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    Exclamation Missingno the infection

    Prolog:

    In a land known as the Rainbow Region...it is peaceful and the pokemon there are mysteriously all shiny. Not much is known as to why they’re all shiny though it is believed to be connected to a strange fruit that grows only one secret place. It is said that it used to grow all over the region but when humans got ahold of it for a impure reason, it would cause the tree to disappear. As such, only one remains but for pokemon, if they eat it, it will cause them and their generations to come to be Shiny. As for what it can do to humans, nobody knows for sure.

    As such, unlike other regions, The Rainbow Region is the only place in the entire world where you’re sure to get a shiny starter. As trainers receive their first pokemon as they do in all other regions...a mysterious threat looms on the horizon...

    In the nearby region known as Twilight Region, it is said that the Reshiram that lives in the light realm and the Zekrom that lives in the darkness realm clashed two millenniums ago. This made the 2 realms merge with the surrounding areas and merge together in the center of the region. This created a black and White mixed sky in the center…like a permanent mix of dark and white clouds that would never go away. The Darkness from that point on spread northward while the light spread southward. This left half of the Region into total darkness while the other half was total light all the time.

    A Mew, a pink cat-like pokemon with blue eyes and a long pink tail, lived in the epicenter of the battle was stunned to see what was being done in the Regions by the two polar opposite black and white dragons. She wanted to two to stop what they we’re doing and when Zekrom, the black dragon, used Bolt Strike sending a huge black lightning bolt that was darkness infused and Reshiram, the majestic white dragon, used Blue Flame, actuality coming out white due to being Light infused, Mew knew this would cause more devastation to the Region.

    As the two powerful attacks collided, Mew bravely fired an aura sphere at the attacks from Zekrom and Reshiram. It absorbed both attacks within and created the Twilight Orb. Mew caught it being asked what the big idea of ruining their fight was. Mew then looked at them and begged the two to stop fighting and once the two realized what they have done to the region, they retreated to their respective realms as what was done could not be repaired.

    However...little did they know they all created something more dangerous...a mysterious creature that lives inside the twilight orb that knows nether light nor darkness. It has no emotion, is very power hungry and is poised to destroy humanity. The mysterious infection...missingno.
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    Chapter 1:
    The Nightmare Forthcomes


    A 16 year old Girl named Liz Azzimagica sleeps in her bed as she anticipates tomorrow. O yes, tomorrow...when she gets her first pokemon...now Liz is a strange girl because she has wings, angel wings to be exact and she loves wearing all white with a red jacket and a silver necklace with a sapphire blue pendant. She is also light skinned, has brown eyes, brown hair, is a very faithful friend and an upbeat person. The kind of person anyone would hope to know as a friend...the angelic girl lives up to her name. And of course, as any trainer, she is excited in not knowing who to choose because this region has starters from all over the planet. The five starters of Kanto, the three of Johto, Hoenn, Sinnoh and even Unova...you name it.

    Even in all this happiness however, a darkness looms in her dreams...
    She has had a reoccurring nightmare for months and tonight is no acceptation. In the dream, she is cornered by pokemon of all kinds that have no emotion to their face...a blankness in their eyes...and a shapeless something overhead that keeps changing forms...the scariest is what appears to be a bone Aerodactyl...and just as they’re about to attack her...
    BEEP, BEEP, BEEP...her alarm goes off followed by "Drop Everything now, meet me in the pouring Rain, kiss me on the sidewalk, take away the pain..." her favorite song by, Sparks Fly-Taylor Swift, plays and she walks up in a shock.

    Liz looks around the room in a panic and sighs in a bit of relief.

    "It was only that dream again..." she said looking about the room then at the clock. "Whoa, how long did I sleep?! has my alarm really been going for 15 minutes?!"

    With that she gets dressed, gets her packed bag, grabs a chocolate chip bar on the way out and heads to the lab.

    Liz thinks to herself ok...Seline said she wanted Eevee...Eevee was on my top five list along with Snivy, Piplup, Pikachu and Charmander...they are all so cute...well...they are all different types to...normal, grass, water, electric and fire...thing is...Pikachu is the only one that evolves on a total voluntary basis...well, guess I'll base it on whoever catches my attention the most but ether way I want a Pikachu eventually she though with a smile.

    As she thought about what she truly wanted, she made it to the lab where her two friends, Seline and Dread, we're waiting for her. Seline was the daughter of a scientist and 16 as well. She had long black hair, blue eyes, fair skinned, wore a long white robe with a white shirt and pants. Dread was a rather casual guy himself but could be a real hot head when he wanted to be, he was also 16. He had Blue eyes as well, fair skin, red shirt, blue pants and tennis shoes.

    Seline looked over at Liz, "Slept in again?"

    Liz looked at her, "Only by 15 minutes...had that nightmare again..."

    "Again...? Wow...that's how many months...? You sure you don't have a Darkrai in the house?" Seline asked with a bit of sarcasm in her voice.

    "It's been three months and yes, I haven’t seen a Darkrai around my house" Liz said looking at her a bit upset.

    Seline laughed a bit and said, "Well if you’re sure..." she said with a smile and a littlt giggle, "Anyway...some trainers came earlier and got Snivy, Piplup and a Tepig...and you know they only allow one kind of each starter per trainer per day"

    "Are you serious? hmm...that leaves me with---" As Liz was about to state her choices, Dread cut in by saying Charmander is gonna be his choice.

    Liz actuality smiled a little knowing Pikachu was still up for grabs. "In that case, guess Pikachu is gonna be my choice..."

    With that, the doors open, a young professor, named Jewel, greeted them as they walked in. There are 14 balls on the table, each labeled by type and each with a label saying what they contain. Two balls stand alone on the end, the one for Eevee and the one for Pikachu. Liz is kind of sad seeing Pikachu's ball all alone on its own table and at the same time, is glad to choose it. Seline feels the same way about the Eevee she has chosen. As they pick them up, they let their new partners out and they are delighted to see their new trainers. To Liz's surprise, both her new Pikachu and Seline's new Eevee are both female.

    Liz decides to name her new Pikachu Crystal. Crystal loves her new name and finds her way unto Liz's Shoulder. Seline doesn't nickname her Eevee but she seems perfectly happy anyway as Eevee finds her way unto Seline's shoulder as well. Dread doesn't nickname Charmander ether, which is a male which suits him best. The three are given 5 balls each, a Pokedex and a PDA system to send messages to each other. With all that in hand, they all set off leaving ruby town behind and are bided good luck.
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    I can see there are some fairly obvious flaws so before I get to the nitty gritty, let me get to something that'll help make this look nicer:

    Remove the smilies and emotcon faces. ^.^ is not becoming for literary appeal unless you're doing it for comedic purposes. Another thing is not to used colored text, even if white technically isn't a color being the exact opposite of black text... erm, my point still stands. Stay standard. As for the story, I was almost convinced at first that this was some sort of parody with a 'Rainbow' land where everything is a shiny, so every pokemon is a one in 8191 rarity. Speaking of numbers, unless they're large numbers, write 'em out! Saying four or five instead of 4 or 5 shows more class than three outstretched pinkies.


    Also spellcheck. I notice errors like minuts and havnt.


    Also a main character with angel wings. I don't know what to expect, but I've been surprised by shaky premises before. I do think you need to clean things up and read Advice for aspiring authors a few times though. It'll help immensely.

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    the only thing I'll leave in is the emotions cause that's how I type, only when the character is happy or angery...you we're right about the typos though, sheesh...I promise I am the worst when it comes to blasted typos, but I can't help it though, with my autism, when I write "actuality" it always comes out "achually" and I have little control over that
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    Firstly, I gave a reply about the emoticons thing as you posted in the Rules: http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthr...1#post15400791 In short, it is something that ought to be dropped as it's a) against the rules for fics, and b) not a good thing to use either. (I'll add that I have only ever seen it done...twice in fics when it would arguably be acceptable, and both of them were purposefully very silly (crack fics) which is probably the only situation they could be used it, as an outlandish joke. By far the exception, not the norm).
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    the only thing I'll leave in is the emotions cause that's how I type, only when the character is happy or angery...you we're right about the typos though, sheesh...I promise I am the worst when it comes to blasted typos, but I can't help it though, with my autism, when I write "actuality" it always comes out "achually" and I have little control over that
    Actually, there is a way to help typos; a number of them actually. The easiest is the use of a spell/grammar checker. For starters, be sure to use some sort of word processing document like Word, as those have a built in spell checker. If you don't have that, Openoffice is free to download and Google Docs is a free online service, and both have those tools as well. And you can always google an online spell/grammar checker program as well.

    You can also have someone beta read your story (that is, proofread it before you post it), although note they shouldn't be doing things that a spell/grammar checker can (ie always use a s/g checker first).

    I'd suggest removing the bold formatting too as it still makes reading a bit harder, although at least that is better than white and bold.

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    I always found bold lettering eaiser to read myself but fine...
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    Exclamation Missingno the infection, Chapter 2

    Chapter 2:
    The Infection Breaks Loose


    After two days into Liz's travels, she has parted ways with her friends Seline and Dread, for now. She caught a Starly, that she nicknamed Brownie and a Minccino that she had no nickname for. Both Female and both shiny like Crystal. Crystal enjoyed being outside her ball all the time as Liz thought she would. Liz had always loved Pikachu so she studied them a lot in the event she would get one. Now that she has one of her own, she knows exactly how to treat her. Crystal, to Liz's pleasant surprise, was born with the special move Volt Tackle, which came in handy with catching Brownie.

    Still, even with all this new traveling abroad, the nightmare continued to follow her. The same one that haunted her for the last three months continued into these past two days. The night before, she tossed and turned so much, that Crystal had to shock her awake in the middle of the night. Liz was shocked in more ways than one when she woke up but was more shaken then upset. So she actually hugged Crystal and knew she made the right starter choice.

    As they walked on the route to Amber City, Liz talks to Crystal hoping to one day understand her perfectly.

    Liz looks at her and says, "Crystal, I'm glad I picked you as my starter...you seem so sensitive to others feelings..." she said with a smile.

    Crystal smiles and nods, "<So I have been told...>"

    "Though you know...although I don't understand what you say completely...I can feel the emotion in your voice..." Liz said with a smile.

    This made Crystal smile to as they we're truly bonding and she simply nodded in response. Later that night, the dream reoccurred again keeping Liz from receiving anything but peaceful rest. The next day, she makes it into Amber Town, takes her pokemon to the center and learns that local gym is a rock type gym. The Leader's name here Branko and she knows her current team won't stand a chance and she needs a water or grass type. She asks around and is told to go to the crystal woods.

    "The Crystal Woods has many grass and water types" a trainer she asked told her.

    Liz nodded at her the trainer, "Thank you so much" she said in a happy response and set off to the Crystal woods.

    As she searched for a pokemon to help her in her gym battle, another battle was stirring in the Twilight Region. A Mew was keeping watch on the surrounding area and the precious Twilight Orb. Though something was stirring inside the orb itself, struggling to break loose and wanting to be free. Mew noticed this and was perplexed and saw a pair of glowing eyes on the orb. Mew was taken aback as the orb suddenly burst from what appeared to be a sky attack and a strange, shadowy shapeless figure appears from the blast.

    "FREEEEEE FREE AT LAST!!!!!!" it declares, "FINALLY AFTER TWO MILLENNIUMS....I AM FINALLY FREEEEEE!"

    Mew is stunned by this turn of events and has no clue what to make of it. Should she try talking to this strange creature? She wasn't sure what else to do.

    "W-What are you? who are you...?" Mew asked cautiously.

    The strange creature looks at Mew and said, "I AM MISSINGNO...I WAS BORN AND CREATED TWO MILLENNIUMS AGO INSIDE THE ORB I BROKE FREE FROM...AND NOW THAT I AM FREE...I WILL RULE THIS WORLD..."

    Mew was startled by the creature's claims and said, "M-Missingno...? you’re saying...the dark and light attack I captured b-breed you and gave you life...?"

    "SO...YOU ADMIT TO LEADING A HAND IN CREATING ME...WELL THEN...I SOPPOSE YOU'LL BE THE FIRST..." he said as he changed into his shadow Ghost form and tries heading for her.

    Mew tries firing an aura sphere and as it hits, it has no impact at all. Mew is shocked by this as she has to get out of the way. Missingno turns back around to fire water gun and Mew counter attacks with psychic and the 2 moves collide. As Missingno came at Mew again, a Togekiss and Zoroark, which goes by the name of “Zist”, appear from the 2 different sides. Togekiss is the servant of Reshiram in the Light Realm while Zist is the servant of Zekrom in the darkness realm. As such, they have their differences but work together only when forced to, and this is one of those times.

    Zist fires a Dark Pulse and Togekiss fires an air slash hitting Missingno. Mew looks there way and realizes she's just been saved.

    "Zist...Togekiss...thank you..." Mew said to them.

    "Don't thank us yet...I doubt that thing is done with us..." Zist said back to her.

    "What is that thing anyway...?" Togekiss asked as Missingno changed again into its odd shape.

    "It called itself a Missingno and it wants to rule the world..." Mew replied to her, "it came out of the Twilight Orb..."

    "S-Seriously?!" Togekiss asked in shock.

    Mew nodded in response and said, "If we can knock it out, maybe I can absorb it into another aura sphere..."

    The other 2 nodded in agreement and prepared for a fight to the finish. All the meanwhile back in the Crystal Woods, Liz had located a wild female shiny Snivy which was quite a lucky find considering their very rare in the area. She tried battling a Treeko earlier but it fled after breaking out of the ball and knows this is her second chance.

    "All the pokemon in the region really are shiny...ok Brownie, you’re up!" she said as she sent her out.

    "<Let's do this!>" Brownie cried out though it sounded like merely Starly chirps to Liz.

    "Use Wing Attack!" Liz called as Brownie comes in nailing Snivy.

    Snivy gets up and to their surprise, retaliates with magical leaf which is an egg move and can't be dodged. Liz realizes that her father must've known the move and passed it to her as she has studied how pokemon breeding works. Now she's happy to know she didn't choose Snivy because there was another special out like this out there. Brownie gets hit but only takes small damage. Snivy now comes in for a tackle.

    "Quick Attack Brownie, let's go!", Liz calls as Brownie complies and nails Snivy before tackle can hit and knocks her back into a tree.

    As Snivy struggles to stand up, Liz readies a ball and vows that she'll catch this one this time. Snivy falls over from her injuries because the wing attack took a heavy toll and Liz tosses the ball her way. The ball hits and sucks her inside. Then it hits the ground and...1...2...3.........ding! Liz smiles and runs to pick the ball up and holds it up happily. As she and her pokemon celebrate their new friend, they run back to the center so they can get healed and ready for the gym.

    Back in the Twilight Region, the 3 on 1 battle was becoming no easy task. It was as if every attack thrown at Missingno wasn't doing much at all and Missingno used attacks like sky attack over and over. Then it suddenly charged a strange energy...and this attack seemed to distort everything around it, entrapping the 4 in a strange distorted area in which there was no escape...the attack of...super glitch.
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    No no no no no! I thought you read the rules and advice like I recommended!

    While I'm glad your smilie emotcon addiction is under wraps. All chapters of a story go into one thread.

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    It is seriously time for you to start reading the rules. As Negrek said, all chapters of one fic should be in a single thread. I have merged them for you.

    If this kind of rule-breaking continues, you may end up getting infractions, so I'd recommend reading the Fan Fiction Rules thoroughly. Having Autism is not an excuse.

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    hold on...I did and read "1 chapter per post" so I assumed if you that's exactly what you ment
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    Yes, one chapter per post. It also says all chapters remain in one thread.

    Posts are the individual messages we submit by clicking "Post Reply."
    Threads are what posts go in. We create them by clicking "Create Thread."
    We are currently posting posts in a thread called "Missingno the infection." Before, you posted in a thread called "The Fan Fiction Rules."

    Does that clear things up?
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    Yeah it does...sorry....I just hate being judged and rubbed the wrong way...can you please edit the last part of my title to remind me? take out the chapter 1 and prolog part? ad just to clairify, you guys don't hate me right?
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    Chapter 3:
    The Infection Spreads

    As the Super Glitch attack continued to rage, it was clearly distorting space all around Togekiss, Zist and Mew much like a Palkia would. Though this was different because it was making the three feel...sick, but an odd kind of sick. Mew, who was struggling to escape the attack, suddenly surrounded herself in a pink bubble using protect and tried to get the other two in but it was too late. Using protect like she did got her thrown out of the attack. When she saw it from the outside, it was like a huge black and white mixed box that you could barely see inside of.

    On the inside of this "box", Togekiss and Zist we're getting the attack's full blown effect. First, they glowed white gaining what the felt was a power up but them it turned to purple making them feel poisoned and ill. Then it turned red like a burn was draining them and finally it went multicolored KOing both of them but it did more than that...much more. The multicolor was turning to black and white now as and it lifted off of them and got absorbed into Missingno. It appeared to carry a strange blue aura with it that seemed to cry out as it was being absorbed.

    W-what was...what was that?! Mew thought as she looked on puzzled and scared.

    Suddenly Togekiss and Zist opened their eyes but...they we're blank and empty of light. They looked to Missingno and appeared to kneel before him. This puzzled Mew even further because she knew where their loyalties lied and it wasn't with Missingno.

    Mew looked at Missingno upset by this, "What have you done?!" she demanded.

    "THE SAME THING I SHALL DO TO ANYONE THAT DOESN'T STAND WITH ME..." he then suddenly changes into a shadow version of Zist and the Togekiss to make a point.

    Mew is stunned, "H-How did you do that?!"

    "MY ATTACK...ALLOWS ME TO ABSORB THE SOULS OF THOSE THAT CAN'T ESCAPE ITS GRIP! BUT ONLY A SPECIAL PART OF THEIR SOUL..."

    "S-Special Part...?"

    "YES...IT DRAINS THE PART OF SOUL CONNECTED TO THEIR EMOTIONS...I ABSORB THEM AND THEN THE OWNER OF THAT SOUL SERVES ME THEREAFTER..."

    Mew was stunned hearing this and knowing she helped to create this thing. She had to get away from him before he did the same thing to her. Before she became an emotionless servant like her friends.

    Missingno finished by saying, "WHEN I ABSORB THAT PART, I CAN TAKE ON THEIR FORM AND ABILITIES...NOW...RISE MY SERVANTS AND BRING HER TO ME!"

    Zist and Togekiss get up and respond with "Yes Master Missingno..." and they both go after her.

    Mew sees them coming and fires two aura spheres to hold them back. As they can't miss, it pushes the two back and Mew escapes by teleporting and ends up in the nearby city of Eclipse.

    "THIS ONE LIKES TO GIVE THE CHASE..." Missingno said seeming rather calm.

    Zist looked back Missingno and said, "Shall we give the chase Master?"

    "NO...SHE'LL COME BACK TO US EVENTUALLY...HEHE...FOR NOW, LET'S BRING MORE TO...US." Missingno replied.

    "Fine then Master..." Zist replies

    Back in the city, Mew sighed in a bit of relief she wasn't given the chase like she feared.

    That was close...Mew thought then said, "I must get to the Rainbow Region and warn my sister..." and she started searching the city for any way she could get there.

    Back in Amber Town, Liz finished preparing for her first gym battle and walked in the building. Inside it was a rocky terrain built for rock types on the gym floor. Branko, a tall man with a slightly warm smile, fair skin, green eyes, short black hair and wore the color orange color shirt and dark blue pants walked out and greeted her.

    "Welcome Challenger, name's Branko, rock type expert in the Rainbow Region, and you are?"

    "I'm Liz Azzimagica of Ruby Town, and I'm ready to take you on" she declared.

    "Well aren't you a confident one...alright then, time to Rock and Roll! How does 3 on 3 sound to you?" Branko asked

    Liz nodded in response, "Fine by me"

    "Ok then, You’re allowed to substitute and I'm not. Now then...let's Rock and Roll!" he called as he sent out his Shiny Cranidos.

    Wow...even the gym leaders have shinnies in the rainbow region...no wonder it's called "The land of the shiny Pokemon"... Liz though as she looked to Crystal.

    Crystal nodded and jumped off her shoulder as a referee called for it to begin.

    "Cranidos, start with Focus Energy then use Headbutt!" Branko called as Cranidos glowed pumping itself up.

    "Crystal, quick, Volt Tackle let's go!" Liz called out.

    Crystal followed her order and the 2 collided head-on though Volt Tackle did a lot more damage than Headbutt. Liz smiled at this and called for a Thundershock this time while Branko called for pursuit causing both attacks to cross and hit knocking both pokemon back.

    "You ok Crystal?" Liz asked. Crystal got back up and nodded as Branko called for a Rock Tomb.

    "Dodge it! and Volt Tackle one more time!"

    "<You got it!>" Crystal called as it started to come around her and she jumped just in time before it closed on her tail. Then she comes back down nailing and KOing Cranidos.

    Branko recalls him as Crystal is declared the winner and smiles, "Nice Job, you got a pretty special Pikachu there being born with volt tackle...let's see how you handle my next pokemon. Onix, let's rock and roll!" he called as he sent his also shiny Onix into play.

    Crystal got a little nervous as Onix roared but Liz called her back knowing her attacks won't do any good. Crystal was a bit relieved and ran back to her. Liz smiled and sent her Snivy who was pretty confident though she was staring down a larger opponent.

    "So Snivy is your next choice eh? Smart move on your part." Branko commended then said, "However, if you look at it this way...it's the battle of the Snakes now...a rock snake verses the grass snake."

    Liz never thought about but what he said was true. She never really liked snakes though...poisonous ones mostly. Though Snivy was different...they don't look like the type that would want to kill you by biting you like most snakes. In fact, they has a sort of cuteness to them and a charisma on the outside. Though on the inside, they truly care for their trainers, at least that's the impression you get with this Snivy. The 2 snakes stared each other down as they waited to begin.

    Meanwhile back in Eclipse City of the Twilight Region, the "Eeveevolution" Gym Leader, aka, Taylor Swift, was packing to head to the Rainbow Region. She was packing things into a plane because she had a string of shows to do out there. This was a stroke of luck for Mew who was watching her pack so she teleports herself onto the plane as she finishes packing it. Taylor gets in and the pilot takes off to the rainbow region with Mew on board.
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    Because of how eager you seem to be, I think you deserve to have someone look at what you've written.

    In a land known as the Rainbow Region...it is peaceful and the pokemon there are mysteriously all shiny.
    Okay, the first thing I have to tell you is that it is generally frowned upon for Shiny Pokemon to be as common as you're describing them. However, if used properly, this concept - all the Pokemon in the region being Shiny - could lead to some good storylines. For example, why are they all Shiny? Was there a natural event that caused this? Did it happen because of a manmade phenomenon?

    One thing you'll need to do no matter what, though, is clearly say just what a "Shiny Pokemon" is. It is not always a good idea to assume that every reader knows every term relating to the universe you're writing in, so simply saying "the Pokemon there are all Shiny" may be lost on some people as they may not know that Shiny means colored differently.

    In the nearby region known as Twilight Region, it is said that the Reshiram that lives in the light realm and the Zekrom that lives in the darkness realm clashed more than a couple millenniums ago. This made the 2 realms merge with the surrounding areas and merge together in the center of the region.

    A mew that lived in the epicenter of the battle used an aura sphere at the attacks from Zekrom and Reshiram collided creating a Twilight Orb. Mew begged the two to stop fighting and once the two realized what they have done to the region, they retreated to their respective realms as what was done could not be repaired.

    However...little did they know they all created something more dangerous...a mysterious creature that lives inside the twilight orb that knows nether light nor darkness. It has no emotion, is very power hungry and is poised to destroy humanity. The mysterious infection...missingno.
    Don't get discouraged, this backstory is actually pretty good! All you need to do with it is some more planning to smooth out the details. Right now we have a chain of events that, while interesting on the surface, is a bit more of a dump of information than anything. A better way to convey this very same information is to depict it in actual scenes instead of having the narrator simply tell the reader. Try showing us Reshiram and Zekrom fighting, the merging of the two realms and the creation of the Orb. Not only will this make the information more appealing to read, it can give additional context to the events.

    I notice that you are inconsistently capitalizing names of Pokemon. There are good arguments for both capitalizing and not capitalizing, but I don't believe I've seen more than one person who (successfully) uses both within their story. I would encourage you to decide whether to capitalize the names (including Missingno) or not, and stick to it.

    A 16 year old Girl named Liz Azzimagica sleeps in her bed as she anticipates tomorrow. O yes, tomorrow...when she gets her first pokemon...now Liz is a strange girl because she has wings, angel wings to be exact and she loves wearing all white with a red jacket and a silver necklace with a sapphire blue pendant. She is also light skinned, has brown eyes, brown hair, is a very faithful friend and an upbeat person. The kind of person anyone would hope to know as a friend...the angelic girl lives up to her name. And of course, as any trainer, she is excited in not knowing who to choose because this region has starters from all over the planet. The five starters of Kanto, the three of Johto, Hoenn, Sinnoh and even Unova...you name it.
    Okay, unfortunately, now is where we're beginning to have problems.

    Her name is the same as your username. Okay, I can ordinarily overlook that. By itself it's not so bad. Where we begin having problems is when you start telling us that she has angel wings and is such a faithful, upbeat friend that anyone would hope to know her. These things are establishing her as someone who is far too perfect to be a character readers can identify with, and to be honest, there is no appeal to characters who are just the embodiment of perfection. She doesn't appear to have any character flaws, and the plot presents her with an easy pass through a potential trial by conveniently offering her a choice from all the regions' starters. That's to say nothing of the angel wings, which do not appear to be present for any particular reason besides giving her a "unique" trait.

    Liz thinks to herself ok...Seline said she wanted Eevee...Eevee was on my top five list along with Snivy, Piplup, Pikachu and Charmander...they are all so cute...well...they are all different types to...normal, grass, water, electric and fire...thing is...Pikachu is the only one that evolves on a total voluntary basis...well, guess I'll base it on whoever catches my attention the most but ether way I want a Pikachu eventually ^^
    I don't understand what "Pikachu is the only one that evolves on a total voluntary basis" means. Could you please explain?

    There's no need for me to address the emoticons because that subject has already been dealt with by others.

    As she thought about what she truly wanted, she made it to the lab where her two friends, Seline and Dread, we're waiting for her. Seline was the daughter of a scientist and 16 as well. She had long black hair, blue eyes, fair skinned, wore a long white robe with a white shirt and pants. Dread was a rather casual guy himself but could be a real hot head when he wanted to be, he was also 16. He had Blue eyes as well, fair skin, red shirt, blue pants and tennis shoes.
    Generally, numbers should be written out; ie "sixteen" instead of "16."

    If you're going to describe characters all at once, at least try not to make it sound like you're just rattling off a list of traits every time. Try to mix in some action with the description of their traits, such as "Seline was brushing her long black hair" for example.

    "Are you serious? hmm...that leaves me with---" As Liz was about to state her choices, Dread cut in by saying Charmander is gonna be his choice.
    Writing character lines in chat style is acceptable when it fits their personality, but it's my opinion that informal language like "gonna" should not be used in narrative outside of quotes.

    Liz decides to name her new Pikachu Crystal. Crystal loves her new name and finds her way unto Liz's Shoulder. Seline doesn't nickname her Eevee but she seems perfectly happy anyway as Eevee finds her way unto Seline's shoulder as well. Dread doesn't nickname Charmander ether, which is a male which suits him best. The three are given 5 balls each, a Pokedex and a PDA system to send messages to each other. With all that in hand, they all set off leaving ruby town behind and are bided good luck.
    Crystal instantly taking to liking Liz is another example of something she appears to be getting with no struggle, thus contributing to her overall air of being perfect.

    Also, this part is far too rushed. There's enough that happens here that with proper fleshing out, it could cover several pages on its own.

    On to Chapter 2...

    After two days into Liz's travels, she has parted ways with her friends Seline and Dread, for now. She caught a Starly, that she nicknamed Brownie and a Minccino that she had no nickname for. Both Female and both shiny like Crystal.
    This is a lot to skip over with just a timeskip and two lines talking about it. Timeskipping a few days is itself not the problem, it's not telling us more in detail what went on in those two days that makes it overwhelming.

    I like that she's not nicknaming every single Pokemon she comes across. What I don't like is that she got two more special Pokemon, though it's difficult to tell if being female is what's unusual or if being Shiny is what's unusual. Either way, three days into her journey she has three Shiny Pokemon, which is a little unsettling.

    Crystal enjoyed being outside her ball all the time as Liz thought she would. Liz had always loved Pikachu so she studied them a lot in the event she would get one. Now that she has one of her own, she knows exactly how to treat her. Crystal, to Liz's pleasant surprise, was born with the special move Volt Tackle, which came in handy with catching Brownie.
    Okay, this is a shining example of what I'm saying about her perfection. She just happens to have the skills to have an ideal relationship with her Pikachu, which is one thing, but said Pikachu was born with a rare Egg Move, which is unfortunately a striking example of her being handed things easily. This is not a good sign.

    As they walked on the route to Amber City, Liz talks to Crystal hoping to one day understand her perfectly.

    Liz looks at her and says, "Crystal, I'm glad I picked you as my starter...you seem so sensitive to others feelings..." she said with a smile.

    Crystal smiles and nods, "<So I have been told...>"

    "Though you know...although I don't understand what you say completely...I can feel the emotion in your voice..." Liz said with a smile.
    Even if she's only communicating with Crystal on a basic level and doesn't understand her words, the fact that she can communicate on even a rudimentary level with Pokemon this soon is a bit unbelievable, not to mention it's yet another "unique" trait of hers that makes her even more perfect.

    Later that night, the dream reoccurred again keeping Liz from receiving anything but peaceful rest.
    I think you meant "keeping Liz from receiving peaceful rest," because this line seems to say the nightmare kept her from getting any rest that wasn't peaceful.

    As she searched for a pokemon to help her in her gym battle, another battle was stirring in the Twilight Region.
    It would help if your transitions from one setting to another were a bit more clear. It was very sudden that this jump to the Twilight Region happened.

    A Mew was keeping watch on the surrounding area and the precious Twilight Orb. Though something was stirring inside the orb itself, struggling to break loose and wanting to be free. Mew noticed this and was perplexed and saw a pair of glowing eyes on the orb. Mew was taken aback as the orb suddenly burst from what appeared to be a sky attack and a strange, shadowy shapeless figure appears from the blast.
    I question how Missingno was just able to escape from the Orb at this point in time, but I'm excited for this. Obviously it means something is happening.

    Mew is stunned by this turn of events and has no clue what to make of it. Should she try talking to this strange creature? She wasn't sure what else to do.

    "W-What are you? who are you...?" Mew asked cautiously.

    The strange creature looks at Mew and said, "I AM MISSINGNO...I WAS BORN AND CREATED TWO MILLENNIUMS AGO INSIDE THE ORB I BROKE FREE FROM...AND NOW THAT I AM FREE...I WILL RULE THIS WORLD..."

    Mew was startled by the creature's claims and said, "M-Missingno...? you’re saying...the dark and light attack I captured b-breed you and gave you life...?"
    How does Mew going from having no clue to who or what Missingno is to correctly guessing that its own actions gave Missingno life?

    "SO...YOU ADMIT TO LEADING A HAND IN CREATING ME...WELL THEN...I SOPPOSE YOU'LL BE THE FIRST..." he said as he changed into his shadow Ghost form and tries heading for her.

    Mew tries firing an aura sphere and as it hits, it has no impact at all. Mew is shocked by this as she has to get out of the way. Missingno turns back around to fire water gun and Mew counter attacks with psychic and the 2 moves collide. As Missingno came at Mew again, a Togekiss and Zoroark, which goes by the name of “Zist”, appear from the 2 different sides. Togekiss is the servant of Reshiram in the Light Realm while Zist is the servant of Zekrom in the darkness realm. As such, they have their differences but work together only when forced to, and this is one of those times.
    It's very hard to keep up with what is going on here, because you don't really describe what the "shadow Ghost" form is, then you rattle off a series of attacks with only their names. Then the Togekiss and Zoroark come in, and nothing much about them gets described except for an info dump about what the two of them do.

    This section is structurally weak for those reasons.

    "It called itself a Missingno and it wants to rule the world..." Mew replied to her, "it came out of the Twilight Orb..."
    "A" Missingno? Does that mean there are more?

    That could be a good plot twist if it was the case.

    The other 2 nodded in agreement and prepared for a fight to the finish. All the meanwhile back in the Crystal Woods, Liz had located a wild female shiny Snivy which was quite a lucky find considering their very rare in the area. She tried battling a Treeko earlier but it fled after breaking out of the ball and knows this is her second chance.
    Another awkward scene transition and another rare occurrence happening for Liz. That's the biggest problem so far: Liz is so unbelievably perfect and lucky that the story is less a story and more a series of circumstances revolving around her.

    Snivy gets up and to their surprise, retaliates with magical leaf which is an egg move and can't be dodged. Liz realizes that her father must've known the move and passed it to her as she has studied how pokemon breeding works. Now she's happy to know she didn't choose Snivy because there was another special out like this out there. Brownie gets hit but only takes small damage. Snivy now comes in for a tackle.
    ...and again, Liz has found yet another unusual Pokemon, not to mention she's studied how breeding works, even though it doesn't have any context making it sensible like her studying Pikachu did.

    Does she have any character flaws at all?

    Brownie gets hit but only takes small damage. Snivy now comes in for a tackle.
    I literally can't picture what's going on here because there is no description. What is "small damage?" What kind of movement is Snivy making?

    Back in the Twilight Region, the 3 on 1 battle was becoming no easy task. It was as if every attack thrown at Missingno wasn't doing much at all and Missingno used attacks like sky attack over and over. Then it suddenly charged a strange energy...and this attack seemed to distort everything around it, entrapping the 4 in a strange distorted area in which there was no escape...the attack of...super glitch.
    Again, what is going on here? What does a "Sky Attack" look like? And even worse, not everyone is familiar with glitches, so what is a "Super Glitch?"

    I give you credit for trying with the glitch stuff, I really do. But the lack of any description is literally ruining it.

    Chapter 3:

    As the Super Glitch attack continued to rage, it was clearly distorting space all around Togekiss, Zist and Mew much like a Palkia would.
    Whoa, now Palkia is involved? This is why the lack of description is such a major issue - you're assuming every reader is looking at it exactly the same way you are and therefore understands everything you're saying, which is a grave mistake. This metaphor is almost too confusing for me with such little explanation.

    That was close...Mew thought then said, "I must get to the Rainbow Region and warn my sister..." and she started searching the city for any way she could get there.
    I sincerely hope this "sister" is not in fact Liz.

    Back in Amber Town, Liz finished preparing for her first gym battle
    What did she do to prepare?

    Then she comes back down nailing and KOing Cranidos.
    Writing "KO" instead of "knockout" isn't a good idea.

    Meanwhile back in Eclipse City of the Twilight Region, the "Eeveevolution" Gym Leader, aka, Taylor Swift, was packing to head to the Rainbow Region. She was packing things into a plane because she had a string of shows to do out there.
    Okay, I'm sorry, but I totally lost it here. Inserting real-life celebrities into the story as themselves is just too much; the story now firmly reads without a doubt as wish fulfillment in which you're simply throwing in things you like so they'll revolve around a main character who I have to assume is a self-insert. I know what making these mistakes is like... I made them all myself once.

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    I still got alot of chapters, planning 20, didn't want to reveal too much too soon as far as the storyline goes, in fact, the shiny factor gonna be explained is in the next chapter. And the idea about about Liz is she seems perfect, at first, but she will have human flaws, right now she's masking the fact about the horrible recurring nightmares are happening except to those that know her. I'll also soon reaveal that she had a tradigy in her past, a major one that she's also masking with her innocence. As for the whole "voluntary basis" evloution thing...it basicly ment the thunderstone, her pikachu can choose weather she wants to evolue or not, thus, "voluntary basis". and the rainbow reagion itself, I based off my favorite Yu-Gi-Oh arcitype called the Crystal Beasts, thus the names so far: "Crystal" Forest, "Ruby" Town, "Amber" Town. Now for Mew's sister, I will reveal it is a Shiny Mew living somewhere in the Rainbow Region and Palkia is no more then a comparision to the fact Missingno's attack distorts space since Palkia is the enbodiment of space itself. O and 1 other thing, I'm bringing my hero Tay into the fic because I just felt she's a big part of my life and I normally compare my character to me slightly (except for the weight loss I went through but let's not go there)...
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    Hokay lets start.
    I liked it overall but there were a few things that I thought were kinnda unnececary.
    1. Taylor swift. I.don't think its a bad as the other guy made it sound but I'm not a fan of her so whatever.
    2. A few spelling errors, easilly fixed.
    3. No emoticons, u got a lot better about it and honestly it looks a lot better.

    But other than that I love the concept and would love to see more.
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    thanks and this is a perfect way to practice for a real story I'm working on, in fact, Ansem, I'll be happy to show you chapters of another story I'm working on. anyway, I'll probally have 4 of this story up in a few days and I'll try to improve my style as I press forward
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    I agree with Ansem, the concept has a lot of potential.

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    thank you both, I needed this positivity after a shacky start, but it will become a stronger and stronger story, I promise, and I know not everybody is like exactly what I do or how I try to present it, but, I'm not gonna give up. Maybe I am too innocent of a person to most but it's worked for me for 23 years
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    Chapter 4:
    The Mysterious N

    Back in the gym, the battle of the snakes was called to begin. Branko called for Onix to use Bind and Liz called Snivy to use vine whip to block his tail. The giant green rock snake came at the tiny grass snake with his tail and Snivy countered by extending her vines from the back and pushed back on his tail. They both continued to push back and forth on each other until they both let up. Then Branko called on Onix to use tackle but as the giant rock snake came at full force, Liz was finally ready to use her secret weapon.

    "Ok Snivy, Magical Leaf, let's go!" Liz called.

    Snivy complied nailing with a rainbow of color changing leaves. Since it cannot miss it stopped Tackle in its tracks and it also does major damage since Onix has a double weakness to a grass move like that. Branko calls for another Bind as Liz calls for a vine whip. The two moves push on each other again but this time, Onix pushes Snivy's attack back and binds Snivy with his tail. She tries to struggle her way out but can't seem to.

    "Ugh, Snivy..." Liz said worried, "Snivy come on, you got to concentrate and use Magical Leaf!"

    Snivy continued to struggle with her eyes closed from the pain. Upon hearing Liz's voice though, she opens her eyes and focuses her energy. She then glows firing the rainbow leaves and it nails Onix hard knocking him out. She then summersaults to the ground as Onix let her go and came down with a big thud. Branko, seeing this, is impressed and recalls his Onix to his Pokeball with a red glow that turns Onix red sucking him safely back inside.

    "Now that was impressive...keeping cool under pressure like that...if you can do that, you can beat anything." Branko said to her.

    This made Liz smile hearing it from a Gym Leader and on her very first try also. All she could manage was a simple "Thank You" at him. Branko nodded and readied his last ball.

    "I hope you’re ready for my last pokemon...he's my most powerful and most trusted partner." Branko said holding the ball in his hand.

    Liz nodded back at him, "We're ready, bring it on!" she said and Snivy nodded as well, ready for anything.

    "The time to rock and roll one more time than! Nosepass, let's go!" Branko called as he threw the ball.

    Nosepass, a strange alien-like rock golden rock since it was a shiny, with what appeared to be a giant red or pinkish nose, seemed to have his eyes closed and he seemed to hold his head as well, came out in a white flash of light. Snivy looked at it and still seemed rearing to go. Liz nodded at her eagerness and wanted to stick with her and then the Referee called to begin.

    "Ok Snivy, let's go for it. Magical Leaf!" Liz called as Snivy nodded and fired the rainbow of leaves that simply couldn’t miss.

    "Counter with Rock Throw!" Branko called as rocks appeared out of nowhere and we're tossed at Snivy. The 2 moves crossed and hit with Magical Leaf hitting harder due to rock being weak to grass.

    Snivy struggled up but wasn't gonna give in one bit. She was panting a bit but wasn't an easy Pokemon to break.

    "Snivy, you ok to go on?" Liz asked concerned.

    Snivy nodded at Liz and said, "<U-Ugh...yeah...I will be...I'm not giving up...>”

    Liz seemed to get it seeing her nodding, "Alright then...I'm counting on you! Magical Leaf again!" Snivy glows and through more colorful leaves Nosepass's way.

    Branko knew it couldn't be dodged so he had to try and get a move in.

    "Rock Tomb Nosepass!" he called and as the leaves hit, some rocks sprouted around Snivy trying to entrap her within.

    Nosepass barely hung on from the leaf attack as the rocks started to put the squeeze on Snivy. Snivy tries to struggle out but cannot move.

    "Ugh, Snivy, come on, get out of there!" Liz called, "Come on, you got to!"

    "Finish Snivy off and use Rock throw!" Branko called as Nosepass had rocks appear above him.

    As the battle was raging, a person was watching from the stands in the gym. He was in the shadows so he couldn't be made out at the moment but for one reason or another, he wanted to watch. He seemed intrigued by Liz herself and the battle at hand. He also seemed to be wondering what she will do with her Snivy in peril like she was. But wait, he wasn't alone, someone or something was with him. Liz didn't seem to notice ether one of them though as she was focused at the battle on hand.

    As Nosepass fired the rocks, Liz knew this was sink or swim time for Snivy. After thinking about it, it would be a long shot but it could work, she was gonna try and fire one more Magical Leaf since Rock Tomb would prevent Snivy being recalled to her ball. She clinched her fist and was ready for calling it.

    "Alright Snivy, I'm counting on you! Magical Leaf one last time!"

    Snivy opened her eyes again and fired the rainbow leaves that simply can’t miss even though she was trapped. As both moves hit the other pokemon at the same time, both pokemon get Knocked Out. Liz is still declared the winner even though it's a draw because she still had 2 more pokemon to use and still defeated all 3 of his. Liz then walks over and picks up Snivy thanking her and the small darker green grass snake gives her a small thumbs up. She then nodded at her and returns her to her ball so she can rest. Branko then walks over after recalling his Nosepass.

    "Well, that was impressive...an amazing gym battle...you should be proud of your pokemon.", he said with a smile.

    Liz nodded and said, "Thank you, and yes, I am very proud of them."

    "Well then, here is proof of your victory.", He said pulling out a orange and round badge that looked like an Amber replica, "This is the Amber Badge, your first of eight in this region, and this is yours to." he said pulling out a disk, "This is the TM for my signature move, Rock Tomb. Use it well."

    Liz nodded and put the badge in her case that was in her blue backpack and put the TM away as well. The mysterious guy was still watching in the stands and thought that Liz seemed to handle herself well enough. Though he wanted to give her time to heal her pokemon before approaching her. Liz still didn't notice him walking out and bidding Branko goodbye though, she couldn't shake the feeling throughout the battle someone was watching her. As she walked out, Branko seemed to notice her wings for the first time but because Liz was walking out, he didn't want to bother her with questions.

    The mysterious guy seemed to notice the wings as well, which is part of the reason why he followed her in to watch the match. The other part was the fact her Pikachu, being Crystal of course, was out of its ball, yet she stayed with her. This perplexed and intrigued him because most trainers he meets have all their pokemon inside the pokeballs. Very rarely does he see one staying out, other than a couple of his own. Though his reason was that he had a very different view on Pokeballs then most others.

    As Liz walked out, he followed her out and headed out for Crystal Forest. As he followed her to the center first, he asked his partner to lead her into the forest and to the lake after she had her pokemon healed. His partner nodded and hid in a bush outside the center which was a white building with a giant "P" on the side of the building. A quick blue flash seemed to come out the bush as the young man headed to the forest. His partner waited as Liz walked into the center and had her pokemon healed by the nurse's machine. The machine itself is a flat panel attached into a wall behind a counter and can heal up to six Pokemon inside of their balls. It is quite a handy thing for any trainer on the go and is available in every Pokemon Center. After Liz's pokemon get healed, she lets Crystal back out and walks back outside.

    As they walked out, the young man's partner walked out and appeared to be a male Pikachu but...was it really what it appeared to be? Also it was a normal looking Pikachu and not a shiny while made Liz wonder if it belonged to someone in another region. As she went to approach it, the Pikachu started to run toward the forest.

    "Wait, where are you going?! I'm not going to hurt you!" Liz said as she began chasing him.

    The Pikachu ran into the forest and looked back to ensure Liz was following him. The crystal forest looked like a standard forest, full of pine trees and all that, but it gets its name from the Shiny Suicune that lives in the lake, one of the three Legendary Dog Pokemon. Not to mention the ground seems to sparkle where the sunlight cuts through the trees. Liz continued to chase the Pikachu until they came upon a lake in the center of the forest. This lake was known as the Crystal Lake and she looked on and couldn't help but notice its astounding beauty. The water was so clear and so clean it was almost like crystal itself.

    Though she wondered why the Pikachu brought her here...was it to simply show her this place? No, there must be something more to it than that. Well she got her answer when she heard someone calling "Thank you for leading her here Zoroark."

    A Zoroark...? she thought and to her surprise, the Pikachu broke the illusion by glowing blue again and turning into the black monster fox with red mane, red claws on his hands and feet, blue eyes, what appeared to be red around his mouth and the red and black mane done in a ponytail fashion.

    This caught Liz completely off guard as even when the illusion broke, he wasn't shiny still because the shiny version would be black and blue. She was convinced now whoever it belonged to was from a different region. Suddenly she heard footsteps from behind and wondered if that was his trainer. She didn't turn around just yet to see who it was but he decided to speak up anyway.

    "I'm sorry if my Zoroark scared you any..." he started, "I saw your gym battle and wanted to talk to you but I felt we should just...talk here"

    Liz turned to get a good look at him as was shocked by what she saw. "You look...familiar somehow..." She said cautiously.

    As he stepped out in full light, it suddenly dawned on her. The black and white baseball cap, Green hair done in a ponytail form, green eyes, fair skin and the strange, yet, innocent smile. He wore black shirt covered in a white shirt that had a cuff and a V-Neck pattern, tan pants, a necklace with an odd round charm that was blue and gold and a rubix-like cube on the waste on a chain on his left. He also wore green shoes and a black and white round bracelet on his right wrist and three gold square bracelets on his left wrist...there was no mistaking him. The former leader of Team Plasma in Unova...N.

    "Now I know who you are...you’re...your N right?" she asked a little unnerved.

    "It seems my reputation precedes me..." N answered acknowledging she was correct, "But how did you know who I was?"

    "Well...I...I read about you online...that how a year ago Team Plasma was defeated and disbanded...how you befriended a legendary dragon...and how your step father turned out to be the true leader..." She answered as calmly as she could.

    N nodded, "All true...and online eh? I guess there's no information that can be kept from the world anymore..." he said

    "Yeah, I suppose your right....though wait...you said you wanted to talk to me? Um...ok...though before we do...what are you doing out here in Rainbow Region?" She asked curious.

    "Well...truth is I was born here and I wanted to explore the region...and yes...I wanted to talk to you...there are certain things about you that...intrigue me." N answered her in a cool and calm matter.

    Liz was surprised to hear this coming from him. Though she wasn't sure if what surprised her more, the fact that she intrigued him...or the fact he was born in the Rainbow Region. Either way, she wanted to know more and felt like maybe she had more questions for him then he did for her. Still, she wasn't sure if she fully trusted him or not. Though she didn't really see him as a true and wicket villain. No, N was more a manipulated anti-hero by his step farther and seemed to be on a journey to find his real truth now. Still, she couldn't help but wonder...what was it about her that intrigued him? She had to know for herself.

    "How exactly do I intrigue you?" she asked.

    "Well...your wings for one...they remind me of the Majestic White Dragon Reshiram...my partner and friend..." N said looking at her, "Another is your Pikachu there...."

    "<Who me?>" Crystal asked.

    N nodded and said, "Yes...how she stays out of her ball and yet stays with you even though she's free to leave you anytime like that...yet she stays..."

    "O that's right...you wanted Pokemon liberation...O that reminds me...I heard a rumor you can actually talk to and understand pokemon...is that...true?" Liz asked

    "It is true and I'll prove it to you..." N said as he looked to Crystal, "Pikachu, tell me...what is this trainer like? Who is she and why does she mean so much to you that you stick with her?"

    Crystal response a little unsure saying, "<Well...first her name is Liz Azzimagica...she lives in Ruby Town...and she's a truly kind person...she makes me feel like I can trust her with my life though she's masking the fact she has terrible nightmares that she hates talking about...she also told me that she's really a half angel...>"

    "I see..." he responded looking at Liz now. "So your name is Liz then and you lived in ruby town...and she said she feels like she'd trust you with her life...that your truly kind but your masking your true emotions by not talking about terrible nightmares you have..."

    Liz was truly astounded hearing that when she didn't say a word and let Crystal do all the talking. She was convinced now that he truly can understand them but still didn't understand how he did.

    "That's...all true...it's...all completely true..." Liz got out still a bit stunned.

    "She also said you’re really a half angel...that is quite intriguing also...you’re the first I ever heard of..." N said.

    "Well..." Liz started, "Both my parents we're too but..." she trailed off, remembering the tragedy when she was younger.

    N suddenly noticed her sudden trail off of her words and asked what was wrong. Liz explained that when she was only five years old, she came home to her house blazing in fire. Both her parents we're trapped inside and the fire was so hot, the firefighters couldn't get ether one of her parents out. So in short, the fire took their lives. The firefighters suspected foul play because her parents had a lot of people that hated them because of them being half angels and how well off they we're owning the chain of Pokemarts in Hoenn. After they got killed she then had to move to the Rainbow Region with her Aunt Gracie and her Uncle Max where she would live for the next 11 years.

    This was for her protection until they found the person responsible. They finally captured him 10 years later which is why Liz is finally able to start her journey with her friends at age 16. Liz was in tears as she told N her account of her past and he was surprised to hear what he was hearing. To him, Liz seemed like a truly strong person but she really was masking her true emotions. Was she hiding them so she wouldn't hurt her friends? And what of those nightmares she had?

    It took him a few minutes to process it all as Liz continued to shed the tears. Crystal crawled into her lap to hug her trying to give her a little comfort. Then finally N put a hand on her shoulder and spoke up surprising her a little.

    "I know how cruel humans can be..." N started, "They can be cruel to Pokemon and humans alike...when my step father found me...he raised me alongside Pokemon that have been treated cruelly by their trainers...which is why I am surprised when I meet a nice trainer...one like yourself...or like the trainer I faced in Unova..."

    Liz was surprised that his words seemed unusually comforting. In his own way, he understood her pain. Though she now wondered about him. He said he was born in the Rainbow Region...and she knew Unova was only a boat ride away from Ruby Town...but how did he end up there? She took a deep breath to ask him.

    "Thanks N...for listening at least...though I got to ask...if you we're born in the region...how did you...?"

    "End up in Unova? Well...when I was about 3 or 4...I was in the Gem Meadows which is just beyond here. I lived in a orphanage because my mother couldn't take care of me...she was a single mom if I recall right...and very sick...so the Gem Meadows is the place I always went to because it wasn't far from the orphanage. That one day, the Raikou and Shaymin that lived there approached me...they saw the pureness in my heart and wanted me to have a gift..."

    "A gift...?" Liz asked, "What kind of gift?"

    "The exact one I showed you...the ability to understand pokemon perfectly...and how I got such a gift came from the legendary Rainbow Fruit..."

    Liz looked at him shocked, "The...The Rainbow Fruit...? You mean, the legendary fruit that is said to have made every pokemon in the region shiny and all but one tree disappeared...?"

    Liz knew about this because she studied the legends of the Rainbow Region. Though it was unclear what it did for people that ate it...until today that is.

    "Awe you know about the legend then...yes, the same fruit..." N said then looked away gazing at the lake then continued, "After I got it...all the kids in the orphanage we're taken on a trip to Unova. We exploded a forest near the Pokemon League where I got lost. However, nobody ever came back for me....and I was getting hungry so I ate the fruit. I'll never forget its sweet taste and after I finished, I found myself surrounded in a strange energy. After that I passed out and when I came to, I heard voices. But they weren't human..."

    "Wow...that's...that's incredible..."

    "Indeed it was...there was a Zorua standing over me and asking if I was alright. I soon befriended him and it wasn't long after that Ghetsis, my step-father, found me, discovered my ability and used it to his advantage." N said as he continued to gaze into the lake.

    Liz looked back at his Zoroark and said, "I'll bet that Zoroark is the same one isn't it?"

    Zoroark just gave her a simple nod admitting it was true. Liz was truly amazed at his account and what the Rainbow Fruit truly can do. She had always desired to have an ability to talk to Pokemon like you could with a normal person but could only feel their emotions. Though she didn't think the legends in the Gem Meadows would deem her worthy because she wasn't that strong a trainer yet. On top of that, she still had some emotional set-backs that needed working on like how she masked her sad emotions.

    In spite of this, N surprised her by asking her to accompany him to the Gem Meadows. Liz got a bit confused by this sudden request from the former Plasma Leader.

    "Wait, you want me to come with you...?" Liz asked

    "Yes, please do...I want to go back but I want to show you the tree that bares the fruit."

    "Well...wait...let me ask you something first..." she started hoping this won't backfire on her.

    "What is it?"

    "Well...you said you wanted to explore the region...and I'm on a journey to do the same. So...how about this? You want to...travel with me?" Liz asked.

    N pondered on this for a second. If he we're to travel with her, he'd surely see more and possibly enjoy more than he ever could on his own even with his pokemon by his side. He'd even get the chance to meet other Pokemon he never could've. His mind was then made up.

    "Ok...you got it...but accompany me to the Gem Meadows first..." N said.

    "Ok, it's a deal then" Liz agreed.

    N smiled and called to Reshiram to come to him. Suddenly the air was filled with Reshiram's Cry as the Majestic White Dragon came down to him landing in front of him. This literally took Liz's breath away as she had only read about this Pokemon and never seen one up close. Even though not shiny, she still was beautiful with the blue eyes, the silver rings around her neck and tail and the angelic-like wings that had white claws on each one. She stood tall as Liz watched in admiration.

    N smiled and got on her back and gestured Liz to do the same. Though Liz had her wings, she couldn't fly very well so she took that gesture. Zoroark climbed on behind her and Reshiram took flight and headed for the Gem Meadows.
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    Wow.
    I loved it and I'm really starting to love this story. Granted like other people said, you shouldn't make her perfect but you seem to be doing less of that and even when you do do it, it comes off quite nicely.
    there are a few spelling errors but that easily fixed. (One is with zoroarks mane not main)
    but aside from that I love it ^_^
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    I think I caught the couple you pointed out that slipped by me cause I spell checked it on word and got most of the critical ones...honestly I suprised myself with this chapter cause it came out 10 pages on word
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    Chapter 5:
    The Secret within the Gem Meadows and Mew's Arrival

    As Reshiram continued to head to the Gem Meadows, they we're now high over the Crystal Forest and soaring through the clouds. A flock of shiny Green Tranquill, whish in this case was a fair sized green bird with a feathery-like tiny Mohawk on its head and a cuff-like feathers sticking out of their necks with yellow eyes, purple claws and "eye-brows" was flying past them. Liz watched them fly so gracefully and wished she could do the same. N inquired as to exactly why Liz couldn't fly that well.

    Liz explained that after her parents got killed, she wasn't exactly allowed to learn how to fly as part of protecting her from the man that killed her parents. Especially while he was still on the loose for those ten years. They told her that her ability to fly would be a dead giveaway to where she was and he may come after her if he found out. N could understand that but wondered why she didn't try after he was caught. Liz explained that she did try the day he was caught and figured "How hard can it be?". Well...it turned out harder than she ever imagined.

    She made a few attempts at flying by jumping from the roof but crashed one time after another. She would glide a bit by catching some air under her wings but then suddenly lose control and hit the ground or crash into a tree. Day after day it was the same attempt and fail process. Eventually, she felt so embarrassed from the all the crashes, she wanted to give up. She was even more embarrassed when after two weeks of trying, she still couldn't get it and crashed into a tree where a flock of shiny Pidgey, the golden-like tiny bird with orange claws and tiny black eyes, flew off because her crashing there scared them off. She couldn't believe she was out flown by a bunch of Pidgey and seriously just wanted to quit at that point. Though her friends told her they know she'll get the hang of it someday.

    N could imagine the frustration she must've felt. First not being allowed to learn, then by the time she finally could, there was nobody to show her how. He was sure her friends tried to encourage her, but not even they could show her how to fly properly because she was the only one that had wings. He was also sure at this point that if her parents weren't killed, they probably would've taught her themself. He wished he know who to help her but what could he do? He didn't have wings ether...though he felt obligated to do something. He'll have to figure out a plan for her to help her out. Though for now, all he could do was try to encourage her.

    N nodded at her and said, "I hope you get the hang of it to...you we're born with those wings for a reason..."

    Liz nodded also and said, "Thanks...if only I knew what it was..."

    "I'm sure it will reveal itself in time...I'm still trying to find my true purpose...you have time to find yours...remember your journey has only just begun..."

    "You know...your right...my journey truly has only started..." Liz answered

    N nodded as they continued to soar through the clouds and begun heading over Topaz Town. This town truly lived up to its name as all the buildings we're yellow/gold in color. Even the gym, which was a said to be an electric type gym, was decked out in Yellow Topaz gems on the front of building and even the Pokemon Center building was a yellow/golden color with the P being painted a yellow/gold color. Then at the edge of the city, what would appear but an old tall yellow/gold building that N pointed out as his old orphanage.

    It also appeared to have a worn out wooden sign in front of the building that read "Topaz Orphanage" that was in faded gold paint. And just beyond that...the Gem Meadows at last. From the air the ground seemed to sparkle and Pokemon played in the flowers and tall grass below. Though the sparkling ground wasn't what it appeared to be, the Gem Meadows was said to hold every kind of one time power-up gem and every kind of evolution stone that exists.

    N pointed out that this was it and had Reshiram land in the in the grass. As N, Liz and Zoroark got off her back, Liz looked ahead and saw what appeared to be a sparkling white tree covered in a multicolored sparkle. It was surrounded by other berry trees that seemed to flourish around it. It almost looked like a tall white willow-like tree and appeared to be baring fruit. Liz stood in awe and couldn't help but wonder if the really was the legendary Rainbow Tree that bared the fruit.

    "Wow...is that...what I...think it is...?" Liz asked not believing this site she was seeing.

    "Unmistakably yes...that's the tree that bares the Rainbow Fruit...the last one of its kind..." N responded.

    "Wow...the drawings and pictures I saw never did it justice...this is some sight to behold..." Liz said with small smile, "I'd love to get a closer look..."

    N nodded and hoped that Shaymin and Raikou would recognize him because the last thing he wanted to was hurt friends of his. As they walked to the tree, the number of one time use gems and evolution stones seemed to increase. Next to the tree was also a very large clear multicolored rock. This rock is known as what else, the Rainbow Rock and is said to spread out and create the gems and stones in the area. Nobody is sure why but some think was a strange meteor that fell to earth long ago. In fact, it'd rumored there are similar ones in other regions and that's where these special stones and gems come from though this one is only one that's truly known about.

    Crystal stayed up on Liz's shoulder because she didn't want to accidently step on a Thunderstone if there was one on the ground. The reason for this is because the Thunderstone, a clear-green stone with a lightning pattern on it, was the only way to evolve a Pikachu like herself into Raichu. This was something Crystal didn't want...at least not yet. Besides...she didn't want her personality to change ether or lose the fact she had a wonderful heart shaped tail tip on her lightning tail which she would lose due to evolving. Also...Liz appeared to be concerned about the same thing because she's not sure she could handle a Raichu at the moment.

    As they finally reached the tree and berry patch, what appears to be a small moving bush ran past them. It was a darker green with a pink flower on the side. N smiled as he recognized him and as he called Shaymin's name, the "walking small bush" turned around to reveal a white face, green and black eyes and white on the rest of his body. At first Shaymin didn't recognize him but then when he looked again...his eyes seemed to light up a little.

    "N...? N is that you?!" Shaymin asked surprised

    N nodded, "Yes and I brought some friends..." N said pointing at Liz, Crystal, Zoroark and his Reshiram.

    Shaymin smiled a little and looked at them, "Hello there..."

    Liz and Crystal gave him a simple hello since Shaymin could be heard by everyone. N looked at him and petted him a little bit on the head.

    Then he looked at him and said, "Please...let Raikou know not to attack them...we're not here to cause any trouble."

    Shaymin nodded and went to look for Raikou as he appeared behind them and roared. Raikou was another of the legendary dogs and this one was orange in color with gray stripes, with a face that made you think more of a saber-tooth tiger even though it's considered a dog, with red calm eyes and a white thin tail that resembled a lightning bolt and a yellow-like cloud on his back. He demanded to know what we're doing there at the sacred tree and started to prepare a Thunder attack by glowing in a yellow light.

    Shaymin then confronted him, "Raikou wait, they mean no harm! I promise you!"

    N turned to face him and confirmed what he said. Raikou then stopped for a second and got a good look at him and stopped his own attack. Liz's heart was pounding when Raikou was poised to attack but she breathed a sigh of relief as he stopped as he saw N. Raikou couldn't believe he was seeing him after all this time.

    "N...is that...you?" He asked.

    N nodded to confirm it and said, "Yes...please don't attack my friends...they mean no harm to you or anyone here."

    "Fine..." Raikou said has he stood down, "Though...it's been years since I last seen you..."

    "Yes I know it has...and I should thank you both for trusting me with my gift..." N said to him.

    "Aw yes...the Rainbow Fruit..."

    "Yes...it's thanks to you...I can speak with pokemon of all kinds..."

    The thunder pokemon nodded and wanted to know where he has been all these years. As N began explaining to Raikou and Shaymin about his adventure in Unova, Liz was off in her own thoughts. She couldn’t believe all she's seen today and who she even met. Was it an accident or fate that she and N happened to meet today? She wasn't sure herself but yet here she was...next to the most beautiful tree in the entire region. Truly one of a kind. Though even with all the beauty she saw...she noticed the time and looked to the sky. The nighttime was going to coming soon and that was the time she dreaded the most because of the reoccurring nightmares.

    How would N react if he saw her struggling in her sleep because of them? On that note...she hasn't exactly told him what they're about. On another note...this just occurred to her...how would her friends react if they saw her with N? She honestly wasn't sure but Dread would probably be the one that wouldn't trust him most. The reason for this is because of his headstrong personality and he's not the most confident person that people like N can change. As for Seline, she may trust him to a degree but would probably be a bit distant from him.

    Liz still wasn't 100% sure she trusted him ether but at least he considered her a friend. This was a good enough reason in her book because in a way, so did she. Then again, when she thought about it, she wouldn't have asked him to come with her if she didn't. In fact if it came down to it, she would put her life in his hands if she had to because that's how any true friend would feel.

    All the meanwhile, Taylor's plane was preparing to land in the Emerald City nearby. This Emerald City was a little more advanced if you compare it to the one in Wizard of Oz. Tall state of the art buildings that we're coated in a shining green color and busy and busheling like any city. The Gym covered on emerald gems in the front and inside was a greenhouse garden made for grass types. Even the pokemon center in this city fit in with the green theme with the "P" painted green.

    Inside the plane, Taylor was getting ready for rehearsal so she was wearing a beautiful sleeveless white dress, white shoes to match, and had her blue eyes focused on her wooden guitar as she strummed it to a few songs. She was also fair skinned and was a rather tall girl for being twenty-two and had curly gold hair. She also had a normal colored female Pikachu named Note and a Eevee named Meredith which is also a normal colored brown-like fox-looking pokemon with long ears. She called the Pikachu Note because she actually know the move "sing" which is a move that puts opposing pokemon to sleep and she also knew the Teeter Dance move which confuses all other pokemon around her.

    As The two we're listening to her practice and they weren't alone. Mew was still hiding in the plane and listening as well. Suddenly, a beam came through the clouds and hit the plane on the side. The plane then took a nose dive and this tossed Mew out of the place she was hiding and made her hit the floor. Taylor suddenly stopped playing and looked over at Mew in shock. Note nor Meredith could not believe it and the checked to make sure she was ok. Mew stood up and told them she was alright, but just a little shaken up.

    Taylor was glad she was alright then noticed that the plane was going down too fast. The pilot said over the intercom that one of the engines failed and they we're most likely going to crash land. Taylor looked outside and saw the smoke from the engine on the right side. This made her positive they we're attacked on purpose. But...by who or what? It didn't matter because right now stopping or at least slowing the plane was priority number one.

    "Not if I can help it..." Taylor said as she sent her normal colored Espeon.

    Espeon is a purplish cat-like pokemon and a psychic type. Its ears have blue inside and its eyes are also completely blue. She also has a thin purplish tail that has a "Y" like tip at the end and a red jewel on her forehead with a tiny black nose. She asked Espeon to try using Psychic on the plane so it slows down and lands safely. Espeon nodded and started to glow blue as did the outside of the plane but it was a lot to for her to handle so Mew stepped in and used Psychic as well.

    Luckily between the 2 of them...the plane began to slow down just before it hit the ground allowing the pilot to land it safely. It landed on the airport runway and as Taylor, Note, Meredith, Mew, Espeon and the pilot surveyed the damage, it was clear a powerful attack hit and destroyed the engine. Mew looked up and thought she saw the shadow of some dragon in the clouds but it took off. She was certain it was another of Missingno's victims and that means he somehow found out she was on that plane. Taylor couldn't believe something or someone would attack her like that but then wondered if it had something to do with Mew. Then it dawned on her...she did recognize that Mew.

    She was sure of it, that Mew was from the Twilight Forest. She had seen her on a walk through the ruins within the forest once. The ruins there is where the Twilight orb was held until...Missingno broke out of it of course. Though Taylor didn't know about Missingno breaking out so she wondered why Mew followed her there. So she had to know just why and what happened.

    Mew looked at her and said, "I'm sorry I brought this upon you...I got to find my sister and warn her of a powerful coming threat. You we're my only ride here to the Rainbow Region..."

    "Well I'm involved now so there’s no need to be sorry...and I should thank you for helping out my Espeon." Taylor said to her then said, "But what you mean "coming threat"? Explain it to me."

    "Well...your familiar with the Twilight Region's legend right?" Mew asked her.

    Taylor nodded as she was very familiar with them. It was part of her becoming a gym leader in her region, in fact it was the biggest requirement for her to know. As Mew was about to tell her about Missingno, the pilot informed them that he got the call that reporters we're coming because they got word of the near crash. Taylor knew they'd want a few words out of her and she should appear so her fans know she was ok. Though...she also knew that they can't get Mew on camera cause then whoever was after her would know for sure they we're together.

    Taylor looked at Mew and said, "You'll have to finish telling me when I get to the hotel...I don't want these reporters to catch you on Camera ok?"

    Mew nodded because this was important to her and said, "Ok then..."

    Taylor nodded and told the pilot to go get the car and have Mew hide inside it. The pilot answered her with a nod and went to get the car. After waiting about ten minutes, he came back with her Limo which was a long car and your typical black color. Mew just teleported inside just when the reporters started to come. They began surveying the scene and recording it while other asked Taylor questions about what happened.

    "Well, I don't know much but we we're attacked but all my fans should know I'm perfectly fine. Thanks to Espeon we we're able to safely land and I will be able to do my show tomorrow which I am looking forward to." She said to the reporters.

    "Attacked, by who? or what?" a reporter asked.

    "Like I said, that I don't know but you can clearly see the damage...I'm sure this was no accident. I'll take no further questions right now." She said as she headed into the car.

    Despite this, the reporters tried to get more out of her but she already got into the Limo with her Pokemon and Espeon used Psychic to slam the door shut as they drove off. After fifteen minutes driving though the glistening green city, they pull into the hotel Taylor is staying at. Like everything else, it's a tall green building with a giant "EC" in a fancy way on it. As Taylor and her pokemon walked inside, they noticed even the tile floor is green and it has white carpet in the lounge with green chairs and a fireplace, a restaurant, a gift shop and a door that leads to an indoor pool. This place was very high end and only way to afford this place, unless your rich, was to get a awesome deal online.

    Taylor walked in and over to the counter where she showed the guy standing their her papers for her paid room. The well-dressed man who was wearing a suit and tie looked them over. He walked over and handed her the set of keys, which really looked more like cards in a envelope over to her.

    "Floor 13 as you requested Miss Swift is where you'll find your room." He said to her.

    The Building itself was about twenty stories high and Taylor's lucky number as her fans know is 13. So when she heard about a 13th floor in the hotel, she insisted for a room on the floor. Now the reason this is so rare is because a lot of people are quite superstitious about the number 13. Because of that, many hotels that go higher normally skip it and go from twelve to fourteen. That always occurred odd to her as she was born on a 13th of December and it has always seemed to appear when things go right. Also, if it was such a bad number, why was it made in the first place? In fact, 13 is nothing more to her then a misunderstood number.

    She thanked the man as she took the keys. She then put her luggage in a cart and stepped into the elevator with her luggage and her Pokemon. As she pushed the button to head to floor 13, she looked at the keys as they we're marked "Room 1313". That made her smile a little bit knowing now maybe the day won't turn out so bad after all. Mew was hiding in an empty guitar case that entire time since they entered the hotel. Taylor made sure there was a hole in it while they traveled in the limo she can breath and have a hiding place till they got to the room.

    The elevator finally stops and she walks out with everyone to find a long hallway on floor 13. It is a long hallway with white walls and ceilings, wooden doors painted green and on the wall 2 arrows. On the left arrow it said "Rooms 1301-1325" and the right "Rooms 1326-1350". Taylor knew she had to take the left path and when she finally opened her room marked "1313", she used the key to open it and went inside. It was truly a suite room, with a large bed, a covert full of stocked sweets, a small kitchen, a TV and the room itself was quite colorful with a nice view of the city. It also had some paintings of Pokemon above the bed and the bed itself was covered in red pillows and mattress pad upon her request and of course a nice sized bathroom/shower.

    There was also a red chair and a table to use for any purpose as well as a drawer and a medium closet. Taylor closes the door and Note and Meredith go to check out the room as Mew reappears from going invisible.

    Taylor looked at her and said, "Now to pick up where we left off...what was the threat?"

    Mew looked down and said, "Well...your said your familiar with the legends...well...when I fired that aura sphere at the attacks of Zekrom and Reshiram two millenniums ago and created that orb...I had no idea it would make a creature so devastating as the one that came out."

    "A devastating creature...?" Taylor asked, "What do you mean?"

    "Well...this odd creature called itself Missingno...it broke out of the Twilight Orb you see..."

    "A Missingno...? Wow...I never heard of anything like that..."

    "Nether have I...", Mew said, "But, it appeared to be born from the light and dark energy...it seems to have no emotion and it has a strange attack I narrowly escaped..."

    "A strange attack? What you mean by that?" Taylor asked.

    Mew then described what she saw to Taylor about how the attack appears to distort space around the opponent creating an odd box that there's no escape from unless one uses protect like she did. Then how a white aura surrounds the oppose making them feel strong, then the red and purple auras that surround the pokemon make them feel absolutely sick, and finally a multicolored aura that turns a black and white and is absorbed into Missingno ultimately appearing to knock whoever is trapped within out. Taylor is quite shocked to hear this as she never heard of such an attack. Mew continued to further explain that Missingno said it was not only his ultimate attack...that it also absorbs the souls of those fully effected by the attack but only the part of the soul that's connected to one's emotions.

    Taylor couldn't believe that such a Pokemon, if she even wanted to call it that, existed. So she then asked what happened to the pokemon who get their souls taken by this attack. Mew simply told her that they become emotionless servants to him and that Missingno can then go from it's odd black and white mixed backwards "L" shape and change into a shadow form of that soul it captured. This stunned Taylor as she wasn't sure quite what to make of it all this. Mew also told her that the first two souls he captured we're her friends...the legendary servants of the legends themselves.

    This made Taylor really shocked to hear this, "You mean...Togekiss the princess of light and the servant to Reshiram and Zist, the Princess of Darkness, the servant of Zekrom...?"

    Mew nodded sadly and said, "Yes...them..."

    Taylor knew they we're both handpicked princesses by Reshiram and Zekrom or so the story goes. Togekiss was picked as a Togetic which might remind one of a tiny-winged angel that appears to have a crown on its head that's white with five points, a skinny neck, little arms and small feet. It is white with red and blue triangles on its body and has small black eyes and a smile most of the time.

    However, it was exposed to a shiny stone that evolved her into a Togekiss, she gained bigger wings and a bigger body and the five point crown turned to three with red on the right tip and blue on left tip and the middle remained white. She was Reshiram's servant and Zist the Zoroark was picked by Zekrom to be his. They we're very powerful in their own right, so powerful their attacks are said to be infused with the power of the respective realms they live in. How can one attack possibly bring them down like that?

    Taylor looked at Mew and said, "If Missingno beat and is controlling them...then how can we expect to fight it...?"

    Mew sighed and replied, "I don't know but warning my sister is a place to start...she's a shiny Mew that lives in this region and she may know the pokemon Missingno might try going after...because it wants to rule the world..."

    "Alright then...listen, thanks for telling me...I'll do what I can to help you out...I don't like how this situation sounds...and good luck in getting to your sister"

    "Thank you...hope I'll see you again soon." Mew said and she teleported outside and went to go find her sister.

    Taylor watched her as she left and bided her good luck and watched as Mew floated away in the now night sky. Back in the Gem Meadows, Liz had made a dinner of berries in the berry patch and a canned beef stew she had packed, not even bothering the rainbow tree as she promised asking if she can pick the other berries. After Raikou and Shaymin told her yes but not from the rainbow tree, she said she didn't intend to get anything from the tree anyway because she absolutely didn't feel worthy of it at all. Her answer seemed to surprise them as everyone else would say different. Though in her heart, she knew it was it was true because she had a lot to overcome before she could consider herself remotely worthy of having a gift like N's.

    What was another gift if you can't use the ones you got? That's how she saw it...and her gifts we're her being a half angel that can't fly and probably hasn't tapped into her full potential remotely and the fact she can sing. The ability to sing came from her mother and after the tragedy, music was one of the few ways she coped with the pain of losing her parents. Even though she masked her emotions most of the time, music was one of those few things that also allowed her to express her sadness.

    In fact, sometimes when she wanted to cry, she would run to her room, put her music on loud as she could and let the tears flow. Here she didn't have that luxury...sure she had an I-Pod...but now if she listens in the open, everyone can now see her cry. Though that's the basic thing she had to overcome because she realized she barely met N and was able to tell him...why not her friends? What made it easier to tell a total stranger and not a friend she trusted for years?

    She ate quietly as she pondered these thoughts and noticed N seemed to be pretty quiet as well. He was eating a few Oran Berries, kind of a giant blueberry with a white cap at the top, and apples, one of which he gave to Crystal and he gave some to his pokemon to. She watched Crystal eat her apple and she seemed to thank N for it. All N gave her was a simple "Your Welcome", a smile and continued to eat himself. The more Liz thought about it, the more she felt N wasn't such a bad guy to have around. As mysterious as he was, he truly did deeply care for Pokemon of all kinds.

    After they finished their meal, Liz was getting quite tired although she knew what would come the moment she closed her eyes. She pulled out a blue sleeping bag she packed and rolled it out. She then climbed into it and Crystal joined her. Her sleeping bag actually came with a gel infused pillow at the top in which she laid her head on and after a few minutes of looking up at the clear starry sky, she fell asleep. N watched her fall asleep and thought that he hoped she slept well after the long day she had.

    Though a few minutes into sleeping...just as Liz thought, the nightmare came forth once more. Though this time it was slightly different, the strange shadow figure had turned into a fossil-like Kabutops, which is an ancient Pokemon with claws that look like long curved swords on its hands and a steel like body that was more a bronze color and it was rather skinny. This creature looked like that, but all bones and it had her cornered on a cliff. It was surrounded by pokemon that had blank stares in their eyes and showed no emotion and Liz still couldn't make out most of them. Though, the two in the front we're a bit more in focus then the others...what appeared to be a Togekiss surrounded in a light aura and a Zoroark surrounded in a dark one. Liz then looked back and realized she was trapped and the Pokemon around the figure attacked and pushed her off the cliff and she started to fall.

    Outside the dream, she was tossing and turning in her sleep quietly begging for help. N was still up and watching her and wasn't sure what to do. He wanted to wake her up but not even Crystal was having luck with it and she thought about shocking her awake as her red cheeks started to spark. N advised her against it and thought for sure there had to be another way. Then he suddenly remembered that a shiny Meloetta lived there in the meadows as well and perhaps she can help her out.

    N called for her and she came down from the Rainbow Tree where she was hanging out. She smiled as she recognized N as Raikou and Shaymin did. Meloetta was small pokemon that had a big voice and she has a black body with small white legs and a tiny green "belt” in the middle of her body, black arms with oval black hands. She also had a white face, green eyes, little green charm on her forehead and a blue-green hair that was long and looked like a music sheet with green notes on it and in her hair seemed to be a "bunny ears" black microphone/earpiece.

    Meloetta was tiny but she had special gift of her own, she can look into a person's mind and heart and see what song soothed them and learn it almost instantly. She would then sing it for them and it would literally sooth them to the core of their soul. N witnessed this on one of his many trips to the meadows all those years ago. Meloetta asked him what he needed and N explained that Liz appeared to be suffering from a nightmare and he didn't want to wake her up, at least not through force.

    She nodded and understood what he meant so she used her psychic powers to peer into Liz's heart and mind to see what song she liked that would sooth her and allow her some peace. As she searched the songs that are in her heart, there was a lot of them but one particularly stood out that was like an old lullaby. The name of it was appropriate given where they we're at the present moment and it was called "Shaymin's Meadow Song". Meloetta was a little surprised it was that particular song because she herself actually knew this one.

    As she began to sing it, the song seemed to enter Liz's dreams in the form of a light and she recognized the words:

    Deep in the meadow
    Under a willow
    A bed of grass
    A soft green pillow

    Lay down your head
    And close your sleepy eyes
    Then when you wake
    The sun will surely rise

    Here it is safe
    Here it is warm
    Here the Gracideas guard you from all harm

    Here is the place
    Your dreams shall come to pass
    Here is the place
    Where love and peace shall last

    Liz smiled a little and sang along in her sleep and it changed the nature of her dream. Whereas she was no longer falling in fact she was floating in a warm light. N saw the change in her reaction to the song and even noticed Liz's voice, though soft, was rather pleasant to hear. No longer worried about her as she seemed at peace now, he can now go to sleep himself. He laid down under Reshiram's wings and near Zoroark and was happy the song worked.

    Liz slept well the rest of the night and when she later awoke in the morning hours, around eight, she felt more rested then she had in days. She looked up and noticed the sun had indeed risen and was shining brightly in the east. Crystal was also still fast asleep in Liz's sleeping bag so she tried not to disturb her. Though as she went to sit up but Crystal could hear her and got up herself and yawned.

    Liz looked at her with a smile and said, "Good morning there Crystal"

    "<Good Morning yourself...>" Crystal answered back with a smile.

    N was already awake and had picked some more berries and apples for them to eat for breakfast. As he saw the two awake, he brought over the food and said good morning to both of them to. After the answered him back with a morning as well, he inquired Liz on how she slept last night.

    Liz looked at him and said, "Well I got to admit to you...I slept better last night then I have in a long time..."

    "Is that so?"

    "Yes indeed...and...the song I heard...I don't know who was singing it but...that song...my mother used to sing it to me when I was little."

    N's eyes widened a bit surprised, "Your Mother...?" he asked

    Liz nodded at him and said, "Yes...she had quite the voice...and she sang that song to me whenever I was scared or had nightmares."

    This was quite surprising to him to learn that her mother had a beautiful voice. Liz further explained that she actually sang that to her the night before she got killed in that fire. For some reason that night, her voice sounded softer and sadder. Even though she never could've predicted her tragic end to her life, it was like somehow she did know that night. The song brings up both a peace and pain at the same time.

    N then admitted he saw her tossing and turning last night and couldn't stand to see it. Especially since Liz was begging for help in her sleep...so he asked the Meloetta to help and explained her ability. Liz was the amazed one now mainly because N cared that much to help her. Though she figured that it was finally time to tell N about the nightmares. He was one step ahead of her however and decided to inquire her about it first.

    "So what of these nightmares you suffer from, what are they about?" he asked.

    "Well...I'm not sure myself but they normally begin by me being cornered by pokemon poised to attack me...but there’s something not quite right about them. They seem to have emotionless blank stares on their faces and if that isn't troubling enough...there’s a strange creature that is normally around hanging around them...it comes in different forms...with each dream." she answered.

    "Different forms...?" N started, "Well, what was last nights? Because Crystal said last night that it appeared to be worst one yet for you from what she's seen."

    Crystal nodded in response and looked at Liz, "<That's why I got so worried myself...I never heard you cry for help in your sleep before...>"

    N translated what Crystal said for Liz and she nodded in response. She then started explaining about the Bone Fossil Kabutops that it was this time and how she was cornered at a cliff this time. She furthered explained that the attacks hit her pushing her over the cliff and caused her to start falling and that was probably the point where she may've been crying for help in her sleep. Though when the song started, it changed the dream's nature from a dark place to a warm light in which she was floating in.

    N pondered on what she said for a moment until Liz said one other thing that really caught his attention. She mentioned about the Zoroark and Togekiss she saw and the dark and light auras they possessed around their body. He wasn't entirely sure why that sounded a little familiar to him but knew it wasn't his Zoroark she was talking about. After a few more minutes of thinking, he looked at her like he was peering into her soul.

    "These dreams...I don't know exactly what they mean or why they keep coming but they seem real enough to the point of reoccurring night after night. Perhaps...if they are about real events to come...then you’re going to have to take advantage of your gifts." he said to her.

    "What do you mean by that?" Liz asked

    "Well...your wings for one...you saw yourself falling in the dream...your wings would be one of the few things that could save you in that situation." He said.

    Liz realized he was right...if she could fly, she would be able to save herself if anything like that we're to happen. Though, at home, all those tries and fails at flying only left her bumped and bruised...a fall like that could literally take her life. She admitted that she wish she knew how to fly and again N found himself wishing he could help her somehow. He then looked back at Reshiram and suddenly had an idea.

    "You know...when I think about it...perhaps in an odd way...this might be another reason our paths crossed..."

    Liz looked at him, "What do you mean...?"

    "It’s a...odd thought but perhaps...my Reshiram can help you learn to fly..."

    "Your...Your Reshiram....?" Liz asked surprised.

    Liz looked at the majestic white dragon realized she indeed used her wings to fly. Maybe N had a pretty cool idea after all!

    Reshiram seemed to nod and said to N, "<Sure I'll help her best as I can...>"

    N smiled and looked back at Liz and said, "She agreed to help you..."

    "O, wow...thanks Reshiram" Liz said with a small smile, "I know it will be hard but...I really want to learn it..."

    Reshiram nodded at her and Liz hoped this was the beginning of change for her. Finally she was going to learn to fly and finally spread her wings the way a half angel should.
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    Once again, I love it. Caught one mistake though:
    the Gem Meadows was said to hold every kind one time power-up gem and every kind of evolution stone that exists.

    There should be an "of " between kind and one.

    And I love the hunger games reference btw.
    And I might have missed it but is there a PM list for this? If there is, I would love to be on it, if there isn't then no biggie.
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    A PM list? no, honestly I never thought about that...not sure how it works but I soppose I could personally PM you and Zorocario when each chapter goes up. As for the hunger games reference...I thought you'd like that
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    Quote Originally Posted by Liz Azzimagica View Post
    A PM list? no, honestly I never thought about that...not sure how it works but I soppose I could personally PM you and Zorocario when each chapter goes up. As for the hunger games reference...I thought you'd like that
    Yeah that's basically a PM list. Some people say they'll do one on the first post and when you post a new chapter, you send out a mass pm telling the people on the list that the new chapter is up.
    Yeah u mentioned the hunger games and the wizard of oz keep up the good work
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