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    Well, according to my story, it started more than 20 years ago. :/ how old is your protagonist?

    It's really all up to Samantha, but I took some liberties in my history.
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    Could I reserve for Persephone and her catalyst? Tyr Faction


    EDIT: Sorry, cancel my reservation.
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    May I also reserve Jormungand?

    Also: it's spelled "Tartarus" in Latin; as it was originally in Greek, it's actually spelled "Tartaros".

    The word "blond" denotes whatever it's describing as being masculine, whereas "blonde" (as you used) actually marks its noun as being feminine. What's funny is how those adjectives are actually French...

    Every need of his was provided, and constant murmurs of “love you” were commonplace.

    “I am Hyperion, Lord of Light and Titan of the East. How would you like to become my Catalyst?”

    Capitalize it.

    You need to learn the difference between things like "gods", "god's", and "gods'"...

    The best way to describe Hyperion is this: take the Rock (Dwayne Johnson); now imagine if he was Greek, covered in scars, and 10x buffer and a couple inches taller.

    There are just too many common errors; you didn't capitalize "that" in all your Greek relics, and you forgot to capitalize so much (I mean, seriously, at least be consistent); in fact, did you know in original Greek (as in Latin) all letters were actually capitalized and didn't have any accents to display how they were pronounced? Also, spaces weren't created until much later.

    So many common errors (sorry, but it's true)...

    You used modern Greek instead of Ancient Greek, and they're as different from each other as Italian is from Latin.

    ALSO, THAT EPSILON (in "aster") SHOULD BE AN ETA!
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    Forget the reservation. Also, I just read all of Icarus'/Hyperion's sign up. By the way, speaking of yakuza...

    Catalyst


    Name: Aimi "Aichan" Sakurako (桜子 「愛ちゃん」 愛美)

    Age: 17

    Gender: Female

    Appearance: She stands at 5'07" and is nothing other than all the world's potential beauty and eroticism; nothing short of "misaki". She has brown and blonde hair (which she frequently dyes whatever color she wishes about every couple of weeks; the dye usually only takes about a week to get fully washed out) as well as blue, slightly green irises. Atypically for a phenom in pop music, she likes to dress plainly, with not only relatively less pointless, trivial articles of clothing than other stars in Japanese or general worldly society, but fewer unnecessary pieces of clothing than other girls in general, or even people overall. Had Aphrodite been cast out from the heavens first, she would have doubtlessly sought to use her.

    She likes to wear regular denim jeans in addition to a thin cotton bright red t-shirt. She also has white running shoes. She has really pale skin; however, if she does just spend a few hours under good sunlight, she can get a decent tan. She tolerates cold weather for the most part; she has a simple white cotton jacket if she absolutely needs it. Essentially everyone universally agrees she looks good, and, as according to her boyfriend, has "sweet tits and a sexy a5$". She can wear whatever people give her; she herself will still look good be beautiful.

    Country of Origin: State of Japan

    Notable Skills:
    - She knows a bit of English, although that doesn't really matter so much, since her deity is usually around with her to speak any language for her (he's also teaching her English and French).
    - She's somewhat clever (a skilled strategist and tactician), and is alright at formulating, predicting, and understanding plans.
    - Due to her past association with the "ninkyo dantai", she knows how they function and has learned many of their operations and techniques (such as usual points of interaction/trade and torture methods).
    - She's learning parkour and spying, and is decent (just above average) at running.

    Personality: She tries to be nice to other people, and she's actually relatively innocent. She knows how terrible life is. She always tries in whatever situation she's in to make sure as few people get hurt as she can. She knows the yakuza isn't right and she doesn't want anything more than to leave it. She aspires to be able to spend the rest of her life doing something right (taking care of herself as well as others) without having to rely on and fuel some terrible human hell-on-earth machine.

    She is the archetype of the sexually promiscuous. She flaunts herself to other people (usually to get a job or deal done) and she enjoys it. She enjoys acting like that to others to get attention, but she knows better than to actually get herself into trouble (getting herself into a situation in which she's hopelessly trapped and going to have to pay the price for what she's been doing is what she fears most). She is going to get around in the musical industry by using her sexual appeal to others, and landing a deal (as well as other acts which are much more clandestine and even metaphysical) is going to be dependent partially on it, as well as whether or not she, her other band members, and her deity are sufficiently charismatic.

    History: She is a rising star of Shinjuku; she's gradually becoming a famous singer. She was born and raised in the city, although her parents usually left her alone and practically wandered all around Kanto. She was often very lonely. She met a few people at her school, but she always felt as if none of them really cared enough to relate with her. Her parents were highly respected in the yakuza. They did all sorts of trade, made tons of money, and always spent the nights with each other.

    She learned about everything that was going on in life from an early age. She always felt terribly neglected. Her closest friends up to her early to mid high school life were also in the gokudo. Her boyfriend, Takashi, met her in high school and was also a son of an even more honored family in the criminal organizations; he was hoping to be able to escape his parents and everyone else, too. She would frequently get herself in the middle of such things in order to profit from it if she could; her parents didn't care about her much and she needed to make a living.

    One day she received recognition for her skill in singing and started a small band up with some of her friends, which also helped them get some money. In regards for the "ninkyo dantai", they were considering leaving, always making business deals less and less frequently.

    What helped out even more was how, recently, she was hanging out alone in her boyfriend's alley (who, as he had been mentioned before, is also one of her close friend yakuza band members), and she saw a burning light fall down from the sky. It crashed down at the end of the alleyway and made a crevasse into the concrete. She headed down over to it; it turned out to be a person. The strange grey-haired entity (who looked hardly any older than she was) claimed to be a "sarugami"; some type of "monkey god".

    At this point she realized her life was seriously going to get interesting.

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    Name: Babi

    Aliases: Monkey God, King/Prince/Bull/Chief of the Baboons

    Gender: Male

    Origin: ΑΙΓΥΠΤΟΥ/Aigyptou/Aegypti/Egyptian

    Weapons/Divine Relics: A 1.5-meter long metal staff with a diameter of a couple of centimeters which can grow to a greater mass and length at his will; its composition also changes to whatever precious metal he chooses, from bronze to gold to silver to some sharp blood-red metal, and he can use it to channel fire in addition to being able to make the end of it sharper as he desires until it's as sharp as a needle.

    Slumber Mode Appearance: He easily stands at slightly over 6'00" in height. He weighs about 160 lbs. and usually has moderately tanned skin. He can alter his skin coloration to be whatever he chooses, from considerably tan to a fierce scarlet color to a shade of albinism. He usually has from light gray to pure white hair, and he can change the color of his hair to a somewhat dark grey, blond, or even dark brown color, too. His irises are an ardent red color of blood; he is a weak god of fire and violence. He looks young and athletic, and typically appears as if he might actually be no older than about 20. Being a god of sexual tension, he looks what teen girls would generally call attractive. He actually has trouble in keeping his form entirely human; in this state, he can also transform into a monkey, alter the amount of hair his human body has in certain locations, and even grow a monkey tail in his human form. During moments in which he opts to be a monkey, he most frequently decides to be an agile South American species.

    For his clothes, he generally prefers to wear a plain and simple black t-shirt and jeans, or a grey collared shirt and khakis, alongside deep red sneakers. He's just fine with wearing other things like a school uniform or any other sort of outfit; he is the type of man god who makes the suit.

    Combat Mode Appearance: He becomes covered in light grey fur, grows a 7 foot long prehensile monkey tail (which he can change the length of up to several yards), and becomes slightly larger and much more muscular. He also gains sharp, piercing fingernails which anyone would call claws and can grow monkey fangs.

    His skin color also typically changes to a much redder hue. More people can see his eyes in this form, which are practically glowing.

    Basic Abilities:

    Simian Rule - he is telepathic with and can control any nearby simians entirely (this is limited in humans; he can influence their thoughts and emotions, primarily regarding lust, hormones, tension, and sexual desire, but he can't outright control them).
    Pyrokinesis - he has a limited extent of control over fire.
    Soul Devoration - he is remotely vampiric; by biting into people, he can consume and become stronger from their blood by nature, as well as destroy and even gain the knowledge of part of their spirits by magic; back during his life in Egypt, he would actually be able to grow to a colossal size and devour unjust people who were not fit to walk into his father's (Osiris') home, let alone stand before him to be judged, most often alive and whole, entirely; however, now his spiritual abilities have been suppressed, and he is weak.
    Absolute Charisma - he can convince human beings and some deities to do absolutely anything as long as he provides sufficient rationale.

    Catalysed Mode Appearance: Aimi can actually change the extent at which she and her deity are Catalysed (however much she has fused with her deity), and, depending on however much of him she has absorbed, he will be able to take a certain extent of his forms, additionally. If she is only fused with him slightly, she can appear to be even more busty, change her hair color at will, appear to be just a bit (about an inch) taller, and even grow a prehensile monkey tail; if she does, he will be able to use his Combat form less strongly.

    At their midpoint, she can reach a point essentially halfway between human and his Combat monkey form, with both of them hardly having any extent of his Combat form abilities (barely any pyrokinesis, if any, and it would leave her exhausted mentally; they become slightly stronger from consuming the blood of their enemies, but they can't consume anyone's souls). They both gain the forms of humanoid monkeys, and she grows a 7 foot long tail of a monkey, but they both have limited abilities.

    If she's Catalysed with him nearly completely, she gets nearly all of his monkey god abilities; her monkey tail can grow substantially, she has the shape and form of a humanoid monkey, and she gains full fangs and claws like a monkey. As her deity does in his Slumber form, in this state, she can also take on the full form of a monkey. In this state, her deity can only be in his Slumber form, and only use those of his abilities (Simian Rule and Absolute Charisma). During moments in which they use this, she's either alone and in need of these abilities or they're usually both going out separately and spying.

    If she Catalyses with him completely, she gains full use of his skill and his abilities, and she fights alone quite skillfully. They usually do this to be together, and, in this form, she can't change back to human instantly. In this state, she's either doing her best improving at fighting, or (in order to minimize their chances of being caught or to spy without having to work separately) she has absorbed him completely and taken on the full form of a monkey.

    Catalysed Mode Abilities:

    Simian Rule - exactly the same as with her deity.
    Pyrokinesis - exactly the same as with her deity.
    Soul Devoration - exactly the same as with her deity.
    Absolute Charisma - exactly the same as with her deity.
    Emotive Manipulation (or, as Aimi likes to call it, especially if she's being coerced to use it by Babi: "Mind Rape") - just by touching someone (aside from any other Catalysts and especially deities; immunity to magic stops this entirely and the stronger the deity, the more resistant his/her Catalyst is to this and the longer it'll take for it to work), she can give people her values and completely rewrite their thoughts and feelings about something.

    Mecha Mode Appearance: Babi's bones, muscles, and skin all become metal; he grows to a size of 60 feet in height easily. He looks like a robotic humanoid monkey; he even keeps his plain, unfashioned hair style, which also turns into metal, as well. He still has a strong prehensile monkey tail as in his Combat Mode, and, although his body is designed to look more like a human's, his face still resembles that of a monkey somewhat more than that of a human.

    Babi's metal covering becomes the same color as his hair/fur was in his basic form; his lower half is colored dark blue as if he is still wearing jeans because he thinks they look awesome. He has significantly greater speed and agility even proportionally; he can react very quickly and he's insanely swift. He still carries his burning metal morphing rod; it now amplifies his power over fire considerably.

    Mecha Mode Abilities:

    Simian Rule - exactly the same as in his basic forms, in addition to being able to control simians from a greater distance and manipulate people much more powerfully.
    Pyrokinesis - exactly the same as in his basic forms, and he can wield flames much more strongly.
    Soul Devoration - exactly the same as in his basic forms, only considerably stronger and he can devour people entirely.
    Osiris' Judgment - he can create a huge blast of hellfire and metal shrapnel with a radius of about 15 miles; this doesn't do much to gods or deities who are resistant to fire and are capable of protecting their Catalysts from fire magic or even just general magic, and he is forced out of Mecha Mode immediately.

    Personality: He's a cordial young deity. He's charismatic and likes everyone to act maturely. He knows he's quite weak, even if he is a god, and never overestimates his abilities. He's brilliant in planning, and, although occasionally he and someone may be enemies and he may act like a total prick to someone for his own amusement frequently, he always carries a deep respect for everyone, whether mortal or deity.

    In spite of how he's weak, he can always set things up so that he and the people he cares about can end up on top. He may belong partly to chaos, but, in the end, he's very selfless and caring. In fact, that's the entire reason why he joined Loki.

    He doesn't like the way his name sounds currently, and preferred how it sounded in ancient Egypt. He has decided to take on the job of Aimi's band's manager/counselor/negotiator/liaison. He can take on any name people desire to give him, and, seeing how he's foreign, Aimi refers to him in katakana as "マナジャー" (ma-na-jyā; manager).

    Mythology: According to the mythology of Egypt, Babi was a son of Osiris, who often stayed with him in the Egyptian underworld, devouring those whose souls were unworthy to be there. Monkeys (specifically baboons, as those were the only ones Egyptians would normally see) were thought to be incarnations of the "worthy" dead.

    Babi was considered to be an underworld deity, who would always reside there, enforcing some extent of order by devouring the unrighteous. In accordance with several myths, he lived down there near his father, down by a lake of fire. Monkeys were seen as being excessively aggressive, and, so, Babi was thought to be vicious and bloodthirsty, and believed to have lived off of entrails and human bodies.

    Specifically, Babi was believed to be Osiris' first born. He was imagined as having a very strong filial attachment to him, and acting accordingly. He carried out due judgment against the dead, either by helping or punishing. He was also called an incarnation of destruction and virility.

    History: He used to spend most of his life in the Underworld with his father, Osiris, living alone contently. He would usually go around and meet up with some of the other deities, such as Bast, Horus, Isis, and even Set. He'd devour people and consume their souls frequently, but he'd also help and talk to those who were friends of the gods occasionally. He was young and reasonably powerful (about just as much as Bast). He was clever, and could infer just about anything pretty much any of the gods were either already accomplishing or planning on doing. For his own entertainment, amongst the lesser gods he'd sometimes set astir much mischief.

    Everything was going normally until just recently. A god of the Norse variety gathered together a military and invaded the land of his family. He captured them all and gave each of them a beating. Even some of the toughest fell to his military. As for Babi, he decided to flee. He failed to escape, however; Loki had caught Osiris and was subjecting him to a terrible punishment. Once he caught word of the news, Babi made his way back to the underworld. He reached his father's palace and saw it was true: Loki's faction had taken and imprisoned all Osiris, Anubis, Bast, Horus, Nephthys, Isis, Horus, and Set.

    At that point, the god offered each of them an opportunity: join his military, or perish eternally. His father refused, but didn't express any desire to join Tyr, either. For Babi, Loki threated to ruin not only him or his father, but his entire family; however, if he would join him, he offered he would set his father and maybe his cousin (Bast) free. Babi naturally accepted.

    After he got into a few fights amongst some weaker gods, he eventually had to fight against Freyr; needlessly to say, he horribly lost. He crashed and landed into a strange city in a well-kept local alley in Japan. He met a person (a young girl) who asked who he was and whether or not he was okay. He replied in her modern human language that he was alright, told her who he was, and asked her who she was before offering to make her his Catalyst.

    Faction: Loki

    ...and I think I might make an Izanagi sign up later (and the Catalyst will actually be from Egypt).

    I'm still thinking about Sobek, Zeus, and Poseidon... also, would a Chaos God from Warhammer 40,000 be permitted?
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    Quote Originally Posted by PokeLegend View Post

    Also: it's spelled "Tartarus" in Latin; as it was originally in Greek, it's actually spelled "Tartaros".

    The word "blond" denotes whatever it's describing as being masculine, whereas "blonde" (as you used) actually marks its noun as being feminine. What's funny is how those adjectives are actually French...

    Every need of his was provided, and constant murmurs of “love you” were commonplace.

    “I am Hyperion, Lord of Light and Titan of the East. How would you like to become my Catalyst?”

    Capitalize it.

    You need to learn the difference between things like "gods", "god's", and "gods'"...

    The best way to describe Hyperion is this: take the Rock (Dwayne Johnson); now imagine if he was Greek, covered in scars, and 10x buffer and a couple inches taller.

    There are just too many common errors; you didn't capitalize "that" in all your Greek relics, and you forgot to capitalize so much (I mean, seriously, at least be consistent); in fact, did you know in original Greek (as in Latin) all letters were actually capitalized and didn't have any accents to display how they were pronounced? Also, spaces weren't created until much later.

    So many common errors (sorry, but it's true)...

    You used modern Greek instead of Ancient Greek, and they're as different from each other as Italian is from Latin.

    ALSO, THAT EPSILON (in "aster") SHOULD BE AN ETA!
    Making those corrections now. Do you have a website that translates ancient greek? :/

    I fully admit that there are a bunch of errors, but meh. :/ If they all bother you that much I'll run it through a grammar check machine.

    Also, yes, I have absolutely no idea about ancient Greek. Unfortunately, all my 10 years of education haven't bothered to educate me on that subject

    EDIT: Thanks for reading my thing and criticizing it. Much appreciated.
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    I know I was being obnoxious; I just wanted to help by pointing out a few things, and I, naturally, am irritated by common mistakes (and respond to them by provoking the people who cause them).

    So, I'm sorry for having been as irksome as I was (the means by which I corrected your sign up's flaws), but I won't apologize for having corrected the errors.

    Edit: Oh; you were being sincere. You're welcome, then (sometimes I worry I might come across as being incorrigibly annoying).
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    Nonetheless, thank you for the corrections.

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    ...I'm also working on this in the unlikely event that this thread is revived...

    Catalyst


    Name: Joshua Krokodeilos

    Age: 17

    Gender: Male

    Appearance:

    Country of Origin: The United Kingdom

    Notable Skills:

    - He's alright at running.
    - To call him excellent at swimming would be an understatement.
    - He knows a bit of Royal Marine martial arts and training.
    - He has a lot of medical knowledge.

    Personality:

    History:

    Other:

    Deity


    Name: Sobek

    Aliases: ΣΟΥΧΟΣ, Suchos, God of the Nile River, God of Crocodiles, God of Egypt's Military

    Origin: ΑΙΓΥΠΤΟΥ/Aigyptou/Aegypti/Egyptian

    Gender: Male
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