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    I hope writing this kind of Pokemon story won't get me into trouble. Anyway, I am writing another one of my own Pokemon stories. This one is called Pokemon: Experimentations. To warn you, unlike my own Pokemon Mystery Dungeon series which is more comedic and has some blood in it, this one is more dramatic, scarier and has lots of blood in it. (Although it's not like you're going to see it). Just like my Pokemon Mystery Dungeon series, Pokemon: Experementations will also be a trilogy. I thought I would share this with you. The sequel, Pokémon Experimentation 2 can be read here: www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?599619. The Pokemon Mystery Dungeon story can be read here: www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?595950NO MEAN COMMENTS PLEASE.

    Plot- The Moon City Corporation have been doing experiments. They are using a type of illegal parasitic drugs on Pokemon. What this does is make them bigger, angrier and more violent. A pokemon who gets hurt by one will also be infected with this. This parasite has no effect on humans. There is also a vaccine for this. With samples of the vaccine, a group of Rescue team members and their partner pokemon travel to an island off the coast of Moon City, where they say their secret underground laboratory is. To get there, they have to go in the big twenty floor skyscraper on top of it.

    Characters:

    Nat Summers- One of the two main protagonist. He is seventeen years old. His partner pokemon is Emboar. He has been knowing his Emboar since Nat was a baby and a Tepig. He deeply cares about him.

    Maria Blossom- The other main protagonist. She is sixteen years old. Her partner Pokemon is Samurott. Also cares and knew Samurott when she was a baby and an Oshawott.

    Kevin Richards- He is eighteen years old. His partner pokemon is Electivire. Nobody knows his past or where he came from. Only thing they know is that he appeared out of nowhere and became a member of the Rescue Team.

    Aaron Caverns- He is also seventeen just like Nat Summers. His partner pokemon is Rampardos. He and his pokemon mysteriously disappear in the beginning of the story.

    Sarah Willard- She is fifteen years old. Her partner pokemon is Weezing. A girl who came to the island to investigate the parasitic activities.

    Some of you might be mad that there is no trainer with a Serperior. One of the main characters of the second series will have one. (I have the whole story and series in my head)

    Prologue:

    A helicopter carrying Rescue Team Members: Nat Summers, Maria Blossom, Aaron Caverns, Kevin Richards and their partner pokemon: Emboar, Samurott, Electrivire and Rampardos arrives at an island off the coast of Moon City. When they get off onto the island, they find a Noctowl and a Primeape infected with the parasite.

    “Rampardos, use smack down!” shouted Aaron. Rampardos used smack down on the Noctowl and the Moctowl got knocked out. Primeape used karate chop. “Dodge the attack, Rampardos!” shouted Aaron. Rampardos avoided the attack.

    “Emboar, use flamethrower!” shouted Nat. Emboar used flamethrower on Primeape an it fainted. Nat used a vaccine on the two pokemon. The pilot, Phil leaves with the helicopter. “No, Stop! PHIL, DON’T LEAVE US!” yelled Nat, but it was too late. The remaining team mates and their pokémon escape into a twenty story building where they thought was safe. For now...


    Chapter 1: The Nightmare Begins

    "I don't know what's going on," said Maria a little scared.

    "Me neither. But this is the only safe place we can be in right now," said Nat.

    "You two go on ahead with your pokemon," said Kevin. "Aaron , our pokemon and I will stay and wait for you guys."

    "Alright," said Nat and pointed at the door across the hall. "Come on Emboar, let's go."

    "Take care you four," said Aaron. He smiled.

    "Let’s go Samurott," said Maria. She didn’t sound too scared now. They went to the far left door in the main entrance area and opened it. They went in. Everything was quiet, except for the sound of a ticking clock.

    "There's nothing here," said Nat looking cautiously. "But there is another door across the hall,"

    "Let's go then," said Maria. Nat opened the door and they went in. They hear a noise across the hall. The noise of a pokemon.

    "Stay back Maria. I'm going to check it out," whispered Nat. He and his Emboar walked quietly at the end of the hall to check what's going on. It was a big Sandslash. A few seconds later, it noticed them. "Emboar use mach punch on it!" shouted Nat. Emboar uses mach punch so hard, he knocked Sandslash out. Nat used the cure to remove the parasite on it.

    "Well that was too easy," said Maria and laughed.

    "I wonder what was a Sandslash doing in a place like this?" Nat asked. "Anyways, I want to know why are The Moon City Corperation doing this?"

    "It's very wrong," said Maria. "I can't believe they would do such a thing."

    "Yeah I can't believe it either," said Nat. He had a sad face. "Let’s go back to Aaron and Kevin. There's nothing else here. The rest of the doors here are locked from the other side." When they go back to the main entrance hall, they find Aaron and Kevin gone.

    "Aaron? Kevin?" asked Nat. No answer.

    "What you think happened to them?" asked Maria.

    "I don't know. It's like they just vanished. Let’s go check what's behind that door," said Nat pointing at the door across the other side of the hall. They go through the door.

    "Oh my gosh!" cried Maria. "It's blood!"

    "Yeah and lots of it too," shouted Nat. "I have a really bad feeling about this!" They go through the other door on the other side. They are back outside.

    "OH NO! IT'S A DEAD BODY!" yelled Maria.

    "You're right it is!" shouted Nat. He examines the body. "It looks like he has been scratched badly to death. By a pokemon.

    "What. But... that can't be... this doesn't make sense. Can this parasite make pokemon strong enough to kill?" asked Maria suspiciously.

    "By the look of this, I think they are," said Nat sadly.

    "What... is going on around here?" asked Maria.



    End of Chapter 1. By the way, please don't judge what pokemon is fighting the other and the moves that they use. To be honest I really don't know what ACTUAL moves most pokemon uses. I know some. And yes, some of you might find the chapters short too.
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    Going to start with: That was very short. Not bad, but short. Must be at least 2 Word Document pages long.
    Quote Originally Posted by Tepig Pignite Emboar 969
    A helicopter carrying Rescue Team Members: Nat Summers, Maria Blossom, Aaron Caverns, Kevin Richards and their partner pokemon: Emboar, Samurott, Electrivire and Rampardos arrives at an island off the coast of Moon City. When they get off onto the island, they find pokemon infected with the parasite. After a few seconds of battling them and curing them, the pilot leaves with the helicopter. The four team members escape into a twenty story building where they thought was safe. For now...
    Uhh... What!? You just give us an interesting paragraph... That should be much more in depth and longer! How do the trainers interact with Pokemon? What's the parasite? A few seconds of battling, you say? What makes them battle so fast? Does the parasite make them easy defeats and weak? This could be good, but you need a lot more description.

    "I don't know what's going on." said Maria.

    "Me neither. But this is the only safe place we can be in right now" said Nat.

    "You two go on ahead with your pokemon" said Kevin "Me, Aaron and our pokemon will stay and wait for you guys."

    "Alright" said Nat. "Come on Emboar let's go."

    "Take care you four" said Aaron.
    There are so many mistakes in this. Let's do it bit by bit.

    "I don't know what's going on." said Maria.
    Fine.

    "You two go on ahead with your pokemon" said Kevin "Me, Aaron and our pokemon will stay and wait for you guys."
    Here we go. The end of the first dialogue needs a comma, and so does the said Kevin. And, it should be Aaron and I, not Me, Aaron...

    "Alright" said Nat. "Come on Emboar let's go."
    Try to vary what you use for dialogue. Instead of "said," just try, "asked," or ,"mumbled, shouted, whipsered, cryed, bellowed." And describe the "said." He said... softly, angerily, enraged, with anger, surprised, with dissapointment. Get it? : D

    "Take care you four" said Aaron.

    "Lets go Samurott" said Maria. They went to the far left door in the main entrance area and opened it. In they went. Everything was quiet. Except for the sound of a ticking clock.

    "There's nothing here" said Nat. "But there is another door across the hall"

    "Let's go then" said Maria. Nat opened the door and they went through. The hear a noise across the hall. The noise of a pokemon.

    "Stay back Maria. I'm going to check it out" said Nat. He and his Emboar walked quietly at the end of the hall to check what's going on. It was a big Sandslash. A few seconds later it noticed them. "Emboar Use Mach Punch on it!" Emboar use Mach Puch so hard he knocked Sandslash out. Nat used the cure to remove the parasite on it.

    "Well that was too easy" said Maria.

    "I wonder what was a Sandslash doing in a place like this?" Nat asked. "Anyways, I want to know why are The Moon City Corperation doing this?"

    "It's very wrong" said Maria. "I can't believe they would do such a thing"

    "Yeah I can't believe it either" said Nat. "Lets go back to Aaron and Kevin. There's nothing else here. The rest of the doors here are locked from the other side." When they go back to the main entrance hall, they notice Aaron and Kevin gone.

    "Aaron? Kevin?" asked Nat. No answer.

    "What you you think happened to them?" asked Maria.

    "I don't know. It's like they just vanished. Lets go check what's behind that door" said Nat pointing at the door across the other side of the hall. They go through the door.

    "Oh my gosh" cried Maria. "It's blood!"

    "Yeah and lots of it too" said Nat. "I have a really bad feeling about this." They go through the other door on the other side. They are back outside.

    "OH NO. IT'S A DEAD BODY!" yelled Maria.

    "You're right it is!" shouted Nat. He examines the body. "It looks like he has been scratched badly to death. By a pokemon."

    "What. But... that can't be... this doesn't make sense. Can this parasite make pokemon strong enough to kill?"

    "By the look of this, I think they are" said Nat sadly.

    "What... is going on around here"? asked Maria.
    There are so many mistakes, it's hard to show them all. I will say that you forget punctuation constantly. And, the characters speech is very... plain. They sound like robots. Look at some stories for reference. I like, "A Hero's Bond" or try mine," Across the World, and Back Again." My friend has one called," A Journey to Remember." Look at those, or any, really. This has many mistakes, and just proof-read and revise your work before posting. It helps.

    I hope this doesn't get locked. I don't think it will, just make sure to lengthen your paragraphs a ton. They're extremely short.

    Good Luck, with your fic. Don't take this so harshly, because I only mean to fix the mistakes and problems in your chapter. Byee! XD
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    I edited chapter one with more detail and correct punctuation.

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    It looks better, but still kinda short. Mine are usually 2-3 and a half pages long.


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    It was actually 2 pages in microsoft word.

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    Chapter 2: Searching for Aaron and Kevin

    Nat and Maria stared at the dead body.

    “Look, he’s holding a piece of paper,” said Maria with a suspicious look. Nat picked up the piece of paper. Nat read the paper. It read:

    Dear Sam,

    “I’ve been doing some research on what the Moon City Corporation is doing to these pokemon. I found out that they are using a parasitic drug called the A-59 parasite that makes them stronger, more violent, angrier and bigger. When injected with this, the pokemon will no longer have the power to control itself. I’ve heard the only way to get them cured was to inject them with the C-30 vaccine. However, I don’t have this vaccine to cure the pokemon outside of my building. I have a bad feeling that I will no longer be here because of how strong they are… I wish you luck in curing these pokemon.”


    Sincerely,
    James Stone.

    “Poor man,” said Nat sadly. “So they name of the parasite is called the A-59.”

    “And the cure is called the C-30,” said Maria finishing Nat’s sentence. Suddenly, a bunch of Pidgeys came flying towards them.

    “There's too many of them!” shouted Nat. “RUN!” So he, Maria, Emboar and Samurott ran back to the door and went in. They examined the blood in the hall again.
    “It must have been from that man,” whispered Maria. “Let’s go upstairs now. We might find Aaron and Kevin there.”

    “Right,” said Nat. He looked at his Emboar. “Let’s go,” he told him. They went out the other door and went upstairs to the second floor. They went through one of the doors. They were in a hall with creepy stuff, broken glass and more blood.

    "I don't like this," whispered Maria. Suddenly, two Herdiers came crashing through the windows.

    “I’ll take care of one, you’ll handle the other one!” he shouted. “Emboar, use flamethrower!” Emboar used flamethrower on one of the Herdiers. The Herdier tackled Emboar. “Now use Much Punch!” Emboar used Mach Punch on the Herdier. Nat ran to the Herdier and injected the C-30 into him. “How are the two of you over there?” he asked.

    “A bit busy!” shouted Maria. “Samurott, use Water Gun!” Samurott used water gun on the other Herdier, but missed. “Hurry and use it again!” This time, Samurott hit the other Herdier. Maria used the C-30 on it. “Alright, let’s go,” she said and pointed to the door across the hall. They went through the door.

    “Oh boy, more doors,” said Nat. “I’ll check this one, you check the other.”

    “Alright,” said Maria. They went in to 2 separate doors. The room that Nat entered had a bathtub filled with water.

    “Let’s see what happens when I drain the water,” Nat said with a bit of a smile on his face. He drained the water. There was a key in it. “It could come useful, don’t you think Emboar?” he asked. He came out and saw Maria and her Samurott waiting outside.

    “I see you have a key. There wasn’t anything in the room I went to,” Maria said. “Let’s go check that room,” she said and pointed to another door.

    “Alright, let’s go” said Nat. Maria and her Samurott went in the room and the door shut closed in front of Nat and his Emboar. “Hey!” he shouted. “What’s going on?” he asked, confused.
    “I don’t know! The door is locked!” shouted Maria. "Samurott and I will check this area.

    "Alright, we'll wait here,"said Nat.

    Maria looked behind her and saw spike walls from each side. “Oh no, I have a really bad feeling about this,” she said a little scared. “What are they doing here in a place like this anyways?” She went in the other door. There was a medal on a pedestal. There was a note on the floor. Maria read it. It read:

    To Whoever Finds This Medal,
    “There are four medals all together to unlock the passage way to the green house in the back of the skyscraper. However, taking each one will result in danger. Be careful.”

    Sincerely,
    Unknown Person.

    That’s all it said. Maria took the medal from the pedestal. She and her Samurott left the area. The door behind them shut locked. The spike walls started moving. The other door was locked. There was no way out.

    End of chapter 2. The chapter was 3 pages in microsoft word.
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    Chapter 3: Puzzle Job

    “NAT! NAT!” cried Maria.

    “Maria? Maria, what’s going on!?” shouted Nat.

    “NAT! THE WALLS HAVE SPIKES AND THEY’RE CLOSING IN! THE DOORS ARE LOCKED! HURRY, DO SOMETHING!” yelled Maria.

    “EMBOAR, KICK DOWN THIS DOOR NOW!” yelled Nat. Emboar kicked down the door. “Come on hurry!” he shouted to Maria. Maria and her Samurott escaped the spiked-walls. Maria hugged Nat.

    “Oh, Nat!” Maria said. She started crying.

    “It’s okay Maria. You’re safe now,” said Nat and started smiling. “Come on. Let’s go check that last door.”

    “Nat, wait,” said Maria. She stopped crying.

    “What is it?” asked Nat. Maria showed him the medal.

    “I found this medal,” Maria said. “There was a note that said that there were four of them and that you need all four of them to unlock the passage to a green house just outside of here. Let’s find the other three. We might find something that’s important in the green house.”

    “Alright,” said Nat. They went through the last door and ended up in another hallway.

    “Let’s check this room first,” said Maria and pointed to the closest door. They went in the room.

    “Look, there are a lot of Pidgeys and paintings here,” said Nat and pointed at the ceiling. “But I wonder why the Pidgeys aren’t attacking us.”

    “I don’t know,” said Maria. “Look, there is another note on the floor.” She picked it up and read it. It read:

    To Whomever That Wants To Find the Medal,

    “There is another medal and it’s in this room. However it’s not easy getting it. There is a switch behind every painting here. But you have to do it in a specific order. Look closely at the three paintings. You see a Poliwag in one, a Poliwhirl in another and a Poliwrath in the last one. To do the puzzle right, you have to press the buttons behind the paintings in evolutionary order. Then you’ll get the medal in the other side of the hall. Do it wrong, and the Pidgeys will start attacking you. Remember, they’re infected with the A-59 parasite.

    Sincerely,
    Unknown Person

    “Must be from the same person who wrote the other note,” said Maria.

    “So we have to press the switches in the correct order,” Nat said. “Well this will be fun.” Nat pressed the switch behind the Poliwag painting first. Then Maria pressed the button behind the Poliwhirl painting. Then they both pressed the last button behind the Poliwrath painting. The picture with all three evolutions moved and the medal came out. Maria picked it up.

    “Alright, two more left,” Maria said. “Let’s get out of here.”

    “Okay,” said Nat. They went out the door. “Let’s go check that one now,” he said and pointed to the other door across the hall. They went in and went upstairs to the third floor. There were more Herdiers.

    “Emboar, use flamethrower!” shouted Nat.

    “Samurott, use water gun!” shouted Maria. They both used their moves on the Herdiers. Nat and Maria used the C-30 vaccine on them. “Come on, this way,” Maria said pointing to the other door across the hall. They went into a room with a Reshiram and a Zekrom statue.

    “Well, there we have to do more puzzling,” said Nat being sarcastic. Nat picked up another note on the floor and read it. It reads:


    “Place the Reshiram and Zekrom statues in a specific way so that they are facing each other. Then when they are both on the right switches on the floor, the box will open giving you the key to access more areas of this skyscraper.” That’s all it said. Not even who this was from.

    “It’s like the writer knows were here,” said Maria.

    “This can actually be another writer, given that he didn’t even put who it was from and to who it is for,” Nat said “Emboar, let’s move the Reshiram statue.”

    “Alright, Samurott and I will move the Zekrom statue,” said Maria. So they move the statues so that they were facing each other and then they put them in the right floor switches. The box opened. The key was inside. Nat took the key.

    “Let’s go,” Nat said. They left the room and encountered two Rattatas.

    “Emboar can do this by himself,” said Nat with a smile. “Use mach punch on them,” he told Emboar. Emboar used mach punch. It was super effective on the Rattatas. He used the C-30 on the Rattatas.

    “Something tells me it won’t be this easy later on,” said Maria.

    “You think?” asked Nat. They went to the last door across the hall. It leads back downstairs. They heard a girl talking.

    “I hear somebody talking behind that door,” said Maria pointing to the closest door.

    “I can hear it to. A girl,” said Nat. “Let’s go in.”

    “Alright,” said Maria and they went in the room.

    End of Chapter 3. This chapter was 4 pages in microsoft word.

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    Actually, I just checked. It was 3, but it's font was way big. 13.5... so.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Chapter of Charizard View Post
    Actually, I just checked. It was 3, but it's font was way big. 13.5... so.
    Actually it's only 12 font. I checked
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    Chapter 4: A Survivor

    “Whoa!” shouted Nat as smog filled the room.

    “Huh… what? Oh! OH, NO!” cried a girl. “Sorry, I thought you were another one of those pokemon infected with the A-59 parasite.”

    “Oh, it’s okay, I don’t think we got poisoned,” said Nat. “Hi, I’m Nat Summers and this is my partner pokemon, Emboar.” His Emboar waved hello. They both smiled.

    “I’m Maria Blossom,” said Maria and smiled. “And this is my partner pokemon, Samurott.” Samurott smiled and waved hello. “What’s your name?” Maria asked.

    “Oh! I’m Sarah. Sarah Willard,” said the girl. “And this is my partner pokemon, Weezing. I came here to investigate the parasitic activities.”

    “Wait… you mean you came here all alone?” asked Nat a little surprised.

    “No, silly,” said Sarah. “I have my Weezing here with me!” she shouted.

    “Oh yeah, it seems the two of us aren’t alone either with our pokemon, right Maria?” asked Nat and laughed.

    “Yeah, that’s true,” said Maria and also laughed.

    “By the way, this is the medical room,” said Sarah. ‘Which means if anything happens, like getting hurt, poisoned or any other kind of bad thing, we can always come here. We can take the heal item with us if it’s an emergency,” she said. The room was rectangular.

    “Thanks for telling us that,” said Nat. “Hey, we’re going to leave now, are you coming with us?” he asked Sarah.

    “Yeah, but you two go on ahead. There are still things I need to pack here,” said Sarah.

    “By the way, before we go, have you seen two other people here, with an Electrivire and Rampardos?” asked Nat.

    “No, I can’t say that I have,” said Sarah.

    “Alright, see ya later,” said Maria. Nat, Maria and their pokemon left the room.

    “Alright, that door is the only one left in this hall, let’s go,” said Nat. They went through the door which led back downstairs to the first floor. They went through the only door there.

    “Hey, we’re back in the hallway where we fought the big Sandslash,” said Maria. “Alright, let’s unlock that red door there now. They unlocked the door and went in to what appeared like a cafeteria room.

    “Look, there’s something on the piano,” said Nat and picked up the paper. “It says, music notes for the Beach Frenzy.”

    “But, none of us really play the piano,” said Maria looking at Nat with a weird look. Then Sarah and her Weezing came in the room.

    “Sarah, do you know how to play the piano?” asked Nat.

    “Well, yes I do,” said Sarah with a smile on her face.

    “Here, see if you can play this music,” said Maria.

    “Okay, I’ll try,” said Sarah. She started playing the notes for the piano. Everything sounded right, except for that last part which sounded scary.

    “Huh? That didn’t sound right,” said Nat with a confused look.

    “Yeah, my piano skills are off a little. I’ll keep practicing. While I’m doing that, you two can search more of the area. You might even find your friends,” she said.

    “Alright, let’s do that,’ said Maria. “Come on, Samurott.” The four of them left the room.

    “This key also might unlock the other door in the main hall up in the second floor,” said Nat.

    “Alright, let’s go there then,” said Maria. They went to the door that goes to the mail hall, up the stairs and unlocked the other door. They went in.

    “Let’s go to the left door,” said Nat and they went to the closest door to the left.

    “Oh man, it’s dark in here,” said Maria.

    “Emboar, light the area, please,” said Nat. Emboar lit the area.

    “Look another medal!” shouted Maria.

    “Yeah, and another note too,” said Nat. He picked it up and read it. It read:

    To Whomever That Wants to Find the Medal,

    “The medal you see here is a fake, and therefore, it’s not one of the four medals you need to get to the green house. But you will need this fake medal to get one of the other REAL medals. First, you have to play music notes from some kind of music in a piano. Do the notes right, and a wall will open up, containing the medal. However, if you take it, the wall will close behind you. Here’s the trick. After you take the real medal out, place the fake one in and the wall will be open again. You’ll be out with the real medal in no time.”

    Sincerely,
    Unknown Person.

    “Who is writing these notes?” asked Maria.

    “I don’t know,” said Nat. “Music notes for some kind of music on the piano… The Beach Frenzy!” shouted Nat. “We have to go back to the cafeteria room! That’s where one of the medals is!”

    “Alright, let’s go,” said Maria. She took the fake medal and they all left them room. They went back to the cafeteria room.

    “Nat! Maria!” shouted Sarah. “I think I did it!”

    “You did? Alright, let’s hear it,” said Nat. Sarah started playing the piano again. This time, the notes of the “Beach Frenzy” were correct. A wall opened up.

    “Oh, I didn’t think that would happen,” said Sarah.

    “Alright, give me the fake medal, Maria,” said Nat. “I’ll go get it.”

    “Okay,” said Maria. She handed Nat the fake medal. Nat went in and took out the real medal. The wall closed behind him. Then he put the fake one in and the wall opened up again. He got out.

    “Oh my gosh, Nat, are you okay!?” shouted Sarah.

    “Yeah,” said Nat. She gave Maria the real medal. “Alright, just one more to go.”

    “Yeah,” said Maria. “Sarah, you coming with us?” she asked.

    “Yes,” said Sarah. “Let’s go.” All six of them left the room. End of chapter 4.
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    There is so much description missing. Chapter four got to a great length, so that's good, but the lack of descriptions is huge.

    Quote Originally Posted by Tepig Pignite Emboar969
    “By the way, this is the medical room,” said Sarah. ‘Which means if anything happens, like getting hurt, poisoned or any other kind of bad thing, we can always come here. We can take the heal item with us if it’s an emergency,” she said.
    “Thanks for telling us that,” said Nat. “Hey, we’re going to leave now, are you coming with us?” he asked Sarah.
    What does the med room look like? Is it big? Circular? Dark? Yellow? All I know is that there's medicine and healing potions in that place.

    To Whomever That Wants to Find the Medal,

    “The medal you see here is a fake, and therefore, it’s not one of the four medals you need to get to the green house. But you will need this fake medal to get one of the other REAL medals. First, you have to play music notes from some kind of music in a piano. Do the notes right, and a wall will open up, containing the medal. However, if you take it, the wall will close behind you. Here’s the trick. After you take the real medal out, place the fake one in and the wall will be open again. You’ll be out with the real medal in no time.”

    Sincerely,
    Unknown Person.
    That's very straight-forward. Who would've left a note saying how to get something very important? Not many other people are there, and if they were there they would've gotten it themselves. Pretty non-nonsensical.

    Good luck with this.
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    Okay, I added the description with the room and Nat and Maria talking about who the notes are from. And this is just a beginning. Give it more of a chance. The story will get better. By the way, do you like my other story? Also, the person who is writing the notes will be revealed later in the story.
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    Chapter 5: A Crisis

    “Alright, let’s go check the other doors in the hallway where we got the fake medal in the second floor,” said Nat.

    “Okay,” said both Maria and Sarah. They went to the main hall, up the stairs, and to the hallway where Nat and Maria found the fake medal in one of the rooms there. An injured man came running towards them.

    “Help…me…” said the man. He had a hole in his body and was bleeding a lot.

    “You two hurry back to the medical room NOW!” Nat yelled. “I’ll stay here with the man,” he said. He was holding the injured man. He had no pokemon with him.

    “Okay,” both Maria and Sarah said. They and their pokemon left.

    “I… I’ve… been… attacked by… a… giant… snake,” said the man.

    “A giant snake?” asked Nat. “Listen, you’re going to be alright,” he said.

    “Hurry, we must get to the medical room fast!” shouted Maria. Maria, Sarah and their pokemon ran down the stairs as fast as they can, through the room where Nat, Maria and their pokemon fought the big Sandslash, through the hallway, and ran into the medical room.

    “Grab everything necessary here, FAST!” yelled Maria.

    “Alright!” shouted Sarah. She took 2 bottles of serum and large heath packs.

    “Come on, hurry!” shouted Maria. They ran back to the room where the big Sandslash was, through the main hall and ran up the stairs to the hallway.

    “Give it to me quick!” shouted Nat. Maria gave him one of the large heath pack. He used it on the injured man.

    “It’s… too… late,” said the man. “The snake got me, I’m a goner,” he said.

    “No, no don’t say that!” shouted Nat. The lots of blood came out of the man. “No, don’t die on me!” shouted Nat.

    “It’s… too… late,” said the man. Then he lay on the floor, dead.

    “No… NO! DARN IT!” yelled Nat angrily as he banged his hands against the floor.

    “I’m sorry,” said Maria. “There was nothing else we could have done.” Nat took a deep breath.

    “You’re right,” Nat said. “Let’s keep going,” he said as he pointed to the other door across the hall. They went inside the room.

    “Look, there is a letter there,” said Maria. She picked it up and read the letter. It read:

    Dear Derek,

    “I didn’t know that by using the A-59 parasite on pokemon, not only that they get angrier, stronger and more violent, but they get bigger as well. I used the A-59 parasite on an Arbok, but I think I overdid it. He’s as huge as one floor of this building now. I was scared of this. I was so scared, that I ran away and decided not to cure it with the C-30 vaccine. I don’t know where the Arbok is now, but I know that it’s still in this building. I’m leaving this place now!”

    Sincerely,
    David Youth

    “Well that’s great,” said Nat. “We now have to watch out for a giant Arbok in this building. I think that is what the man was talking about.”

    “He did?” asked Maria. “I don’t like this.”

    “Me neither,” said Sarah, scared. “Come on. Let’s keep going.”

    “Okay,” said Nat and they went through another door which led back upstairs to the third floor.

    “AHHHHHHHH!” cried Sarah, as a bunch of Spearows came.

    “Emboar use flamethrower!” shouted Nat Emboar used flamethrower on the Spearows, but he only got one of them. The other Spearows used aerial ace on Emboar but missed.

    “Stand back you guys!” shouted Sarah. “Weezing use smog!” Weezing used smog on the remaining Spearows. They all got poisoned and couldn’t move.

    “Quick, use the serum and the C-30 vaccine on them!” shouted Nat.

    “Okay,” both Maria and Sarah said. They used the serum and the C-30 vaccine on the Spearows.

    “Come on, let’s keep going,” said Nat. They went to the end of the hall way and opened the door on the other side of the hall. There were three others doors in the new hallway.

    “Let’s check the closest one first,” said Maria and pointed at the closest door. They went in the small room.

    “Hey, there’s another letter,” said Sarah. She picked up the letter and read it. It read:

    Dear Marco,

    “I’m leaving for Moon City tonight. Since you’re staying here, I am leaving this key to open the green house. There are important things you need to do in the green house. The basement of the green house is flooded. Make sure that when you’re down there, to drain the water there. But the switch is on the other side of the area. So you have to through the area while flooded first. Be careful, there might be pokemon infected with the A-59 parasite down there. If they’re water types, they won’t be as strong when you drain the water. By draining the water, you will get to go to the other areas of the green house. Good luck!”

    Sincerely,
    Michael.

    “This could be useful,” said Nat. “Alright, let’s check one of the other doors.”

    “Okay,” said both Maria and Sarah. All six of them left the room, went in another door and ended up in a big rectangular room.

    “Look, another note!” shouted Maria. She picked it up and read it. It read:

    To Whomever That Wants To Find the Medal,

    “Getting this medal is the hardest one out of all of them. You can easily find it, but be careful, there’s a snake nearby. Good luck!

    Sincerely,
    Unknown Person

    “Why couldn’t this person get these medals himself?” asked Nat.

    “Maybe because he’s too scared, especially with this one,” said Maria and laughed.

    “Alright,” said Nat. “All we need to do is find this last medal…” Suddenly a huge Arbok came and saw them. “Oh great, this is just what we need!” shouted Nat sarcastically. End of Chapter 5.

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    It's getting much better! Mistakes are lessening, and the length is very good now.

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    Next, try to add depth to the characters. Someone said this to me on my fic, and I used it to make the characters more real. Make them relateable. What makes them do what they do. Background. I'd say to startk w/ Nat or Maria. It's good to add depth to make them seem very humane/human like.


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    Okay, I'll try.

    Chapter 6: To the Green House

    The giant Arbok came and saw Nat, Maria, Sarah and their pokemon.

    “Emboar and I will distract the Arbok while you four look for the last medal!” Nat shouted. “Emboar, use flamethrower!” Emboar used flamethrower on the Arbok and got its tail. The giant Arbok screamed in pain. Maria, Sarah and their pokemon were running away from the Arbok when Sarah noticed the last medal.

    “I found it! I found the medal!” shouted Sarah.

    “Alright, let’s get the heck out of here now!” shouted Maria.

    “Okay, hurry!” shouted Nat. They ran to the door when the giant Arbok used poison sting and got Nat’s shoulder.

    “AHHH!” he yelled and started bleeding. They left the room.

    “Nat! Are you okay!?” shouted Maria.

    “Yeah I think… I…” Nat started to say when suddenly he hung on to the wall and fell on the floor.

    “NAT!” cried Sarah.

    “I think… I got… poisoned… by that… giant… Arbok,” Nat said. “The A-59… parasite… may not… effect humans… but Arbok… is a… poison… type… pokemon. Mix the serum… and the… large… health pack and… give… use it on my… wound… hurry!”
    “Okay,” said Maria. They mixed one of the serums with one of the large health packs and used it on Nat’s wound on his shoulder.

    “Are you alright now?” asked Sarah. Nat got up and moved his arm.

    “Yeah, I’m okay now,” said Nat and smiled. “A minute late and I would have been a goner. Come on, let’s go to that door we have gone to yet,” he said and pointed to the door all the way across the other side of the hall. They went in a new hallway.

    “Okay, so this leads back down stairs,” said Maria. They went downs stairs where there were two doors. Nat tried to open the one closest to them.

    “It’s locked,” said Nat. “Let’s try the other door.” They tried the other door and opened it. On the other side of another new hallway, there were four slots to put the four medals in.

    “Look another note!” shouted Sarah. Sarah picked up the note and read it. All it said was:

    To Whomever That Found All Four Medals,

    “Congratulations, now that you have all four medals, you can now unlock the door to the passage way to the green house. But be careful, you never know what or who comes.”

    Sincerely,
    Unknown Person.
    Nat look around the hallway.

    “I have a feeling whoever wrote this is watching us right now. I mean, how does he know we have all four medals already?” he asked.

    “I don’t know, maybe he has super powers,” said Maria and laughed.

    “Yeah right,” said Nat and smiled. “Anyways, let’s put the four medals in.”

    “Alright,” said Sarah. They put the four medals in each slot. The door right next to them opened and it led back outside.

    “Alright, let’s find this green house,” said Nat. They walked a few steps when a Houndour jumped on Nat. “AHHH GET IT OFF ME!” he yelled.

    “Samurott, use water pulse!” shouted Maria. Samurott used water pulse and the Houndour. It was super effective. Maria used the C-30 vaccine on the Houndour.

    “Well that was uncalled for,” said Sarah.

    “Tell me about it!” shouted Nat. “I never seen your Samurott use that move.”

    “Samurott’s used it before,” said Maria and smiled. “Okay, let’s keep going.” They kept walking and stopped at an area where there was lots of water.

    “Well Emboar can’t go further apparently,” said Nat. “I see a drawbridge, see if you and your Samurott can go to the other side, use that crank there and close up the drawbridge, Maria.”
    “Okay, I’ll try, let’s go Samurott,” said Maria. Then went in the pool of water and went to the other side. “Okay, let’s close up the drawbridge.” She and Samurott used the crank to close up the drawbridge.

    “Okay Emboar, you have to try and not to fall now,” said Nat. Nat, Emboar, Sarah and Weezing carefully crossed the bridge and made it. All of a sudden, five Ekans came coming towards them.

    “Okay, this is not good! RUN!” yelled Nat. They all ran as fast as they can so that they would lose the Ekans. Then two more Houndours came coming towards then from the other side.

    “Don’t worry, we can do this in one shot! Samurott use water pulse!” shouted Maria. Samurott used water pulse on the Houndours so much that they hit against a wall and got knocked out. “See? Piece of cake,” said Maria and used the C-30 vaccine on both of them.

    “Look! I think that’s the green house!” shouted Sarah pointing at a big brown house.

    “Looks like a regular old house to me, and it’s not green,” said Nat and laughed. Nat pulled the key to open the entrance to the green house. They walked to the door. Nat used the key on the door and opened the door. “Okay, let’s go in,” Nat said and they all went in the green house. End of chapter 6.
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    Chapter 7: Inside The Green House

    Nat, Maria, Sarah and their pokemon entered the Green house.

    “Whoa,” said Nat with a surprised look. “Look at all these big plants.”

    “Yeah,” said Maria. “I guessing we’ll find lots of grass type pokemon here.”

    “Well this is why they call it a green house,” said Sarah and laughed.

    “Okay, be careful,” said Nat. “You don’t know what kind of pokemon will be here…” Suddenly three Glooms came toward them. “Emboar can do this in one go! Use Flamethrower!” he told his Emboar. Emboar used flamethrower on one of the Glooms and the Gloom got knocked out. After Nat used the C-30 vaccine on the Gloom, one of the other ones used acid on his back. “AHHH! THAT SON OF A… FREAKING… AHHHHHH!” Nat yelled.

    “Nat!” cried Sarah. “Weezing use smog!” she shouted. “Weezing used smog on the remaining Glooms. The Glooms fell on the floor, poisoned.

    “I’ll mix the some antidote and the C-30 vaccine together!” shouted Maria. She mixed the antidote and the C-30 vaccine together and used it on the two Glooms. Then she walked towards Nat. “Are you okay?” she asked him.

    “Yeah, I’m alright now,” said Nat. “Let’s keep going.” They came to one of the doors and opened it. They went in.

    “Look, there is a book on the floor, and another letter,” said Sarah. She picked up and read it. It read:

    Dear Mike,

    “Remember the color of this book. It is brown. There is a room in this green house where you have to place this book with all the other brown books are in the bookshelf to access the ladder down to the basement of this place. Once you get this book, do that right away. Be careful when you’re in the basement, you never know what kind of pokemon that are infected with the A-59 parasite are down there.”

    Sincerely,

    Peter Stevenson.

    Maria picked up the book.

    “Okay, now we need to find the room to put this book in,” Maria said.

    “Let’s check the other doors in the main area of this green house,” said Nat. They left the room and went to another door across the hall. They were in a big rectangular room with two Leavannys. “Emboar and I have to be careful not to burn this whole place up!” Nat shouted. “Use flamethrower!” Emboar used flamethrower and the two Leavannys. It was super effective and the Leavannys got burned.

    “Alright, we’ll mix a burn heal with the C-30 vaccine,” said Sarah. She and Maria mixed the burn head with the C-30 vaccine and used it on the Leavannys.

    “Look, a key!” shouted Maria. She picked the key up. “It will be useful,” she said.

    “Alright, there’s nothing else here,” said Nat. “There’s another door across the main hall, let’s get there.” They went back to the main hall of the green house and went to the other door and opened it. They ended up in a big hall way. While in the hallway, a big Skiploom came. Skiploom used energy ball on Maria.

    “AHHHHHHHHHH!” Maria cried as she fell on the floor.
    “Maria!” cried Nat. “Emboar, use flamethrower again now!” he shouted. He used flamethrower on the Skiploom. Skiploom was holding his head, burning in pain. “Sarah go for it now!” Sarah used the burn heal and C-30 mixture on the Skiploom. Nat picked up Maria off the floor. “Are you alright?” Nat asked Maria.

    “Yeah… I’m okay,” said Maria holding her head. “Let’s go everybody.” They went to the other side of the hallway to a door. Nat tried to open it.

    “It’s locked,” Nat said. “Maria, give me the key.”

    “Okay,” said Maria and she gave Nat the key. Nat used the key on the door and unlocked it. They went into a huge dark hallway.

    “Okay, it’s dark so be careful…” Nat started to say when five Beedrills started flying towards them. “Look there another door across the hall! We can’t fight them all, RUN!” he shouted. They ran to the other door and Nat quickly opened it which led to stairway.

    “Okay, let’s go upstairs to the second floor,” said Sarah.

    “Alright,” said Maria and they all went up the stairs to the second floor. There were in a room with a table.

    “Look, another letter!’ shouted Sarah, picked up the note and read it. It read:

    Dear Sandra,

    “As you’ll notice, this green house if full of plants everywhere. You will also notice mostly grass and bug type pokemon here. I do warn you not to let a fire type in this place because it will destroy this place up along with all the important things we have here. By the way, you might as well say, there is already a fire type pokemon in here. The pokemon is also a bug type, which means that any fire move will do normal damage against it. This will project this house from burning. But don’t make him mad. Who knows what he’ll do, because he’s infected with the A-59 parasite. Good luck with that.”

    Sincerely,

    David Anderson.

    Nat looked at his Emboar after he heard Sarah read the letter.

    “Oops, I let a fire type in. But that’s okay, this house is nothing but a piece of junk.” Nat said and laughed. “Anyways, let’s go through that door now,” he said and pointed to the door across the room. They were then in a hallway with two other doors. Nat tried the one in the right. “It’s locked, but I hear something in the other side,” Nat said.

    “Yeah, me too,” said Maria. Let’s go check on the other door. Maria went to the other door and opened it. “Come on,” she told the others. They all went in the room.

    “Look, it’s that bookshelf the other letter was talking about!” shouted Sarah. “And there is a blue book with all the other brown books and another letter!” She picked up the letter and read it. It read:

    Dear Mike,

    “This is the bookshelf to put the brown book in. Take out the blue book that is there. Inside that book is one of two key cards that you’ll need to access the secret underground laboratory underneath the skyscraper. The other key card is in the 20th floor of the skyscraper. You’ll need a key to get to the highest floor. That key is in the green house with a big pokemon. You’ll need to get through an underground passage to get to the area where you need to put the 2 key cards. Good luck with all of that.”

    Sincerely,
    Peter Stevenson.

    “Okay, let’s take out the blue book and take the key card that’s inside there. Then we put the brown book in its place,” said Nat.

    “Alright,” both Maria and Sarah said. Maria took the blue book out, opened it and took the key card out. Nat then gave the brown book to Sarah and Sarah placed the book it in the blue book’s place. A trapdoor opened showing a ladder.

    “Okay, this leads to the basement, you guys ready?” asked Nat.

    “Ready,” both Maria and Sarah said.

    “Okay,” said Nat and he, Maria, Sarah and their pokemon climbed the letter down to the basement. End of chapter 7.

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    Chapter 8: The Basement of the Green House

    Nat, Maria, Sarah and their pokemon entered the basement of the green house. There were two doors, one to the left and one to the right. Nat tried to open the one on the right.

    “It’s locked,” Nat said. “Let’s try the one on the left.”

    “Okay,” said both Maria and Sarah. They went to the other door and opened it. They all went in the room, when suddenly, two Golducks came out of nowhere and used aqua jet on Sarah.

    “AHHHHHHHH!” cried Sarah.

    “Sarah!” shouted Nat. “Darn it, Emboar’s fire or Samurott’s water attacks won’t do much damage on the Golducks. Emboar, use mach punch!” Emboar used mach punch hard on one of the Golduck’s stomach. Golduck hit the wall and got knocked out. Nat ran to the Golduck and tried to use the C-30 vaccine on the Golduck, when the other one slapped the vaccine out of his hand.

    “OUCH!” yelled Nat.

    “Nat, Sarah! Are you two okay!?” shouted Maria.

    “Yeah,” said Sarah. “What about Nat?”

    “Get that Golduck while I use the C-30 vaccine on the other one!” shouted Nat.

    “Okay, Samurott, use razor shell!” shouted Maria. Samurott used razor shell on the Golduck’s face .The Golduck screamed in pain and started bleeding. Nat used the C-30 vaccine on the other Golduck.

    “Hurry! Mix the Large Health Pack and the C-30 vaccine and use it on the Golduck!” shouted Nat.
    “Okay!” shouted Maria. Maria mixed the large health pack and the C-30 vaccine together and used it on the other Golduck.

    “Alright, let’s keep going,” said Nat.

    “Okay,” said both Maria and Sarah. They went to the other side of the hall where the floor went lower and there was water.

    “Okay, this must be the flooded area behind this door,” said Maria. “You two and your pokemon stay here, Samurott and I will find the switch to drain the water.”

    “Okay,” said both Nat and Sarah. Maria opened the door and in she and Samurott went in to a huge rectangular flooded room.

    “Man, this place is flooded,” said Maria. “Okay Samurott, I think the switch is on the other side.” Maria and Samurott tried to go to the other side when three Sharpedos came. One of them tried to use ice fang on Samurott, but missed. “Samurott, use slash on that Sharpedo!” Samurott used slash on the Sharpedo. Sharpedo cried in pain and started bleeding. “We can’t use the vaccine right now because of the other two Sharpedos. Use slash again on both of them!” Samurott used slash on one of the other Sharpedos, but missed the last one. The other Sharpedo used crunch on Samurott, but also missed. “Use razor shell!” shouted Maria. Samurott used razor shell on the last Sharpedo. Sharpedo screamed. “Okay, their hurt and can’t attack! Here goes!” She used the C-30 vaccine on all the Sharpedos. “Okay, let’s keep going,” Maria told Samurott. They went to the other side and saw a lever. “Okay, this must be it, let’s do it.” She pulled the lever and the water got drained. “Okay, the water’s gone now! You guys can come now!” Maria shouted.

    “Okay, were coming!” shouted Nat. Nat, Sarah, Emboar and Weezing came in the room and met up with Maria and Samurott Nat, Sarah and their pokemon saw the three Sharpedos. “You did this?” Nat asked.

    “Yep, I did,” Maria said and smiled.

    “So now what?” Nat asked.

    “Look, there’s another door across the hall,” said Sarah.

    “Well, what are we waiting for? Let’s go,” said Nat. They went to the door and opened it. They went in to a new room, where two Tentacruels stood. The Tentacruels saw Nat, Maria, Sarah and their pokemon. “Uh oh, this is not good,” said Nat. “Emboar quick, use mach punch on both of the Tentacruels!” he shouted. Emboar used mach punch on the Tentacruels. One of them got knocked out. The other Tentacruel tried to use hydro pump on Emboar. “Oh no! Emboar, get out of the way!” shouted Nat.

    “Weezing, use sludge bomb!” shouted Sarah. Weezing used sludge bomb and got a direct hit on the other Tentacruel before he was able to get Emboar. Tentacruel fell on the floor, knocked out.

    “Well that was close!” said Nat. “Now Maria, you use the C-30 on the Tentacruel that is not poisoned and Sarah, you mix the Antidote and the vaccine and use it on the poisoned one!”

    “Got it!” shouted both Maria and Sarah. Sarah mixed the Antidote and the C-30 vaccine and then both she and Maria used the C-30 vaccine on the Tentacruels.

    “Look another door,” said Sarah.

    “Alright then, let’s go,” said Maria. They went to the door and opened it. They ended up in a huge cubic room.

    “Look, a letter!” said Sarah. She picked up the letter and read it. It read:

    Dear Marco,

    “This is a room to turn some wheels. There are five wheels on the walls. If you turn the wheels the right way, you will get the key that access the area to the locked door on this floor and the one above it. Here is the right way to do it: Turn the far left one left, then the left one right, then the middle one right, the right one left and the far right one to the right. Then you can get the key. Go to the room on this floor first. Use a fire type pokemon to burn the roots that are protecting a pokemon on the upper floor. Then go on the upper floor, but be careful. This is a very strong pokemon. I would be a very bad friend if I didn’t tell you this.”

    Sincerely,
    Michael.

    “Alright let’s do what it says,” said Nat. “I’ll turn the one on the far left, Emboar will turn the one of the left, Maria will turn the one on the middle, Samurott will turn the one to the right and Sarah will turn the one on the far right.”

    “Okay, let’s do it,” said Sarah. Nat turned the wheel on the far left, to the left, Emboar turned the one to the left, to the right, Maria turned the wheel on the middle, to the right, then Samurott turned the one to the right, to the left, and Sarah turned the one to the far right to the left. A safe containing the key opened.

    “Alright, let’s take it,” said Nat. Nat took the key. “Let’s go back to that locked door on this floor.”

    “Okay,” said both Maria and Sarah. They went back through the room where they fought the two Tentacruels, through the big rectangular room where Maria fought the three Sharpedos, through the room where they fought the two Golducks and to the room with the locked door.

    “Okay, let’s open it,” said Maria. So Nat used the key on the locked door and opened it.

    “Look, there are the roots,” said Sarah.

    “Okay Emboar, use flamethrower on the roots,” said Nat. Emboar used flamethrower on the roots. The roots burned. There was a scream of a pokemon.

    “Whoa, what was that?” asked Maria.

    “Must have been a pokemon, let’s go to the upper floor now,” said Nat.

    “Okay,” said both Maria and Sarah. They all climbed the ladder back to the second floor of the green house.

    “Okay, let’s go,” said Nat. Nat opened the door to the hallway with the other locked door. “Alright, let’s see what kind of pokemon is in this room.” Nat used the key to open the door and in they all went. “Oh my gosh, this is so not good,” Nat said as they saw a huge Volcarona. “This just gets better and better, does it?” he asked sarcastically. End of chapter 8.


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    Chapter 9: Fierce Battle

    Nat, Maria, Sarah and their pokemon started to fight the huge Volcarona.

    “Alright Emboar, use flamethrower!” shouted Nat. Emboar used flamethrower on the Volcarona. Volcarona got hit with the flamethrower and screamed. He used fire spin in the area.

    “WATCH OUT!” yelled Maria as the fire came towards them. All six of them dodged the attack. “Samurott, use water pulse!” Samurott used water pulse on the Volcarona and got him.

    “He’s still moving?” asked Nat. “Emboar again, use flamethrower!” Emboar used flamethrower on the Volcarona and got him. Volcarona used heat wave.

    “Here it comes!” shouted Sarah. “EVERYONE, DODGE!” They all dodged the attack. “Weezing, use Smog!” Weezing used Smog on the Volcarona. Volcarona got poisoned. But he was still standing.

    “This one doesn’t give up does he?” asked Nat.

    “Look! He’s poisoned!” shouted Sarah. “EVERYONE, ATTACK NOW!”

    “Emboar, mach punch! Go!” shouted Nat.

    “Samurott, slash! Go!” shouted Maria. Emboar and Samurott did their attacks on Volcarona. Volcarona started bleeding from Samurott’s slash.

    “HE’S STILL STANDING!?” yelled Nat, furiously. “EMBOAR! USE MACH PUNCH AGAIN!” Emboar used mach punch on the Volcarona again. Volcarona stepped back from the mach punch.


    “He doesn’t quit, does he!?” shouted Maria. “Samurott, use razor shell!” Samurott used razor shell on the Volcarona. Volcarona started screaming in pain as he was bleeding a lot now. Blood splattered and got onto Nat.

    “Oh, that’s just great! Thanks, Samurott!” Nat shouted as he wiped the blood off of him. “One more time Emboar, use mach punch!” Emboar used mach punch on the Volcarona and finally knocked it down. “Gee, finally! Now let’s mix the large health pack, the antidote and the C-30 vaccine together!” he shouted.

    “Alright!” shouted Maria and Sarah. Nat, Maria and Sarah mixed the large health pack, the antidote and the C-30 vaccine together and used it on the Volcarona.

    “Look, a key!” shouted Sarah. Sarah picked up the key.

    “Okay, good work,” said Maria. “Now let’s get out of here,”

    “Right,” said Nat. They left the room. “Come on, this way,” he said and pointed to the door that led back to a small room. Then they opened the other door on the other side and went downstairs. They heard the noise of Beedrills.

    “Electivire, use thunderbolt,” said a person.

    “Let’s go check who it is,” said Maria. They went to see who it was. There was a man with an Electivire. The man was using the C-30 vaccine on the Beedrills.

    “Kevin!” shouted Nat and smiled.

    “Oh it’s you,” said Kevin. “It looks like you found the four medals.”

    “Wait… it was you who wrote those notes?” asked Sarah.

    “Well… yes,” said Kevin and smiled. “Hi, I’m Kevin Richards,” he said to Sarah.

    “Hi, I’m Sarah Willard,” said Sarah and smiled. “I came to this island to investigate the parasitic activities that are going on here.”

    “Really?” asked Kevin.

    “Yes,” said Sarah.

    “Kevin, where have you been!?” shouted Maria. “And where’s Aaron!?”

    “Well after the four of you left, Aaron, our pokemon and I got attacked by several pokemon, and we got separated by the attack. I’m sorry, but I don’t know where he is right now,” said Kevin.

    “If you know about the four medals, why didn’t you get them yourself!?” asked Nat, a little suspicious.

    “I… had other things to do,” said Kevin.

    “Oh…” said Maria.

    “Is that a key to unlock more areas in the skyscraper?” asked Kevin.

    “I believe so,” said Sarah.

    “Okay, I want you all to go back to the skyscraper and unlock the new areas,” said Kevin.

    “And what are you going to do?” asked Nat.

    “Electivire and I will stay here for now and investigate to see if there’s anything else here,” said Kevin. “Now go.”

    “Okay, good luck,” said Maria.

    “You too,” said Kevin.

    “Alright, let’s go,” said Nat, and they went back to the main area and back outside. They started talking as the six of them started walking back to the skyscraper.

    “So he’s a friend of yours, right?” asked Sarah.

    “Yeah,” said Maria. “He’s the best one we can count on right now. We all trust him to do the right thing.”

    “Alright, I will trust him to as well,” said Sarah. A few minutes after, they were back outside of the skyscraper.

    “Okay, were back,” said Nat. Nat opened the door.

    “WAIT… WHAT WAS THAT!?” yelled Maria as they heard footsteps running towards them. The footsteps came closer and closer. Then a huge Seismitoad stood behind them.

    “Oh…no,” said Nat. “It must have followed us all the way from the green house! This is not good!” he shouted. End of chapter 9.
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    Chapter 10: Battling Takes A Wrong Turn

    The huge Seismitoad used hydro pump on Nat, Maria, Sarah and their partner pokemon.

    “Watch out!” shouted Nat, and everyone dodged the attack “Emboar, use mach punch!” Emboar used mach punch on the Seismitoad’s stomach. Seismitoad fell on the floor, coughing up blood and couldn’t move. “Quick, the both of you, mix the large health pack and the C-30 vaccine and use it on the Seismitoad, now!”

    “Right!” shouted both Maria and Sarah. They mixed the large health pack and the C-30 vaccine and used it on the Seismitoad. Seismitoad fell unconscious.

    “I’m really worried about Aaron and his pokemon,” said Maria.

    “Don’t worry Maria, I’m sure that they’re okay,” said Nat and smiled.

    “I hope so,” said Sarah “Anyways, let’s go back in now.”

    “Right, let’s go,” said Nat. They went back in the skyscraper. “Alright let’s see if this key unlocks that door now,” Nat said pointing to the door that was locked before the six of them went to the green house.

    “Here,” said Sarah, giving Nat the key. Nat used the key to unlock the door and opened it. They all went in the new room where two more Seismitoads came attacking them.

    “What’s with all the Seismitoads all of a sudden!?” shouted Nat. “Emboar, use mach punch again!” Emboar used mach punch on one of the Seismitoad’s face. The Seismitoad screamed in pain, and started bleeding from his face. The other Seismitoad used muddy water on Emboar, but missed.

    “Ewww!” shouted Maria as she also avoided the muddy water. “Samurott, use razor shell!” Samurott used razor shell on the other Seismitoads and also started bleeding from the cut.

    “They’re hurt and can’t fight now! You two know what to do!” shouted Nat.

    “Okay!” shouted both Maria and Sarah. The mixed both the large health pack and the C-30 vaccine and used it on both of the Seismitoads. They both stopped bleeding.

    “These Seismitoads weren’t here when we were in this skyscraper before,” said Sarah.

    “I know, what’s going on?” asked Nat.

    “I don’t know,” said Maria. “Look, a letter.” She picked up the letter and read it. It read:


    Dear Dr. Will,

    “If you are going to the underground laboratory through the underground passage, be very careful. There are lots of dangerous pokemon infected with the A-59 parasite down there. I even heard there was a huge spider pokemon down there. Take as many heath items and C-30 vaccines as you can. It would be a lot easier. Trust me. Do it so that nothing will happen to you.”

    Sincerely,
    Dr. Drake.

    “Dangerous or not, we still have to go down there to get to the underground laboratory,” said Nat. “Look, there’s another door across the hall, let’s go,” he said.

    “Alright,” said both Maria and Sarah. They went to the door and Nat opened it. They ended up at more stairs.

    “Ready to go back up to the second floor?” asked Nat.

    “Yes, we are,” said Maria.

    “Okay,” said Nat. They went up the stairs to the second floor and ended up at a big office room. “Let’s read some of the papers here. They could contain useful information,” Nat said.

    “Look at this one!” shouted Sarah.

    “Sarah, let me see,” said Nat. Nat read a letter. It said:

    Dear Selena,

    “On the other side of this room is an electronically locked door. To open it, you need to use the three computers to the right of the door. There are passwords to put in each computer to unlock the door. I’ll give you a hint to what all the passwords are. The password on the left computer is the name of the city where this whole parasitic activity started. The password on the middle computer is the name of the parasite and the one on the right computer is the name of the vaccine. Put those passwords and the door will be unlocked. Good luck solving it.

    Sincerely,
    Alan Solomon.

    “Okay I know the passwords,” said Nat. Nat went to the first computer on the left and typed in Moon City as the password. Then he went to the computer in the middle and typed in A-59 as the password. Then he went to the last computer on the right and typed in C-30 as the password. The door unlocked.

    “Okay then, let’s go in now,” said Sarah.

    “Right, let’s go, said Nat. They opened the door and went to a new room. “Hey,” Nat said. “There’s nothing here…” Then a huge Arbok came towards them. “Back for more, huh?” asked Nat. “Emboar, use flamethrower!” Emboar used flamethrower on the Arbok. Arbok got hurt by a little.

    “Samurott, use water pulse!” shouted Maria. Samurott used water pulse on the Arbok. Arbok dodged the attack. “Darn it!” Maria shouted.

    “Weezing, use sludge!” shouted Sarah. Weezing used sludge on the Arbok and got him. But Arbok didn’t get poisoned. Arbok tried to use bite on Nat, but Nat dodged it and fell on the floor. Arbok was about to use poison sting on Nat, but Emboar got in the way and took the hit.

    “EMBOAR! NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO O!” cried Nat. Emboar started bleeding from his arm. Then Emboar used an ultimate flamethrower move on the Arbok. The Arbok burned to death. Emboar held his arm in pain and then fainted. “EMBOAR, NO!” cried Nat.

    “Oh, no!” cried Maria.

    “NO, THIS CAN’T BE HAPPENING. EMBOAR, YOU CAN’T BE INFECTED WITH THE A-59 PARASITE!” cried Nat.

    “I’m sorry,” said Sarah.

    “GO BACK OUTSIDE, AND MIX THE LARGE HEALTH PACK, ANTIDOTE AND THE C-30 VACCINE TOGETHER QUICK! I JUST WANT TO BE ALONE WITH MY EMBOAR NOW!” yelled Nat.

    “Okay…” said both Maria and Sarah. The two and their pokemon left Nat and his Emboar alone. After mixing the large health pack, antidote and the C-30 vaccine together, Maria started to cry.

    “I feel very bad now,” said Maria with tears in her eyes.

    “Me too,” said Sarah who also started to cry. “Why did this have to happen?” Then they heard Emboar make a screaming noise.

    “EMBOAR! WHAT ARE YOU DOING? STOP IT! YOU HAVE TO FIGHT IT! EMBOAR!” yelled Nat. Then Emboar raised his arms and smashed through the floor, through the first floor and into the basement of the skyscraper. The whole building shook.

    “What was that!?” shouted Maria, who she and Sarah stopped crying.

    “Let’s go check it out!” shouted Sarah. The two and their pokemon went back inside to see Nat standing next to a big hole on the floor.

    “EMBOAR! WAIT!” yelled Nat as he jumped down all the way to the basement.

    “NAT! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!” cried Maria. “Sarah, we have to follow them in the basement right now!”

    “Okay!” shouted Sarah. “Let’s go!” The two of them and their pokemon jumped down to the basement of the skyscraper. End of chapter 10.

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    Chapter 11: A Miracle

    Maria, Sarah and their partner pokemon jumped down to the basement of the skyscraper looking for Nat and his now infected Emboar.

    “Oh, where could Nat and Emboar be?” asked Maria.

    “I don’t know,” said Sarah. “We have to find them, quick!” she shouted.

    “This basement is hot,” said Maria. “There could be some fire type pokemon here.”

    “Of course, one of them we are trying to save!” shouted Sarah. Suddenly, two Magmars came towards them.

    “OH WE DON’T HAVE TIME FOR THIS!” yelled Maria. “SAMUROTT, USE WATER PULSE!” Samurott used water pulse on the two Magmars and it was super effective. Maria used the C-30 vaccine on the Magmars. “Okay, let’s keep going!” Maria shouted. They went to a door at the other end of the room and opened it, They went in the new, long, rectangular hallway. But there was no sign of Nat and his Emboar.

    “Where can they be!?” shouted Sarah.

    “Come on, this way!” shouted Maria when three Ponytas came running towards them. “DARN IT, WE ARE TRYING TO SAVE A LIFE HERE!” yelled Maria. “SAMUROTT AGAIN, USE WATER PULSE!” Samurott used water pulse and got two of the Ponytas. The other one went straight for Sarah.

    “AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! WEEZING, USE SLUDGE BOMB, NOW!” yelled Sarah. Weezing used sludge bomb on the remaining Ponyta and the Ponyta fell. Maria and Sarah used the C-30 vaccine on all three Ponytas.

    “Let’s keep going, now!” shouted Maria. The four of them kept walking when they heard a voice.

    “Don’t, do this!” the voice said. “You have to fight it come on! Emboar!”

    “It’s Nat!” shouted Sarah. “Come on!” They went to another door and opened it. They ended up in a kitchen room, where Nat and Emboar were standing.

    “Nat!” shouted Maria.

    “Maria? Sarah?” asked Nat. “I don’t know what to do!” His Emboar raised one of his arms and tried to get Nat.

    “Emboar, stop! It’s me!” shouted Nat. “Emboar fight the parasite!” Emboar used flamethrower at the ceiling, angrily. A light fell to the floor. “Emboar, don’t you recognize me!? You have to fight the A-59 parasite in you! EMBOAR!” Emboar started screaming and holding his head. His put his knees on the floor. “That’s right! Fight it” Nat shouted. But Emboar got up and started walking towards Maria, Sarah and their pokemon.

    “Emboar, we don’t want to hurt you!” shouted Maria. Emboar started to raise his arms. “EMBOAR, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!”

    “Weezing, use smog!” shouted Sarah. Weezing used smog on Emboar. “Nat, I’m sorry!’ shouted Sarah.

    “It’s okay, there’s no other way!” shouted Nat. “Just do it!”

    “Samurott, use water pulse!” shouted Maria. Samurott used water pulse on Emboar. Emboar stepped back. But that didn’t stop him. Emboar used flamethrower on Samurott. “Samurott, dodge!” Maria shouted. Samurott dodged Emboar’s flamethrower.

    “OH, NO!” cried Sarah.

    “Samurott, again, use water pulse!” shouted Maria. “Emboar! I’M SSSSOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR RYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY YYYYYYYYYY!” Samurott used a strong water pulse on Emboar and Nat’s Emboar fainted.

    “Quick! Use the large health pack, antidote and the C-30 vaccine mixture on my Emboar! NOW!” yelled Nat.

    “Okay!” shouted Maria. Maria used the mixture on Emboar. Emboar had his eyes closed and didn’t move. Nat walked and sat next to Emboar.

    “Emboar? Emboar, wake up now,” said Nat. No response. “Emboar, stop fooling around and wake up!” he started to shout. Still no answer. Nat started to cry. So did Maria and Sarah. “No… no this can’t be happening… you can’t be dead… please, wake up! WAKE UP!” Tears were coming out of Nat’s eyes. “Emboar, I love you so much, I should have been the one to take the hit from that Arbok, not you. It wouldn’t have infected me! EMBOAR WAKE UP! EEEEEEEMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR RRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!” He put his head on Emboar’s chest and was crying a lot. Then Emboar’s eyes opened and Emboar his hand on Nat’s head.

    “Nat!” shouted Maria and Sarah. Nat put his head up.

    “Emboar? OH, EMBOAR!” yelled Nat. Nat and Emboar got up and started hugging each other. “Emboar, Thank goodness you’re not infected anymore! Don’t ever do that again!” Nat shouted, with tears still in his eyes.

    “Oh it’s a miracle!” shouted Maria.

    “Yeah, it is!” shouted Sarah who she and Maria both wiped their tears of their faces. The Nat wiped his tears off his face.

    “Okay, so where to now?” asked Nat.

    “Look, there is an elevator over there!” shouted Maria.

    “Okay, can we all fit?” asked Nat.

    “It is a big elevator, so I think so,” said Sarah.

    “Okay, then let’s go,” said Nat. They all went to the elevator. “The highest floor this elevator can get to is the fourth floor, then we’ll have to climb up the stairs all the way to the twentieth floor and get the other key card to open the underground laboratory. You all ready?” asked Nat.

    “Ready,” both Maria and Sarah said. All six of them went in the elevator. Nat pressed the fourth floor button. The doors closed and up they went. The elevator stopped at the fourth floor and all six of them stepped out of the elevator. End of chapter 11.
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    Chapter 12: The Long Way Up

    Nat, Maria, Sarah and their partner pokemon stepped out of the elevator and into the fourth floor of the skyscraper.

    “Okay, we have to go all the way up to the twentieth floor from here,” said Nat.

    “It will be a long way up,” said Maria.

    “I know, right?’ asked Sarah. They walked to the middle of the room they were in.

    “See if there is anything useful here,” Nat told the others.

    “Look there is chip here, along with another letter,” said Maria. Maria took the chip and read the letter. It read:

    Dear Mike,

    “This is one of three chips you need to unlock the elevator that leads to the experiment room in the underground laboratory. One of the other chips is on the twentieth floor of this skyscraper, in the same room where the other keycard is. The last one is in the underground laboratory. Once you have all three of them go to the engine room. But be careful, there are lots of electric and psychic pokemon infected with the A-59 parasite down in the underground laboratory. When in the engine room, go all the way to the other side of the room and place the three chips. Then go to the elevator to the experiment room. Good luck!”

    Sincerely,

    Peter Stevenson.

    “Nice work, Maria,” said Nat and gave her a thumbs up.

    “Thanks,” said Maria.

    “Okay, let’s go to that other door at the other side of this room,” Sarah said.

    “Okay,” said Nat. The all went to the other door and Nat opened it. They went in to a new, dark room. Two Gengars appeared out of nowhere and one of them tired to use lick on Emboar, but missed.

    “My Emboar isn’t going to get infected again!” shouted Nat. “Use flamethrower!” he told his Emboar. Emboar used flamethrower on the Gengar. Gengar covered his face from the burn.

    “Samurott, use water pulse!” shouted Maria. Samurott used water pulse on the other Gengar. The Gengar fainted. Nat tired to use the C-30 on the Gengars, but couldn’t.

    “Darn it, they’re ghost types, I don’t understand how they got infected. Emboar use odor sleuth, so that I can use the vaccine on them,” Nat told his Emboar. Emboar used odor sleuth on the Gengars. Nat then used the C-30 vaccine on the Gengars. “Alright, let’s keep going,” Nat said. They walked to another door and Nat opened it. The six of them ended up at a room with a huge box. “That box is blocking our path. Emboar, use strength and push that huge box. Emboar used strength on the huge box and pushed it. He kept pushing the box, until there was a door on the left wall.

    “Okay, let’s go in,” said Maria. Maria opened the door and they all went in the new room.

    “Look, another letter,” said Sarah, picked up the note and read it. It read:

    Dear Sandra,

    “What is the number that when you multiply 500x500, you get 250,000 and then times that by five? That is the pass code to open the door you see on the far right of this room. Good luck solving the problem.”

    Sincerely,

    Jason Marks.

    “Okay, let’s solve the math problem,” said Nat.

    “So 500x500 equals 250,000, then multiply that by five,” said Sarah.

    “The answer is 1,250,000,” said Sarah.

    “Thanks, Sarah,” said Nat. Nat went to the pass code input that was next to the door and typed in 1,250,000 on it. They door opened. “Okay, let’s go in,” Nat said. They went into a new room. Three Persians came towards them.

    “Oh, snap,” said Maria.

    “Weezing, use sludge bomb!” shouted Sarah. Weezing used sludge bomb on one of the Persians. The Persian got poisoned and couldn’t move.

    “AAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!” yelled Nat as one of the other Persians jumped on him.

    “Oh, no, Nat!” cried Maria. The Persian was about to scratch Nat when his Emboar mach punched it in the face. The Persian got knocked out and started bleeding from his face.

    “Thanks, even though I didn’t tell you to do that,” said Nat and got up.

    “Samurott, use razor shell!” Maria told her Samurott. Samurott used razor shell and cut the last Persian’s cheek by a little. The Persian touched his face in pain and started bleeding.

    “Wow, one little scratch and the Persian can’t attack,” said Nat. “You two know what to do.”

    “Right,” said both Maria and Sarah. They mixed the large health pack, the antidote and the C-30 vaccine and used it on the Persians.

    “Okay, let’s keep going,” said Maria. They went to another door and Nat opened it. They ended up at new stairs that went up to the fifth floor.

    “Ready to go up?” asked Nat.

    “Yes,” said both Maria and Sarah. They went upstairs to a huge rectangular room. Then, ten Pidgeottos flew towards them.

    “Oh great, this is too much,” said Nat. End of chapter 12.

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    Chapter 13: Tougher Battles

    The ten Pidgeottos surrounded Nat, Maria, Sarah and their partner pokemon.

    “Darn it, this is tough because fighting moves are strong against normal, but flying moves are strong against fighting, which makes Emboar’s fighting moves do normal damage on them!” shouted Nat.


    “Don’t worry, we got this!” shouted Maria. “Samurott, use water pulse and spread it on all the Pidgeottos!” Samurott used water pulse on all the Pidgeottos. Only two of them went down after that.

    “If only Kevin and his Electivire were here with us,” said Nat. “Emboar, use flamethrower on all the Pidgeottos!” Emboar used a big flamethrower on three of the Pidgeyottos. Only half of them remained. Two of the remaining Pidgeottos used wing attack on Emboar. “Emboar, dodge the attack!” Emboar avoided the attack.

    “Weezing, use smog!” shouted Sarah. Weezing used smog on the Pidgeottos. They rest of them got poisoned. Sarah mixed the antidote with the C-30 vaccine and used it on all the Pidgeottos.

    “This was a tough battle.” said Nat. “Let’s go to the door on the far side of this room.”

    “Right,” said Maria and Sarah. They went to the other side of the room. Nat opened the door. It leads upstairs.

    “Wow, were already going up now,” said Maria. “Let’s go,” They went up the stairs to the sixth floor.

    “Check for anything important,” said Nat.

    “Look, there’s another letter and key!” shouted Sarah. Sarah took the key and read the letter. It read:



    Dear Rick,

    “There are a few elevators that go to certain floors. If you want to get to the twentieth floor quickly, take this key. With this key, you can get access to three elevators in this skyscraper. One of the elevators is in the seventh floor, which the highest floor it can take you is the tenth floor, then climb up the stairs to the thirteenth floor and take the elevator there and the highest floor it can take you is the fifteenth floor. Finally, go up to the eighteenth floor, use the elevator there and go up to the twentieth floor. Good luck!”

    Sincerely,
    Richie Dent

    “Good, there are shortcuts to the twentieth floor,” said Nat.

    “Yeah, let’s keep going,” said Maria.

    “Yeah,” said Sarah. They went to the other side of the room and opened the door. As they went in the new room, four Mightyenas were there.

    “Wow, this is getting harder now!” shouted Nat. “Emboar, use mach punch!” Emboar mach punched one of the Mightyenas in the head and the Mightyena got knocked out. One of the other Mightyenas tried to bite Emboar. “Emboar, avoid it now!” Emboar dodged the attack.

    “Samurott, use razor shell!” shouted Maria. Samurott used razor shell on another Mightyena. The Mightyena started bleeding from his stomach. The other two Mightyenas tried to bite Samurott. “Samurott, dodge the attack!” The Mightyenas missed Samurott.

    “Weezing, use sludge bomb!” shouted Sarah. Weezing used sludge bomb on the remaining Mightyenas. “Quick let’s use the C-30 vaccine!” Nat, Maria and Sarah mixed the large health pack and the C-30 vaccine and used it on the four Mightyenas.

    “Look, another letter, let’s see what it is,” said Nat and picked up the letter. It read:

    Dear Thomas,

    "I’ve been hearing rumors that the Moon City Corporation is planning on doing an experiment on a special pokemon. I don’t know what pokemon it is, but I bet it will be something big. I want you to go to the underground laboratory and find out what’s going on. They might be planning on doing something really bad. I’m counting on you, Thomas."

    Sincerely,

    Harris Edwards

    “Okay, let’s open that door now,” said Maria and pointed to the other door across the hall.

    “Okay,” said Nat. They went to the door and opened it. It leads upstairs again.

    “Alright, I bet the elevator is right here,” said Sarah. They went upstairs where they saw an elevator.

    “Sarah, give me the key,” said Nat.

    “Okay,” said Sarah and gave Nat the key to open the elevator. Nat used the key to open the elevator.

    “Okay, let’s go in,” said Maria. The six of them went in and Nat pressed the tenth floor button. The elevator went up and reached the tenth floor. As the elevator door opened, five Mismagiuses stood right in front of them.

    “Oh, give me a break!” shouted Nat. End of chapter 13.

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    Chapter 14: Further Up

    The 5 Mismagiuses surrounded Nat, Maria, Sarah and their partner pokemon.

    “Emboar, use odor sleuth to make this battle easier and then use mach punch!” shouted Nat. Emboar used odor sleuth and then mach punched one of the Mismagiuses in the face. The Mismagius fell and got knocked out.

    “Samurott, use aqua tail on the rest of the Mismagiuses!” shouted Maria. Samurott used aqua tail got two of the remaining four Misgagiuses. The two were now busy getting the water off them. The remaining two used shadow ball on Samurott. “Samurott, dodge!” Samurott avoided the attack.

    “Never seen Samurott use that before!” shouted Sarah. “Weezing, use sludge bomb!” Weezing used sludge bomb on the two Mismagiuses and they both got knocked out.

    “Alright, we know what to do now!” shouted Nat. Nat, Maria and Sarah used the C-30 vaccine on all the Mismagiuses. “Look there is a door across the room,” said Nat, pointed to the door across the room.

    “Alright, let’s go to the new room then,” said Maria. The opened the door and ended up at a very dark room.

    “I see something red glowing there,” said Sarah, pointing to a red light on the left side of the room.

    “It could be a button,” said Nat. “Let’s press the button.” Nat pressed the button and the whole room turned 180 degrees.

    “Hang on!” shouted Maria as the room was turning.

    “Okay, let’s go back out now and see if there’s anything different now,” said Sarah as the turning stopped.

    “Right,” said Nat. Nat opened the same door they used to enter the room. The hallway, outside of the room now lead to a flight of stairs going up.

    “Okay, let’s go up to the eleventh floor now,” said Maria. The six of them went up to the eleventh floor. They went to a new rectangular room.

    “Let’s see if there is anything useful here,” said Sarah.

    “I see a shiny item over there,” said Nat. Nat went to the shiny item. “It looks like a type of key.” Then he saw a letter and read it. It read:

    Dear Rick,

    “This is a silver key that will open certain doors in this skyscraper. I forgot to mention that you will need this key to access the areas with the other elevators you need to use to get to the twentieth floor. I hope that you find this here. The next elevator is not far from here. There is a door to the right, which you need the silver key to open that door. It leads to a long hallway. There is another door on the other side. Open it and it takes you up to the twelfth floor. There are three rooms you need to get through to get up to the thirteenth floor and finally take the elevator that’s there to the fifteenth floor. After that, you know what to do. Good luck!”

    Sincerely,

    Richie Dent.

    “Okay, follow me,” said Nat.

    “Alright,” said both Maria and Sarah. They all went to the door on the right. Nat used the key to open the door. As they went in the long hallway, three Eevees approached them.

    “Okay, this will be easy! Emboar, use mach punch!” shouted Nat. Emboar used mach punch on two of the Eevees. The two fell on the floor, hurt. The remaining Eevee used quick attack on Emboar. “Emboar, avoid the attack!” Emboar dodged the attack.

    “Samurott, use razor shell!” shouted Maria. Samurott used razor shell on the remaining Eevee’s leg. The Eevee fell to the floor, holding his leg in pain and started bleeding.

    “Alright, I know what to do!” shouted Maria. Maria mixed the large health pack and the C-30 vaccine and used it on all three Eevees.


    “Okay, let’s keep going,” said Sarah. They went all the way to the other side of the hallway. Nat opened the door.

    “Ready to go up again?” asked Nat.

    “Yes,” said both Maria and Sarah. All six of them went up the stairs to the twelfth floor.

    “Look, there’s really nothing here but that door now,” said Nat, pointing to a door across the room. The six of them went to the door and Nat opened it. They went to a big room where four Zangooses stood.

    “Heh! Another easy one! Emboar use mach punch!” shouted Nat. Emboar mach punched one of the Zangooses in the stomach The Zangoose flew and hit a wall and the wall cracked.

    “WHOA!” yelled Maria. “That was a strong move! Samurott, use razor shell, again!” Samurott used razor shell on one of the other Zangooses and got him in the face. The Zangoose started holding his face in pain and started bleeding.

    “Weezing, use sludge bomb again!” shouted Sarah. Weezing used sludge bomb on the remaining Zangooses and they got poisoned. Nat, Maria and Sarah mixed the large health pack, the antidote and the C-30 vaccine together and used it on the four Zangooses.

    “Okay, let’s keep going,” said Nat and pointed to another door.

    “Right,” said both Maria and Sarah. They all went to the door and Nat opened it. They went to the new room.

    “Look another key!” shouted Maria. She took the key.

    “Look, and there is another letter!” shouted Sarah.

    “Yeah, and it’s the same two people,” said Nat and picked the letter to read it. It read.

    Dear Rick,

    “The door that stands in front of you leads upstairs to the thirteenth floor, where the next elevator is. You will need this gold key to access more rooms in this skyscraper. You will need it to get to the room with the next elevator on the eighteenth floor. Good luck!”

    Sincerely,

    Richie Dent.

    “Alright, what are we waiting for?” asked Maria. “Let’s go.”

    “Yeah, let’s go,” said Sarah.

    “Alright,” said Nat. They went to the door in front of them and Nat opened it. They went up the stairs to the thirteenth floor.

    “Look, there is the elevator,” said Maria, pointing to the elevator.

    “Nat, let’s use the elevator key!” shouted Sarah.

    “Right,” said Nat. They went to the elevator and Nat used the elevator key to open the elevator doors. “Let’s go in now,” Nat said. The six of them went in the elevator and Nat pressed the fifteenth floor button. The elevators closed and the elevator started going up. It stopped at the fifteenth floor. As the door opened, a dead man fell on them.

    “AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!” screamed Maria and Sarah as they saw the dead man, which had blood all over its body.

    “WHAT THE HECK IS GOING ON AROUND HERE!?” yelled Nat. Then they saw a big Escavalier in front of them. “Okay, I think we now know what killed that man!” shouted Nat. End of chapter 14.

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    Chapter 15: To The Top

    A big Escavilier stood in front of Nat, Maria, Sarah and their partner pokémon.

    “Okay this one is bug and steel, which means Emboar can do this all by himself,” said Nat. “Emboar, use flamethrower!” Emboar used flamethrower on Escavilier. Escavilier got hit, but was still standing. “That’s impossible, he shouldn’t be standing right now!” shouted Nat. Escavilier used X-scissor. “Emboar, dodge the attack and use flamethrower again!” Emboar avoided the attack and he used flamethrower again on Escavilier. This time, Escavilier fell to the floor.

    “Alright, let’s do this!” shouted Maria. Maria used the C-30 vaccine on Escavilier. “You think this was the same pokémon that killed the other man just outside of this building?” asked Maria.

    “I don’t know…” said Nat.

    “You mean there was another dead body?” asked Sarah.

    “Yeah, we saw it before we met you,” said Maria.

    “I don’t like this,” said Sarah. “Okay, let’s keep going now.”

    “Right, there is a door there,” said Nat, pointing to a door across the room.

    “Okay, then let’s go there then,” said Maria. The six of them went to the door and Nat opened it. They went to a new room.

    “Look, there is a letter on the floor,” said Sarah. She picked up the letter and read it. It read:

    Dear Erin,

    “Upstairs is a lever room. There are three levers in that room. Do it in the correct way and the door to the left of that room. You can pull the levers either up or down. Here is a hint of how the levers should go up or down. Up, down, up, left to right. Good luck!”

    Sincerely,
    Paula Wilton.

    “Alright, let’s go upstairs now,” said Nat.

    “Right,” said both Maria and Sarah. They went in front of another door and Nat opened it. It lead to a flight of stairs up to the sixteenth floor. The six of them went up. They ended up at the lever room.

    “So it says, up, down, up, left to right,” said Nat. “I got it, the left one goes up, middle one goes down and the right one goes up.”

    “Okay, problem solved,” said Maria. Nat went to the left lever and pulled it up. Then Maria went to the middle one and pulled it down. Finally, Sarah went to the right one and pulled it up. The door on the left side of the room opened.

    “Okay, let’s go in now, shall we?” asked Sarah.

    “Of course, we have to,” said Nat. They passed the door and went in another room, where three Liepards ran towards them. “Emboar, mach punch one of them as hard as you can!” Nat shouted. Emboar used mach punch on one of the Liepard’s face and knocked it out. The other two tried to use slash on Emboar. “Emboar, avoid it!” shouted Nat and Emboar avoided both of the Liepard’s slashes.

    “Samurott, use razor shell!” shouted Maria. Samurott used razor shell on one of the other Liepards in the leg. The Liepards held his leg in pain and started bleeding. The last Liepards was about to slash Samurott.

    “Weezing, use sludge bomb!” shouted Sarah. Weezing used sludge bomb on the last Liepard and the Liepard got poisoned.

    “Alright, we know what to do!” shouted Nat. Nat, Maria and Sarah mixed the large health pack, the antidote and the C-30 vaccine together and used it on the three Liepards.

    “Alright, there is a door there on the other side, let’s keep going,” said Maria.

    “Okay,” said Sarah. They went to the door and Nat opened it. They went in another room.

    “Look, a key,” said Nat and took the key. “No note though, but it could be useful. That’s all there is in this room, let’s keep going.”

    “Alright,” said Maria and Sarah. They walked towards another door and once again, Nat opened it. It lead upstairs again.

    “Okay, let’s go up again now,” said Nat and they went up the stairs to the seventeenth floor. They were at another room.

    “Look there is a note!” shouted Maria and picked up the note and read it. It read:

    I only have one move and one move only unless you give me TMs. The move I have is teleport. What pokemon am I? The answer is the password on the computer to open a door in the next room.

    “I know,” said Sarah. “It’s Abra!”

    “Nice work, Sarah,” said Nat. “Okay, let’s go.” They walked to another door and Nat opened it. They ended up at a room with a big computer. “Alright, let’s put the password in this computer.” Nat went to the computer and typed in Abra. A door on the other side of the room opened.


    “Let’s keep going,” said Maria. They walked to the open door, which again lead upstairs. They went up to the eighteenth floor and saw an elevator.


    “Look, the elevator to the twentieth floor!” shouted Sarah.

    “Okay, are we all ready?” asked Nat.

    “Ready!” shouted both Maria and Sarah.

    “Alright,” said Nat and he used the elevator key to open the elevator. The six of them went in and Nat pressed the twentieth floor button. The elevator doors closed and the elevator carrying the six of them went up. It stopped at the twentieth floor. As the doors opened, Nat, Maria, Sarah and their partner pokémon saw two Scraftys. The two Scraftys saw them and they both used hi jump kick. “EVERYONE, DODGE!” yelled Nat. They all avoided the attack and the two Scraftys got hurt and couldn’t move. Nat, Maria and Sarah used the C-30 vaccine on the Scraftys.

    “That was the easiest battle ever!” shouted Maria.

    “I know, we didn’t even have to move that much!” shouted Sarah. Then she saw a chip, a book and a letter on a table. “Look, there is one of the other chips, a book and another letter!”

    “Right, let’s take them!” shouted Nat. Nat went up to the table and took the second chip, the book and the letter. Nat looked at the book. “This must be where the other keycard is.” Nat opened the book and took the other keycard out. Then Nat read the letter and it read:

    Dear Mike,

    This is the other keycard you need to open the entrance to the underground laboratory. The second chip that you need to unlock the elevator that leads to the experiment room in the underground laboratory is also here. Take both of them. Now that you have everything that you need now, you can now go to the underground passage. There is an elevator on the other side of this room that can take you all the way down to the first floor. There will be a door there that will lead you back to the passage way to the green house. The entrance to the underground passage is in front of the entrance to the green house. Careful, most of the pokémon in the underground passage are rock type. Good luck!


    Sincerely,

    Peter Stevenson.


    “Alright let’s go now,” said Nat. The six of them went to the elevator on the other side of the room and opened the elevator doors. They went in and Nat pressed the first floor button. The elevator went down to the first floor. As the elevator doors opened the six of them got out. “Okay, let’s go back outside now,” Nat said and he opened the door which led back to the passage way to the green house. They all stepped outside and went back to the entrance to the green house. There was a trapdoor in front of the entrance. Nat stared at the green house.

    “What’s wrong?” asked Maria.

    “You four stay here, Emboar and I are going to go back in the green house to see if Kevin and his Electivire are still in there,” said Nat.


    “Okay, you two be careful,” said Sarah.

    “Come on Emboar, let’s go back in,” said Nat. Nat and his Emboar went back in the green house.

    “Kevin? Electivire? Are you two still here?” asked Nat. No answer. Nat and his Emboar checked all the rooms in the first floor, before they went up to the second floor. Nat went in the room where the six of them fought the huge Volcarona. “Hello? Kevin and Electivire? Are you two here?” Still no answer. “Where could they be?” Nat asked. They went back out and to the other room which led to the basement of the green house. They both went down. Nat and his Emboar went to all the rooms in the basement, but so sign of Kevin and his Electivire. “Alright, we’re going back out Emboar,” Nat said. They both went back outside with Maria, Sarah and their Pokémon.


    “Did you two find them?” asked Maria.

    “No,” said Nat sadly. “Okay, open the trapdoor, were going down now. Are you all ready?”

    “Ready,” said both Maria and Sarah.

    “Okay, let’s go in the underground passage,” said Nat. Maria opened the trapdoor and all six of them climbed the ladder down to the underground passage. End of chapter 15.

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    Chapter 16: Who Are The Traitors?

    Nat, Maria, Sarah and their partner pokémon entered the underground passage.

    “This place is kind of dark. Okay, there is only one way to go now and it’s straight,” said Nat.

    “Alright, then let’s go then,” said Maria. They kept walking straight and stopped at a door. Nat opened it. They went into a new room in the underground passage. Two Gravelers stood in from of them.

    “This will be easy for Emboar and Samurott,” said Nat. “Emboar, use mach punch!” Emboar used mach punch on one of the Gravelers and the Graveler hit the wall. The other Graveler used Rollout on Emboar. “Emboar, dodge it!” Emboar avoided the attack.

    “Samurott, use aqua tail on the Graveler!” shouted Maria. Samurott used aqua tail on the Graveler and Graveler fell to the floor. Nat used the C-30 vaccine on the Gravelers.

    “Okay, should we keep going?” asked Sarah.

    “Yeah, look there is light over there,” said Nat, pointing to the other side of the room.

    “Let’s go then,” said Maria. They went to where the light was and found another door there. Nat opened the door and the six of them ended up in a long hallway, where a Rhyhorn appeared.

    “Weezing use sludge bomb…” Sarah started to say.

    “Don’t, Sarah! Weezing’s poison moves won’t do much damage, Leave it to us!” shouted Nat.

    “Okay!” shouted Sarah.

    “Emboar, use mach punch, again!” shouted Nat. Emboar used mach punch on Rhyhorn. Rhyhorn stepped back.

    “Samurott, use aqua tail again!” shouted Maria. Samurott used a strong aqua tail on Rhyhorn and he fell on the floor. Maria used the C-30 vaccine on Rhyhorn. “Okay let’s keep going,” Maria said. They kept walking right until there was a gap in front of them, with a door on the other side of the gap.

    “Look, there is a crank here!” shouted Sarah.

    “Okay, I’ll turn it,” said Nat. Nat turned the crank and part of a floor came up through the gap. “Okay, let’s keep going now,” Nat said. They walked to the door and Nat opened it. They went into a new, rectangular room. Five huge Onixs crashed through the wall behind them.

    “Oh, man, RUN!” yelled Nat. They ran. As they ran, they saw a door in front of them.

    “Look, a door!” shouted Maria. They ran to the door and Nat opened it as quickly as he could and they went in a new room.

    “Whew! That was close!” shouted Sarah.

    “I know!” shouted Nat. Suddenly, as they kept walking, a huge boulder fell behind them and started rolling towards the six of them. “Oh, heck no! TIME TO RUN AGAIN!” yelled Nat as they started running again. Nat saw a hole to the left. “In here!” he shouted.

    “Okay!” shouted both Maria and Sarah as they all went in the hole. The boulder passed by and it crashed through a wall.

    “Okay, let’s go now,” said Nat. They walked to where the boulder crashed.

    “Look there is another door there,” said Maria.

    “Then let’s go to it,” said Sarah. They went to the door and Nat opened it. They went into a new room, where three Kabutops stood. One came and tried to use slash on Emboar.

    “Emboar, avoid it and use mach punch!” shouted Nat. Emboar used mach punch on one of the Kabutops’s head and got knocked out. Another one tried to slash Weezing.

    “Samurott, use aqua tail!” shouted Maria. Samurott used aqua tail on the Kabutops before he was able to slash Weezing.

    “Nice one!” shouted Sarah.

    “Emboar use mach punch again as hard as you can!” shouted Nat. Emboar mach punched the last Kabutops so hard, he got knocked out. “Oh man, I hope you didn’t break his skull,” Nat said. Nat used the C-30 vaccine on all the Kabutops.

    “Look there is a ladder over here!” shouted Maria.

    “Then let’s go,” said Sarah.

    “Right,” said Nat. The six of them went to the ladder and climbed down. They then walked left when they saw a man with a Rampardos. “Aaron? Aaron is that really you?” asked Nat, and started smiling.

    “So what if it’s me,” said Aaron.

    “Aaron, what’s wrong?” asked Maria. “Why are you talking to Nat like that?”

    “What’s wrong?” asked Aaron. “What’s wrong is that I bet the two of you and your pokémon are traitors too, just like him and his pokémon.”

    “Traitors?” asked Nat. “Who are you talking about…?” Nat started to ask when suddenly, thunderbolt filled the room.

    “What the…?” asked Sarah. Aaron suddenly got up.

    “YOU!” Aaron yelled and pointed at an unidentified man with an unidentified pokemon. “COME BACK HERE, YOU TRAITORS!” He and his Rampardos started chasing the man and his Pokémon, who also started running. They four of them left.

    “AARON!” yelled Maria.

    “Maria, wait!” shouted Nat and held Maria’s arm.

    “But we can’t just them run all by themselves!” shouted Maria.

    “I know, it’s just that…” Nat started to say. “Did you see who that man or his pokémon was?” he asked.

    “No, But I’m guessing from the thunderbolt, the Pokémon is an electric type,” said Maria.

    “And I bet that man and his pokémon your friend and his pokémon were chasing are the traitors he was talking about,” said Sarah.

    “Yeah. Okay, let’s go to where they all went,” said Nat.

    “Right,” said Maria and Sarah. They started to walk to where Aaron, his Rampardos, the unidentified man and his unidentified electric type pokémon went. Then the six of them saw spider webs.

    “What’s with the spider webs all of a sudden?” asked Nat.

    “I don’t know, let’s see what’s behind that door,” said Maria. They went to the door and Nat opened it, they ended up in another big rectangular room, where a huge Ariados stood.

    “Oh great, not another huge poison type!” shouted Nat. End of chapter 16.


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