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    Bumping this awesome RP on behalf of Billy here - join his RP guys!

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    I will before Saturday. Sixth Grade is one of the busiest years.

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    Checked your sign up before you notified me because I'm an omniprescent being.

    The sign up looks good enough, but I'd like you to change one little thing. Technically, the denizens of Equestria don't yet know that they are in danger, or that humans even exist (as the few humans that have been there so far have kept a low profile). So ABB (my abbreviation of your character's name ) wouldn't yet know about that. It's understandable that you could be confused, since I don't think I directly mentioned that in the plot. You're Accepted, but I'd like you to edit that part of your history.

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    Okay. I see that now. I have a bro in 8th Grade. I will fix it now. Thanks for accepting me.

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    Chili's best friend here! Ya he got banned for a week. He was pretty pissed today.

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    Name: Cynder
    Age: 16
    Gender: Female
    Race: Zebra
    Skills: Cynder, as being an Zebra, is very wise and uses her mind a lot. Her voice is her most potent weapon, as she can use it to make foes see her reasoning.

    Personality: Cynder is short, quick, and to-the-point. She likes getting things done as quickly as possible, and doesn’t care about quality. This leads to problems that can be solves with one word…”OBJECTION!”. As she used to be a lawyer, she knows the ways of the world and has delt with the more difficult cases. She has done 20 cases during her time, and being so young, that’s kind of impressive. She relies on “Perfection” and only cares about being “perfect”. When being a defense attorney, she always got the ‘not guilty’ verdict, and vice versa when prosecour. She always carries a whip around and lashes her way through the more difficult situation. When she hears something she dosent like, the whip will speak for itself. She likes going solo and dislikes villans of all sort. It’s hard getting her as a friend…she will question you and make sure you’re a friend, not a foe. She's short tempered and doesn't like to be annoyed.

    Appearance: Cynder has an unusual mane style for her time- the right side goes up, the left side goes down. It’s neat and to-the-point, not messy. It alternates white and black. She is tall for her age, a bit above what the average pony height should be. Her “body” is light grey. Her tail goes down but then curves up, and is once again neat. Her eyes are light blue. She weighs lighter than usual and has a weak build. Black stripes adjourn her face and body. Her 'Destiny Emblem' is her necklace. It 's silver with a ying-yang in the center. It glows and Psyche Locks appear when people are telling lies. She dosen't have it yet. She has a belt where she puts her whip.

    Cutie Mark: A mallet (To show her talent in being a Lawyer/Defense Attorny/Prosecetor, or just defending her friend. Or getting the right verdict… or cross-examination. Or maybe its all of those things! It's black and white and made with lines, no fill color.]

    History: Cynder was born in Canterlot under two Zebra immigrants. After seeing she had little to no stripes, they disposed of her. A unicorn called Starshine found Cynder and took care of her.
    About 10 years later, Starshine died. Cynder grew a hatred for evil, and death. She decided she would stop at nothing to become a lawyer or defense attorney, and began her studies. She earned her cutie mark in the process after she defended her friend who was accused of stealing the class pet. Cynder knew right then it was her destiny to become a lawyer. She soon dropped out of school at the age of 14 and became a lawyer. It was odd seeing someone as young as that be a lawyer, but she was extreamly good and perfect. She never lost a case at what she was doing, and her skills put her to the advantage even more. However, once she was accused of a case…and she was getting defended…this was too much for her to bear. She quit being a lawyer, and stayed in Ponyville. The natives of Ponyville think it's quite odd a Zebra is living in Ponyville. Now-a-days she helps out with Sweet Apple Acres. [Which is quite odd being a zebra]

    Misc Info: Cynder resides in Ponyville.


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    Just took Cynder, changed her to a Zebra and tweaked some things. Don't know if you accept past sign-ups for last game.
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    Several people used previous sign ups, so that's fine. In fact, the Magatama necklace fits a zebra a lot better than a Earth Pony. I just have two problems:

    1. The cutie mark should look more like Zecora's. It doesn't need to be EXACTLY like hers, but it should at least be monochrome, to match a zebra's color scheme.

    2. Zebras aren't ponies. NO pony could possibly have a child who's a zebra, let alone two Pegasi. Both of Cynder's parents need to be zebras. For that matter, zebras come from a far away place, so Cynder's parents would need to be immigrants at the very least, or she could have came to Equestria by herself.

    Other than that it's good, so I shall put this as Pending until changes are made.

    EDIT: I noticed some other problems as well, though they are more minor:
    1. Her fur and mane colors need to be monochrome (white, grey, and black).
    2. You say the necklace IS her Destiny Emblem. That'll work of course; if she doesn't have the necklace yet. I'm sure you know that she wouldn't have her Destiny Emblem yet, but I'm just making sure.
    3. How does she use/carry her whip? Her using her mouth to hold it is an acceptable answer, but you cannot say she can just make the whip appear out of hammer space when she needs it; after all she isn't Pinkie Pie. She'll need some way to carry it.
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    Fixed, I hope.
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    You fixed everything I had a problem with, excellent work. You are now Accepted!


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    Le wild bump appears, because this Rp deserves it! All are welcome, brony or not, but preferable bronies and pegasisters. We welcome all idea, and all will find peace within our little group
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    Name: Dr. Dawn Starshine (She insists on being called Dr. Starshine)
    Age: 33
    Gender: Female
    Race: Unicorn
    Magic(If a magic user): Restoration and Alteration
    Skills: A scientist specializing in magic related sciences, Dr. Starshine is the go-to pony for anything related to magic. Although she's uses Restoration and Alteration magic for the most part, she has extensive knowledge of all forms of magic in Equestria (Not Spirit, Dimensional, or Conjuration obviously, since they're pretty much exclusive to Sapiera at the moment). She also has a disturbingly high amount of knowledge of the anatomies of all the major races of Equestria and some medical knowledge, so she can be a makeshift doctor, or even surgeon, of nessesary.

    Personality: Although she appears cold and apathetic to others, Dr. Dawn Starshine truely does have a caring heart somewhere deep inside her. After some mistakes she's made and lives she's seen pass on, over time the doctor has grown detached to others, as she fears the possibility of being hurt by losing someone she cares for. Despite her trying to hide her caring attitude, she will often find herself helping others who need help in one way or another, such as healing those who may be sick or wounded, often making the excuse that it's "a part of the job".

    Almost seeming socialpathic, generally the only thing that proves that she does actually feel emotions is her fascination with magic, science, and the possibility of discovery. Her drive to learn and study can sometimes cause her to do things that others would consider "unethical"; which doesn't really bother her (on the outside at least). She also has extreme determination and an iron will, so the likelyhood of her giving up on something she has set her sights on is next to nothing.

    Appearence: Dr. Starshine stands at a pretty high height for a mare, being close to the size of a larger stallion. Her weight and and girth, however, are more like a normal mare's. Her fur is kind of a blue-green color, though slightly darker. Both her mane and tail are long and flowing, both being two shades of purple. Most of her hair is a blue-purple color, with stripes of violet running through it. Her eyes are a darker yellow color, with a hint of brown coloring. Although she normally doesn't need them, she has black framed reading glasses that are pointed on the end, as she suffers from nearsightedness. For attire, Dr. Starshine wears a dull blue lab coat and wears a watch on her front left hoof. Her Destiny Emblem has an odd jewel on the center of it that is purple and dark blue, that appears to have a swirling effect to it, like a whirlpool.

    (I made a picture of her with an OC pony creator.)

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    Cutie Mark: A rolled up scroll with a white aura surrounding it.

    History: Dawn Starshine was born in Canterlot, her father being a Pegasus royal guard, and her mother being a Unicorn noblewoman (or rather noblemare) whom had fallen in love with Dawn's father at a gala held at the Canterlot Castle. From an early age, her father taught Dawn the importance of dicipline, while her mother taught her how to be proper and ladylike. Despite living a rather comfortable life, Dawn was still unsatisfied. It wasn't until she first learned to use her magic and in a "experiment" that led to accidently breaking an expensive vase that was a family heirloom for her mother, a terrified babysitter, and a confused neighbor that confused the loud shreiking next door to be someone being murdered, Dawn earned her cutie mark and realized that she was meant to lead a life dedicated to magic.

    After coaxing her mother into letting her do so, Dawn left private tutoring to be taught at Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns. She was a fast learner, and became one of the top students in the school in the matter of a few years. Despite being a natural at using magic, Dawn was never asked by Celestia to be her personal pupil, which upsets her to this day (especially when a Unicorn named Twilight Sparkle who was about half her age ended up becoming her pupil instead; to this day Dawn is still somewhat spiteful towards her for that fact).

    At the tender age of 16, she graduated top of her class. Eager to put her newfound skills to work, Dawn ended up taking some odd jobs that involved magic, including some that were in somewhat of a moral grey area (the worst probably being the father who asked her to mutate his unborn child so that she'd be part dragon; to this day she questions that stallion's sanity, although she personally thought the end result was rather interesting). At one point, she even became a nurse at a hospital, though not for too long (she doesn't like to talk about her years as a nurse much). Still craving knowledge, she returned to school and earned a Doctorate and later a PH.D in Magic Sciences (yes, that's a thing in Equestria, because I said so), thus why she likes to be referred to as Dr. Starshine.

    Currently Dr. Starshine works as a scholar at the Canterlot Archives in Canterlot Castle, and although she likes the fact that she has plently of spell books at her disposal, she wishes she would get the chance to do field work more often.

    Misc. Info: She carries her glasses in a pocket in her coat when not in use, and when she uses telekinesis with her magic her horn and the object glow a light blue color.
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    Name: Halt Drakeson

    Age: 20

    Gender: Male

    Race: Human

    Magic(If a magic user): Minor Alteration and limited Guardian. Halt learned very limited magic from his mother, and as a result, he can only do minor changes to his body such as small fins or wings. As a Royal Knight, he learned a few Guardian spells, mostly different barriers to overlay on his shield for added protection against different spells.

    Skills: Halt is an excellent swordsman, being best at two-handed sword fighting. He is also able to channel Alteration magic in his weapons, changing their length to fit the situation. He is very sturdy and resilent, trained at a young age to be able to take punishment, wether he liked it or not. He is also very powerful, able to break bones with his fists. He also knows how to box and fight from a mounted position.

    Personality: Halt is extremely stalwert, never flinching in the face of danger or even a threat to his own life. He is very protective of those he holds close, and is willing to jump in front of a blade for them. Despite this, he is very closed in, never sharing his thoughts on a matter, nor revealing facts about his scars. His mind is sharp as a mage's, but he never uses it, in fear that he might become one and lose the respect he built as a knight. Like all knights, he is chivlious, though he still is contianed and will merely offer his assitence to a lady rather than forcing it on her. He has great respect for the old kings and queens of the Caen order, and has resentment towards Reneis for destroying it. He isn't a member of the resistence because of his position of power, but he still respects them, and often sends reports of Kingdom troops' movement and positions to Morieh. Before he became so contained in himself, he was a very fun person to be around, cracking jokes even in the darkest of situations. He has a close connection with his steed, Horace, named after Halt's instructor in the Knight Acadamy.

    Appearence: Halt is a tall man, reaching 6'2" and around 169 pounds. He is very musculer, though he doesn't flaut it, it still shows under his clothes. His skin is taned from constant training in the sun and his face is heavily scared. He has three scars along his right side of the jaw, and one large one streching across his forehead. His eyes are a startling blue, and his expression is often stern and looking down. He is missing his right ear, replaced by a bad bite wounds where his father's dog bit his ear clean off. He is deaf in that ear, though he doesn't try to show it. His black hair is kept short under his helmet, as if it got too long, he wouldn't be able to see.

    Halt's armor is custom made, the only nice thing his father every did to him beyond creating him in the frist place. The helmet is streamlined, fitting perfectly over his head. The visor portion swings up and down to allow for more vison if nesscery. The visor itself is convexe, having a portion of it stick out along a line from the top of his head to the mouth. It forms a crest about one foot long jutting out above his head, and the enitre portion that sticks out is sharp as a sword. A single slit exsists for him to see out of, leaving his eyes vunerable. The rest of his armor is custom fit for his body, made of pure steel. It's over 100 pounds of heavy metal weighing on his body, so he can't run fast nor move with that much agility. It's plate armor, and can deflect most sword attacks from an angle and will be able to take most hits. On the right breast of the armor, the insignia for the Kingdom is stamped on.

    His weapons are a massive two handed claymore and a shorter hand-a-half sword mostly used for mounted combat. The claymore is six feet long, the blade being four feet long on its own. The blade of the claymore has the property of gaining a shaphiere blue hue when drawn. The cross guard is forked at 45 degree angles, and the hilt is two feet and leather strapped. It's sheathed acorss Halt's back, the hilt towards his right shoulder. The calvery sword hangs on his left hip. The pummel of the hilt is shaped in the likeness of a hourses head, and the hilt is leather bound. The cross guard does not exsist, but the point where it should be has two horse heads touching nose to nose over the blade. The blade is nothing special, about a foot and a quarter long. Halt's shield is starnderd issue for the Royal Knights, a steel plated tower shield. Halt keeps his across his back when not is use, but can quickly pull it out when the need presents itself. Halt's shield is adorned with a blue phoenix burning in a black flame. His Destiny Emblem has a silver gem, with a single slit of shaphiere blue.

    Cutie Mark: What your cutie mark is. No real limit, but try to be descriptive. Take note that if you're young, you may not have your cutie mark yet. Only put this in if your character is an Earth Pony, Pegasus, Unicorn, Alicorn, or Zebra.

    History: Halt was born to a fairly well kept family. His mother was an Alteration mage, and his father was a blacksmith, but prefered to call himself a war smith. He made weapons and armor for the army and other forces, and took his son to see the knights when he went to outfit them. He was an umpleasent man, often gipping knights on bad armor and weapons for increased price, and merely blamed his son for these events. Halt's mother wasn't home much, so his father was allowed to do what he wanted to little Halt. When Halt was three, his father began the beatings, often resulting in Halt blacking out. Halt carried more than a dozen scars on his body because of these happenings, and he wore them with shame. At the age of five, Halt's parents seperated, and Hat began to live a month at his father's, a month of beatings, and a month at him mother's, a month of strict learning. Halt learned that life is fair only to those who want it to be fair, and he wanted some kind of sign that he dervered fairness. His mother was killed when Reneis took over, and Halt was forced to live with his ever-increasingly vicious father. At the age of seven, his father bought a guard dog for the smelter and forge, but it attacked Halt instead. Halt fought it off, even cutting it's shoulder open, but it managed to bite off and take Halt's right ear.

    This was the final straw for Halt. He took some money and left his father to live on the streets, and began to shape his life from there. At nine, Halt learned of the Acadamy, and how it was accepting new canadents for the following year. Halt jumped at the chance, and managed to earn the money needed to appliey. He got in, and began his life as a squire. He had read tales of brave knights with his mother, and he loved every moment of the training, to become one of those famous knights. He was one of the top students, and even made a few friends. His biggest surprise, though, was at age tweleve when the Academy awarded him for his good marks and provided him a foal for him to raise as his personal war horse. Halt was estatic, and became one of the biggest names in the Academy in terms of studies, horsemenship, and swordsmanship. He was one of five choosen to become the King's personal hand picked division of Royal Knights, a goal Halt has been striving for all his life.

    As a Royal Knight, he was tasked with escorting the King, and this lead him into several battles against the Resistence. He learned more about them, but instead of his over knights, he didn't imeddiatly diss them as mere rabble. He saw their coordinated attacks, and felt that they had a source of an hierrachy and command. He also began to see what the other knights didn't see, or didn't want to see, and that was what the King really was-a murderous mad man. Halt began to do some digging in the archives, and found several facts about the king, includding his dark mind washing plans and undead armies. He also learned about the hostile take over that his father hide from him, and this nearly drove Halt to defect. However, because of his high postion, defecting would attract too much attention. Instead, Halt worked from the inside as a spy, sending infromation to the Resistence about the King's troops movement, but couldn't get too much about where the King goes. He did this for two years, and was recently sent a letter about Morieh and his Destiny Heros. Halt gave the King a letter of absence, and rode off to the Resistence hide out.

    Misc Info: Halt is regarded as a high ranked memebr of the Kingdom, and is only known as a spy by those inside the resistence
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    I redid Halt, maing him a Kingdom knight
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    I really don't want to do this, but school's busier than I expected so I'm dropping my reserve
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    Halt is Re-Accepted. One thing though; you forgot to describe what his Destiny Emblem looked like.

    Since Norns has given up the reserve, the RP will probably start tomorrow or the day after that. Remember anyone who may still want to join, sign ups are still open throughout Chapter 1.


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    Alright, thanks. I can't believe i missed that, i even had an interesting design too...
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    Name: Soaring Melody
    Age: 17
    Gender: Female
    Race: Pegasus
    Skills: Plays a variety of instruments; specializes in the cello. Has perfect pitch. Average athletic abilities. Wing Power: 5.4.

    Personality: Melody (her preferred shortening of her name) is hardworking and loves to help others, especially when they have questions about music. She is accepting of others' opinions, but once she decides what she thinks there's not much that can sway her! She is a little shy, and may even seem aloof at first; something which she is trying to change. She is optimistic and loves a good laugh. Music is her passion. Melody is a musician first and a pegasus second--so much so that she was one of the last to arrive to fly water up to Cloudsdale last year!

    Appearance: Taller than average. Body is yellow with a smidge of orange mixed in. Mane and tail are dual-colored purple and light blue, and are long and wavy. Melody often needs to blow her bangs aside to see what she's doing.
    Destiny Emblem has an eighth note pattern with an oval opal as the head.

    Cutie mark: A purple bass clef, since Melody's first instrument was the cello.

    History: As a filly, Soaring Melody went to Flight School like anypony in Cloudsdale. She did decent, but couldn't show the enthusiasm that everypony else had. Flying just wasn't what Melody was interested in, which worried her, since isn't it required for a pegasus to enjoy flying?
    Everything changed with a class field trip to Canterlot when Soaring Melody was 8. She and her peers attended a concert, and the main musician was none other than Octavia! As she heard the music, the beautiful sounds Octavia could coax from her instrument, Melody knew deep within her that this is what she wanted to do more than anything else in the world. Her cutie mark appeared then and there.
    With her parents' blessing, Soaring Melody soon moved in with her aunt in Canterlot. She was at first annoyed that she couldn't take lessons from Octavia, but after a bit of searching around she found a fantastic teacher and quickly became proficient in the cello. She branched out to piano, clarinet, french horn, to name a few, hopping all around Canterlot for lessons.
    One day, Melody's cello teacher told her that she could no longer instruct her. When Melody asked, "Why?!" she received the amused reply, "You've gotten better than I am! You know, with your passion for music, you would make a great teacher yourself!"
    Now graduated from student to teacher, Melody moved to Ponyville and founded a music store. Currently, she sells all kinds of instruments and accessories. She gives lessons for free, and as such has gained a large clientele.

    ((I was wondering about ages--I tried to put them in human years, but is there a different pony standard?))

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    I can't figure out how to find the file for my OC pony.

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    @Thecatteam - Personality and Appearence just barely meet critera but that doesn't matter too much. You are Accepted! As for your question: yes, the age is supposed to be as human years. It's unknown whether or not ponies in Equestria actually age at the same rate as humans, but for the purposes of this RP, it shall be assumed that they do.

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    The RP is ready to go.

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    Bumping in case anyone else may stumble upon this. Sign ups ARE still open, for anyone who is interested.


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    Default Digitail the clever Pegasus

    Name: Digitail.
    Age: 16
    Gender: Male
    Race: Pegasus
    Magic: The magic Digitail uses the light form of magic.
    Skills: Digitail can organise anything in a short period of time. He likes everything neat, so picked up this skill with ease.

    Personality: Digitail is a smart pony. He loves to read novels, to write novels and is in to all the latest technology, even if there is not very much of it. Digitail is a witty, clever pony who is always ready to help in bad situations. He's always, under pressure or not, he takes pressure shockingly well. Digitail is also a kind pony, he'll think of the kindest things to say and the best gifts he can get for his friends and usually hates being mean or angry towards people. Digitail is also a rather brave pony, too. Digitail takes to leadership well and can be a strong leader in tough situations.

    Appearance: Digitail has a dark grey shade of fur, covering all of his body, excluding his mane and tail. His tail and main seem to be some sort of magical, small cubes flying around where hair should be, these dark red pixels are a mystery, but Digitail just says it's magic that was born with him.

    Cutie Mark: Digitail's cutie mark looks like the original Game boy It is a red device, with rounded corners, near the top there is a black screen, covering most of the shape Towards the bottom of it is a keypad, a up, down, left and right button. Next to this are two circles with an "A" and a "B" marked on them, both of these buttons are a dark grey. The whole shape though is a vibrant brick red.

    History: Digitail was born in Cloudsdale, his mother and father were both very happy to see him born. He learned to speak and walk with great speed, and both his rather intelligent father and his confident, brave mother were overjoyed to see their son's progress. The family lived a happy life and Digitail grew up to be a very smart pony, thanks to his father's teaching outside of his school and automatically, from birth had picked up his mother's bravery and leadership. Even though Digitail didn't really fit in with a lot of the ponies in his school he was still always happy with his life. Digitail trained magic and flying with his father, discovering new things about himself along the way, so Digitail is very skilled at using magic and flying. When Digitail turned 16 he wanted to move to a college, and agreed with his parents that he would move to Ponyville to go to the college, so, he moved in Ponyville and is studying hardly there.

    Misc Info: I know some of the parts of my character are a little unreal or unnatural forth My Little Pony universe, but I hope it will be okay, thanks.
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    Good to see a sign up, but I see a ton of problems.

    Quote Originally Posted by Exspearos View Post
    Magic: The magic Digitail uses the light form of magic.
    1. You're a Pegasus. You don't have magic; at least not yet. *hint hint*

    Personality: Digitail is a smart pony. He loves to read novels, to write novels and is in to all the latest technology, even if there is not very much of it. Digitail is a witty, clever pony who is always ready to help in bad situations. He's always, under pressure or not, he takes pressure shockingly well. Digitail is also a kind pony, he'll think of the kindest things to say and the best gifts he can get for his friends and usually hates being mean or angry towards people. Digitail is also a rather brave pony, too. Digitail takes to leadership well and can be a strong leader in tough situations.
    2. No offense, but you character seems like a Mary Sue (or rather Gary Stu, since he's a guy). I mean, your character is smart, clever, friendly, kind, brave, and a natural leader, but apparently has not a single negative trait. Your character can't be perfect; no one is perfect. Describe at least a few negative traits of his. Maybe he's overly neat, to the point of being obsessive compusive about it? Or maybe he's shy when it comes to talking to ponies he's never met before?

    Appearance: Digitail has a dark grey shade of fur, covering all of his body, excluding his mane and tail. His tail and main seem to be some sort of magical, small cubes flying around where hair should be, these dark red pixels are a mystery, but Digitail just says it's magic that was born with him.
    3. Appearance is waaaay too short. And the floating pixel things gotta go. That wouldn't even make sense for a Unicorn to have, let alone a Pegasus.

    Cutie Mark: Digitail's cutie mark looks like the original Game boy It is a red device, with rounded corners, near the top there is a black screen, covering most of the shape Towards the bottom of it is a keypad, a up, down, left and right button. Next to this are two circles with an "A" and a "B" marked on them, both of these buttons are a dark grey. The whole shape though is a vibrant brick red.
    4. Game Boys don't exist in Equestria. Besides, from what I have seen the technology of Equestria is probably the equvilant to technology in the 1920's/1930's on Earth, so even if it WOULD exist in Equestria, then it hasn't been invented yet.

    History: Digitail was born in Cloudsdale, his mother and father were both very happy to see him born. He learned to speak and walk with great speed, and both his rather intelligent father and his confident, brave mother were overjoyed to see their son's progress. The family lived a happy life and Digitail grew up to be a very smart pony, thanks to his father's teaching outside of his school and automatically, from birth had picked up his mother's bravery and leadership. Even though Digitail didn't really fit in with a lot of the ponies in his school he was still always happy with his life. Digitail trained magic and flying with his father, discovering new things about himself along the way, so Digitail is very skilled at using magic and flying. When Digitail turned 16 he wanted to move to a college, and agreed with his parents that he would move to Ponyville to go to the college, so, he moved in Ponyville and is studying hardly there.
    5. Some of this just feels like filler. And some of the sentences just feel akward, such as "his mother and father were both very happy to see him born." But I think the only real problem with this is that he apparently went to college in Ponyville. First, I doubt there's a college in Ponyville. Second, why would he specifically want to go to Ponyville's college? Oh, and as previously stated a Pegasus can't use magic.

    Sorry, but it's not going to be ok. I'm going to have to Reject Digitail. The whole basis of his character is based on an idea that really makes no sense for a Pegasus. You are very much welcomed to try again, and reuse any ideas that I didn't shoot down, but Digitail just isn't going to work. My apologies.


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