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    Default +Ash's Tears+ [PG-13, Pokéshipping]

    This is an interesting one-shot.

    I have to say, this was partially inspired by Deathspector's Don't Cry, Misty. I'm not sure if it's here, but I know it's at Pokemon Elite 2000 forums, and it has a similar storyline. But it is not connected in anyway (people here didn't see that, but some people did on PokeCommunity). It's just inspired!

    However, this involves a few darker things - murder, alcohol.

    +Ash's Tears+
    An eye for an eye
    A tooth for a tooth

    Small beads hit the floor…

    Drop…

    Drop…

    Shattered.

    Much like my heart.

    I walk to the kitchen. Grab a tissue. Try to dam them up. They keep coming.

    Like a cancer, he returns. Gary stumbles in, alcohol on his breath. Like me… strung out: struggling to get over it.

    No, I have to remind myself. Unlike me. He never knew her so well… never whiled away the hours entranced by her long orange-red locks. Never kissed for hours, so that time stood still, and then gone further…

    And it was not my fault.

    Gary could not say the same of himself. Regardless of the fact that the Global Police had said it was a wild one, I believe, I know, that his Alakazam was the one.

    The blood was on his hands.

    “You.” My voice sounds broken. Torn apart.

    That was the alcohol, and the miles of tears I had shed since December the first.

    “Ash…” Gary began.

    I give him no opportunity. “Get away from me!” I shout. Tearing around the kitchen table, I charge towards him like an enraged Tauros.

    He pulls back, shaking his head. “It’s not my fault, Ash. I didn’t do it! Listen to me!”

    “NO! YOU LISTEN TO ME!” I shouted back, roaring so loud that I couldn’t speak. Minutes later, I was able to continue in a quiet rasp. “If it isn’t your fault, then why are you the only one that had reason to kill her? And the only one that has an Alakazam!”

    An eye for an eye.
    A tooth for a tooth.


    “The Alakazam wasn’t mine!” Gary closes his eyes. His tears hit the floor.

    Drop…

    Drop…

    Shattered.

    Like the love I had. Now, she’s gone. She’s never coming back. Misty…

    I turn back to the kitchen, going to the top right drawer – the one next to the fridge. I slide it open. My hands slide onto the handle, bringing the weapon up. I turn and face him. As I do, I catch a look at the digital calendar. Friday. Five days since. The day our engagement would have been official.

    No more…

    I looked at Gary, forefinger willing to pull the trigger. My eyes cut through him like a knife. Like a bullet.

    “You’re going to shoot me? Aren’t you, Ashy boy?” He slurs. “In cold blood?”
    I nod.

    “Well then, what are you waiting for?”

    I nod again. And then realize I’m shaking all over.

    No doubts. No regrets.

    I pull the trigger. And before the shot sounds, he falls. Blood rolls down his face and hits the floor.

    Shattered.

    Seconds later, the cold realization hits. My conscience returns.

    An eye for an eye.
    A tooth for a tooth.


    I raise the pistol again.

    I pull the trigger.

    They say you never hear the bullet that kills you.

    They say right.

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    :3 Lovely, Arcanine! *hugs* I love the emotion portrayed and how you wrote this, very powerful, very nice. :3 Slightly morbid, but it was supposed to be and I love that stuff anyway. xD

    The ending lines are perfect.


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    Quote Originally Posted by katiekitten View Post
    :3 Lovely, Arcanine! *hugs* I love the emotion portrayed and how you wrote this, very powerful, very nice. :3 Slightly morbid, but it was supposed to be and I love that stuff anyway. xD

    The ending lines are perfect.
    *gives Gary-Ash-gun combo plushie* (Um... okay...)

    First review! Thank you oodles...

    Yeah. It's definitely morbid. I'm glad you like the ending lines, though. I wasn't sure if they would work well.

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    ...Dang! =O

    Like katiekitten, very powerful emotions here. Can really tell how Ash felt, really sad that Misty died. Aw, poor Ash!

    However,...

    I turn back to the kitchen, going to the top right drawyer – the one next to the fridge. I slide it open. My hands slide onto the object, bringing it up. I turn and face him. As I do, I catch a look at the digital calendar. Friday. Five days since. The day it would have been official.
    I am confuse what he meant by that. O.o

    Again, nice job! ^^
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    Quote Originally Posted by Bay View Post
    ...Dang! =O

    Like katiekitten, very powerful emotions here. Can really tell how Ash felt, really sad that Misty died. Aw, poor Ash!

    However,...



    I am confuse what he meant by that. O.o

    Again, nice job! ^^
    Yeah... Hanako Tabris said the same thing over at PokeCommunity. Basically, it means he would have asked her to marry him on the day he died / killed Gary. Anyways, thanks for the comments, and thanks for reading.

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