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Thread: A Journey To Remember!

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    Chapter 1

    I woke up in the morning with eight paws on my chest and two noses sniffing my face. I open my eyes and see the faces of my Poochyena and Zigzagoon light up with excitement that I have awoken. I turn on my side as they try to lick my face to see my parents standing there with a packed bag and.... is that.... a Pokedex?!

    “Guys! You shouldn’t have!” I cry out.

    “Well it’s not everyday you start your journey,” my dad says pridefully.

    My facial expression changes to a mixture of happiness and seriousness. “I'm going to miss you guys.”

    “We’ll miss you too,” my mom says. “Now go downstairs. I made waffles.”

    My favorite! I run downstairs, while Poochie and Ziggy run past me. It’s more their favorite than mine.

    After our breakfast, we all go outside. It’s a beautiful summer morning, with a family of Pidgeys and Pidgeottos flying with their Pidgeot parents. My two Pokemon are chasing each other around in the sun. My neighbor is outside with his Machop and Paras. They both have beaten my Pokemon before.

    “Hey Matt! Wanna battle?” I yell, feeling lucky.

    “Are you serious? Do you WANT to be swamped again?”

    “Thats not going to happen this time! Poochie, Ziggy, let’s battle!”

    Matt and I walk into the street and some of the block gathers. Another neighbor, Liam and my brother, also named Liam, volunteer to referee. Matt lines up Machop and Paras up.

    “Double battle! Lets go!” And without warning he yells, “Machop, Karate Chop! Paras, Leech Life!”

    To be continued...

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    Chapter 2

    Machop throws a heavy hand towards Zigzagoon. He quickly dodges it, like we practiced. He then quickly counters with a strong tackle. Machop falters back a few feet. Quickly, Paras jumps out of nowhere with a growing claw, and hits Poochyena with a strong blow. You can see Poochie’s hurt, but there is one benefit to that. Poochyena gets back up, and his feet start to glow. This was because of his ability, Rattled.

    He runs like the wind, and then stops quickly, kicking up a strong cloud of dust and sand, that blinds both Machop and Paras. The he quickly uses Bite on Paras, which causes immense damage.

    Suddenly, the hair on Ziggy’s back then starts to glow. I hold up my pokedex and scan the move. It is called Pin Missile. Then the glowing hairs start to shoot off and hit Machop, one by one. Then, Ziggy opened his mouth, and the move that we have practiced over and over started up. Sparks formed around his teeth, and a small beam launched at Machop. He fell to the ground, and fainted.

    “Machop! No!” Matt cried out. “Paras! Leech Life!”

    Quickly, a small beam hit Poochyena. It seemed to hurt Poochyena, but heal Paras. But this activated Rattled even further, and Poochie ran so fast that he was barely visible. His teeth began to ignite. It was Fire Fang!

    “Great job guys!” I screamed.

    Poochie then sprinted and bit Paras with its ignited teeth. Paras fainted.
    “I won!” I screamed. “My pokemon learned a bunch of new moves, and I won!”

    The block roared for my victory. After all, they are my first fans.

    Then, my little sister came up to me with her Phanpy by her side and Wingull on her shoulder. “Conor! I have a great idea!” she exclaimed. “You should challenge the gyms of the region! I know it’s always been your dream!”

    I looked at her and said, “That’s exactly what I'm gonna do.”

    To be continued...

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    LOL, it's really good! I like how you used me, haha. Anyway, there are really close to know mistakes. In the first paragraph, you have an "ANd" that should be "and". LOL I like it a lot, remember to write on mine! XP


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    lol thanks! and definatley!
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    Chapter 3

    I have been dreaming of beating the gyms of my home region since I was a kid. My region is called the Rentoh region. It is a large island that has no pokemon unique to itself. We are the product of settlers from Unova, Kanto, and many other regions throughout many years, so we have a diverse population of pokemon. My family is full of well known trainers. My dad is the retired Elite Four Champion, my cousin is the new Saffron City Gym Leader, filling in for Sabrina while she follows her dream of becoming an actress, and my grandma is a gym leader.

    My grandma is relatively easy to beat, so she will be my first badge. Her official expertise is normal types, but she really just picks the most ‘adorable’ pokemon out there.

    Lucky for me, she lives in my town.

    So, I started to walk to her house. My two pokemon started running around me in circles, yipping and barking at each other. I think they too are excited about getting our first gym badge. I run through possible strategies. Zigzagoon has Pin Missile and Charge Beam for us. Poochyena has Fire, Thunder, Ice and Poison Fangs, thanks to his breeder. I think all of these together can result in victory. At last, I reached my grandmother’s gym. Or should I say house.

    I rang the doorbell. After a few seconds, my grandpa and his Castform came to the door. He is a bit of a weather freak, so he likes knowing tomorrow’s forecast in advance. Right now, Castform was in the Sun form.

    “Hey Grandpa. Is Grandma here?” I asked.

    “Hey Conor. She’s in the back right now. Come on in,” he says.

    “Thanks.”

    We walk through the house, towards the back door.

    “Good luck,” He says.

    I walk out, into the open lawn that is the battleground.

    “Grandma! I’m ready for my first gym battle!”

    “Okay,” she replies.

    She throws a Pokeball, which releases a Teddiursa.

    “Let’s go.”

    To be continued....


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    Please read the Fan Fiction Rules: each chapter must be at least two pages long on Microsoft Word in standard font size, and it looks like you're falling a bit short. Please try to bump up each of your chapters. The best way to do this would be by adding description - describe people, places, things and Pokemon, as well as actions and emotions. During battle, describe how each Pokemon acts and reacts - if they look like they have a lot of energy or are panting and struggling just to stand. Show how a Pokemon reacts to getting hit by an attack - do they cry out in pain, do their legs start shaking, do they collapse in one go or struggle to stay standing? It's little things like this that can add excitement to a story (while also adding the needed length).

    Please be sure to make the proper edits, as it really shouldn't take long. If you need ideas or inspiration on how to do it, read a few other fics here and see how they do it. Good luck,
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    Oh! I'm sorry! I'll be sure to start lengthening it. But what size is standard size>
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    I believe it's Arial size 12. It's detailed in the fanfictions rules thread (sticky, top of this section), so it's worth a read.

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    Ok! Thanks! And does it HAVE to be 2 pages or can it lean towards 1 1/2?
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    Chapter 4

    “Go Poochie!” I yelled.

    On my command, Poochyena lunged forward, growling, teeth barred. It’s surprising that he can bark at a Pokemon so adorable and innocent as a Teddiursa.

    “Teddy, use Fury Swipes!” my grandma yells.

    Suddenly, Teddiursa starts to bombard Poochyena with multiple scratches on the face and body.

    “Poochyena! Quickly! Poison Fang!”

    Suddenly, Poochyena’s teeth become a disgusting, acidic looking purple color. He dashed towards the Little Bear pokemon, and sunk its teeth into it. Teddiursa screamed in pain, and my Grandma suddenly called out to Teddiursa.

    “Use your new move, Teddiursa!!!”

    The bear’s claws began to glow with a white aura. It then hit my Poochyena with these razor sharp claws. I scanned it with my Pokedex. It was called Slash. I can definitely see how it earned its name.

    Poochyena was weak. This is the hardest it’s ever battled. It’s knees were shaking tremendously.

    Then I yell out “Poochyena! Assurance!”

    Poochyena starts to charge at Teddiursa. He has a shocking look of ambition in his eye, devotion even deeper than the ocean.

    “Teddiursa! Another Slash!”

    The exact second that Poochyena hits him, Teddiursa hits him with a razor sharp claw.

    They collide so hard, a cloud of dust gets kicked up.

    The dust clears. And I see a passed out Teddiursa, and a Poochyena struggling to stand up. A feeling of pride pumps through my body.

    “Great job, Poochie!” I scream. I take out his pokeball. “Now just take a nice rest, Poochyena.”

    A red light comes out of the pokeball, hits Poochyena, and he dissolves into light, and is recalled.

    The referee called out “Challenger: One. Leader: Zero. Currently ahead is the challenger, Conor.”

    I spend a little bit thinking over in my head.

    I’ve known Grandma’s pokemon for years. Which could it be? It could be Skitty, or maybe Jumpluff? Oh, I know! It’s Purrloin. Or Glameow... Or maybe even Meowth! Ugh.... she has so many different Pokemon to choose from! Most can probably beat Zigzagoon! Will I not actually win my first badge on the first try?

    “Good game so far, Conor.” My grandma yells across the field. “You have really developed into quite the trainer, evident by the way you battled with your little Poochyena. I can’t wait to see how Zigzagoon will battle!”

    As soon as she said that, I could see I was at a major disadvantage. She has known my 2 Pokemon since they were both born, yet she has so many pokemon I can not even begin to keep track of them all.

    “Well let’s find out, Grandma!” I said. “Go Zigzagoon!”

    The second I sent out little Zigzagoon, he was as peppy and eager as ever. Just like Poochyena, he knew what his goal was, and wanted it bad. Perhaps even more so than me.

    “Nice to see you again, Ziggy!” My grandma says, happily. “Do either of you remember my Azumarill?”

    Right when she says its name, the Aqua Rabbit pokemon appeared in front of Zigzagoon, almost 3 times its size.

    To be continued....

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    Quote Originally Posted by ysmr97 View Post
    Ok! Thanks! And does it HAVE to be 2 pages or can it lean towards 1 1/2?
    the Fan Fiction Rules: each chapter must be at least two pages long on Microsoft Word
    at least. So I guess 1 1/2 is not recommended. Mine are usually 3-4

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    Chapter 5

    Zigzagoon looked the big, blubbery water rabbit in the eyes. Azumarill looked down at Ziggy with an intense glare. Even then, my Tiny Raccoon Pokemon did not back down. Instead, he glared right back with his deep brown eyes.

    Then, without warning, my grandma screamed "Azumarill! Quick, use Water
    Gun!"

    Suddenly, the Azumarill sucked in a deep breath, and then quickly exhaled, shooting a strong shot of water at Zigzagoon.

    Zigzagoon was pushed back a few inches, but still stood his ground. He just shook his body until he was dry, and awaited my first command.

    "Zigzagoon! Pin Missile!"

    He then began to shoot razor sharp needles at Azumarill.

    "Azumarill! Defense Curl!"

    Before the spikes even hit, Azumarill curled into a ball. When the needles hit, they didn't seem to do much damage.

    "Azumarill! While rolled up, use Rollout!"

    Azumarill started to roll, and like a runaway tire, it rolled towards Zigzagoon.

    "Zigzagoon! Quickly! Use Headbutt on Azumarill!"

    Zigzagoon started to dash at the Azumarill, and when there was a good distance between the two, he launched himself at the rolling rabbit.

    Both where knocked back, but Zigzagoon was launched through the air. The small raccoon flew right into a nearby pond. Goldeen in the pond swam away in fear from the sudden splash in their aquatic home.

    After a second or two, Zigzagoon resurfaced. Then, his usually dark brown eyes turned an aqua color. I quickly got out my pokedex to scan this unusual occurance.

    The second I scan Ziggy, he summoned a large wave out of the pond water, and began to ride on it. This, the pokedex defined as the move Surf.

    The wave crashed on the still dazed Azumarill. On the way down, Zigzagoon hit the Aqua Rabbit with a strong Headbutt.

    The whole grass field became flooded and waterlogged. Azumarill was waist deep in water. It was hurt, but not too badly.

    I looked around the field. It was a grass field, with white lines outlining it. Outside those lines, where a pool and a few garden decorations, like birdbaths and such. Suddenly, I had an excellent idea.

    "Zigzagoon! Jump up onto that birdbath!”

    He looked confused, but he did as I said. Then he looked at me, expecting my next command.

    Without hesitation, I screamed, “Ziggy, use Charge Beam on the field!”

    Up on his perch, Ziggy summoned a few sparks in between his teeth. He then shot a beam of electricity at the flooded field. The water conducts the electricity, and Azumarill falls.

    “The Leader Dorothy is out of usable Pokemon. The winner is the challenger, Conor!” The referee calls out.

    I am dumbfounded. I can barely believe I have won my first gym battle!

    My grandmother holds out her pokeball. “Azumarill, return!” she says as the pokemon dissolves into light that retreats into the pokeball. “Great match guys!” She then yells to me and my pokemon.

    She then begins to walk along the sidelines of the field to reach me. When she finally gets there, she hands me a shiny badge, in the shape of a paw print.

    It was my first gym badge!

    After the battle, we walk back inside to see my Grandpa with his Castform, which is now in its Rain Form.

    I then say my goodbyes, then walk outside, admiring my first gym badge as I hold it in my fingers.

    But, suddenly, a dark figure swoops down, tears it from my hands, and flies away.

    To be continued....

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    Wow! It's really great! The chapters getting longer really does make it better, and I can't stop reading! No joke! I mean, its not perfect, but Its very welll written and I love the way this is going! Kepp up the good work! Also, Later, before conor leavs for his journey, you should have the Liams double Battle Him! Or, are they going with him? Bleh, dont ruin it! XD


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    haha that just made my day xD and one of your predictions may or may not come true xD
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    Chapter 6
    “Hey! Come back here!” I yell after the bird-like silhouette as it flies down the street.

    I need to get this back! I thought to myself, frantically. This is my first gym badge! We worked so hard for it!

    I started to sprint after the flying shape in the sky. I took out both of my pokeballs and release Poochyena and Zigzagoon.

    “Hey guys, ya see that flying thing? I think it’s a pokemon! Anyways, it stole our badge! The one we worked so hard on!” I explained to my two partner pokemon. “We have to chase after it and get that badge back!”

    The look on their faces is astonishing. They both had expressions of mixed devastation and devotion. They worked so hard at this badge, almost to the point of pure exhaustion, and in seconds it was torn right out of their grasp. Or, technically, mine.

    They shook off their hard feelings, and they rushed ahead.

    But, alas, the flying Pokemon was too fast for them.

    Well, at least for the moment.

    Almost completely in unison, my Zigzagoon and Poochyena body’s were both engulf in an almost blinding white light. Their shapes began to morph into that of another form.

    “They.... They are.... evolving!” I murmured softly to myself. “I can’t believe it! Poochie and Ziggy are evolving!”

    Soon, the bright white light faded. There stood two new Pokemon, who looked vaguely familiar but still completely foreign to me. As soon as they fully developed into these new forms, they took off like lightning.

    I took out my Pokedex to scan my two new Pokemon, while all three of us sprinted after the flying Pokemon with our first badge.

    The first one was called Mightyena. It was apparently the evolution of Poochyena. The second was named Linoone, and he was the evolution of Zigzagoon.
    But wait, there was a third entry!

    On my Pokedex screen appeared a Raven looking Pokemon. It’s name was Murkrow. It’s Pokedex entry specifically said that it loves to steal and collect shiny things. The pokemon with my badge was a Murkrow.

    I looked up and realized how close Linoone and Mightyena where to that Murkrow. It’s gunna be a little hard to get used to their new found speed.

    “Linoone! Charge Beam!” I yell. “Mightyena! Use Ice Fang!”

    Linoone shot his signature Charge Beam at Murkrow, and sure enough it was a direct hit.

    The Murkrow fell towards the ground, but caught itself in mid air and started flapping away again. But, this time, Mightyena gained extra speed and launched itself into the air, and bit Murkrow with his Icy Fangs.

    Murkrow fell to the ground, and fainted on the spot.

    I saw the badge right there next to it. I bent down and picked it up.

    “Guys! I got it!” I yelled to my newly evolved Pokemon. “I got the badge back!”

    I looked at Murkrow. In a way I felt bad for him. He just wanted a shiny thing to call his own. He just happened to like my badge.

    I remembered something that i had it my pocket. It was an empty pokeball. I took it out of my pocket, and threw it at Murkrow. It trapped him inside, started to shake, and then stopped, ensuring his capture.

    I took Murkrow to the nearest Pokemon Center, and while I waited for the nurse to heal him, I made him something I knew he’d like. When I got his Pokeball, I let him out.

    “Hey Murkrow, sorry for the fight.” I said in a sympathetic tone. “I understand that you like shiny things, but that one thing meant a lot to me and my friends. But I made you this.”

    I pulled out a shiny gold coin on a necklace, and put it around his neck.

    “I hope you like it.”
    Murkrow sat there for a few seconds, and it seems like he was, kind of, speechless, in Pokemon terms.

    He then looked up at me, smiled, and replied peppily “Krow!”

    To be continued....


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    Its awesome! XD


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    I'm interested in this fic! There should have been more backstory to how Conor obtained poochie and ziggy... it was kind of random. I also didn't like how they evolved so quick into the fic...
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    Eh... I'd say that those complaints are invalid. Think of the Anime or Manga. They always evolve at obvious times. And, I dont think there needs to be a back story; in fact, a back story would ruin it. A story is something that you read, while giving you some imagination too. If I read the Hunger Games, and it said "I like to hunt. I will die in an arena. I fight. I won." That would be terrible. But, in a story like this one, its description and lack of description leaves the perfect room for an individuals creativity. Maybe Conor caught Zigzagoon first, but then Poochie was his first encounter. Maybe Poochie was a gift from a professor, but zigzagoon befriended Conor afterwards. The possibilities are endless, and insignifigant details such as yours are the perfect kind that shouldnt be stated. Nothing too major, but also nothing of such unimortance.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Xragon View Post
    I'm interested in this fic! There should have been more backstory to how Conor obtained poochie and ziggy... it was kind of random. I also didn't like how they evolved so quick into the fic...
    Hey buddy! I understand your complaints, but remember that I plan this fic. I understand the vagueness of Poochie and Ziggy. I am planning to go into their backstory more and more in the following chapters, maybe even putting a possible Murkrow storyline I was toying with aside for now. I don't want to just tell u now how he got them. And for the evolutions, in-game Zigzagoon and Poochyena evolve at low levels, and they have just beaten an extremely hard gym and a tough neighborhood trainer. And Conor has probably had them for a while.... Thanks for the feedback, and read on! (:
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    i love your fan fiction!!! keep it up!!!!

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    Saw this pop up at the top a few times and decided to check in. I noticed it lacked an actual review so here you go.

    I wake up in the morning with 8 paws on my chest and 2 noses sniffing my face. I open my eyes and see the faces of my Poochyena and Zigzagoon light up with excitement that I have awoken. I turn on my side as they try to lick my face to see my parents standing there with a packed bag and.... is that.... a pokedex?!
    Present tense. Kind of risky if you ask me. Any number under 100 must be written out so instead of 8 it should be eight. This last part just bugged me. It might be my dislike in present tense, but who knows.

    My face goes a mixture of happy and serious.
    This is, well, not great. How can a face be an emotion? Oh wait, you meant the expression. It would be nice to include that. Instead you could write, My facial expression instantly changed to one in between happiness and seriousness. Or something like that.

    It’s a beautiful summer morning, with a family of Pidgey’s and Pidgeotto’s flying with their Pidgeot parents.
    There is nothing possessive here. The apostrophes are not needed.

    Thats not gunna happen this time! Poochie, Ziggy, let’s battle!”
    Contraction. Apostrophe needed.

    Me and my Matt walk into the street and some of the block gathers.
    First thing wrong with this is that in the first person, you always mention yourself last. This should be Matt and I. Secondly, you forgot to delete my. The third thing is just something that bugs me. Instead of and some you could use as some.

    Matt lines up Machop and Paras up.
    Two ups. Take one out.

    “Machop, Karate Chop! Paras leech life!”
    Two things:

    1. There needs to be a comma after Paras.
    2. Why capitalize Karate Chop, but not Leech Life?

    Very short chapter. So short it breaks the rules. Psychic already warned you about that though. I applaud her. She does her job well. Moving on.

    Chapter 2

    He runs like the wind, and then stops quickly, kicking up a Sand Attack
    This is the kind of writing you want to avoid. Describe the attack instead of just using the name. There are obvious exceptions to this such as Tackle where the Pokemon literally tackles them.

    “Conor! I have a great idea!” She exclaimed.
    Lowercase she.

    Chapter 3

    After a few seconds, my Grandpa and his Castform came to the door.
    Since grandpa is not being used as a proper noun it is lowercase.

    He is a bit of a weather freak, so he likes knowing tomarrow’s forecast in advance.
    Tomorrow's.

    “Good luck.” He says.
    Comma before end quotation, lowercase he.

    Chapter 4

    They collide so hard, a cloud of dust gets kicked up.
    I'm having trouble understanding how those attacks made a cloud of dust erupt into the air.

    The referee called out “Challenger: One. Leader: Zero. Currently ahead is the challenger, Conor.”
    You're missing a comma after out.

    “Good game so far, Conor.”
    His grandma just called GG...Comma before end quotation, not period.

    Chapter 5

    Then, without warning, my grandma screamed "Azumarill! Quick, use Water
    Gun!"
    There's a weird spacing here. It continued on the next line. Might want to fix that. Also, a comma is missing after screamed.

    Outside those lines, where a pool and a few garden decorations
    Were.

    Chapter 6

    It’s name was Murkrow. It’s Pokedex entry specifically said that it loves to steal and collect shiny things.
    Its. This was the first time I saw you mess up on that.

    and bit Murkrow with his Icy Fangs.
    Not capitalized.

    This needs...a lot of work. None of the characters have any depth. I don't even know what they look like. As of now they're all just blobs to me. The only description given of the region was that it was an island...and that was all. Is it mostly forested? Does a desert cover it all? The speed at which it is moving is also kind of fast. This is probably due to your ridiculously short chapters. As Psychic already told you, the minimum is two pages in MS Word, but why not shoot for more? That gives more room for character development, action, plot twists, and more. Your entire cast of characters are completely flat. They only have one emotion; happiness. It just strikes me as odd that no one is ever bummed or sad.

    The two battles you've had so far have been boring to say the least. I can get over Machop's loss because type advantage isn't everything, but how did Conor win against his grandmother with such little training? Conor himself even admitted that Poocheyena was weak. The round with Azumarill was even worse. Zigzagoon randomly learned a move (an HM move he doesn't learn naturally by the way) and uses it to perfection without any practice. Also, their sudden evolution irks me. Why evolve when chasing Murkrow and not in the battle against the leader? I would have had less problems with it then.

    There is a lot to work on (characters, development, description, etc), but that doesn't make it impossible to do. Flesh out your characters and your story. Lengthen the chapters so you have more wiggle room. And don't forget to read the chapter over before posting. That will stop the little mistakes from popping up. I wish you luck. If you have any questions then VM or PM me. I am always available and will always reply. Until next time.
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    IM sorry for all the minor grammetical errors. And, in the anime, there is no such thing as TM's or HM's, yet pokemon know surf. Also, in the anime there are random dust clouds when two attacks collide, just like my fan fic. And for the sudden evolution, they have just worked extremely hard at their 1st badge, and a Pokemon has taken it. It is too fast for them, so to be able to retreive it, they evolved. And can u point out where I state that Poochie was weak? But, thanks for the negative criticism. I can only improve.
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    I hope not, because that was a flagrantly rule-breaking post. Treat critics with respect even if you disagree with them; it's in the rules. Yes, even critics who aren't mods, who have every bit as much of a right to say what they honestly think.

    Chapter 64: Hide and Seek
    The story of an ordinary boy on an impossible quest in a world that isn't as black and white as he always thought it was.
    (rough draft of the remaining chapters finished for NaNoWriMo; to be edited and posted)

    Morphic
    (completed, plus silly extras)
    A few scientists get drunk and start fiddling with gene splicing. Ten years later, they're taking care of eight half-Pokémon kids, each freakier than the next, while a religious fanatic plots to murder them all.

    Lengthy fanfiction reviewing guide / A more condensed version
    Read and I will be very happy for a large number of reasons.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ysmr97 View Post
    And can u point out where I state that Poochie was weak?
    Poochyena was weak. This is the hardest it’s ever battled. Taken straight from chapter 4. Unless you meant to say that he was weak from battling then my point stands. IF you did mean weak from battling then I apologize about the misconception.
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    While it is very reminiscent of a lot of journey trainer fics, it held my attention. It stands out among a lot of the other fics I've read lately and I'm excited to continue the story.

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    oh sorry I meant he was weak from battleing. Ill change that l8r.
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