From the new WoJ Review Game! I just finished reading this, and enjoyed it much more than I thought that I would. I was thinking that it would be just another PMD story, which is not really my interest, but I really like the concept of this. It seems like a cool concept to think that whenever a person transforms into a Pokemon, the inverse also occurs. Anyway, I'll split the rest into a few categories...
Plot: Like I said, you have a really neat idea with the... Human Mystery Dungeon. I hope that you will implement this fuller as you go. Maybe have Amy relate a forest/route/desert to a dungeon? I also like how you have added the BW characters. I never would have thought of taking that battle with N in Accumula and escalating it with the rivals of BW and your own group. I was wondering how you were going to pull the Vulpix thing, since she once spoke to these Pokemon, and that was handled well, as was N seeing her communicate similar to how he does. N's journey was given a good explanation, but I want to see how the gym leaders deal with being asked for the drives. Speaking of which, I'm really excited to see if Amy does gym battles, but at the moment I can't see her doing that.
Characters: Crest might be one of my favorites so far. it was cool to hear what the starters have to say. Ghetsis is really a well spoken evil mastermind, and I like how you have incorporated him and Looker already having met. N has a good adaption, and I like how you have given him and Amy similar skills. I'd love to see it when he confesses to being part of Team Plasma, how Luke and Amy react. Luke was given a good personality for how it contrasts with how Amy acts. The biggest thing that I don't really understand is the idea of dropping out. How old is he? I would envision a world in Pokemon that you once you complete trainer school (which ends around the time a child is 10), you are able to start your journey. Dropping out just makes it sound like there is a bunch of delinquents running around with powerful monsters. Just my view, though.
Spelling/Grammar: I don't have much to say here. Most of it is good. However, I don't really care for the use of the word "anyways". Anyway is the right word and I'm not sure if there is even a need for the s. In chapter 2, this line is used when Luke's mom is helping Amy pack...
I think that I would say, instead of "too", replace it with "to have/keep/etc.". To me that sounds better.
"It's a Bag. You can keep your clothes in it. And anything else you need too, of course."
Descriptions: I love how you described Amy at the beginning. It was a good adaption of a Vulpix to a person. You did best elaborating on people, but I still enjoyed seeing technology through Amy's eyes and how crazy everything was. I don't have much else to say about this one, I guess.
Enjoyment: I liked this a lot more than I thought that I would! It was really a good story and I hope that you will get back to this soon, as I see that you haven't added to this in a while. Hey, add me to the PM list should you start this back any time soon!
I've gotten into IV Breeding. I'll breed any Pokemon that can, just ask and I'll see what I can do!