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    Alrighty, another addition to the PM List.
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    Chapter 4 is too short...gaah! The horror of describing! jk, jk. I'll see if I feel like improving it. No! I shall not overwork myself and try to stretch the next chappie with uselessness! Quantity is NOT more important than quality!My head hurts...

    Sorry guys, I kinda overworked myself today, gonna have to slow it down, Gaah, my head. Chapter 4 may be a little too lacking description at some point and too short.
    I'll post it and you criticize, OK?
    Prepare for junk! Oh yeah it's rated in between PG and PG-13. Not too much violence. But some. I'm cruel. XD

    Chapter 4: Snagem Hideout! Rescue May!

    Drew trudged through the sand, blinded by the current sandstorm. At least Max was safe in a hotel back in Phenac City. But Drew wasn’t thinking about that. One thing was on his mind: May.

    He had his Go-Goggles on so he could see, but due to the desert storm, there was a lack of air and he had trouble breathing. Somehow, thinking about May kept him conscious. He could’ve suffocated more than an hour ago.

    He coughed as sand littered his almost closed mouth. If he didn’t get to Team Snagem soon, who knows what would happen to him and May. Somehow, he was forgetting about himself and pulling through because of May.

    His secret feelings for her, they could never be forgotten. Was his soft side towards May keeping him going?

    ‘Another minute and I’ll suffocate,’ he thought. He spotted a building in the middle of all the thoughts and confusion. He started for it, slowing down with each step. “I’m coming. Just hold on,” he said.

    He reached for the door handle and using every bit of his remaining strength, pushed it open and fell inside, unconscious.
    * * *
    “What do you reckon we do with him?” said a male voice.

    “He’s probably here to save the girl,” boomed a much deeper, tougher voice.

    Drew opened his eyes. He was lying on the floor, tied up.

    All he could remember was opening the door. Wait! Could this be the Hideout?

    He struggled to get up. It was hard, getting up with your hands tied to your back.

    “Boss, he’s up!” shouted a female voice.

    But whoever was “Boss” was gone.

    “Boss?” The female looked for him.

    While she was distracted, Drew hurried out the door.

    He heard voices coming from a room on the left of him, and one of the voices belonged to May.
    “I know he’s coming! He wouldn’t leave me here to rot like you would!” He heard she shout through her sobs.

    “He didn’t even make it through the desert! He’s in the hideout, unconscious!” said a male voice.

    Drew shook with anger and pushed the door open. “Who said?”

    “Drew!” May looked up and the tears stopped flowing. She was tied up and was hanging from the ceiling, similar to the way she got tied up by Team Rocket on Mirage Island.

    “Ha, you’ve been tricked,” said the male grunt. A ton of other grunts surrounded him and hung him from the ceiling as well.

    The grunts laughed and left them to their misery. The male one said as he left, “We’re gonna set those ropes on fire, you’ll be history!”

    “WHAT?” May screamed.

    “May, don’t worry I have a plan!"
    * * *
    Drew started to flail about, making him swing around. He collided hard with May and her rope broke, setting her free.

    She sneaked down the hallway, careful not to make a sound. It was difficult, as there were paper scattered everywhere, but she tiptoed between them. She sneaked into a large storage room and found a Voltorb. Luckily, it was sleeping, so she picked it up and set it in the hallway. She found other sleeping Voltorb and placed them next to each other, then went back to Drew’s room and untied him down. Then they crept through the hallway and woke up one of the Voltorb and ran out as quickly as they could, winding through hallways, dodging grunts, pushing open doors.

    "I don't see why I could've just untied and go," May complained.

    "The Voltorbs'll destroy the Hideout, and plus, they could distract them while we escape," Drew explained.

    May seemed worried. Drew's breathing was quite raspy, but he was still running and pulling her along.

    "I wonder how those grunts don't get lost in here," Drew muttered.

    The Voltorb they woke up became angry after getting its pointless awakening. It used Self-Destruct, and because there were several other Voltorbs and even an Electrode next to it, it caused a chain reaction, destroying the hideout.

    "Drew, I think-" May started.

    "We're almost out!" Drew tried assure her as the explosion brought most of the ceiling down.

    May and Drew were pretty lucky, as they had escaped quickly enough and the sandstorm had subsided while Drew was on his rescue mission. Several grunts frantically escaped as their Hideout crumbled down to a dump of broken walls.
    * * *
    “Drew, you could’ve died in that sandstorm!” May snapped as they got back at Phenac City.

    “Well, you could thank me for a change,” Drew snapped back.

    May fell silent. “Thanks.” Tears dripped down her face. “It’s just- you could’ve died out there!”

    Drew held her hand. “That’s not as important as our sticking together and safety.”

    Suddenly, Drew collapsed. His breathing was heavy and it sounded really scratchy.

    “Drew! Please speak to me Drew!’ May shook him. She cried harder.

    But her hand was still in his.
    * * *
    “There’s sand in his lungs, but after we remove it, we should be fine,” the doctor said.

    May still was crying. Tears were burning her eyes. One splattered on Drew’s face.

    Then May realized that Drew was still holding her hand. She had an idea. She squeezed his hand and kissed it. Drew’s eyes opened. “Huh?” He appeared to be breathing fine. May was so happy, she kissed him on the cheek.

    She blushed so red she almost passed out.

    I know, good beginning, sucky ending. My headache loves me too much. XD
    I'll edit when I get the chance...

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    It was nice! Give yourself a little credit- you've been making chapters all day. I hope your headache goes away soon!
    Jade~

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    yea u should chill and relax instead of workin ur mind out.............. but its good............ can't wait 4 ur edit of da chapter

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    Great chappie. sorry I didn't review earlier, I did but then I edited my post, and ended up deleting it, and it's a long story. heh, but enough about that, this is a great story, and your REALLY good about updating! I think I could've put up the same amount as you have in about a year! (I'm so slow at typing!Gahh!) Neway, the ending is short, but really sweet~!! Hope your headache goes away (those things really are killer aren't they?)

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    Hey nice Chapter! can you add me onto the PM list?


    Other interests and HSC preparations have prompted me to be inactive. T3T

    But you can still find me here yo~
    Or the usual places (MSN, Facebook, etc.)

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    Thank you everyone for forgiving me, I feel a lot better, a good night sleep does a lot of help! (I think I'm cry...never had such nice people around me)
    Anyway,
    The PM List:
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    If I missed or misspelled anyone's name, please tell me!
    (Grr, my sis ate all my bubble gum!)
    Back to work,
    EDIT: I edited most of Chapter 4. Hopefully it's a LITTLE better now.
    Chapter 5 is up! rate PG!

    Chapter 5: The Hidden Door! Golden Forest and Princess Kirlia!

    Drew sat up abruptly in his hospital bed. He felt that it was easier to breath. He tried to get up, but his legs wobbled and he felt weak. He sat back on his bed, unable to stand. Then he noticed something on the side of his bed.

    May was asleep with her head resting on her arms. Drew looked closely and saw that her face was streaked with tears. Then he noticed a pink box next to her. Clueless as he was, he read the note.

    Dear Drew,
    I hope you feel soon,
    Even better,
    It's Valentine's Day!
    Yes I know,
    Weather's hot in Orre
    Even in winter.
    Oh joy,
    I can't wait for summer!
    Then we'll cook!
    From May

    He opened the big pink box and saw a bouquet of roses and another note:

    I have been saving these, you know.

    He smiled and placed the roses next to his bed in a vase filled with water. He ripped one off its stem and put it through May's hair.

    "Happy Valentine's Day to you too, May."
    * * *
    May woke up, and stretched. "Huh?"

    Drew's bed was empty.

    She scratched her head and felt a rose sitting behind her ear. Knowing it was probably Drew, she blushed as she saw that he had already read the note and got her present.

    She got up and searched the room for him. Nope, she was the only one here. She peered into the room next to Drew's and saw the doctor arguing with him.

    "Drew, you're weak, so you should be in bed," the doctor scolded.

    "I'm fine. I'm standing up," Drew said angrily.

    "NO. You are not leaving until you can stand up without support!" The doctor eyed him. He was leaning on a bed. "There's nothing for you told hold in the desert, and there could be another sandstorm there, so yeah, why go?"

    "Because of the Annual Star Night Festival in the Sandi region!”

    “The Sandi region?” May asked. “Where’s that?”

    The doctor sighed. “Everybody in the Johto and Orre region know about it. Sometimes we let experienced coordinators know about it.”

    “But why just Orre and Johto?” May asked.

    “Kanto is closer to Houen than Johto, so they can get to contests easlier than the other regions, so Orre built the Sandi region behind a hidden door, so that Houen’s contests wouldn’t be deserted,” the doctor explained. “However, the door is hidden in the desert, and Drew here needs his rest.”

    “But what’s Annual Star Night Festival?”

    Doctor shook his head and sighed. “Kids these days, they’re too curious.”
    * * *
    Drew sighed. “I really wish that he would let me go!”

    May sat on a chair next to his bed. “I do too.”

    Max sat on his sister’s lap. “Hey, maybe we could sneak out!”

    “But Drew needs to recover!”

    Max did his “shine-glasses.” “Drew, I need your Roselia.”
    * * *
    “Roselia, are you ready?”

    Roselia nodded. “Rrolll!”

    “Roselia, use Aromatherapy!”

    “Aroma-what?” May and Drew said at the same time.

    Roselia glowed and bubbles of light flew from her body. The bubbles sank into Drew’s chest.

    Drew stared at it but felt no pain. He got out of bed and stood up straight.

    “What was that?” Drew said, walking around.

    “Aromatherapy gives energy to a teammate,” Max explained.

    Roselia lay on the ground, exhausted from using its newly learned attack.

    Drew picked Roselia up. “Thank you so much,” he said as she was sprayed with a potion and returned to her Pokeball. “I’m ready to go!”
    * * *
    “Are you sure the doctor won’t find out too soon?” May asked, worried. “He could catch us before we even leave town,”

    “Just don’t look too suspicious,” Drew told her.

    They quickly ran out through the Phenac City gate and ran on the desert sand.

    “It’s too hot, we might not make it,” May said. “Wait, Flygon can fly through deserts and sandstorms and intense heat, right?”

    “Then why not ride your Flygon!” Max suggested.

    Drew hesitated and finally sent out the Ground/ Dragon Pokemon.

    “Raaaawwwrrr!” It gently flapped its triangular wings.

    “Flygon, can you handle three passengers?” Drew asked.

    “Ryyyyy!” It bent down for May and Max to climb on.

    “Guess there’s enough room for all,” he said, taking a seat in the front.

    Flygon tightened its muscles and pushed off the ground with its feet. As soon as it was airborne, it flapped its wings to stay in the air. It reared its neck and pushed it forward and flapped its wings to go faster.

    Because the dragon was flying so fast, it felt like there were strong winds. Flygon flew low to the ground, stirring the sand as it went.

    “Do you see a secret door anywhere?” Drew shouted.

    “I thought I saw something open and close,” May shouted above the wind. She pointed to the right. Flygon turned its head and turned to the direction May was pointing to and landed at a huge rock three times its size.

    The trio hopped off and felt the rock for any sign of a door.

    “I think I found something,” Max shouted. May and Drew looked at him as he pushed a section of the rock open.

    “Return, Flygon!”

    Max jumped through the blinding white, and May followed. Drew stuck his head in, but it was too bright to see anything. He jumped in, closing the door behind him.

    He felt as if he was going down really long slide.

    “Unhh!” Max shouted as he landed.

    “Oof!” He shouted again when his sister landed on top of him.

    “Ow!” May and Max yelled in pain as Drew landed on both of them.

    Drew opened his eyes to find himself on a pile of people and quickly got off.

    “Sis…you’re killing me…” Max screamed.

    May groaned and got off of her squashed brother. “What is this place?”

    They appeared to be in a forest. The trees were lined up side-by-side, making a perfectly straight road. The leaves were so thick, only a few golden rays of sunlight lit the ground. The leaves were a beautiful, calm mixture of their usual green and the golden sunlight it was partially blocking.

    They heard Pidgeys cooing and Vibravas humming. Zigzagoons picked berries off the leafy bushes, and bunches of baby Pokemon chased each other around. Scythers flew about, cutting off old branches to let sunlight flow through. Hoppips floated in the gentle breeze that rustled the leaves.

    “Wow, this place is beautiful!” May exclaimed.

    “I believe that this is the Forest of the Gardevoir,” Drew said, admiring the rose bushes.

    They walked along the road. Oddishes popped out of the ground as they passed to welcome them.

    They came to a stone throne with a Kirlia sitting in it.

    “Hello there,” May greeted.

    “Kirlia!” It happily ran over to them and curtsied.

    With nothing else to do, the trio bowed/ curtsied back.

    Kirlia called for its friends.

    A bunch of Sunflora came, holding baskets of fruit. They set them down and bowed to Kirlia.

    “I guess Kirlia is the princess here,” Max guessed.

    Kirlia nodded and its eyes glowed blue.

    The trio felt something make them sit down.

    “Maybe Kirlia used Confusion to make us sit down,” Max said.

    Kirlia picked up a bundle of grapes and picked one off and ate it.

    Drew did the same. “Mmm, these are really delicious,” he complimented.

    They started eating to their hearts content. A few other Pokemon joined them in their feast.

    THUD. The ground shook and a few leaves fell to the ground. THUD!

    The Pokemon and Kirlia panicked. Kirlia hid behind her throne while the other Pokemon scattered into the trees.

    Drew and May looked up while Max hid with the Pokemon.

    A strange, robotic thing with a huge bucket behind its back, ten feet tall stood in front of them and released a pincer, which went behind the throne and pulled Kirlia out and threw her into the bucket.

    “Let Kirlia go!’ Drew shouted angrily, taking out a Pokeball.

    “Who are you anyway?” May demanded.

    “Oh, look, it’s the girlie and her hero again,” laughed a male voice.

    A door opened and the same male from Team Snagem that kidnapped May appeared.

    “You,” Drew muttered menacingly.

    “Out of my way!” He closed the door and the pincer went for May.

    “No!” Drew stood in front of May and the pincer got him instead. He was thrown into the same bucket that Kirlia was in.

    “Drew!” May cried. “You’ll pay for that! Go, Combusken!”

    She released the Fire/ Fighting Pokemon.

    “My name is Kent, and you’re not getting in my way, girlie! Vileplume, use Poisonpowder on Combusken and the girlie!”

    He released his Flower Pokemon and it released a toxic powder from the top of its huge head.

    “Sis!” Max said, running to his sister.

    “Max, you’ll get hurt!” May protested.

    But it was too late.

    May, Max, and Combusken passed out.

    Meanwhile, in the bucket…

    “Kirlia, I need you to call for help,” Drew said.

    Kirlia nodded. “Kiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiirrr…” Its voice rang through the forest, and the Pokemon rushed to aid their princess. “Kirlia! Kirlia!” it commanded.

    RAM. The bucket shook as the Pokemon rammed into it. CRACK. The bucket ripped off of the robots back.

    “What’s happening?” Kent yelled, as the robot fell apart.

    Drew and Kirlia hopped out of the bucket, safe and sound. “Kirlia, use Psychic!”

    Kirlia’s pupils narrowed as her eyes glowed blue. The robot glowed blue, too, under Kirlia’s control. Kirlia thrusted it into the sky, where it disappeared.

    “Great job, Kirlia!” Drew said. Then his attention turned to May and Max.

    Kirlia called for the Grass Pokemon. Several wild Roselias came and used Aromatherapy on May, Max, and Combusken.

    May and Max woke up.

    “Where’s Kent?” May asked, looking around.

    Drew smiled. “Kirlia and the Pokemon got rid of him.”
    * * *
    May, Max, and Drew were about to leave, when Kirlia cried out. “Kirlia!”

    The sun was setting. A gentle breeze rustled the leaves.

    “What is it, Kirlia?” Drew asked.

    Kirlia’s eyes glowed and one of Drew’s Pokeballs. “Hey, what are you doing?”

    The Pokeball hit Kirlia on the head and it was zapped inside.

    May giggled. “I guess Kirlia wanted to come with you after you saved its forest.”

    “But then who will be in charge?” Max asked.

    “Ral!” said a Ralts sitting in Kirlia's throne.

    Drew smiled as the trio walked out of the forest, on their way to a nearby town.

    -Ralts
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    This chapter is sooooo sweet! I especially liked the part when Drew put a rose in her hair... awww... Anywayz, good job and keep it up!
    Jade~

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    BeAuTiFuL mAy: I liked that much too, although I'm not one for mushie stuff.

    Thanks for reviewing, I'm standing by all day! (I mean it )

    I suddenly had an idea for another fic, but I'm NOT going to start it before I finish this one. I'm loyal to my readers.

    -Ralts

    EDIT:
    Coming is Chapter 6: Starry Night Festival!
    May, Drew, and Max arrive in Moki Town, a peaceful town with open spaces and beautiful land, which makes it a perfect place to see the stars.
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    wow, awesome pichu gurl! the beginning was soooo cute! I liked the part where she saved those roses. That was so sweet! ^^ sorry I didn't review even earlier, I just got out of bed, heh. _ _'
    -MiniMinun

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    MiniMinun: Heh, I guess there's an everybody-like part in every chapter. That chappie took 6 hours with only a lunch break.
    At least you got more sleep than me, I'm a couch potato. Got up 6 in the morning just to work on the fic. My grandma brought breakfast to the computer so I didn't need to stop typing. Thanks!

    I feel kinda tired, I could've started chappie 6 an hour ago! *runs away from readers* I'll start now. ^_^'

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    Oh, don't worry, for your first fic this is really good! I may think about posting a fanfic, but then, the readers'll have to be about once every other month patient! lol. trust me, I don't think anyone here'll get mad just because you didn't post more than one chappie a day! (so no need in running away) I think your great at updating! of course, rushed isn't always best. quality over quantity as they say! ^^

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    MiniMinun: I'm kinda getting slowed down by Writer's Block right now. ^_^' Now I can slow down!

    Hm, I should.........and then make..........then that............then he.............Kirlia does...........(and I go on)

    -Ralts

    EDIT: I'm proofreading Chapter 6 right now, and I'll put it up first thing tomorrow.

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    I am so so sorry for the double post, but I can't keep you guys waiting! Also, if you didn't get a PM for some reason, please tell me, I had a little mix-up.

    Alright, from now on all the chapters will be rated PG, because of my age level.

    Chapter 6: Starry Night Festival!

    “I see it!” May shouted from the top of the hill. She saw a couple of buildings and open plains and shimmering lakes or in other words, Moki Town. She ran down the hill, gathering speed as she went.

    Max and Drew followed close behind.

    “I guess this is the perfect place to see shooting stars,” Drew said; looking up at the cloudless, blue sky.

    May stopped and turned to look at him. “What do you mean?”

    “In the Starry Night Festival, people gather outside to watch the shooting stars and make a wish,” he explained. “Moki Town is the perfect place to spend Starry Night with no trees or city lights and buildings to block the way.”

    “Wow, no wonder you didn’t want to miss it!” May said, looking up at the sky.

    Max shrugged. “I don’t see what’s so special about a bunch of shooting stars.”

    May glared at him. “Come on, Max, doesn’t it sound pretty?”

    Max “shined his glasses.” “It sound pretty alright, pretty ROMANTIC.”

    May answered him with a whack on the head. “Anyway, we should get moving.”

    That night…

    May sat next to Drew on one of the fields. Max was already asleep, as they were waiting for an hour. A lot of other people sat down on the grass, waiting for the star shower. Even some Pokemon came to watch, and they sat down near humans as if they weren’t afraid of being caught by a trainer.

    “I sure hope it’s going to show up,” May said, worried.

    “Don’t worry, I’m sure it’s coming,” Drew assured her. He tossed her a rose.

    “You never seem to run out of them, do you,” she hinted.

    Drew caught the hint and laughed. “Oh, yeah, really helps when you get them back,” he said sarcastically.

    “Hey look!” May pointed at the sky. A star fly across the sky. Another one moved and pretty soon, the sky was filled with falling stars. May let Drew hold her by the waist to get a better look-see. In two minutes, the sky faded except for the full moon.

    “Wow…that was beautiful,” May said dreamily.

    “Did you like it?” Drew asked, setting her down.

    “Of course I liked it!” May said.

    RUMBLE!

    “What was that!” May screamed.

    The ground shook as a drill appeared, scaring off some people and Pokemon. No, it wasn’t just a drill, it was Team Snagem.

    Kent’s voice came on some sort of loudspeaker, then a female voice.

    “Get ready for chaos!” Kent said.

    “Stop it? Just make us!” said the female voice.

    “To storm across the desert sands,”

    “To bring disturbance to every land,”

    “Kent!”

    “Sam!”

    “Team Snagem catches them all!”

    “Give up now, or at our feet you shall fall!”

    Kent had brown hair that stuck up straight. He had evil blue eyes, and a smirk always on his face. His uniform was a red shirt and a black vest and black, baggy pants.

    Sam had blonde hair in pigtails and the same evil eyes as her partner. Her uniform was the same as Kent’s except it had a mini skirt; black, of course.

    “Your motto is even cornier than Team Rocket’s!” May complained.

    Sam, or the female, flipped out. “Don’t you dare compare us to those good-for-nothing losers!” She practically shot fire from her mouth as she yelled.

    Drew reached for his Pokeballs. “Go, Roselia and Kirlia!”

    “Roll!” The flower Pokemon called.

    “Kirlia!” The human-like Pokemon twirled around on its tiny feet.

    “This call for a battle! Go, Sneasel!” Sam said.

    “Come out, Vileplume!” Kent said.

    “Sneasel, use Icy Wind!”

    The Dark/ Ice mouse released an icy wind. Roselia fainted because of its weakness to Ice attacks. Kirlia remained standing.

    “Go, Combusken!” May sent out the fighting bird. “Use Blaze on Sneasel!”

    Combusken light up its foot and kicked Sneasel…in the guts. Having hit its weak spot with a super effective attack, Sneasel was out for the count.

    “Kirlia, use your psychic!” Drew commanded.

    Vileplume glowed blue and slammed into the drill machine so hard, it was knocked over. Vileplume fell to the ground, defeated.

    Kent and Sam recalled their beaten-up Pokemon and were forced to retreat. The machine stood upright and drilled into the ground.

    One more shooting star lit up the sky and May and Drew made their wishes.
    * * *
    May awoke the next morning and found that she had fallen asleep on Drew’s shoulder as other couples were.

    Drew woke up and found that May had fallen asleep on his shoulder.

    May turned to him cheerfully and said, “Good morning! Looks like another day!”

    The sun was low in the sky, yet Moki Town looked pretty much lit up.

    “I guess we should be going now,” May added. “Where’s Max?”

    Max came running to them from the Pokemon Center. “Guys, look, I got a map of the Sandi region!” he waved his Pokenav around and looked as if though he won a million dollars in the lottery.

    “Where are we heading next?” Drew asked.

    “The closest major town, Wandy City, is where you register for a Sandi Contest Pass and it also has the Wandy Contest!” Max said. “Wandy City it is!”

    Sorry if it sounded a bit corny, the motto actually took forever to think of. XD
    Please rate this thread honestly, and point out mistakes if you want to. All these compliments are going to my head. XD

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    You have a good reason to get a big head! It was really good, like the rest of the stuff you've written. Except the motto was kinda weird.
    “Give up now, or at our feet you shall fall!”
    It's not bad, I know how hard it is to make a motto. We had to make a motto at school a while back, and.... let's just say my grades went scuba diving after that. ^.^; Anyways, keep up the good work!
    Jade~

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    BeAuTiFuL mAy:
    Except the motto was kinda weird.
    We all agree with May, it's really corny. XD. I mean it. At least it makes Kent and Sam sound like idi*ts. XD

    I'm almost done with Chapter 7, just need to add the part where *BLEEEEEP* and then I'm done, 'kay?

    -Ralts

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    Woah took me ages to read all those new chappies but I'm glad I did those chappies were good. AAHHHH ANOTHER MOTTO *runs around screaming*....sorry it's just for some reason motto's seem to be annoying. Anyway update soon.
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    nice chapter pichu gurl........... can't wait 4 chapter 7

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    Thanks everyone for reviewing!

    As usual this new chapter is rated PG for words that don't cuss, but ring a little kiddie's "bad word bell," if little kids consider     Spoiler:
    a little too much for them otherwise, its like your average TV epi. ^_^'

    Warning: Chapter title has Spoilies. Read at your own risk (whatever that meanse ^_^;

    Chapter 7: Castform and the Ditto Dilemma!

    “When are we going to get to Wandy City?” May cried impatiently. “We’ve been walking all day in this canyon and getting nowhere!”

    Max shook his head. “We should reach Wandy by late tomorrow. We should set up camp, it’s getting dark.”

    “Max and I are going to set up the tent. Get some firewood, May,” Drew said bossily.

    May sighed. “That’s fine by me, I don’t even know how to set up a tent.”

    They had been walking a whole day through Transformation Canyon. Luckily, there was a forest nearby with fallen branches. May picked a few up and heard a weak cry.

    “Cast…” a voice cried quietly. It seemed to be calling for help. “Form…”

    May dropped the firewood and looked over a bush and saw a Castform that was badly hurt.

    “Castform, are you hurt?” May asked nicely. She held out her hand. “I won’t hurt you.”

    Castform shuddered and moved back, afraid.

    “It’s OK, I wouldn’t dare hurt a cutie like you.” She gently stroked its head.

    Castform tried to escape, but it was in pain. With no other choice, Castform used a lot of its remaining energy to jump into May’s arms. May picked up the branches and hurried back to the campsite.

    “May, we’ve been waiting for you- whoa, a Castform!” Max said.

    “I found it like this while getting the firewood, “May explained. She dropped the firewood neatly into a pile on the ground. She gently set Castform on the ground and took off her bandana and put Castform on it.

    Drew took out a Potion and carefully sprayed it, reducing its pain.

    May looked it up on the Pokedex.

    “Castform, the Weather Pokemon. Castform has the ability to change form because of the weather. It also has the ability to change the weather to its liking.” The computer recited.

    “Wow. Castform can change shape? That’s amazing!” May exclaimed after hearing the Pokedex recite the info.

    Castform woke up, and happily floated around May. “Castform, cast!” It said happily as it sat in her lap. “Form!”

    “Aren’t you the cutest little thing,” May said happily, stroking it.

    “Wow. You just met it and it already likes you,” Max said.
    * * *
    Max was already sound asleep in his sleeping bag. May and Drew sat near the fire with Castform.

    “Castform, can you tell us how you got hurt?” May asked.

    Castform looked at May.

    “I get it, if you tell, you might start crying,” May said.

    Drew winked at Castform. “I think she knows that from experience.”

    May glared at him, then looked back at Castform.

    Castform sighed shakily.
    [Flashback]
    A colony of Castforms landed on Transformation Canyon and began making their homes. There was one smaller than the rest that wasn’t allowed to help since it wasn’t strong enough.

    This Castform really wanted to help, as progress was slow. It tried to help build a little house with its brothers and sisters. It got too excited and accidentally knocked the entire structure down, making its siblings furious. The oldest brother demanded that he didn’t help. The oldest sister suggested he help them find some berries to eat.

    Castform sadly went to the nearest forest and found a tree full of berries and instantly became delighted. It approached the tree and then a Ditto popped out and said that the tree belonged to the Ditto. Castform tried to go past the pink blob, but then a whole colony of them appeared and transformed into Castform.
    Castform backed away, frightened. The Ditto told the Weather Pokemon that if it didn’t leave, it would be sorry.

    Castform, having no idea what the Ditto meant, stood its ground.

    The Ditto Leader commanded its colony to copy the Weather Ball attack and use it on Castform.

    In a second, Castform was knocked out and thrown out of the bushes.
    [End flashback]

    May hugged Castform sympathetically. “I’m sorry that happened, Castform.”

    “What matters now is that Castform returns to its family,” Drew said, choking on the word “family.”

    Castform shook its head.

    “Drew, I don’t think it wants to go back to its family, they treat it like a dried leaf!”

    “Let’s just be glad it has a family at all!” Drew turned around and stared at the moon.

    No one spoke for a while. The only sounds were the crackling fire and Max’s snoring.
    * * *
    May woke up the next morning. It was sunny and warm. She noticed something orange on her bandana.

    “Max, Drew, wake up!” She shook them awake.

    “Mommy, five more minutes!” Max shouted, further waking Drew.

    “What is it?” he asked rubbing his eyes. ‘What a morning person,’ he thought.

    “Castform looks funny!”

    Drew left his purple jacket in the tent and walked outside. “Oh. He just changed shape because it’s really sunny out. When it’s sunny, he becomes a fire type and its Weather Ball attack becomes a fire attack.”

    “Wow, that’s amazing!” May said.

    Drew flicked his hair. “What’s also amazing is that you weren’t smart enough to check your Pokedex,” Drew sneered in a friendly way.

    May didn’t notice his tiny bit of friendliness in his voice and slapped him on the back of his head.

    Drew rubbed the back of his head and shrugged.

    “Cast?” Castform slowly opened it eyes.

    “Castform in its Fire Form. The orange spheres on its body collect heat and is stored in Castform’s head until it uses it for a fire attack.” The Pokedex told May.

    “Castform!” The Pokemon cried happily.

    RUMBLE.

    The small quake scared Max out of the tent.

    “Yikes!” Max scrambled out of the tent and tripped over a rock. “Whoops. Huh?” Max took a closer look at the rock.

    “That wasn’t there before!” May said frantically.

    “Wait! It’s not a rock; it’s-“ Max began.

    “Team Snagem!” Drew finished for him.

    The “rock” was actually the tip of a drill. Team Snagem’s drilling machine came out of the face and faced the trio.

    “Introducing our Diglett Drill Vehicle 1.0!” Kent shouted.

    The DDV 1.0 drove towards the forest. A vacuum came out of the machine and began sucking up all the Ditto.

    “Ditto!” The pink blobs cried as they disappeared into a basket on the machine.

    “Stop it!” May shouted.

    “Oh great, it’s those pests again,” Sam groaned. “I’ve only met them once and they’re so annoying I can’t stand it!”

    “Get ready for chaos-“ Kent began.

    May interrupted them. “I don’t need to hear your idiotic motto.”

    Sam exploded. “IDIOTIC? How dare you! Sneasel, Slash them!”

    The evil, sharp-clawed mouse popped out of its Pokeball and charged towards May.

    “Oh, if it’s a battle you want, you’ll get one,” Drew said. “Go, Masquerain! Use Silver Wind!”

    The Bug came out of its Pokeball and unleashed the powerful bug attack. Sneasel ran right into it and was knocked back.

    “May, I need you to set all the Ditto free. These goons are gonna the learn the lesson the hard way.”

    Sam guffawed. “Please, you don’t need to teach us anything! Sneasel, Icy Wind!”

    “Quick, Masquerain, Bubblebeam!”

    The two attacks collided, and frozen bubbles fell to the ground and broke like Christmas tree ornaments.

    Meanwhile…

    “What to do…what to do…I know!” May said. “Castform, use Weather Ball!”

    Because Castform was in its Fire Form, it shot out a ball of fire. It burned the basket to a crisp, and the Ditto were set free.

    “Kent, we’re losing them!” Sam yelled at him frantically.

    “What can I do?” Kent asked.

    Sam looked out the window and saw the Ditto, Castform, and Masquerain. “Oh no.”

    The Ditto transformed into Castform’s fire form while Sam recalled her Sneasel and gulped.

    The army of Castforms used their Weather Ball and caused the DDV 1.0 to explode.

    Kent and Sam flew from the explosion in a similar way to Team Rocket.

    “Ditto,” said the Leader of the colony. They turned back into themselves. It apologized to Castform and thanked it for saving its entire colony. The whole colony bent down in gratitude, as if bowing to Castform.

    * * *
    “Look, I can see Wandy City!” May shouted to her friends.

    “I guess you’re leaving, huh,” Castform’s eyes seemed to say.

    “Castform, you want to come with me?” May asked.

    Castform nodded and flew into May’s arms and looked up at her with puppy eyes.

    May pulled out a Pokeball and zapped Castform inside.

    It popped back out.

    May repeated the process, but Castform refused to stay inside for half a second.

    “You’re just like my friend’s Pikachu; you never want to go in a Pokeball,” May told Castform. “Oh well, that’s fine by me.”

    Castform nodded, glad that May understood. “Cast!”

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    Great chapter, pichu_gurl...^^
    I have to say...You are such a fast writer...

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    I agree. I didn't find a single mistake in it, and it's kinda like something that could actually happen on an episode of AG. Good job!
    Jade~

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    ur must b a great writer....................... and fast 2.............. anyways great chapter^ ^

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    Thanks everyone! (Is that all I ever say?!@.@; )

    I'll have Chapter 8 up tomorrow!

    Coming up next, in Chapter 8: Wandy and the Double Contest Ribbon!
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    This is supposed to be really descriptive, so it'll take a while. I'll have it done by early tomorrow!

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    Wow~ Nice chappie! although, it seems like catching the pokemon seems too easy! but thats just me. otherwise, that was a good chappie! the "Castform in it's fire form" part was a little awkward though. can't wait for the next chapter!

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    Quote Originally Posted by MiniMinun
    Wow~ Nice chappie! although, it seems like catching the pokemon seems too easy! but thats just me. otherwise, that was a good chappie! the "Castform in it's fire form" part was a little awkward though. can't wait for the next chapter!
    I know, lol, I guess I was excited for the next chappie....gotta slow down!
    Wow, MiniMinun, I never noticed how I made both Pokemon go willingly! O.OU Gotta watch out for that. I'll make up for it, you'll see.

    See you tomorrow,
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    NO! Castform-
    NOO!!! Skitty! yes!
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    Good work Pichu Girl I enjoyed reading chapter 7. I felt sorry for Castform...with all those Ditto and the other Castform being mean too it. Anyway can't way until the next chappie....update soon.
    Claiming is overrated, can be fun sometimes but others silly. I only claimed Henry Cavill as no one really knows him.

    Oh yeah and i'm paired up with the cool Chuboy.

    Claimed Henry Cavill on the Celebrity Claiming thread...he's all mine muh ha ha ha ha...^^;.

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