Thoughts up to this point since I finally found a reason to just stop reading: At first, I wasn't sure how well-developed Milly and Daphne's relationship was becoming from this scene until I thought about it: they love and cherish each other and are very close, but Daphne PERHAPS doesn't entirely respect Milly's job (OR is slightly jealous of it...I can't quite tell yet; there seems to be some extremely low level of resentment or...something negative I can't quite put a finger on). Milly feels like the younger sister in that she seems somewhat cowed by Daphne (Daphne lets her real self through when she speaks; Milly seems to force laughs or come at her ideas a bit sideways). So yes...I may be WAY OFF in any of my thoughts, but this section is doing a better job of establishing their relationship than I thought at first. It's all very subtle and insidious.
Not sure what to think of the Misdreavus scene on the phone and the subsequent discussion about Misdreavus and Snubull. I actually hadn't originally pictured Milly as someone who even OWNED a pokemon, so there's one interpretation of mine that was way off.
Something threw me here about the commas. There should be commas around "at the very least". They aren't mandatory commas, but they really make that read a little better in my opinion. And there avtually shouldn't be a comma before "but" since there is no subsequent subject. It's just a compound predicate which doesn't require a comma.These would be the kids whose parents insist that their children at the very least develop a few math skills and basic reading comprehension, but don’t value education enough to make them go anywhere beyond that.
Other notes from along the way: I'm assuming Roy is going to be the dopey comic-relief of this group, but I also don't FULLY trust Milly as a narrator, so it's possible he's a better/more reliable character than she is letting herself believe.
"McMiltank's" was a bigger groaner than most of Milly's unused headlines from the prologue. But in a fun way.
I like the Juniper-Hvam study reference. Lovely realistic world-building.
I guess kind of like you with "alright" (but I still hate it! ), I'm not a big stickler for "You shouldn't start sentences with a conjunction!" There are some instances where I think it sounds perfectly fine and more dramatic to do so. I'm not sure if this is one of those, though. My brain really wants "...end of the education spectrum, but among low-paying..." to flow into one line. Conversely, I could TOTALLY see there being a full stop after "completed grade school" and starting the next sentence with the following "And" because I already get a sense of a longer pause there. Maybe just the way my brain read the paragraph, though.Grade-school graduation as a standard is not as silly as it sounds. Oh, sure, most well-paying jobs are still situated at the higher end of the education spectrum. But among low-paying jobs, more consideration is given to applicants that at the very least completed grade school, and even more to those who made it all the way through junior high without bugging out to catch ‘em all.
This is why I like Milly as a narrator. She really is unreliable and kind of a jerk. She tries to rationalize Daphne as somehow more than shallow, but it's SHE who can't see anything of note from Roy other than his physique and physical appearance. Jealousy? I get a feeling of it.To be perfectly honest, I don’t know what she sees in him. …Alright, that’s a lie. I at least know part of what she sees in him—such as the lightning-fast metabolism, the noticeably-in-use gym membership, the silky hair not entirely ruined by the gobs of hair gel he puts into it, and the prominent hazel eyes. But despite Daphne’s eye for… aesthetics, I know deep down that she’s not shallow enough to date Roy solely because of that. I’m just not sure what, if anything, of value lies beyond.
All the pokemon talk to this point has been quite entertaining. The thought that Bellsprout need to be watered is interesting and creative (you'd think that as long as you let them out of their ball regularly, they'd have enough sense to get their own water, but perhaps they are not spectacularly intelligent pokemon). The whole gender discussion of Misdreavus was very astute (I, like Roy, am always amazed to discover that they can be male). The Snubull is already pretty adorable. I've had fun reading about them. I am still curious, to this point, how "capable" pokemon are in this iteration. Are they communicative? Do they poke-speak? Are they self-aware (The Snubull doesn't seem to be, but Misdreavus certainly does, so perhaps there are levels of intelligence and thought processes based on species)?“I didn’t kill anything!” I retorted. I’d like to say that my anger wasn’t guilt-based, but that would be telling a lie—and telling a lie would make me feel guiltier (and therefore angrier). “It just got a little…”—I searched around for the right word—“wilted. Mom made me give him to a shelter and that was that.”
-GreyHoundoom was every bit as fun/lame as McMiltank's. I love that stuff.
Overall, this was pretty fun. Like I said, right now, I'm getting the biggest kick out of Milly's vain, judgmental narration. I look forward to see her proven wrong early and often.
I'm sure I'd have more to say if it wasn't 730am and I started this an hour ago. I think I'm going to go back to bed. But I look forward to the next installment, of course!