehehehe … Uhh how about you three just, do an errand for now AND LOOK! HEY TAIKO! GIVE THEM AN ERRAND PLEASE I’M SORRY I CANNOT HELP FOR A WHILE SO THANK YOU ANDGOODBYE!!” I just slam the door shut. Gosh that was too close for comfort.

While we are kinda awkward as to what’s going on with Zoxi and his strange pals, our baby is just laughing a lot. Zoxi really is funny.

“Well that’s unexpected.” Both of us felt the sweat drop.

“Well … Sir and Maam Tanabata. Am I Right?” Guess who’s here?

“Yes. Are you by that way … Taitoko?” I ask.

“Yeah. Though call me Taiko instead.” he breaths in and out for a moment. “How about we get to know ourselves first while we head to my room? Just curious.”

We just nodded and followed.

“Tell me. What brings you two here at Ignis? It’s easy to tell your race from your birthmarks that both of you are Navanian.” Taiko is the kind of doctor who wears those crystal clear circle things at his eyes. Some said that it is worn by tivanian who pursued knowledge and curiosity. But we don’t see that a lot on our time.

“We were travelling back all over Vitandes.” I said to him.

“Any relations with Zoximayru Ulirys?”

“We are friends with him.” Lucas takes my lead.

“Then I bet you two should know that he is our hero’s best friend.” We nodded.

“But I remember him giving me stories about our hero’s children … or so adopted children they said. I don’t know much.”

Lucas lends me an ear and whispered whether we should tell him more about us. I agree since he’s friendly enough.

“Thanks for that conversation. But can you repeat that part you are saying about our hero’s children?” I asked.

“What for? But … guess it doesn’t hurt much. Something about our hero having children that are adopted.” He fiddles his glasses.

“Do you know who you are talking to now?” Lucas implied our doctor. “They could be with you now.” I know he tries being humorous.

This gives him a gasp. “C-could you two be … okay! Apologies for that startlement. Now I get it. We can get to know each now perhaps.” until he looks at our baby. “My oh my. A recently born baby huh mister and miss Tanabata. He is indeed looking healthy.”

“Our friend Johanna checked both of us up.” I bet when I told him her name, he was covering his face for a bit.

“We named Jireh as an honor of our master.” Lucas looks back at the picture of a house.

“Jireh … hmm … not exactly our hero’s name but more of a closely meaningful term.”

As he mentions ‘meaningful term’, it hit my head when I look back.

“Check his chest. That’s where his symbol was marked.”

“Mr. Taiko. We want to know something that we don’t know about.” I propose.

“Curious couple huh? Well, I’m willing to answer that.”

“It is something about our baby. Something so new for both of us. Like a checkup.” Lucas follow omy proposal.

This giggles him for a while, “You two remind me of my sibling and her husband during their early days as a family. I went to the point doing more than just teach them health. I even did parenthood. Lemme see what you little fella holds.”

Taiko did his usual stuff on checking up our patient. But for such a growing old tivani, he’s a kid at heart, which is also what our goddess wanted us to realize. She really was wise.

“Hmmm … this kid of yours doesn't have a birthmark? Cause I ain’t seeing one. This tivani seemed … unique.” He says unique when I find it strange.

“I think my friend uses something like a flashlight like those.” I point out to his cabin of medicines and herbs. He tries using a simple flashlight. But nothing’s showing up until he picks up another one.

“Before I forget, please return this to your friend that helped me with your patient. She kinda left this behind. Finding this kind of flashlight is very handy for us doctors; yet it is one of the rarest items to find.” Lucas nod and our doctor continue his check-up using Johanna’s flashlight, until that familiar symbol appears.

While we all stared at awe, Taiko is more than awes, “This … this is new! You two … must have something very unique on your genetics. This is a completely new symbol that I happened to find on this day. It’s amazing! You two sound be really proud of your child!” I bet he really is happy for all of us.

“But in all honesty, I don’t specialize in birthmark origins. I’m sorry that I can’t give you the answers that you need. Maybe someone else knows these things.” He sighs, I bet disappointed.

“Thanks for trying sir. We’ll get going.” Lucas thank him. As both of us pick up our baby wrapped in my scarfed clothes, our doctor whistled.

“One moment please. If you two have some spare time, can you do an errand for me?” An errand?

“See this box at my table?” Taiko pointed a box wrapped in colorful wraps. “My sister’s quite a farmer. I wanted to give this to her myself. But I’m occupied for only one more day of my business before I can go home and rest. Will you deliver this to her?”

“We’re okay with it.” I volunteered after a bit of discussion to Lucas.

As we are about to leave the room, he whistles back at us. “Since you two are guests, I may as well give you the map of Hivanis in case you get lost. Just follow the mark of the map. It’s where our house was.”

**Skiyomi** · 12th November 2012, 8:10 PM

I'm here from the review game and I've got some comments on your prologue and first chapter:

“Run everyone! Run this way!” a man of his old age looks at the distance of his dying motherland.

Is the man saying this? There’s no dialogue tag on it, so it really shouldn’t be considered part of the first sentence. I’m going to try to rewrite this so that it makes sense to me, because there’s a lot of odd sentence construction here that makes it hard to understand. Here’s what I’d change it to:

“Run everyone! Run this way!” an old man shouts, looking into the distance at his dying motherland.

They were invaded by shadows that deny their existence.

“They” needs to be referring to something from the previous sentence and in this case it isn’t. I assume by “they” you mean “the old man’s people.” You need to be clear about that.

Inside a tunnel high in the mountains, 4 people are close to a portal of aquamarine behind a magical shield.

You need to write out the word “four” instead of using the symbol. You do this in a lot of other places in this too, and you really need to write out the word or it looks unprofessional.

Just as the old man seals the gate with his magical power, three people are begging him to join them. Yet he refused their offer for he value the life of his children.

Should be he “values” the “lives” of his children. I’m assuming his children aren’t all sharing one life.

“Master, please don’t do this for us yet! You said to be loyal to you ‘til the end!” one of his disciples sheds his tears. As two other female followers just cried.

A couple of problems here. First off, you’re using the wrong preposition in the first sentence. It shouldn’t be “please don’t do this for us yet!” It should be “Please don’t do this to us yet!” Unfortunately prepositions don’t really line up from language to language, so this is something you’re just going to learn.

Secondly, you’re doing the same thing you did in the first sentence where you’re acting like “one of his disciples sheds his tears” is a dialogue tag. You can’t speak through “shedding tears” so if you want it to be related to the bit of dialogue, you have to use a speaking term like “cries out” or “begs.”

Lastly, the last sentence is a fragment, plain and simple. You either need to use a comma and integrate it into the previous sentence or get rid of the “as.”

“My students if you don’t go now, we’re all gonna die and many more others!

You’re using direct address here, so there should be a comma after “My students.”

Veering away from technical issues and more toward character and speech patterns, I find it very weird that the old man is saying “gonna.” I mean, there’s a time and place for that term and it could be perfectly reasonable coming out of a younger character’s mouth. But from what seems like a venerable old man, particularly in a very serious time… it seems off. I would change it to “going to.”

And, live on!”

You don’t need the comma there.

With a shallow breath, he said,

You’ve been doing everything in present-tense before this, so it should be “says” not said, unless you want to go back and change everything else to past-tense. This paragraph seems fraught with past-tenses and it’s very inconsistent with what’s been put out before. The same thing happens in chapter one.

“I’ve got nothing else to teach for all of you.

Much like with the “gonna” instance, I feel like this construction is far too young and slangy for a venerable old man. “I have nothing else to teach to you all” (again, “for” is incorrect here) would sound much better and more appropriate to his stage in life.

Then the whole planet blew out white to oblivion.

This seems very plainly and briskly stated for such a monumental event. This would be a good time to break out some top-shelf descriptions and really make your reader feel the explosion.

There’s a lot of drama going on in this prologue, but it’s very difficult to be invested in because I don’t know much about what’s going on. The characters aren’t fleshed out and the danger is vague, so there’s little for me to grasp onto here.

Perhaps you’re relying on me to read your little terminology and encyclopedia style entries on what’s going on? If so, don’t. A lot of people simply won’t do that. And really, you should be able to explain what’s going on in the body of the text without moving exposition outside the story. These things need to be integrated into the chapters themselves.

Moving on to chapter one.

Taken inspiration from a distant star, she placed one ocean and one sea, two continents, and blooming with mountains, forests, caves, beaches, deserts, oasis, plains, volcanoes, hills, lakes, rivers, and few other elements left by that inspired star.

I assume you’re still referring to what the goddess is doing here, yes? If so, it should be “taking” not “taken” and this should be part of the previous sentence (joined with a comma).

The list here seems overwrought. It’s long, but it doesn’t really provide any details. And ending the sentence with “that inspired star” just creates unnecessary repetition.

young youth

As opposed to the old youth? You don’t need to specify that the youth were young—that’s the definition of being a youth.

It seems like you’re trying to push a sort of moral-philosophical agenda in this, which is not at all unusual in a sort of sci-fi/fantasy setting. At the moment, its talk of innocence and virtue and simplicity and balance all seem rather generic, but it’s early on and perhaps you’ll develop these further.

I’m not going to pick apart every grammatical/punctuation error in this chapter, but there are a lot here and some of them are the same type of errors that cropped up in the prologue. I will add, though, that you’re using a lot of sentence fragments, which is making the prose seem rather choppy. Complete, flowing sentences are what you want to combat that effect.

A giggle cry is loosed again

This is rather odd word choice. Giggling tends to be happy, whereas cries tend to be sad or afraid.

Another thing to point out: you’re using a lot of semi-colons and most of the time incorrectly. Clauses separated by semi-colons should be able to exist as sentences on their own merit. If each piece can’t exist as a complete sentence, then what you want to use is a comma, not a semi-colon.

“Aaaahhhhhh! The baby! Gasp… it’s kicking now! Ahhh!” Celena is carefully being carried by Lucas to the closest flat floor. As he called Mien Rin for the childbirth procedures, he looks back at the fortune teller’s advice he got yesterday.

This could’ve really used a transition because it happens waaaay too fast and I’m very surprised that there’s no panicking, that she’s just carried away without any comment. Don’t be afraid to give your scenes some breathing room to let people react naturally. ...And you have her actually say "gasp" here. People gasp; they don't say "gasp."

Also, if you’re going to involve childbirth in your story then you really should’ve done some research on it first. Unborn babies do kick, yes, but that is not the signal that a child is about to be born. Babies kick a bunch way before their time to be born and it’s nothing to panic over. If you wanted a signal that it was time for the baby to be born, then it should’ve been something like her water breaking or her going into contractions.

“I don’t understand what you mean.” He wondered.

This is incorrectly punctuated and it’s not the only example of incorrectly punctuated dialogue that you need to fix. “He wondered” is part of the previous sentence, so the period should be a comma and “he” should be in lowercase.

6 months of careful health finally gave her a healthy child.

Am I to assume that this race has a shorter gestation period than humans do? Because for humans it’s nine months, not six. You might want to explain that within the text.

All in all, I think the primary thing you need to worry about are technical issues that are riddled through this. They overshadow connection to character and an exploration of this culture, their aspects of family and their system of philosophy which you seem most interested in shining a light on. To make these aspects come into sharp focus, the distractions of the ways its written need to be addressed first. I’d recommend checking out some books on English grammar and paying extra close attention to the way prose is constructed in the English-language books that you’re reading. I can’t overstate how important it is to get these things right, because even if a story had an otherwise amazing world set-up and characters, I wouldn’t want to read it if I had to deal with errors and awkwardness in the text. Without clarity, it's hard to enjoy the plot.

Good luck as you revise.

**Psychic** · 28th November 2012, 12:32 PM

Please read the Fan Fiction Rules - the first part of your story must be in the first post. In this case, that means your prologue.

Also, why do you keep deleting posts? Especially things like replies to reviews don't need to be deleted. For editing chapters, just use the Edit button to fix what needs fixing.

~Psychic

**jireh the provider** · 30th November 2012, 7:02 AM

Originally Posted by Psychic

Please read the Fan Fiction Rules - the first part of your story must be in the first post. In this case, that means your prologue.

Also, why do you keep deleting posts? Especially things like replies to reviews don't need to be deleted. For editing chapters, just use the Edit button to fix what needs fixing.

~Psychic

My chapter are looking too disorganized when i posted them. Last time, instead of posting chapter 12 after 11, I ended posting chapter 13. Which means I lost track on my work at all that I had to delete it.

**jireh the provider** · 30th November 2012, 5:10 PM

As both of us leave the hospital, we come across a horse ranch so we can give ourselves a ride to where we are supposed to go. Mien Rin catches up with us at last. I just thought that she’ll be staying with Johanna since all three of them are best friends.

As both of us leave the hospital, we come across a horse ranch so we can give ourselves a ride to where we are supposed to go.

“Hey! Where the heck are you three going without me?!” Mien Rin catches up with us at last. I just thought that she’ll be staying with Johanna since all three of them are best friends.

“I thought that you’ll be staying with your best friends.” I say.

“You are right about that. I wanted to do so badly. Yet something tells me that if I’m not here with both of you, both of you’ll really mess up badly.”

“Are you saying that we’re not responsible enough to raise our child?” Lucas agrees with me on this case.

“He’s right. I bet both of us are good enough to raise Jireh. Right son?” tickling by baby for a bit, he giggles with joy. I’m confident that both of us can do it.

“As much as you two try, both of you are in serious need of teaching. Both of you are still irresponsible in some way or another.” Big sis …

“N-no were not.” Lucas replies back.

“Then it’s settled. I’ll join with my family. That’s official.” Just great, she really means this time.

“Fine. You can join us.” It sucks to be corrected by big sis as Lucas and I admit defeat.

“So where are you two going?” even she tries to play grumpy, I’m used to it too.

“We are doing an errand.” Lucas did his turn on raising our baby, who finds him quite comfortable too.

“For who?” my big sis ask. Maybe for once, she’s right that I’m forgetful. I think she doesn’t even know where we are going

“From the doctor that saved Johanna’s twin.” I open the map that Taiko gave us. It was written and marked as ‘Taminiz Village’.

“Where’s your destination abound maam?” the horseman asks as he’s fixing his hat.

“Here.” I show him the map.

“Taminiz Village then. Here we come! And enjoy the view! Hyah!” thus, we now begin our next return trip to Hivanis. Taminiz Village.

Taminiz Village. It’s been a long time since I had fun in here when I was still a kid. I still remember that master told me that many of the residents living here will always have a farm on their backyard farm but of course the soil hey use will overall be the property of Taminiz Village, a rural village home to the popular and classic ‘taminiz candy’. Fairly nice houses that they got since they mixed it a bit of wood but still, it is stone that they always use. Being a ‘Taminiz Candy Making City’ means that you cannot avoid the sweet sugary scent of candy, it’s all over this village.

“Taminiz candy special available today! Mango Float flavor is the flavor of the day! Order one while you can! Four pieces for only five oseps!” Trust me about this place! Its candy shop paradise!

“Mama! Mama! Papa!” And just like me, my baby finds it very tasty just to eat a single piece of that candy. Normally, I’d rather avoid it since he needs sugar control. Too bad I didn't feed him this morning. I decide to use the discount on that shop. After I said yes, he giggles through my shoulders. Stopping our ride at that one mango candy shop, I buy four pieces of Mango Taminiz Candy for five Oseps and continue our ride while I feed my baby. The candy looks like a chopped piece of wooden pencil. But eating it will make it very jello, being reactive to our wet tongues. I remember trying one strawberry flavor before that it melted inside my mouth. It is chewable like sweet jelly. At least they know how to make edible yet healthy candy for babies. “Meema!” such a child that we are raising; meema, he loves both Lucas and I.

“Is this the reason why couples wanted a child?” I ask myself that this could be the true answer. After going for a bit of riding, we found our place of residence.

“Hello? Anyone living here? We’re looking for Taiko’s sister.” Mien Rin did the work as both of us deal some things with our lovable baby who is sniffing the air around him..

“Coming,” Then we heard a male voice opening the door, “Guests? … Hmmm … I’m not sure what brings you three here. Are you here for my wife?”

“Are you … Taiko’s sister’s wife?” Even if Lucas starts it, I just did a nod

“Yes. In fact, mentioning Taitoko’s nickname tells me everything that I needed to know. All four of you have something that he wants to give to Keema. Right?” that man ask

All of us just nod again.

“She’s at the back of the farm but I think we should just talk more about ourselves some more in our backyard farm. Come.” With ‘Keema’s man’ leading the way, his farm is only about half the size of our master’s farm. By his physique, he is a bit like Lucas but his height and muscle and skin tone is another story. “Oh here’s my birthmark if you need recognition.”

“Hivanian. Right?” Mien Rin assures.

“Today. But I was in all truth a Navanian like you little lady.” I bet he refers it to me. “But to the looks of you young man, yours is still undergoing changes. But I think your dominant element would be some Herbarian traits. Hey Keema! We got some guests sweetiepie!” he calls out. Then we met his wife in a unique way. She’s quite like Lucas but with more feminine traits of Herbardam. It makes me feel so small.

“Guests?” she seems to act like very happy for sure. “Gasp … are you two … also married?” Stars are a good bet on what she sees now. “Oh my goodness! You two are so adorable together! I could have at least prepared something delicate for you two!” Maybe too energetic.

“Uhhhmmm … hello? Who are you two anyway?” I wave my hand over her head.

“I’m Keema Wesnu, Here with me is my husband, Imtrimi Wesnu.” Really weird names if you are asking me.

“Call me Trim if you want.” And our guest ‘Trim said’.

“Sorry for the hassle but could you lend a helping hand?” I bet seeing Keema’s facing tells that big sis is here for another field work. “Don’t worry. We’ll give you something good for the four of you tonight.”

Seeing their farm close to completion of getting every last fruit that they got, I bet that is their special giveaway for all of us. So we lend them a good hand. Minus me since my baby would rather cling on to my chest still and I can’t work at all yet.

Later that evening, we have a dinner with our two guests. During our cooking time for some ‘Taminiz candy’ specialty, we added a bit of knowing each other during the bustle. ‘Course it would be boring without a conversation’ for Keema anyways.

“How old is your baby? Cause he is quite small.” Trim puts up a smile on his face, plus in some way that all of us laugh. Jireh just finds them very funny. I guess he just finds them approachable too.

“Recently born.” Mien Rin does the doctoral filler since ‘me and my love’ are not so fond of it. In the middle of them all, my baby was happily feeding himself some of my breast milk. But looking back at what we did in the kitchen a while ago is something quite disturbing for Mien Rin.

“Celena. Come here for a moment.” Keema peered through the kitchen opening. Once I entered and find myself a seat, “So how is your experience so far for being a mom?”

“Seems very good as far as I felt,” I sheepishly said. “So what’s the call for me here?”

“Have you ever tried giving something that you did yourself for your child?”

“Not yet.” I replied.

“How about YOU cook some ‘Taminiz Candy’ for baby Jireh?”

In a nutshell, I did quite a mess on my cooking. Cooking Taminiz candy properly takes me six times to finally get it right, just great that my left hand is burned too.

During my conversation with Keema and Mien Rin, Lucas and Trim are having a conversation of their own; probably learning about being a dad and also something that I overheard about Keema and Trim having a son of their own going somewhere.

Until, something from Lucas’ bag falls out of his bag.

“Ohh. Now I remember. We kinda forgot to give this to you.” Lucas hands over the box that Taiko gave us.

“No need to tell. I’m sure that’s from my brother. Giggle … quite happy for a single man.” As she unwrap the gift, she stares at it with stars all over her eyes. All of us (minus Trim) are startled. Ain’t that …

“Oh my goodness! I’ve never expected my brother to give us something so beautiful!” I’m just dumbstruck. “Here you go little baby. Hold on to it. Lemme get my papers and—“

**jireh the provider** · 12th December 2012, 12:47 PM

Last chapter:

“Oh my goodness! I’ve never expected my brother to give us something so beautiful! Here you go little baby. Hold on to it. Lemme get my papers and—“

“Lucas! That’s the stone!” Mien Rin react the quickest while we catch up to see this one orb holding that unknown sickness. I just grabbed that orb and placed it on the table without thinking. It’s just gives me a sense of foreboding. Just when Keema’s husband is about to pick it up, I snatch it away.

“WHOA THERE YOUNG LADY! No hurt but you are getting quite tense on that thing!” Like I should not, Trim. You nearly ended your own life!

“Don’t you know what’s in this one?! Both of you nearly killed my baby!” I am frantic. But, “Oh no! What am I fearing? Why am I feeling like this? What am I seeing?”

“Heyhey! What the hassle goin on here?” that is until Keema faces me.

“Miss Celena. Are you okay?! Seems like you are spooked by that present that my bro’ gave me! I just hope that my man didn’t do something to ya. Or the other way around that is.” Oh no, I have to do something. I made quite a mess. “Young man, do something to her. Seems that she just saw a fading spirit that rose from the ground.”

“Sweetheart. Just give some composure to your reaction.” Lucas made it easier said than done.

“It’s easier said than done! This orb holds-“ Just as I stopped, I heard ringing bells. After a few seconds, I was speechless. “I don’t think there are any bells outside. But .. was all of that noise coming from my head? It better not be. I’ve got to convince them that something’s wrong with this orb. Those symbols attached to it are the reasons Avea got seriously ill.”

“I hate repeating it again maam but you are making yourself look insaaaaaaAAHHH!” Just as Keema is talking, the orb that I’m holding shines a very bright red that it enveloped all of us inside screaming with fear, even my own baby. Then I just pass out.

In an unknown place, a tune of a heartbeat and the grind of a trillion gears that synchs with the other. On the floor lies the family of Tanabata and Wesnu. But wait … someone is missing. With the heartbeat and grinding they wake up by themselves.

“Where … are we?” Both couples ask themselves.

“Celena. Lucas. I’m glad you’re still okay.” The eldest of the three gives them a reassuring hug.

“Miss Celena. I want answers from you as to where the hell we are right now?!” that tonal hostility from Keema tells Celena that both Keema and Trim aren’t happy.

“Keema. Sweetie. There’s no need to be mad at her.” Understanding Celena’s cluelessness, Trim defends her, “Besides, she didn’t want this to happen anyway.”

“Thanks for understanding Trim. My wife doesn’t know as much as I do too.” Lucas said before he asks, “Has any of you seen Jireh?”

Murmurs are bursting. Something within Celena is driving her to be worried for her child. “Where’s Jireh? Where’s my baby? Where’s my child?” the more she thinks about it, it slowly turns to a murmur that everyone else heard.

“Celena. Celena. Wake up!” distracted by Lucas, all of them are looking at her.
Moments later, all sound in the environment is lost. Until a few seconds later, a mysterious music is being played all around them.

“Don’t just ask about where we are. What is that?!” Mien Rin looks below the floor as the floor shows unknown symbols. “Ain’t these marks the one Avea had?”

Then the symbols started to float on the sky and arrange themselves. All that they did was staring at the ancient message through silence in awe; all of them asking themselves many questions, but two things kept them asking. ‘What is going on here? What are these symbolic lines represent?’

Two minutes later, Boom! The script blows itself apart.

“HELP! SOMEBODY!” a voice has averted me to see a child high on a peak. I don’t know what kind of volcano it was, until I noticed a caravan with horses a bit ahead of us. “Somebody! Help!” the child is crying. I just can’t help but do something about it. I just have to. But looking at my wife, she is just blankly staring at the source of the plea.

“Celena? Sweetheart? Hello?” That is until I can hear a loud aggressive cry from the distance.

“Would you three get onboard and run now?!” Keema, who is riding a carrier of sorts, is pointing at the left and all three of us saw many moving things with WEAPONS ON THEIR HANDS. There are two groups fighting one another. A large group of white and small men with their own hands are using small sized weapons that looked so sharp on the tip. The other one has few numbers that are black colored and they’re like wearing something sturdy and heavy. Yet they can move fast with the huge and flat weapons that they have! How are we gonna get out? Were in an unknown place as I check the surroundings a while ago! We got nowhere direction to go.

“Everyone, get in!” all that we could do is make a run for it. I just gave one good signal for the horses to run as fast as they can. All of us can hear a lot of agony from the small things fighting the huge guys. But one particular scram gives us dread. I can see those huge black things after us, as if they wanted us killed.

“What is going on here? And importantly, what did the orb do to us? We just kept running straight wherever we supposed to go.”

“LUCAS! LOOK AT THE PEAK!” As my wife point out, I can see a portal opening. Then all of us saw a woman blinking like a star.

“Should we follow it? We could outrun them!” Mien Rin is making a point. I think that following that bright light, along with that portal of sorts, just might save us.

“Seems we can trust that and rescue the kid- WHOA!” the ground starts shaking and the earth itself is cracking to not much more than a huge mazes..

“Hey driver, watch it! The ground is getting narrow! One wrong turn and were goners!” Hearing the other couple scream DID NOT HELP! With a limited road and a maze to follow, I am nervous.
Until she held onto my shoulder, “Sweetheart! Let me help you!”

“Celena! Are you out of your mind? We may end up falling together!” I can’t believe that I had to argue with her. But why? Why now?!

“I can feel it! That kid holds our child! Both of them are trapped!” we went silently for a bit. “Follow my lead! I got a feeling that I know the safest and quickest route.” Our child … is at the peak too? I’ve known her for being quite a misleading girl that I love! But … can I trust her on this case where our demise is coming? After a moment of hard thinking … I’m putting on some faith to her.

“Lead the way sweetheart.” I place a hand on her hand.

With Celena telling me where to go, I focus on the road and run the way. Even if we are running now, we can clearly hear the loud stomping of those … things chasing us. As if those things were like … like…

Boom!

“Lucas! We’ll slow them down for you. Just focus!” Whatever Mien Rin does to slow them down will help.

During our run, we make a right. Then a left. Another Right. Upwards. Going left. Left again. So many directions to follow. Then we came across something shiny on the ground that boosted up our speed. Just being far away from those things gives us relief. Not for long though. They use the path we used as well. So much for confidence. After a bit of ‘running for our child and life’, we are getting close to the portal. We are quite sandwiched between two walls of rock.

“Hey!” Getting my attention from the voice, I saw this stranger clothed in red carrying our baby from the top edge of the cliff. He or she is pointing to the edge of the cliff and a motion of his arm is telling us that both of them will jump on to us.

"Celena. The way he -- she is asking is risky. Should we take the chance? It just too dangerous. Our child may be killed in the process!” Mien Rin makes a good point.

“ … should we? Hold on.” she is not yet sure?

“Celena! Hurry!” I am hesitant as we are getting close to freedom. But we can’t leave our child behind.

“GO!” Now? Did she just shout now? That stranger just jumps while we haven’t reached his line of range yet. To make it worse, Celena got out of the front as if she was reaching up to Jireh. All of those few moments give me a frightened meaning.

“Please. Make it with us. Don’t die yet my child. Celena and I can’t bear it if we lose you!”

Then I just close my eyes and make my final whip; hoping for the best as we pass through the mysterious gate.

**jireh the provider** · 26th December 2012, 8:31 AM

Start of the Family Arc

Amidst the midnight winds of Hivanis, the house of the Wesnu family emanates a warm red light within those few moments before it fades to nothingness. Everyone just slept at random spots of the house, amnesiac on what happened before.

“I’m … I’m back. What just … happened? Uhhhnn … Ji … jir …jireh?” waking up from what I guess would be … … a house? Everything else hit me, recalling a moment of survival. “Those … things. They’re after us … and our child. I caught my child alive. Yet … the other. What happened to the other?” It didn’t take me long enough to feel another warm feeling. My child. “Jireh! You’re okay! Mommy’s worried about you!” I whisper to his ear.

Trying to wake up now, the dawning sun is fairly notable, “My baby in my arms, but what a really strange dream.” Looking at the other sofas, everyone else must be sleeping. As if … they exhausted themselves.

“Waaahhh! Mama! Mama! Waaahh!...” Oh dear. Not again. I notice Lucas and Mien Rin mildly waking up from their sleep.

“Could you keep Jireh down? We’re still tired.” With big sister mumbling, I have no choice but to do it somewhere else. She’s not the morning person type. Peering at the window tells me that it is slowly rising.

Whispering at my baby, I sing to him the song that gave him ease during his recent birth. After that, he falls asleep. I entered their kitchen and begin making some mild tea. But of course, I have to breastfeed my child again. It’ll help him get big like us. I bet he’s happy that I am flustered to feel him nibbling at me.

“…Mama?” Is Jireh … looking through my eyes? Why do I feel like adoring him? It gives me a feeling of worry that he is worried about something. I don’t’ want him to get too tense in his early days. I want him happy.

“Wanna walk around the place?” I ask him through a whisper. His giggly reply tells me he’s eager. I did one last quick sip of my mild tea and leave the house. As we wonder through the farming fields, I find a nice tree for us to relax ourselves. Within the horizon, I can see a small line of yellow orange. The sun must be coming now

“Look Jireh. It’s the sun. It is such a beauty. Isn’t it nice? The sun gives us warmth when we feel cold. Whenever I feel lonely, I wait for the sun to rise another day.” I hold on to his little hand to ease his pain, just how master accepted me as his young sister. Lucas enlightened me as well despite his difficulty to win my heart during my young days as kids.

“Mornin` there young lady. Last night sure is weird eh.” Keema? Why is she here?

“What is weird last night?” I ask.

“Nah. Nothin to really mind my girl. I dunno know what I’m even askin. But it surely is weird. Not like I min about it dhough.” She gave both of us a pet in the head. “Are you an early bird Celena?” she asked me.

“Quite much,” I answer. “Keema. Where’s your son?”

Looking at her face is quite a mix, as if she is both happy and lonely altogether, “Oh … ma boy is quite a man if he was here. He left our place five months ago as a traveler. I dunno what he may find … but … I have faith with my son’s choices. He may be back with something for me or not, I’m always welcome to him no matter how much my son may change. Life is like a relationship between crops and farmers. So love your son with all of your heart just as you love your little man.” Both of us are just sitting under the tree. Sometime later, she gets up, “You should head back to our house now. Your husband seems to be born a natural cook. You’re lucky to have him as your husband. The scent of his food is unique.” After she walks away, I head back with my child to their house.

Lucas cooks another set of healthy meals again for us. But this time, he makes a little Taminiz candy for our baby. It has a strange green color on its form. But nonetheless, he nibbles and licks it like a rabbit happy about carrots. I try one out for myself.

“Wow! How did he learn to cook one so good in one try?” Oh my baby. He’s really hungry. “Jireh seems to ask for more.” he giggles in excitement when I say that to Lucas.

“I think our kid is hooked to this healthy treat like you do.” Lucas smiles cutely for Jireh as if he is also close to him like me. Then he returns to the kitchen to make more healthy candy for him.

“Oh. Honey.” Calling him back, something in the back of my mind tells me to ask him this.

“Yes?” he turns back at me.

“ … What can you say about our child? So far?” I ask him.

Time stands still for us both. I wonder how he perceives our new lives now. “When I think about this … it reminds me of those times when we’re just students to our master. We’re competing with each other as to which one of us is much more tamable. I still remember on how hard it is for me to make you so disciplined … no thanks to your simplicity and contagious optimism.”

“Seeing you being so restraint to me is something I enjoyed. I used to really annoy your seriousness since you’re smile often intimidates many. While you and Mien Rin are doing most of our master’s request, I’m the one that he often had to order around. You’re just too disciplined. But it seems the more I do so, the more I lose my own perspective to you. Maybe I did tame you in the end of it all. I still smile and a bit lax in many things. But I somehow understand on how your disciplined personality can win the trust of more people than I.” Oh Lucas, those were the days we had back then.

“Now that you said that, I learned to be optimistic in some times thanks to your optimism. But of course I don’t let myself get carried away most of the time. Yet I think that even if you tamed me in the end, I still tamed you on your disciplines and responsibilities. Maybe we’re still on even ground after everything we've been through.” I said.

“Mien Rin’s the exception though.” As I finished saying this, he agrees with me in laughter.

After we had our morning breakfast, he can hear some shoveling and plowing outside.

“Oh hey! Look who’s back!” What a surprise for us three. Zoxi comes back with our fellow doctor joining his sister. But we wanted to hang out at the tree I took a rest this morning.

“Aww heck yeah big boy! Seems you've grown soft to your little bugger eh?” I bet he gives Lucas quite a hug. While I smile for him, Jireh still cries at his face. “Oh no! Of all the little children that liked me, you only give me a cry when I only do things to make ya happy. I still remember how to deal it with ya.”

It is indeed … another candy. But I think I just pick it up and eat it for myself.

“Good gracious woman… why did you even take away my gift for your little fella?” Oh big guy, my child just giggles at you when you look so disappointed.

“I gave him enough health candies for the morning.” My sweetheart lay down next to me. Both of us relax under the shades of the tree. Zoxi is left to do some chores with Taiko and everyone else about the farm.

“Will the three o ya be able to do some farm harvestin fo us?” Trim just land down some empty baskets next to us.

“What for?” I ask.

“To make it up for your overnight, yo three may as well help us fo today’s harvest. Turnips just gon boomin today.” Before I could reply, my husband silenced me with a hand. As to why he stops me, mien Rin did it herself.

“We’ll help you guys. But on two conditions. My little sister can’t work big time like us. She just gave birth to their baby five days ago. Two, her husband will help us at least thirty minutes later in the field. Family bonding issues. I’ll take their places instead.” It didn't come to me that she would save us time for our moment together. The older couple took them a bit of time to decide on how we are gonna fare, even by whispering. Looking at their expressions reminds me the way we need to be disciplined to master.

“Your sister’s right about that proposal you two,” Did Trim just … agreed? Never knew that Trim can be just a worker. “Lucas, normally I’d be like a straight kinda guy, especially on important days. I decided to lean a curve this time. C’mon. Even yo child need to luv an know ya a lot too.”

Then Keema went next to our talk, “Since yo two are pretty young, especially you Celena, we decided to give you two a better idea. I’ll let ya two ride our carriage and tour our farm at your own leisure. After twenty five minutes, you two head over there so that we could harvest all of da turnips we raised.” Like a double fair job, we agree.

Touring their farm makes our day worth spending. There are lots and lots of plants everywhere like rainbows are sprouting from the ground. My child is gladly admired. With the three of us cradling together, we feel like we’re in a fairy tale now. Lucas married me. I loved him just as he loved me. Jireh, our child, is our great joy and treasure. Of course we have to head to our route twenty five minutes later. What surprises me is that Zoxi joined with big sis as our replacement for the work we should ‘owe’ the Wesnu family. Just as they finish placing the turnips in the cart, Zoxi does what he does best.

“I don’t like disturbing your family moment but I think you two forgot something upcoming.” Zoxi about something upcoming?

“Upcoming?” Both of us asked.

“Did you three just FORGOT everything about Navanis five days later? It’s an important Vitanian event!” When he said five days later, all three of us are hit hard in the head.

“THE VITANDES FLAVOR FESTIVAL!” All three of us are shocked like big time. My baby only cried louder. I guess he kinda whines again to Zoxi in a form of a cry.

As Mien Rin and I want to beat the heck out of him, Lucas is holding us back “Zoxi! How dare you not say it to us from the get go we left our house?! Plus you--"

“They are indeed … the most childish of families I've ever met bro.” I pat him on the head

“True … True. Like good ol times sis.” Taiko, even if both of us change, we enjoy past company too.

“Looks like those three are gonna have one heck of a misadventure. Like us, cherry blossom.” Trim gave a peck kiss and blushed. Just like how we treated my bro when he helped us become parents.

“Lucas. Good old memories about my days with my married sister and her husband.” Taiko stares at the volcano of Igmaragma.

**jireh the provider** · 29th December 2012, 7:36 AM

“Ugh … you three should have thanked me for bringin you three baggages left behind at Taiko’s ol hospital!” I hate to admit my ignorance but it’s bad on my part. “And please you four should give yourselves a bath!” In the end, HE … HIT us in our heads. Lucas and Jireh are lucky ‘cause he’s a guy and he plays soft when it’s about babies. “Just get it done and we’ll ride the train back to Navanis.”

After our preparation, we give our goodbyes to the Wesnu family and hitch ourselves back to Navanis.

Later:

“Next stop. Simplicity Fields Station. Please pack your things for arrival.” With Zoxi dealing with the farming tools, Lucas and I carry our stuff. But I have to carry some of my sister’s stuff since she cannot do heavy work after giving birth to our child.

“It’s getting close to evening.” I said to them.

“The traveling horsemen are hard to find in stations like these country roads. Seems we can only travel halfway on foot before we sleep from exhaustion.” Lucas’ got a point.

“But with all of these things on our backs, we may as well get some rest for the night we reach halfway to Auvelis.” Zoxi makes logical sense. I just find it a perk for him. Our master really changed him in some ways.

“Are there any other residents closer to us Lucas?” I ask. Who knows?

“I never explored this part of Navanis before. Just the trip to this station a few days ago.” Well, there goes our quick ticket.

“What should we do now?” Just as I finished that question, a horseman came just in time.

“Whoa there Navanians. What brings your group here at the station?” This guy is your usual horseman with a carriage. As he notice the station and our baggage, he responded, “Returned from a trip huh? So where do you live here?”

“Auvelis Village.” Lucas said.

“Don’t worry. Get in here. I’ll bring you guys back home.” As the horseman said it, we give ourselves a ride and managed to get back home early.

Returning to Auvelis does seem to be refreshing. But the town is beginning to bloom some colors on the approaching night. Upon seeing their house, it has some flashy green designs of leaves and flowers.

Stopping at the house, everybody place their stuff near their gate. But of course, where’s the fun without the two?

“Celena! Mien Rin! Lucas! You’re back!” Those nurses give them quite a returning hug. “Have you heard about our upcoming festival?” both girls ask. The family just nodded while Zoxi had to deal with other stuff.

“So how’s our backyard doing?” Celena inspects through the second floor of their house. It still looks fine. But she knows that they don’t farm their food big time. They do it somewhere else in Auvelis.

“It seems fine.” Avea replies before giving her twin the cue. “I bet your family can still work here for our village.”

“But Xianix village needed a helping hand from us. Our farms are already full with tivanian farmers that some of us are just dealing with decors or just living things normally.” Johanna finishes.

Just as the big guy placed the last baggage, he gives one last whistle.

"Well. Time for me to leave. I'll see you guys another time." Zoxi did his farewell and leaves the scene.

“I think we just need some goodnight sleep for now. Right Celena? It’s already getting late night time.” As Lucas asks, Celena agrees. And after some farewells from Zoxi and the doctor twins, all three of them took the night pill and hit the white sack.

As I write the last things I want to say, it makes me look back on my days. What have I done to her? I couldn’t save her when she really needs it? Why did she had to die in my place when I learned from my mistakes? If you are reading this, all I can wish from you is your forgiveness.

“B-brother.”

“I’m sure that he finally understands, my child. Now I ask you this once more. What I’m giving you is another chance to achieve a great destiny. The chosen one’s spirit has been in conflict with another spirit within. I fear that the two will face an unwanted future ahead of them. But in the end, only one will live. The other will die. You will be my vessel to guide the chosen’s mother to their destiny. Do you accept?

“I’m ready to serve your duty. Goddess Feli.”

The Next Day:

It was another morning and another day dealing with my child.

“Ummm … hello?” is that … a young woman? I hear a voice from our gate.

“Huh? At sunrise?”I ask myself. As always, I carry along with me my baby. Upon opening the gate, I see a woman with long bright red hair. She keeps in a high ponytail using some kind of Herbardam plant. Her bangs are fairly clipped back. On the short side, she has green eyes that are darker than my husbands. The way’s she dresses up is casual outdoor set of clothes with a farmer’s hat on top. She has somewhat of a ‘childlike’ appearance compared to me. It’s as if she’s like my 14 year old self.

“Good morning … maam.” This little girl sounds like a young girl.

“So … what brings you here my child?” I ask.

“Oh wait I’m sorry miss! I am not a child. I’m nineteen right now.” She kind of needs a bit more of learning about life I guess.

“Why are you here anyway? It’s still too early in the morning.” When I try looking at her though, she seems to be quiet. Too quiet perhaps.

“Well … I … I need some help.” At first she is quite slow before she goes again too fast. I bet she kinda blushes in front of us. My baby was giggling not long before his stomach gurgled.

“It’s still fairly cold this early morning. How about you join with us for breakfast?” I propose to her.

“Ummm … is it okay? I haven’t had a meal when I left early.” At least I know she is quite soft spoken.

I did a nod and let her enter my home. I let her seat in our living room. It is quite a nice view to see the backyard of our home. There are mini tables, candles, and other furniture craftsmanship.

Just as I’m about to cook some breakfast, Lucas give me a morning hug.

“Cooking huh? Want me to have some time with our son?”

“Sure.”

Jireh looks happy the way he waves his arms to papa.

Once I did breakfast for everybody, it’s a decent mix of eggs, fruits, veggies, tea and coffee, and some meat. Lucas and I were quite small eaters on meat but it’s Mien Rin who eats them most. I ain't sure about our guest though. “Everyone! Breakfast’s Ready!”

After all of us gather at our diner, we have ourselves a nice breakfast with an ongoing conversation with our guest.

“Who are you anyway?” I ask our female guest.

“Akiko.” She seems so faint on tone when I’m with my husband and big sister.

“How old are you anyway?” it’s big sis who asks this time.

“Nineteen…” she blushes when she looks both at Lucas and Mien Rin.

“Can you show us your birthmark?” I request since I haven’t known her origin kingdom yet. Her figure looks weird to all of us. She kind of turn around and lifted her pony tailed hair for a bit. Until her birthmark is clearly seen. It is like Lucas’ birthmark.

“Have you gone through some strange occurrences Akiko?” both of us, without big sister, asked.

“What do you mean?” I gotta admit though, she does remind me of my own naiveté before.

Lucas shows his left hand with the birthmark that he has. “Akiko. I think we kind of shared similar birthmarks. My wife here is a pure Navanian as of now. Both of us somehow began showing traits of Herbarian traits.”

“I … I didn’t know. So … am I still a Navanian?” she seems too curious or is it her naiveté again. By this time though, our breakfast is done.

“I ain’t sure as well. But I think you and I are still Navanians.” He rests assured to her. We just hear some horseman caravan near our gate. I wonder what it wants now.

“Miss Akiko? Miss Akiko? You and the Tanabata family are needed right away at Xianix Village.”

“Ahh. Is it okay for you guys to join with me for the day? You guys don’t need to bring anything. Well, maybe some things for your child. I’ll tell everything along the way.” Akiko seems quite slow on things I guess.

After bringing a few things for our baby, all of us ride the caravan and head right over this ‘Xianix (Ce-ya-nix) Village’.

**jireh the provider** · 1st January 2013, 4:48 AM

Location: Simplicity Fields

“Well. I am Akiko Yoru. I am a resident of Xianix Village,” With me speaking in a group of people, I feel nervous even if they are so kind to me. I mean look at them. I am talking to a family. But after they showed their hospitality to me, I feel I can trust them with confidence after what happened at that morning. “I am a recent resident of Xianix Village two weeks ago,” Sometimes, I just felt that being with a wife who married someone handsome makes me feel left out. “I am here looking for a helping hand with our farms. I figured that I should be looking for you guys.” I blushed again. “hehehe … It’s my first time here at … Auvelis.”

“But if you’re a recent resident there, how did you know us?” Just when the eldest of them asked me, I just blushed like crazy. I can’t even speak out that guy. He’s so charming that I just fainted from thinking about him!

“Uhhh … Akiko. Are you … alright?” Celena closely approach me. But her baby just started ruffling my hair, and poking my forehead.

“Your baby is playing with me so much.” I find it so funny even if it’s quite disturbing.

“Wanna know what is like to hold a baby?” Celena’s letting me hold her baby? Just before I could continue, she place her baby at my arms. I think just does what every baby does.

“Celena’s baby huh? … He has an adorable look. Not to mention, a very innocent view of life. I hope … that he stays this way. Like all of us tivanians.”

Xianix Village. So this is how wide they are. Everywhere you can see, there are so many plants of many kinds. From fruits to veggies, every kind of flour, and every kind of tree with fruits. On rare cases though, I found some plants are I don’t usually see a lot. House are a bit clustered though unlike in Taminiz Village. Even the houses are in the middle of the farming grounds. While our village themes more for Herbardam, Xianix is a stronger emanation of Tramore. That is why I find the routes quite scrambled. The only thing I can recognize is a house next to a cave. What’s a cave doing here in her village anyway?

“So … uhm … Akiko?” I raised a hand.

“Yes?”

“Where’s your farm?” I asked her. But she only pointed through a certain direction to the north east. It didn't take long to see such an elusive house. I bet it maybe something crafted like our house but with a touch of Topaz sparkle. It’s as if it was raised from the depths of Vitandes. It is a bit smaller compared to ours. “There? I can’t see it very well.”

“Mien Rin. I think stealing an apple may be a bad thing.” Looking behind was my big sister with an apple at her hand. Of course she would ignore my husband’s orderly notes.

“I think you’re hungry now. Right? It’s okay though. You can have it.” Did she just allow my sister to steal something?

“Told you I was lucky Lucas.” Uuuuughhhh! Lucas and I are very envious right now. She often gets what she wants by doing something dirty without getting caught.

“Mie Mie! Hahahahaha…” Jireh? How am I going to teach you to be mannered in the future once you grow up in the future? I should be the once carrying you now. Why did I pass you to her?

“Looks like your baby sides with me mommy Celena.” I knew that she will often spout a joke on how cute I was whenever I get angry. What she just said is only one of many.

“Haha … I don’t find that funny sister. You just insulted me.” He gave me a hug as both of us were dealing with big sister turned to a mischievous kid again.

“I’m sorry … papa Lucas.” Both of us just pouted until we gave out a sigh.

“Quit spoiling yourself…” Lucas finished it for us both.

“Uhhh … am I … disturbing your … conversation?” from her down tilted blushing head, we nodded side wards, “Look over there! Ain’t that nice?” as Akiko let us see her home, I can see her house for a bit. Built out of wood. Even my baby in Akiko’s hands joined with her hands. “Plus that adamant and funny- Ahhhh!“ I don’t know what happened for a while, but seeing my baby pull down Akiko’s hair is quite funny.

“OOWOWOWOWOWOWWWOOOOWWW!! MAAM, DO SOMETHING! YOU COULD HAVE TOLD ME YOUR BABY HAS QUITE A PULL!” it only gets funnier when he licks her hair. Maybe it reminds him of the red taminiz candy that I made him back at Taminz Village. Plus, it is cooked long like our guest’s air color. “MISS CEL! PLEASE DO SOMETHING! HE BETTER NOT EAT MY HAIR! I AIN’T A FLOWER HEAD TO FEAST WITH!”I think I let my baby have a bit of fun with her for a bit. After a while, I pick him up and feel his happy giggle with a bit of red hair strand on his hands. Big sis is holding off an urge to laugh out loud. I am giggling quite a lot but my sweetheart got my face shut up as I look over her frowned expression. If only Lucas could let loose some of those laughter like I do.

“Maam … Is that even possible? A recently born baby … being that strong?” Poor Akiko. Without her leaf hair tie, it’s as if her hair becomes a scattered blooming petal.

“That … I don’t know. Celena … am I really muscular before we were married?” Lucas asks.

“I just remembered you being so strong. Not the kind of strong like Zoxi nor our master. I think it is a mix of both.” My baby seems to look sad for a bit when he sees his crafted creation to our guest’s hair. Im just a few moments he laughs at her again

“I’m very sorry for what my baby did Akiko. I never even thought that he could do something like that.” I apologize to her as she is fixing her ponytail hair. I even heard big sister face palmed. “Let alone mess up your hair.”

“Not that the baby did it bad at me. But … giggle … you guys are … a strange family.” Oh … kay. Akiko was normal until her voice starts to dim out. I think she is the weirdest of us all.

On the Farming Fields:

Arriving at the fields, we have to get ourselves clothed with farming equipment. Lucas and I look like some kind of Tramorian in a farming suit but Celena still kind of stay the same even if when she is wearing some farming clothes because she’s wearing one of Akiko’s spares due to her small height. I just don’t know if both of them can get along.

“Now that you guys are set, most of us are doing the hard part that we got no extra room for watering the fields.” Akiko told us as she is watering the field she’s standing on.

“So you want us to water the fields?” I assured.

“Yup.” I’ve got to be thinking funny but she is blushing a lot even in the simplest of talks. “Don’t worry about the payment though. I’ll give it to you guys once the festival’s over.”

“But Akiko … I thought that we will only work for today.” I just feel jumbled as to why she told us not to pack ourselves some stuff for an overnight back then. I bet she catches herself that quote … as if she just forgets something to add up. Good gracious. She’s like little sister in some ways.

“Oh. It will only be for the day time you guys will work. I’ll make sure that you guys can return home before the sun really falls down at night.” She raise her watering can to the northeast. “You guys can start over there.”

“Uhh … Akiko. My wife just recently gave birth to our child. I don’t think she could work much big time. Let alone on watering the gardens.” If I learned something from Lucas, then it would be his sense of reasoning. Why does he always switch favors? One time, he acts like me. Then he acts like little sister.

“Ohhh … I apologize to you Maam Celena. Perhaps, I can make your job much easier for all of you three.”

“How?” all three of us ask while my baby stared at her puzzled face.

“You three will be delivering the seeds to our farmers instead. Also, you three will inspect our water canals if they’re flowing properly. When there’s a clogging, please fix it. I bet that’s easy enough.” Guess what? Now I join my friend’s love trip.

“Thank you.” All I can say.

“Seems I’ll be looking for your replacements. You guys will at least have about four to five hours to get it done. Enjoy!” Seeing Akiko go ahead made me wonder if she’s moody or not.

“Hey Akiko wait—“she is so a child.

Ignoring that silly moment, we may as well start our work. I bet the following days would be like ordinary routine for us of course. Though I can’t help but feel like both of them let me do their work sometimes. They still have so much to learn, and Akiko is certain not a good example on maturity.

“Lucas. I hope that you and little sister can handle Jireh. He may be easy to manage as of now. But once your child becomes a kid, it only gets harder. It only continues further when he grows to a teenager. But as an adult … be ready to face something difficult for all three of you."

**jireh the provider** · 1st January 2013, 5:07 AM

Authors Note: This one day is a unique double post but I may as well give you guys a notification. I'm not sure if I already showed you guys chapter 17 and above. But if I haven't released them yet, Fear not. They are now officially ready for tomorrow. currently, I finished 23 Chapters in my MS word copy.

A gut feeling just came to me that I can mend chapter's 15 and 16 for today's post since after these two chapters, the rest are going to focus on a more anguish and suffering scene.

Event: Vitandes Flavor Festival: Tenth day of Spring; Month of Nema.

Here’s every one of us dressing up in the early morning. But we didn’t have any breakfast since our lady farmer, Miss Akiko Yoru, will be joining with us. She is wearing plenty of green clothing today that seems to match the color of emerald forest leaves along with her long red hair tied and polished with a yellow leaf string as the pin. “How’s my look Mien Rin? Ain’t this nice?” I have to say that she feels quite energetic as of now.
Mien Rin gives herself some fairly lavender clothes but she likes clothes that are quite travel fitting and slim. But her sleeves are pretty long. ”You just made yourself the dancing queen today Akiko!” I bet our shy girl just covers her face.

“I agree with her. A lot of young guys will fall in love with you.” Meanwhile, Lucas is wearing blue clothing along with a blue cape. The cool thing about him would be the stick that our master used before. It is old yet it’s still holding strong. Combine it with a wicked looking hat, his style kind of look like our master’s successor.

For my own costume though, I still wear my white scarf. But I change myself to cappuccino flavored clothing. To tie up my hair, I use lavender flower tie. Master used to make me wear this when I was young. I remember being used to hating it until I took a lover’s kiss to the lip.
And I’d rather not forget my baby child. I just wrapped him in a white scarf. But I gave him a bit of a yellow bandana. Costume him with a bit of purple wrappings makes him more mystique. It sounds like all of us are wrapped in a lot of clothing.

“Shall we visit Amenam Town? It’s the central location of this month’s festival.” Akiko ask if we are ready.

“What are we waiting for?! Let’s get going!” I went ahead with everybody else to the carriage. I don’t mind if my husband or big sis called me childish. But this gift also came from Feli herself.

Moments later, here we are arriving where the center of our festival begins. Amenam Town, the Navanian town of festivals.

Amenam Town. The Navanis Festival Capital. Since it is a town of festivals, you could just imagine any kind of business and houses built in this town for almost every kind of festival. Need something for Herbardam’s festival? Amenam’s got it. Want a simple crystal from Hivanis at a modest price? It has them. Needing fish feed for Manaqua? Come here in Amenam Town. It’s like the seller of raw products here at Navanis.

But today, a lot of stores are open. From homemade food restaurants to exquisite specialties, you name them all. Want a mix of Hivanian and Tramorian food? They have it.

Our first stop to try is a home-made restaurant cooking something sweet.

“Hey! Welcome to our appetizer cuisine!” A chef in a casual wear is baking something on brick toasters. It can easily be described by the white smoke it is emitting. “I see you guys as a family group eh? Here! Try this one!” He passed to us what look like crackers in a leafy food. But it strangely glows under the sun.

“Oohh! How did you make this glow sir?” Probably Akiko reacting to its glamour, what’s the point of it when we’re just gonna eat it?

“Interested eh? I had a dad who works in Herardam, giving me these edible leaves. I came from Lexan Tramore Province where I often cook steamed pastries that glow in the dark.”

“Lexan … tramore?” Lucas does think he can be smart at times. But I guess he’s still coping up. Good for him.

“Never heard of that place yet? Just find something or someone who knows about the Tramore Kingdom after today’s festival.” The casual cooker feeds himself with one of his meals. “Give my meal a shot! Best recommended if you are eating healthy.”

Little sis, the first one to taste it. After that one bite though, she’s going rabbit mode. “It tastes great! Akiko, try it yourself!” Sugar tooth sibling.

“Okay?” As our lady farmer grabbed a bite … her face just … stopped.

“Akiko? … Are you …” As I look at her, she just collapsed. As if she just paled out her voice was a bit raspy. Sweating and panting too.

“Thirs … ty.”

“OH DEAR! HANG IN THERE GUYS!” the shop owner just began digging his stash. Then he returns with a big glass of water mixed with something white. “Give this to her, quick!”

Without a word, I had to feed it to her throat. After a while, Akiko is regaining her senses. Her sweating also stops.

“Uhhh … what happened?” Our friend from the past few days seems like she had amnesia upon waking up before her stomach followed. “I’m a bit hungry.”

“Geesh! You three could have told she was allergic to steamed Bas leaves.” The shop owner returns to his cooking. “Better be careful next time!” Then he begins calling for more consumers to feed as we leave. The rest of us are fine after eating the biscuit. It is decent. Until we came to a trash can as Celena began vomiting and sweating.

“I’m not eating those things again.” It giggles me.

After that unpleasant feed to my sweetheart and our guest, we find ourselves near Bravery River and its restaurants. Amenam Town resides to the River of Navanis, which tells me most of the foods I smell are made by Manavian cuisine. A female maiden wearing blue clothing all over approaches us, cute looking but my wife is cuter.

“Welcome customers. I’m your maiden leading you to some of Manaqua’s cuisine exclusives you won’t find anywhere else!” She must be jolly so to speak. Not to mention cute. As we find ourselves a seat, I carry my child with ease. Though I’m not as good as Celena, I’m holding fine.

“What are you guys serving us? We want something for all five of us.” My sweetheart chooses our order. Normally, she has a sweet tooth flavor. But I guess she needs a big fill after puking out that biscuit.

“Right now, our latest family buffet is ‘Manaqua Crest’ filled with best quality veggies from Herbardam. Unique fishes from Manaqua, and some meat from Tramore and Navanis add flavors to it. The perfect meal for a family wanting to be healthy!” I guarantee a nod for all of us.

“Shall we call this a cheer?” I raise a glass of water.

“Cheers!” all of us enjoy this part. All of us share the meal evenly. But for our baby, he has to take the nutrients from the soup. Regardless, he enjoys it too. Normally, he should be nipping at my sweetheart now, but time gives us an evolution to make cuisines suited for newborn children.

Guess what? Its snack time! All three of us, not sure about Akiko though, enjoy crispy snacks. I’m a big eater of things sweet. Mien Rin is a big eater of fruitees and meat. Lucas is, yes indeed, our snack guy. Arriving on one shop, guess what …

“What flavors do you have for your Ember Fries?” a familiar girl comes asking at the counter. Behind her would be our familiar friend and a guy she love pounding with.

“OHHH HHIII THERE!” All three of us loved doing this to them while we are still young way back then.

“Looks like your friends came at the perfect time!” Looking at the restaurant they’re shopping with, they are buying the biggest bucket of fries for ten tivanians! Imagine like buying a large size Ember Fries times ten. That’s a lot!

“Celena! Mien Rin!” both of us give a ‘hi-five’ to the twin doctors. While Lucas, Akiko, and Zoxi deal a conversation among themselves, we have time on our own. After that, we find ourselves a large round table to play the Fries Game.

“You got quite a cute guy here. I think he’s handsome.” Akiko lend me an ear.

“Really?” I asked.

“Of course! The way he makes me laugh is priceless. Even if your husband is a bit stoic talk, try giving him a bit of light to it.” Could he be the guy she flattered a few days ago/ It better not be.

“As much as I like too, I love Lucas the way he is. But … I guess it doesn’t hurt.”

“Are you two ladies leaving your place in the game?” Zoxi is playing jokes with us again.

“NNOOO!” both of us pout and everyone else laugh.

“Well then, its snack party time!” Of course, Zoxi leads the ‘fries’ way. We shuffled the flavored fries a while ago. Which means every piece of Ember fries we get will be a different flavor. Our bucket has a mix of the following powder flavors: Cheese, Barbeque, Sour Cream Onion, White Cheddar, Pizza Flavor, Nacho Chip Beef, Fried Bacon Powder, Spicy Cheddar Pepper, Sweet Corn Powder, and Sweet Cream Cheese.

It was fun to enjoy the meal with everyone. A good way to enjoy with everybody! While all of us suffered from one of the ten flavors, we tried it all on my baby. After ten small bites, one bite for each flavor, I’m dumbstruck that he ate the all fine.

“Celena. Your baby just kept getting weirder.” Johanna spoke as if she is groggy.

“Like when he messed and licked my hair back then.” Did Akiko just …
Too late. Jireh is crying again. Now she meant it for real.

“Akiko! Watch it!” I protest to that. “Take it like a woman!”

As for the doctors, they find Akiko much Like Celena. At least for Avea, she has something to play jokes with. All the rest enjoyed is a bragging right of the childish women. If only Avea took part of their hassle. Better yet, all of the girls, the guys will be laughing before getting pummeled.

That is how the Festival was celebrated with a happy, and hilarious, moment.

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Prologue

Seedling Arc: Chapter 1 - Childbirth

Seedling Arc: Chapter 2 - Auvelis Village

Chapter 3: Goddess Birthmarks

Chapter 4: Zoximayru and the Docs

Chapter 5: The Luxentum Express

Chapter 6: The Road Festival

Chapter 7: Hivanis Kingdom

Chapter 8: Steaming Gem Stones

Chapter 9: Hidden Anima 1:

Chapter 10: Errands.

Chapter 11: Keema and Imtrimi Wesnu

Chapter 12: Gateway to the soul

Chapter 13: Family Moments

Chapter 14: Akiko Yoru

Chapter 15: Farming Life

Chapter 16: Flavors of Vitandes

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