Hey just want to say great start i'm liking this a lot, just as much as walt and mimi's journey.
I did find a few mistakes, the one above is clearly incorrect grammer and should be changedAshley going along and ran into a group of Venonat
The first sentence here is present tense, the second is past tense, you really need to be consistant with these thingsShe releases the Pokeball, and it lands on the Venonat. Venonat was inside the ball, and one, two, three flashes went off.
All in all well done!